#Tales of Zaterre

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tepid hound
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I get to this eventually.

tepid hound
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I like it so far. I can't wait for chapter 2.

formal portal
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I finished the prologue. It was good. Some editing required but it was fun to read.

true ember
obtuse vault
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I like that Matthias started out as the typical incompetent Prince but then became an actually competent person. Although I would love to see him still struggle with that because as it is, it feels like they are two different characters because we saw no link between them other than the name and the events of the prologue being mentioned later. But overall I liked it, I especially liked that there were gambesons, they don’t get enough love in fantasy.

true ember
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yee gambesons are underloved in fantasy

obtuse vault
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So much.

true ember
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But we'll see more of Matthias' past as the story goes. I wanted to do a character who had his whole character arc in the background

formal portal
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I think it's usualy beat to pick one specific flaw that the character struggles with. That flaw can lead to other flaws though. Like daylens pride leading him to angry outbursts and self denial in shadow of the conquerer. Or vins mistrust of others keeping her distant from those around her turning into naivety that almost got her killed when fighting Zane. I could list other examples but I think the point is made. No flaw works alone it's like a Crack in the character that leads to little cracks forming from its widening. The character we have here seems to be someone with maybe less cracks. I'll have more to say as I read further.

true ember
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Yessir

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I'm curious to see what people make of Matthias and Anrie going forward, how they perceive them as we go further in to the story

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It'll be fun

obtuse vault
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Anrie seems like the kind of person who is way too casual. In my setting, you’d probably be executed for breaking into your liege’s room at night, but I mean if he doesn’t have an issue, I guess it’s fine

true ember
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Hehe...

true ember
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TVP Update:

I've currently finished chapters 3 and I'm finishing up chapter 4. I'll review them, fix up things and place on the Google Doc

tepid hound
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Cool

true ember
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Well then, I revised chapter 3. Onto chapter 4 now

tepid hound
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Yay!

true ember
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Chapters 3 and 4 uploaded

tepid hound
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I love the madlad Dwarf so far.

true ember
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heh

tepid hound
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I don't think that he should have chemicals though. However, I want to see his hijinks now.

true ember
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Yeah well, the adventure has begun. We'll see his hijinks

tepid hound
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Yay!

true ember
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@obtuse vault I hope you like the new chapters when you get to read them

obtuse vault
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Interesting. I like how Elizabeth is so very clearly unprepared for any sort of travel. And how she gets called out on it but is just like "no I'm right".

true ember
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Hehe

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Yeah

tepid hound
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My favorite is housing the guests, but the town is generous.

true ember
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We got new characters introduced here. Sophia and her daughter, Braill, Elizabeth, Wei, and Clawridge.

tepid hound
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Sophia is a my favorite.

true ember
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The mayor?

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Interesting

true ember
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Chapter 5 is halfway done. I plan on releasing chapters on the Google doc two at a time if I can

true ember
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Well, chapter 5 is done, now to chapter 6

tepid hound
tepid hound
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Maid dress scene is funny.

true ember
tepid hound
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Chapter 4

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Last page

true ember
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Ah when the maids are not dressed for travel

tepid hound
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Yep

tepid hound
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Maids begging for mercy is hilarious.

true ember
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I mean you would do that if a mage was angry at you

tepid hound
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Depends, that Dwarf is toe to toe at times.

true ember
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True enough

true ember
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@obtuse vault I would love to see what you think about rge most recent chapters

obtuse vault
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I have been quite busy as of late, I think I’ll have time to read them later today

true ember
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Coolio

obtuse vault
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Nice. May I ask what you mean when you say “low guard” is it like pflug, alber or one of the other guards I can think of but don’t remember the names?

true ember
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You know, the typical guard for fantasy and historical fiction actors who don't know how to handle a sword

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This kind of guard

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obtuse vault
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Ah, Long Point. I forgot the German name for it. Very good guard actually. Pretty versatile. Allows for many different attacks while being defensive

true ember
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Aye

tepid hound
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Cool

true ember
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Working on the next chapter. Got some 700ish words done in an hour long session

tepid hound
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Nice

formal portal
true ember
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Yeah

true ember
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I think I've completed chapter 7. Not bad

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Have to revise it of course

true ember
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Will edit the chapter further then upload it

tepid hound
true ember
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And done

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Seventh chapter is uploaded

tepid hound
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Cool

true ember
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Let me know what you guys think when you get a chance to read it

tepid hound
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One, he likes hanging people.

true ember
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Let me upload this lower because it will get bogged down as we keep talking in this thread

Tales of Zaterre: The Vagabond Prince
Genre: Fantasy, Adventure, Action
Word Count: ~20k (for now)
Synopsis: A prince without a crown sets off in a journey to find a long-lost magical sword that is the key to unite the land. There are those who wish his downfall, and those who wish to take the sword and its power for themselves.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1_9O3CvpN9sc107buqGh-MxfH-R0IY4bIbVmyYH3HToI/edit?usp=sharing

Google Docs
TOZ: The Vagabond Prince

A prince without a crown sets off in a journey to find a long-lost magical sword that is the key to unite the land. There are those who wish his downfall, and those who wish to take the sword and its power for themselves.

tepid hound
true ember
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I mean, bandits are a pest in medieval societies

tepid hound
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You characters hanged them,

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Which is sort of medievel.

true ember
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But these weren't bandits

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It literally says so in the story

tepid hound
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Disguised ambush

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Also the Goroi is a uber minotaur from the first Disney Narnia movie.

