#The Mighty Universe

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The Mighty, Season 2
Chapter 17

Genre: Superheroes, Action, Sci-fi, Fantasy
Word Count: 3,464 (9 pages)
Synopsis: A night on patrol for Barbara turns into a chase for a neohuman criminal alongside a hero from Sable's past.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1ug_DaTbmWLF_upFjNZGhUSSUhgeAtKn3pRFPTM33_jU/edit?usp=sharing

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The Mighty S2

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The Mighty, Season 2
Chapter 18

Genre: Superheroes, Action, Sci-fi, Fantasy
Word Count: 3,184 (8 pages)
Synopsis: Halloween gets interrupted as a hunt led by Alucard leads Caroline and the team to fight one of their own.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1ug_DaTbmWLF_upFjNZGhUSSUhgeAtKn3pRFPTM33_jU/edit?usp=sharing

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The Mighty, Season 2
Chapter 19

Genre: Superheroes, Action, Sci-fi, Fantasy
Word Count: 3,500 (8 pages)
Synopsis: Caroline and Michelle do battle with the powerful Prisma, who is becoming more deranged the more she uses the Skull. Alucard joins the fray.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1ug_DaTbmWLF_upFjNZGhUSSUhgeAtKn3pRFPTM33_jU/edit?usp=sharing

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The Mighty, Season 2
Chapter 20: Show's On

Genre: Superheroes, Action, Sci-fi, Fantasy
Word Count: 3,074 (7 pages)
Synopsis: As dozens of neohuman criminals are released from supermax prison Tartarus, a powerful man with reality bending powers challenges The Mighty, bringing a different twist into the conflict they're used to.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1ug_DaTbmWLF_upFjNZGhUSSUhgeAtKn3pRFPTM33_jU/edit?usp=sharing

torpid raven
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It's great now that we're on chapter 20. The journey to the end of the story begins now. Just two more adventures before the end comes.

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The Mighty, Season 2
Chapter 21: Those That Came Before

Genre: Superheroes, Action, Sci-fi, Fantasy
Word Count: 3,443 (8 pages)
Synopsis: Following the Musician's mass release of criminals from Tartarus, the team hunts down all the escapees. Carlos, fresh from a victory, makes a discovery that shakes his world.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1ug_DaTbmWLF_upFjNZGhUSSUhgeAtKn3pRFPTM33_jU/edit?usp=sharing

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Here's the official document of The Mighty, Season 1 for those that weren't in the server when I did it.

Synopsis: When illegal technologies start appearing with criminal groups, a team of heroes unites to investigate these events. They weren't expecting how deep this investigation would take them, and that the fate of the world would fall on their hands.

Genre: Superheroes, Action, Fantasy, Sci-fi
Chapters: 23
Word count: 68,024
Page count: 168
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1nZqTm932EoTJmXWdGp3mp1ErZOXCz_HmaBA7ciCykp4/edit?usp=sharing

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The Mighty, Season 2
Chapter 22

Genre: Superheroes, Action, Sci-fi, Fantasy
Word Count: 3,156 (8 pages)
Synopsis: The team prepares for a well deserved break and Christmas party.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1ug_DaTbmWLF_upFjNZGhUSSUhgeAtKn3pRFPTM33_jU/edit?usp=sharing

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The Mighty, Season 2
Chapter 23

Genre: Superheroes, Action, Sci-fi, Fantasy
Word Count: 3,226 (7 pages)
Synopsis: An imminent invasion puts the world on edge and our heroes face off against an unexpected former foe.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1ug_DaTbmWLF_upFjNZGhUSSUhgeAtKn3pRFPTM33_jU/edit?usp=sharing

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The Mighty, Season 2
Chapter 24

Genre: Superheroes, Action, Sci-fi, Fantasy
Word Count: 2,775 (7 pages)
Synopsis: The invading morriban force arrives and a battle for space supremacy takes place.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1ug_DaTbmWLF_upFjNZGhUSSUhgeAtKn3pRFPTM33_jU/edit?usp=sharing

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The Mighty, Season 2
Chapter 25

