#The Divine King
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Are you still open to feedback?
Yeah, please feel free to leave any feedback right here.
Ok, iwill dive in and get back to you.
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Wouldn't be surprising
Are you open to beta reader feedback on this?
Leave feedback here. Also, bot.
Alright i will give the summary of what have read here
It feels like a really solid myth-style origin story Kroni’s journey from abandoned child to king comes through clearly, and the themes of revenge and leadership work well.
I think the main thing holding it back a bit is how much is summarized. Moments like the fight with the Waldaz, the villagers’ reaction, and parts of his rule go by pretty quickly. Letting those play out more as actual scenes could make everything hit harder emotionally.
If you need a indepth feedback on this let me know
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How long have you been writing this?
I originally wrote is about a year or two ago, but recently did some rewriting.
Wow this nice.
What inspires you to write?
oh a bot that has an engagement function
Yep. They're getting good.
Do you think I am a bot?
@regal willow has just advanced to level 2.
Yes
Yes.
I am not a bot.
And why do most authors and writers thinks all beta reader and editors are always bots?
I mean in Discord servers.
cause they are lol
swarming like flies lately, here is only that, several per day, it's fascinating
Yeah, I get why it seems that way lately, but not everyone is a bot you can usually tell just by talking to them.
About the book are you still in need of feedbacks?
Sure, any feedback is appreciated. Provided it's not obviously AI
Alright do you want it here or in DMs?
I would just give short summary on what have read in the book.
The new opening feels way more alive and mysterious I love how you twisted the divine birth into something raw and almost forbidden. It pulls you in immediately with that darker, more poetic tone instead of the standard myth vibe.
I have a question on what I read. can i ask?
Here is good.
Go for it.
What did you think of how Kroni’s relationship with Malri shaped him as a king?
I would love to go in-depth for the feedback. i don't know if you'd be open to that also?
Probably gave him a very "Apex predator" view of power and kingship. You have to be strong to rule, and steward
Yeah go for it.
Alright to be upfront, I do charge for in-depth feedback. Are you open to that?
@regal willow has just advanced to level 3.
No economy in server. If you're not a bot, loiter around like a human being in the other channels. It'll be fun to see.
Hell no. Nobody's gonna pay for feedback, especially here.