Basic Deco 3

[half void]

In 3 days worth of attempts this is the only passable structure I've managed to make for this exercise, I kinda suck at deco so I'd appreciate even the most nitpicky of feedback

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[half void]

other screenshots

inspiration

[jovial forge]

i will give some fb soon

[jovial forge]

okay, so a few things

1. i would suggest having a few more layers of deco in general

it'll help with depth a lot and make things more interesting

take this for example

segmenting it and having two separate layers like this

immediately makes it a lot more interesting

while on that topic of segmenting, it's fairly boring to have every single segment be a rectangle

try having some more variety

[half void]

this is the structure

[jovial forge]

here's an example of what i might do for structures

[jovial forge]

ik ik

im just going through things with the WIP screenshots bc it makes it easier to make points on the more fundamental things

like the structure shape

fixing those issues will help a ton after all

[half void]

fair, go on

[jovial forge]

and even before you get to more intricate details it will make things look more interesting

this is a fairly specific example but you do this a few times throughout the structures: be careful with overlapping details that are blending / have low opacity

it makes things look quite messy, another example is here with the connector blocks

plus, these low opacity / blending details stand out less, and while youll want that for some details, doing it everywhere makes the details less effective

[jovial forge]

on that note: you have a similar issue with the details here as with the structures

a lot of these details are very repetitive; for instance, all squares

or all connectors

if you vary things even a little bit it'll look far more interesting

e.g., changing the size of some details

this is a good example i think, lemme break it down for you

https://tenor.com/view/break-dancing-gif-17724132266718964003

ok so, the ground here

most of the stuff here is just "rectangles" right

but there are slight differences

the most obvious difference here is just the size

some are way larger, some are way smaller

but besides that, some of them aren't rectangles; theyre trapezoids, or pentagons, or other irregular shapes

makes it look more interesting and also natural, like it wouldnt surprise you to see that kind of variety

similar example here, with the blocks. i think this works well because i also used a lot of the same objs as you, so you can see a pretty direct example of some ways to use them

for instance

the part behind the m etal here

is just the same object, copy-pasted twice

but each time, i changed the scale and the opacity

varuety'

and when i do repeat details, it's only in a small segment, not in the entire thing

that, or i copy-paste a detail and change some small aspect of it

you can also see this sort of variety when looking at the reference, for instance these windows are basically the same but their colors are different

same goes with these windows

stuff like that makes it look a lot more interesting

@half void

so to summarize,

• make the structure shapes more varied
• try to stack layers of (not opaque/blending) deco to make things more interesting
• try to make the details more varied; if you're copy-pasting details, try to either make small changes to them between copying (e.g., size, rotation, skew), or limit how much you copy-paste them without changing anything

[half void]

alright, thank you so much for the help, later I'll try to revamp my original submission in accordance with your advice

[jovial forge]

sounds good

and no prob

[nocturne acorn]

@half void

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[half void]

At long last I have completed the first (and hopefully last) revision of this deco exercise, I'll still welcome any feedback possible

[jovial forge]

soooo much cleaner

love it

now im rly getting into nitpick territory lol

[half void]

dive in, don't hesitate

[jovial forge]

the way the dark part overlaps with the brighter section is a biit awkward, id personally add an outline so it doesnt look as odd

same goes for these places

id lowkey consider darkening the BG and including some neon glow on this, that way it'll stand out + look pretty cool

(neon glow is just the hue shifting described in this guide)

and you could lowkey do the same with the non-blending glow here

in fact, if you make that red glow blending + neon, add a white / yellow outline at the base, and add a deep red blending overlay on top, it could look really damn cool

[half void]

(also just realized the ugly layering issue here, fixed it)

[jovial forge]

and thats about it for what id personally change

oh i didnt even see that lol

also slight nitpick: id personally add corner glow here!

like, the 45 degree corner glow would fit pretty well

make it feel like its not as harsh of a cutoff

gonna put this on pending again, hopefully the bot wont close it; if it does just make a new post lol

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[nocturne acorn]

@half void

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[half void]

alright, thanks so much for the feedback again, I'll get to work tomorrow

[jovial forge]

sounds good, and no prob

[half void]

I've completed the second revision of my structure. I've added some more details and tried making changes in accordance with your advice. First off I have to state I completely do not understand how to hue shift in order to achieve a neon glow, I've been looking on the internet and experimenting for like half an hour but this is my best attempt at replicating that. Also I added corner glows to cutoffs at spikes, but decided to keep them as they are in other places. I like to think the dark parts just block out the light (though I am fully aware that's not how light works at all). Again, feedback would be appreciated

[jovial forge]

for hue shifting i have it in a few videos, lemme pull them up

https://youtu.be/P2r4Z5kbx7M?t=770&si=_pqYLM5UzmnTFLbJ

https://youtu.be/ThFRTGlkycc?t=475&si=VUjc5dS3gyfarmvN

[jovial forge]

besides that, id brighten the light grays in these areas

so they stand out more

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@half void

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[half void]

alright thanks, will check those out

[jovial forge]

np!

[half void]

think I get it, would something like this cut it?

[jovial forge]

yuppp

🎯

love it

night and day difference

[half void]

excellent, love to hear that

[jovial forge]

could probs include some gradients on these parts too once you get the hang of it

[half void]

I'll try playing around with it now, this is too fun

[half void]

Alright, this is what I ended up with after a bit of tinkering around. I'm incredibly happy with how the glow looks, thank you so much for letting me know about hue shifting. Then again, I might have overdone it a little, so lmk if that's the case

Also like, even though there's definitely plenty of room for improvement, I'm really impressed, and even proud of myself. If someone told me a week ago I'd make something like that I wouldn't believe them

I mean, this was my peak just yesterday. Crazy

I'm eagerly awaiting even more feedback