Genre: Superheroes, Action, Sci-fi, Fantasy
Word Count: 2,718 (6 pages)
Synopsis: Sable accepts the challenge of the alien empress and fights for the very freedom of Earth in a one-on-one fight.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1ug_DaTbmWLF_upFjNZGhUSSUhgeAtKn3pRFPTM33_jU/edit?usp=sharing

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The Mighty, Season 2
Chapter 26

Genre: Superheroes, Action, Sci-fi, Fantasy
Word Count: 3,368 (7 pages)
Synopsis: Sable and Adira's fight comes to an end, and the fate of the Earth is decided.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1ug_DaTbmWLF_upFjNZGhUSSUhgeAtKn3pRFPTM33_jU/edit?usp=sharing

torpid raven
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The Mighty Universe

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NEW SEASON!

The Mighty: Season 3
Chapter 1

Genre: Superheroes, Action, Sci-fi, Fantasy
Word Count: 3,181 (8 pages)
Synopsis: A new year for our heroes has arrived and new threats arise. After Sable faces a familiar foe, secrets are cast out of the shadows.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1tKw_kyyMVzbKJm2AuN1NMYUwtFg_8wQaqyNw9R_ug2c/edit?usp=sharing

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The Mighty: Season 3
Chapter 2

Genre: Superheroes, Action, Sci-fi, Fantasy
Word Count: 3,094 (8 pages)
Synopsis: After Incognito's declaration of war, the effects of it are felt quickly. Targets have been picked.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1tKw_kyyMVzbKJm2AuN1NMYUwtFg_8wQaqyNw9R_ug2c/edit?usp=sharing

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The Mighty: Season 3
Chapter 3

Genre: Superheroes, Action, Sci-fi, Fantasy
Word Count: 3,112 (8 pages)
Synopsis: Barbara seeks answers, someone wants her life and she needs to figure out who. In her search, she comes against the agents hired to kill her.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1tKw_kyyMVzbKJm2AuN1NMYUwtFg_8wQaqyNw9R_ug2c/edit?usp=sharing

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The Mighty: Season 3
Chapter 4

Genre: Superheroes, Action, Sci-fi, Fantasy
Word Count: 3,110
Synopsis: Barbara faces off against her foe, but a final surprise awaits her.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1tKw_kyyMVzbKJm2AuN1NMYUwtFg_8wQaqyNw9R_ug2c/edit?usp=sharing

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The Mighty: Season 3
Chapter 5

Genre: Superheroes, Action, Sci-fi, Fantasy
Word Count: 3,289 (9 pages)
Synopsis: Incognito has selected a new target. Another hero is in his crosshairs, and his weapon brings forth hidden lies.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1tKw_kyyMVzbKJm2AuN1NMYUwtFg_8wQaqyNw9R_ug2c/edit?usp=sharing

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The Mighty: Season 3
Chapter 6

Genre: Superheroes, Action, Sci-fi, Fantasy
Word Count: 2,439 (7 pages)
Synopsis: A UN summit is disrupted by an unexpected but familiar enemy.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1tKw_kyyMVzbKJm2AuN1NMYUwtFg_8wQaqyNw9R_ug2c/edit?usp=sharing

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The Mighty: Season 3
Chapter 7

Genre: Superheroes, Action, Sci-fi, Fantasy
Word Count: 2,748 (8 pages)
Synopsis: The world, and the heroes, are reeling from the attack in the UN. It's up to Ares to find his old enemy.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1tKw_kyyMVzbKJm2AuN1NMYUwtFg_8wQaqyNw9R_ug2c/edit?usp=sharing

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The Mighty: Season 3
Chapter 8

Genre: Superheroes, Action, Sci-fi, Fantasy
Word Count: 2,821 (8 pages)
Synopsis: The heroes are ready to end a war once and for all. Ares confronts the last ghosts of his past head-on.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1tKw_kyyMVzbKJm2AuN1NMYUwtFg_8wQaqyNw9R_ug2c/edit?usp=sharing

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The Mighty: Season 3
Chapter 9

Genre: Superheroes, Action, Sci-fi, Fantasy
Word Count: 2,839 (10 pages)
Synopsis: As the team gets closer to finding Incognito, the mystery hacker now targets the leader of the heroes: Sable.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1tKw_kyyMVzbKJm2AuN1NMYUwtFg_8wQaqyNw9R_ug2c/edit?usp=sharing

