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trail saddle Mar 29, 2024, 2:10 AM

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AND HERE IS A SYNOPSIS TO GET A GENERAL IDEA OF THE BOOK.

The estate is a place where historical creatures- vampires(Dracula) werewolves(Lupin) etc that has terrorized humanity are trapped/living inside for eternity, block off from the outside world (and unable to affect it). each of these creatures eg Dracula has on the outside assigned to Them a disciple, who is human (who doesn't knows about their existence because their meant to be extinct). these humans will possess traits relating to their master, eg intelligence, strength, agility etc (they're not superhuman, but at least above average for a human capacity).
And now the main story, Dracula suddenly goes missing/dead. leading the plot to arc(my MC's name) and one of the three disciples of Dracula (which is abnormal because Creatures can only have one), is brought into the estate and is on a mission to find who killed Dracula and also survive the other 2 disciples who'll be hunting him down. This is because the last surviving disciple will be the successor to Dracula and also his Powers.

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So now back to my problem which happened when one of my friend told me "It'll bore the readers, going through all of that inconsistent tension and mind games at the beginning. Instead, I should just skip to the point where he ends up in the estate(as in, he meets the Creatures). And I needed something that'll hook the readers right away from the beginning of the book".

I NEED ADVICE ON TWO THINGS:

No1: should I just go with my original or setting that will bore most readers?. (Tell me based on your thoughts)

No2: or
I should just go with his advice (which I've thought about) and find a way to skip all the mind games/battles of wits straight to where he'll meet the Creatures. I was thinking of what if he's suddenly transported/teleported there directly. then I remember my rule: the creature cannot affect anything in the human world.

There were also many ideas that came to mind, the problem is I don't want overly used cliché plot settings eg:

*Being guided by a wise old, Uncovering hidden symbols from random places
*Receiving cryptic messages, old books, mysterious doorways, or Stumbling upon a hidden staircase leading up to the estate, etc.
I've seen/watched a lot of settings like that, and choose to want to make mine different (lol, not saying those ideas are bad).

Please I need your advice on this. if you pick No 2 for me also add any cool idea you can think about that'll lead him to the estate.
or at most you can choose No 1 and still give me ideas. (^⁠_⁠^) Thanks.

NB: for those who want to read the full story (or where I've reached) it is currently impossible cause it's still in the outline stage and I haven't built up on the scenes and padding. I only gave a more fleshed-out synopsis to that my friend.

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@waxen fjord

waxen fjord Mar 29, 2024, 2:14 AM

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alright wait

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should i read both?

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i feel like this is a little cliche, the mc and the heroine being the only ones to survive, are they traumatised after this? i mean your average 14 ye old doesn’t experience soemthing like this. is he injured after he falls? is he lightheaded? like the plot is something i’ve read before in a manwha, obviously not the same but with a very similar plot.

are they suspiciously strong for their age?

what’s the characters motive? what would happen if the mc ended up losing everyone, or died himself? because it’s a synopsis for when you properly write don’t make the mc or heroine have plot armour, a little is fine. make sure they get injured, them escaping make it believable. don’t make it easy, don’t make it simple, make it so the mc goes through something life changing, make this an experience that makes him go ‘what the flip’. make it so they seem vulnerable ;….;;; (i may have yapped a lot in this.)

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because some people may be into this work, but it’s soemthing i’ve read many times, and to be honest, i was not impressed.

waxen fjord Mar 29, 2024, 2:25 AM

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trail saddle So now back to my problem which happened when one of my friend told me "It'll bo...

the first three words of a book are important you have to hook the reader in, many people will read a book and read a few words or more and go ‘errr no thanks, thas boring’ — when you properly write it out send it to me. ill help in any way i can.

trail saddle Mar 29, 2024, 2:26 AM

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waxen fjord i feel like this is a little cliche, the mc and the heroine being the only ones ...

Oops, sorry I didn't go into detail, and just jumped to the spoiler, but this is just a synopsis and my characters aren't going to be like ordinary overly CLICHÉ characters, trust me I've watched, read and seen lots of shows anime and mangas

waxen fjord Mar 29, 2024, 2:26 AM

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trail saddle Oops, sorry I didn't go into detail, and just jumped to the spoiler, but this is...

have you written character profiles ?

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if you have can i read them