median owl
if the squared are suppose wo be what the flying fellar is seeing, then i would first show that they are flying and then what they see
also, a camera looking up shouldn't be seeing rings unless its under the surface and in that case there would be the warping of the entire image. I'd recommend either removing that, or if tis really intended as a camera POV to have few blurry drops sliding down the lens/view
also lack of bordering between the big ones is kinda confusing,
also
the hideout line, it has a tail of speach, but bubble of thourght
also
given how this makes me think there might be a frequency of thought bubbles in this one, i reccomend this vid as reseatrch
https://youtu.be/o7gzvAzBBwQ?si=S31zeq1gkDQDD63k
not saying you gotta remove them, just giving the perspective on it
i had to do a double take
i'd p[utm the small boxes under the flying panel, and add some division between the background panels
even something like branches, if you realy want to keep it as a uniform lending panel
it has some issues, but i honestly seen panel layouts so confusing, that the artist had to put arrows between panels to indicate reading order so its not bad
there is never a yes/no answer to this sort of things
it always depends
you could be intentionakly confusing if the scene calls for it
i had to read it twice
proven nebula
Is this readable the answer is yes and no as someone who is new to comics he'll not be able to read and some have to read two or three times and very less people will be able to read it in one go
median owl
Is this readable the answer is yes and no as someone who is new to comics he'll ...
why are you assuming im new to comics?
if i was a novice i wouldnt be giving out advice on this stuff
i do comics myself
proven nebula
why are you assuming im new to comics?
if i was a novice i wouldnt be giving out...
I was not saying that most people have to read it more than one time
median owl
"... as someone who is new to comics he'll not be able to read ..."
im talking about this
proven nebula
> "... as someone who is new to comics he'll not be able to read ..."
im talking...
He won't be able to read it I meant that
median owl
and the "he" is who?
proven nebula
He is someone from audience
median owl
cause it kinda came across as the he being me
proven nebula
I wasn't targeting you
median owl
He is someone from audience
pro tip: next time use "the reader"
no chance of confusing with someone in conversation + not assuming stuff
proven nebula
pro tip: next time use "the reader"
no chance of confusing with someone in conve...
Sure I'll do that
Yes in my opinion
median owl
they will probably need a double take, but should be readable overall
-# guessing taht the insistance of the question stems form not having the file itself so any change would require redoing a bunhc?
i would shift the sqquares to the bottom of the top panel (would also make the character seem more like they are flying over the place cause the only thing above them would eb the sky)
and add some sort of bordering between the background panels, even in form of branches if you want to keep the continuous feeling while separating the panels
median owl
once i saw a panel that literaly had arrows pointing what orer to read the pannels in cause it was so bad
i think it was one of the old "Tytus Romek i Atomek" comics but im not sure
hard stream
woah this looks so cool and professional, love the details! the only thing I think slightly missing is maybe a bit more emotion of the character in the mask in the last pannel, I think unless intentionaly you did that adding a bit more emotion or making it more lively would def help!
Yeah! At first I didnt clearly notice the bubbles of speech but when zooming in it def helps, Is this a comic youve been working on for a while? is it on webtoon?
Alright! well if you ever publish it anytime I would love to read it! it seems like it would have a good story
I myself am thinking of making a webtoon, but I delayd it since I was too busy
Actually when im thinking about it... your style reminds me a bit of the webtoon Spontaneous World Shifting! its a really good comic so thats why I probably noticed your art, if you havent read it yet you might get some inspo!
dense parcel
I know I'm pretty late to this post but I think it's pretty readable, I had to zoom in slightly but that's about it. Though I would add more space between the bubble border and the text
That's just my personal opinion though, you don't have to take my advice considering I'm not an expert. Though if this ever does get published I would love to read it!
past laurel
a little too bright in the colors for the text i say make it darker a bit