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The Mighty: Season 3
Chapter 10

Genre: Superheroes, Action, Sci-fi, Fantasy
Word Count: 3,286 (13 pages)
Synopsis: As shadows gather and plots are made, Sable receives an unexpected request.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1tKw_kyyMVzbKJm2AuN1NMYUwtFg_8wQaqyNw9R_ug2c/edit?usp=sharing

wooden smelt
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So, uh, where's season 1?

torpid raven
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The Mighty: Season 3
Chapter 11

Genre: Superheroes, Action, Sci-fi, Fantasy
Word Count: 3,108 (13 pages)
Synopsis: The challenge has been issued. Sable stands as the Champion of Clan Bloodthorn.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1tKw_kyyMVzbKJm2AuN1NMYUwtFg_8wQaqyNw9R_ug2c/edit?usp=sharing

wooden smelt
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So I started reading season 1, but I dropped it at the start of chapter 2.

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The fight scene at the beginning is messy, but beyond that it didn't feel like any of it was earned. It's like you're starting at intensity 100%, but I have no idea why I should care about this character nor atlantean weapons nor anything. If this was a movie and looked cool, then maybe, but in writing it just comes across like you're assuming everything is cool enough that I will read onwards regardless, but nah. If anything, it feels generic.

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Or put it another way, there's nothing relatable about it for me, and superheroes are done-to-death genre, so, dunno. The main character feels generic since you're basically playing the archetype straight, including the cop banter and everything.

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Additionally, you're dropping names and jargon and stuff the whole time, and I have no idea what any of it is or means, so it means nothing to me

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If you had, say, dedicated a chunk of the first chapter to this hero guy proposing, or doing something human-like, instead of just nonstop action and jargon, then maybe. You're going way too fast, way way too fast.

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I thought that scene had a good vibe to it, but then it gets cut off by weather-controlling neohumans(?!), and frankly at that point I was skimming your action scenes in the hopes that I'd find another character moment

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Like, it would've worked so much better if you had taken the rest of the chapter in that scene with the guy at the restaurant, let me get to know the actual person, doing actual person things, lol.

torpid raven
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Thanks for feedback

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Yeah I do need to work on scenes a lot

wooden smelt
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you just need to pick one or two things and do them well. The first chapter feels like you're trying to do 50

torpid raven
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Hmm that's an interesting thing to consider

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I might have to rework some things eventually

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Go through the story to edit it out

wooden smelt
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but i don't understand tho

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each season is a book?

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or what?

torpid raven
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The Mighty: Season 3
Chapter 12

Genre: Superheroes, Action, Fantasy, Sci-fi
Word Count: 3,440 (10 pages)
Synopsis: Sable and Carlos return from their mission in space, only to find out Incognito has struck again.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1tKw_kyyMVzbKJm2AuN1NMYUwtFg_8wQaqyNw9R_ug2c/edit?usp=sharing

torpid raven
# wooden smelt each season is a book?

Yes (sorry I answered so late) each season is essentially its own book. I could have just named them books 1, 2, and 3 but I've gotten this far already with "seasons"

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The Mighty: Season 3
Chapter 13

Genre: Superheroes, Action, Fantasy, Sci-fi
Word Count: 2,884 (9 pages)
Synopsis: The team reviews the damage caused by Incognito and gather to say goodbye to a friend.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1tKw_kyyMVzbKJm2AuN1NMYUwtFg_8wQaqyNw9R_ug2c/edit?usp=sharing

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These are the profiles of fictitious countries set within The Mighty Universe.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1QINHPncLge0cpQ7NuJLDsGFllm4V07whYCSjNy34Bfg/edit?usp=drivesdk

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The Mighty: Season 3
Chapter 14

Genre: Superheroes, Action, Fantasy, Sci-fi
Word Count: 3,950 (13 pages)
Synopsis: Caroline is plagued by dreams and visions of a figure who questions who she is.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1tKw_kyyMVzbKJm2AuN1NMYUwtFg_8wQaqyNw9R_ug2c/edit?usp=sharing

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The Mighty: Season 3
Chapter 15

