chapter 1: curse
#End book Cycle Requiem: Sigi’s curse story
balmy orchid
genre : fantasy, sexual content, sci fi, horror, mental illness
length: 10 page, and 1024 words
synopsis : the begining of the curse
cedar quartz
It's okay, maybe a tad violent.
balmy orchid
Chapter 2: Qliphoth
genre : fantasy, sexual content, sci fi, horror, mental illness
length: 15 page, and 1893 words
Synopsis: Naamah told Sigi about Qliphoth
balmy orchid
It's okay, maybe a tad violent.
chapter 2 is out
balmy orchid
What are your thoughts
balmy orchid
She's not
cedar quartz
Thanks.
balmy orchid
chapter 3: Nehemot
genre : fantasy, sexual content, sci fi, horror, mental illness
length: 26 page, and 4175 words
Synopsis: around the training of utilizing nehemoth, Sigi became possessed by Sitra Achra
balmy orchid
@cedar quartz chapter 3 is here
cedar quartz
Ok.
balmy orchid
what do you think
cedar quartz
A bit sexual description.
balmy orchid
How so
cedar quartz
The way the woman treats Sigi
balmy orchid
Oh
balmy orchid
@cedar quartz I have alter some aspect in chapter 3
balmy orchid
chapter 4: gamaliel
genre : fantasy, sexual content, sci fi, horror, mental illness
length: 44 page, and 8197 words
Synopsis: lyulf started to realzied the person he was fighting was non other than a reincarnation of the tree of death own demonic form
@cedar quartz chapter4 is out
cedar quartz
One moment
cedar quartz
Some words, reincarnation is crazy.
cedar quartz
Nice
peak root
reading chapter 1, there is no dialogue of bro meaking a deal at the start(or maybe am just dum)
balmy orchid
reading chapter 1, there is no dialogue of bro meaking a deal at the start(or ma...
there are diologue, just read more
balmy orchid
It was a way for Sitra Achra to reveal her true self
peak root
How's she revealing her true self is this is like the first time she shows up
plucky narwhal
One thing that I'd immediately like to point out is that you should probably consider some better formatting.
It looks a bit all over the place.
peak root
Its fr confusing and I think there needs to be more exposition(er, information clarified. Prrobably same thing). I only read the first chapter tho because the second chapter got a bit sussy wussy
plucky narwhal
Sussy wussy in... what way?
peak root
did you read chapter 2
plucky narwhal
I'm still (I'm sorry, Lucas) trying to climb my way through the first chapter.
Luke here has a very particular way with words and it's giving me some trouble.
peak root
some crazy stuff happens, dont read it around your parents
plucky narwhal
Doesn't matter even if I do: my mum doesn't speak English.
balmy orchid
when did the deal happen
Do I need to change it
balmy orchid
One thing that I'd immediately like to point out is that you should probably con...
Like what
peak root
Do I need to change it
probably?
Like, she just says "ya I can help you" and then they suddenly start gasping and talking about their sole
maybe add a thing like they realize they somehow accidentally made a deal
plucky narwhal
Like what
Proper capitalisation, centreing, page breaks, paragraph spacing and length, the difference in font sizes.
That's just the issues with the way it's presented.
I hate to say it like this since you seem to genuinely want to tell a story, but there's no softening the blow here: the formatting is a horrible, disjointed mess.
balmy orchid
How to have a good Proper capitalisation, centreing, page breaks, paragraph spacing and length, the difference in font sizes.
plucky narwhal
I could give you a hand with it if you want. I've done my fair share of editing back in the day. I won't do it all, though: just enough for you to get a glimpse of how it's supposed to look like and apply it yourself in the future. Teach a man to fish and all that.
balmy orchid
I could give you a hand with it if you want. I've done my fair share of editing ...
I would like for you to help me with that
plucky narwhal
Sure.
You'll need to give me editing permit for the file, though.
balmy orchid
How to do that
peak root
make a copy of the doc, Helkaros might be very evil)this is a joke but its always good to have a backup)
plucky narwhal
This.
Clover is right.
Backups are a must.
I learned that the hard way when my former editor got a bit too creative with his editing.
balmy orchid
Sure.
You'll need to give me editing permit for the file, though.
i already did
now you can edited my story,Helkaros
plucky narwhal
now you can edited my story,Helkaros
I did some reformatting on the first 6 pages.
It wasn't much, but it should give you some idea on how you can make it look more appealing without changing any of the content.
balmy orchid
so you only edited that ?
plucky narwhal
As I said I would.
I'm not a professional editor. What I did here was only to show you how. If I kept doing it for you, you'd never learn it for yourself. And I won't always be around.
balmy orchid
I seen my paragraphs space are way to big, and I started to fixe it
balmy orchid
As I said I would.
I'm not a professional editor. What I did here was only to s...
Did you read the other chapters
plucky narwhal
Did you reformat them?
balmy orchid
Yeah
balmy orchid
chapter 5: samael
genre : fantasy, sexual content, sci fi, horror, mental illness
length: 56 page, and 14464 words
Synopsis: after the Battle between Sitra Achra and Lyulf. Sigi found out about something sinister about their existence
balmy orchid
@plucky narwhal @cedar quartz chapter 5 is out
cedar quartz
Check on it later.
balmy orchid
Ok