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That's the only thing to describe it.

true ember
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I'm thinking on ditching the chapter names so I don't feel restricted as having to follow a specific thing for the chapter

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Right now whenever I make a chapter I feel like I have to come up with a good name

tepid hound
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Do it.

true ember
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New chapter uploaded.

Tales of Zaterre: The Vagabond Prince
Genre: Fantasy, Adventure, Action
Word Count: ~30k (for now)
Synopsis: A prince without a crown sets off in a journey to find a long-lost magical sword that is the key to unite the land. There are those who wish his downfall, and those who wish to take the sword and its power for themselves.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1_9O3CvpN9sc107buqGh-MxfH-R0IY4bIbVmyYH3HToI/edit

Google Docs
TOZ: The Vagabond Prince

A prince without a crown sets off in a journey to find a long-lost magical sword that is the key to unite the land. There are those who wish his downfall, and those who wish to take the sword and its power for themselves.

true ember
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Working on chapter nine

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Man, sometimes the inspiration leaves and sometimes it stays

true ember
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Made good progress yesterday. The chapter is at over 1.3k words so far

tepid hound
true ember
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New chapter is up

tepid hound
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Sad

tepid hound
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Very sad

true ember
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Yeah, I guess you met the villains

tepid hound
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Yea, they are the stuff from Elder Scrolls.

true ember
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Oh buddy, they're worse...

tepid hound
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I know.

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Like SS.

true ember
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Working on a new chapter. I finished writing it and am in the process of editing it

true ember
tepid hound
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Marriage one is funny.

true ember
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What do you mean?

tepid hound
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His betroth was an awful one.

true ember
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Ah

true ember
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Well, I've got almost 1k words done for chapter 11

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All in an hour or so

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Not bad

true ember
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I'm really liking this chapter

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Hopefully I can finish it today, if not, tomorrow

true ember
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Well, time to edit

true ember
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@obtuse vault I believe there are some interactions in the most recent chapters that you would like. And moments of course...

obtuse vault
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I’ve been busy, I’ll catch up as soon as I get a chance

true ember
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Coolio

true ember
true ember
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Working on a world building doc written as if in-universe scholars wrote it. It will be a fun thing for later.

true ember
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Don't know why I disappeared for twelve days without writing

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Mostly did some world building on the side and got stuck on playing CK3 for three days nonstop. Anyways I'm back at it for chapter 12 (what a coincidence)

tepid hound
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Yay

true ember
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Tales of Zaterre: The Vagabond Prince

Genre: Fantasy, Adventure, Action
Word Count: ~45.7k (for now)
Synopsis:

The lands of Zaterre are divided. Nations clash against one another, and the many races squabble over power, lands, and riches. Long gone are the days of peace and the Twelve Kingdoms of humanity. Long gone are the days of heroes and demigods. But there is still hope for Zaterre.

The Vagabond Prince, Matthias Luprel, is the last son of his house. As the last prince of the Kingdom of Caveth, one of the Twelve Kingdoms, it is up to him to restore his family's legacy and bring peace once more to his land. To reclaim the lost ancestral sword, Dawnsplitter, and claim the throne that belongs to him.

Matthias will be threatened and challenged at every step of the way. He must gather allies to restore the throne and push back any threats, be they human or not. Dangers lurk in every corner, and he must be ready. There are those who wish his downfall, those who hide in the dark. Dark days are ahead, but they will be darker if he fails in his quest.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1_9O3CvpN9sc107buqGh-MxfH-R0IY4bIbVmyYH3HToI/edit

Google Docs
TOZ: The Vagabond Prince

A prince without a crown sets off in a journey to find a long-lost magical sword that is the key to unite the land. There are those who wish his downfall, and those who wish to take the sword and its power for themselves.

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Chapter 12 all done

tepid hound
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Reminds me of Gondor's last ride in the movie.

true ember
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Well, time to edit chapter 13

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This one was a bit difficult to start writing but I managed

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Next chapter should be fun

true ember
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And Chapter 13 is complete

true ember
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Chapter 14 is complete

true ember
true ember
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Working on chapter 16

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Nearly complete

true ember
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And it's done

true ember
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Tales of Zaterre: The Vagabond Prince

Genre: Fantasy, Adventure, Action
Word Count: ~52k (for now)
Synopsis:

The lands of Zaterre are divided. Nations clash against one another, and the many races squabble over power, lands, and riches. Long gone are the days of peace and the Twelve Kingdoms of humanity. Long gone are the days of heroes and demigods. But there is still hope for Zaterre.

The Vagabond Prince, Matthias Luprel, is the last son of his house. As the last prince of the Kingdom of Caveth, one of the Twelve Kingdoms, it is up to him to restore his family's legacy and bring peace once more to his land. To reclaim the lost ancestral sword, Dawnsplitter, and claim the throne that belongs to him.

Matthias will be threatened and challenged at every step of the way. He must gather allies to restore the throne and push back any threats, be they human or not. Dangers lurk in every corner, and he must be ready. There are those who wish his downfall, those who hide in the dark. Dark days are ahead, but they will be darker if he fails in his quest.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1_9O3CvpN9sc107buqGh-MxfH-R0IY4bIbVmyYH3HToI/edit

Google Docs
TOZ: The Vagabond Prince

A prince without a crown sets off in a journey to find a long-lost magical sword that is the key to unite the land. There are those who wish his downfall, and those who wish to take the sword and its power for themselves.

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We are back with another chapter

maiden coral
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Nice