Genre: Superheroes, Action, Fantasy, Sci-fi
Word Count: 3,456 (13 pages)
Synopsis: Ares and the other gods have appeared. The heroes go to Themiscyra to confront them, but a powerful enemy arrives as well.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1tKw_kyyMVzbKJm2AuN1NMYUwtFg_8wQaqyNw9R_ug2c/edit?usp=sharing

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The Mighty: Season 3
Chapter 16

Genre: Superheroes, Action, Fantasy, Sci-fi
Word Count: 3,210 (12 pages)
Synopsis: The time for secrecy is at an end, what was hidden now lays bare. The team finally faces the one who has been observing them all this time.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1tKw_kyyMVzbKJm2AuN1NMYUwtFg_8wQaqyNw9R_ug2c/edit?usp=sharing

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The Cosmic Ray (Short Story)

Genre: Superheroes, Action, Sci-fi, Fantasy
Word Count: 6,923 (19 pages)
Synopsis: Kaneele is a reeshian space marine with barely adequate qualifications as a marine. When she suffers a tragedy on a mission she is chosen to wield the powers of the Cosmic Ray. She must find her purpose and how to be a hero.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/17h2-GnTMl0S0IApBqPiIpvNgQ0olsFj6g2kZE8oWKVE/edit?usp=sharing

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The Mighty: Season 3
Chapter 17

Genre: Superheroes, Action, Sci-fi, Fantasy
Word Count: 2,205 (9 pages)
Synopsis: After all recent events the team finds a moment to breathe, but Omega is still planning.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1tKw_kyyMVzbKJm2AuN1NMYUwtFg_8wQaqyNw9R_ug2c/edit?usp=sharing

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The Mighty: Season 3
Chapter 18

Genre: Superheroes, Action, Adventure, Sci-fi, Fantasy
Word Count: 2,332 (11 pages)
Synopsis: The time has come to test the mettle of Sable. A monumental task lies ahead, and his teammates are not who he would expect.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1tKw_kyyMVzbKJm2AuN1NMYUwtFg_8wQaqyNw9R_ug2c/edit?usp=sharing

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The Mighty: Season 3
Chapter 19

Genre: Superheroes, Action, Adventure, Sci-fi, Fantasy
Word Count: 2,112 (10 pages)
Synopsis: Time and space are breaking, the Shards are consuming the timelines. It's up to Sable and the others to defeat the Beast and defeat all the Shards.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1tKw_kyyMVzbKJm2AuN1NMYUwtFg_8wQaqyNw9R_ug2c/edit?usp=sharing

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The Mighty: Season 3
Chapter 20

Genre: Superheroes, Action, Adventure, Sci-fi, Fantasy
Word Count: 2,031 (10 pages)
Synopsis: The Sables head towards the second Shard and find a terrible world and a disturbing foe.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1tKw_kyyMVzbKJm2AuN1NMYUwtFg_8wQaqyNw9R_ug2c/edit?usp=sharing

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The Mighty: Season 3
Chapter 21

Genre: Superheroes, Action, Adventure, Sci-fi, Fantasy
Word Count: 2,722 (13 pages)
Synopsis: The Sable head towards the third Shard and find themselves in an even more challenging situation. Time is running out.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1tKw_kyyMVzbKJm2AuN1NMYUwtFg_8wQaqyNw9R_ug2c/edit?usp=sharing

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The Mighty: Season 3
Chapter 22

Genre: Superheroes, Action, Adventure, Sci-fi, Fantasy
Word Count: 2,666 (12 pages)
Synopsis: An old foe returns and terrorizes an already hurt timeline. Time has run out for the Sables. The Shards must be stopped.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1tKw_kyyMVzbKJm2AuN1NMYUwtFg_8wQaqyNw9R_ug2c/edit?usp=sharing

torpid raven
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We're in the final stretch ladies and gentlemen. The final stretch of Season 3.

molten rover
torpid raven
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It's over. It has been done.

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The Mighty: Season 3
Chapter 23

Genre: Superheroes, Action, Adventure, Sci-fi, Fantasy
Word Count: 2,554 (12 pages)
Synopsis: One last fight. One last chance. The fate of the universe lays on our heroes' hands.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1tKw_kyyMVzbKJm2AuN1NMYUwtFg_8wQaqyNw9R_ug2c/edit?usp=sharing