A " fairly robotic/flat but with a little humanity" voice

[knotty mauve]

Hey! Was wondering if i could get feedback on this (never sent a file like this over discord before, so let me know if it doesnt open/play). It's supposed to be a robotic voice "somewhere between a Star Trek computer and the PDA voice from Subnautica" as according to the audition

[hard ingot]

this sounds really good

[knotty mauve]

Thanks :DD

Is there anything at all i could change to make it better?? Even the tiniest thing

[dull verge]

Are there effects on this audio? If not, your space could use some stronger treatment, otherwise, assuming you'll be recording the final product on-site, the performance should be fine for an audition. For a second set of takes, though, you could try looking at this as a character, as opposed to a voice, i.e. try to give this more of a personality (playing with pace, emphasis, making actable choices), so that you aren't just saying words. If nothing else, it could help you stand out.

[knotty mauve]

There aren't any effects—you're right about my space, i could definitely hear the difference in audio quality when i compared it with other auditions. I'll try writing down some notes on how i imagine the character to be, and try to re-record with those traits in mind? I agree that it didn't seem to have much of a personality to it, i just wasn't sure how far to go with giving it one because the person who listed the audition said they wanted it to be rather robotic/flat.

There's also the matter of the referenced examples, which i was trying to channel through my acting; I wasn't quite sure how to give my audition its own feeling without disregarding those.

How do I give this character its own personality while still staying accurate to the desires of the person who'll be reviewing the audition?

[dull verge]

Well in this case, it's to remember that you don't necessarily have to hit every direction on every part of every line. Also, a lot of casting directors don't actually know what they want until they hear it. Let that give you some peace of mind. Now, again, outside of the space, your takes are fine for an audition. You don't have to do this, but it's an option. If you want to make things more personal, you can try reading it without the heavy emphasis and enunciation on every word.

For example:

Notice how that's a lot more like a personal companion. As opposed to just a tool that needs to be heard.

[dull verge]

Robotic/Flat doesn't have to mean "HeLLo I aM-" It can, sure, but note that one of the references is the Star Trek computer. The Star Trek computer has a very human delivery, it's a little detached, but it's otherwise got a very normal tone. Almost like a PA system.

[dull verge]

Now, that said, unless you're being asked specifically to do an impression of some kind. The references, (at least, in my experience) typically are there more to help you get a feel for a character's vibe than the sound of a voice.

For example:
Set One: (Subnautica PDA inspired)

*Very Detatched. Clearly unnatural/artificial tone. Reflects a sense of technological precision and Coldness
*Not a character, a tool.
*Emphasizes efficiency over emotion
*Communicates information in a straightforward manner
*Lacks personalization or emotional depth

Set Two: (Star Trek Computer Inspired)

*Slightly detached but with a touch of warmth.
*Maintains a neutral tone while still conveying a sense of familiarity.
*Offers information in a clear and concise manner.
*Exhibits subtle hints of curiosity/interest, suggesting an underlying intelligence.
*Creates an atmosphere of trust and reassurance for crew members.

Note how you can go in a number of directions with these. The reference just helps you establish a few components, it's up to you to decide how to put them together.