A short story titled "An earnest rejection"

[pulsar pewter]

the edit access isnt set for everyone with a link :)!

[crude ice]

now it is

[remote lintel]

I would tend to agree that it doesn't grab me. It opens with a scene that has no action...then introduces a character with no name.

If it was a "normal Sunday morning", then this may not be the right place to start the story. See if you can find where his life is changed by something and start the story there, then fill in what backstory is actually needed for the reader to understand what's going on.

Also, your first quote mark is on p5, but you have implied dialogue on p3. Why no quotes there?

[crude ice]

Thanks for the feedback, although i was asking for the short story titled " An earnest rejection" which was just after this in the document.

[crude ice]

As for this story, it was supposed to be a world-end scene, my thought was that when the world will end it will not come by telling us, it will be just another day when things will be calm, you might be cooking your food, driving your car, or planning for a date with your love.

and that's why i didn't used any name, I didn't describe any characteristic of the charcaters beacuse it was supposed to be just anyone from anywhere

But by the end, I thought this whole story had no emotional impact, so I pretty much put it on hold after that.

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[remote lintel]

Ah! I didn't see that next story. (Now I understand the overall title of 'collection'.)

If you set those story titles to Heading Styles, they'll show up in the Navigation pane, so folks will know where they are.

[crude ice]

Ohh thanks a lot for telling me about this, was looking for something like this..

[remote lintel]

You know how to do it?

[crude ice]

you mean to change story titles to heading styles ???

[remote lintel]

Yes, how to set styles.

[crude ice]

ahh yes i know