Does this look alright?

[mental olive]

I'd recommend not to draw every individual line on the teeth, instead, try and draw the gums and try to indicate the teeth with some shading, not too dark tho. I'd also recommend to make the lines a bit curved since teeth have a curve to them and are now just straight lines.
Hope this helps 🥰

[sacred dagger]

Ya, that’s what I was thinking too