#start of story

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trail sparrow
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If someone sat you down in a nice plain room and gave you two nice plain choices, black and white, the right thing to do and the wrong one, it'd be real easy to be a good person. It’d be real easy to make the right choices away from all the hustle, the distraction, the chaos of life. The problem is real life just doesn't work like that. The hard problems, the awkward decisions, the difficult moments, they get thrust onto you while you're busy doing something else, it's on you to realise it's something you even have to think about in that moment. There is no one sitting across that table from you, clicking their fingers saying “Hey. Pay attention. This matters.”

I never wanted to be a bad person. I never wanted to be that guy, stumbling through everyone else's carefully woven lives. When you lay in bed at night and think of all the could haves and should haves, all the wills and won’ts, I’m sure I’m right up there with the best of them. It's just for me… the right choices have never stuck out like they should.

flat island
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It's not too bad...if you're a fan of that style (which I'm not).

Having the author/narrator speak directly to me feels more like a conversation than experiencing a story. I like the ones that have a character doing something...right in the middle of some action, possibly some 'relevant' dialogue (not just talking heads in a dark room).

You can fill in the details later, but I want to know the character before I care about him.

trail sparrow
flat island
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You may find...once you're a ways into it...that the beginning isn't the right one.

trail sparrow