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ripe frigateBOT
pine epoch
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holy shit

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also i think its hilarious you have a “headcanons” for your own character

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okay im curious have you had this character in mind for awhile?

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my comments
-im kinda confused on how his quirk works, i feel like the description should have a little more explanation on how his quirk effects him like how the hydration levels are related to what seem to be like plasma beams.
-also mistake in the fact that he wears his coat over his suit not vice versa
-i think you should include a number in the hero ranking tab or maybe in parentheses add the fact that he isnt ranked like shinso
-im also curious on if over usage in terms of using too many rings in succession has a factor in burnout, dehydration or even potential burning to the user
-for his ultimate move is his shield really "unbreakable" or is the durability just insanely high, in the same regard since the shield is made of a superheated energy can opposing types of energy (such as a super cooled one or another super heated one) make him burnout faster or the potential breaking of the shield even in its much more durable state?

@mellow solar

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also i hope you dont mind but im going to steal some of your categories and put them in my sheet (ultimate moves, fun facts, and more in depth explanations for weaknesses and strengths)

mellow solar
# pine epoch okay im curious have you had this character in mind for awhile?

yes!! 🙌

-oh yeah i should probably do something abt that and write it, but basically the plasma beams are mainly made by the water in Yuzu’s body… i’ll work on the explanation actually in a bit

-oh yeah my bad

-will do! yeah he won’t be ranked either

-yeah! if the user uses too many beams at once or uses multiple beams at a time then water levels decrease far quicker too… like

-his shield isn’t technically “unbreakable” it’s just insanely high durability and there are no current reports of his shield ever being broken in ultimate usage

-YES! opposing forms of energy can cause burnout faster, and if it’s the same temperature as the shield then it will shatter on impact like metaphorical glass

also i dont mind go pop off on categories!
i’ll prolly add more soon but yeah feel free to use them, i actually based my format on yours lmaooo

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but yeah i’ve had yuzu’s character in mind for a couple of months actually and that one-two year gap with studies before entering the underground hero scene is when a lot of his lore takes place!
for example the dreams, mysterious book, and mango nickname are all related to that

mellow solar
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alright I've updated the doc

pine epoch
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just reread it and i love how diverse the quirk is also W changes and further explanations into the quirk and its weaknesses and i LOVE the zapway ultimate move! Also W insanely real and canon Unzari cameo

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i love how naturally i can imagine your character into mha

mellow solar
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so true so true hash

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😌 we need a Unzari and Yuzuto team up mission

vocal adder
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That’s a lot of words

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I might read them

pine epoch
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@mellow solar not saying you should change it but i feel like the dialogue from the nezu interview seems a little odd coming from him. I think it might be a little better coming from a former trainer of sorts? the more combat oriented speech and improvements upon that combat might sound better coming from a hero he was a former sidekick of

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just a thought tho no pressure!!

mellow solar
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ty hash TenkoPat

mellow solar
pine epoch
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yipee!!!

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also you left a giant “insert text here” message at the top of your doc 😭

mellow solar
vocal adder
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Im gunna read ur thing almon

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Trust

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Right nose

pine epoch
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@mellow solar i have more griping to do, i dont feel like the interview with gunhead is properly positioned from his point of view, by this i mean
-it would fit better if gunhead spoke from a pov of Yuzu being a former colleague than a student if i had to like exemplify i would say it like this
"My star pupil? What did he do this time? No but Night comet as a hero has also intrigued me with his adaptability, to use a quirk most would see as a curse as your greatest weapon was enough alone for me to want to learn more about him. In missions I thought i was going crazy when i started hearing his attacks match up to his hums! But every time he managed to surprise me when matching his fighting to the rhythm gave him the boost he needed to prevail. Despite getting knocked down he gets up fast and doesnt let the same thing knock him down again. He even seemed to pick something up ive seen happening with another hero, Tsumannani where he feeds and reasons with the villain after capture. As a person, Yuzuto Kikkõ is fabulous! Despite his day time schedule, he would always make time to go around various hero schools and provide guest presentations at a moments notice. Despite his "less than professional" methods, I always hear Yuzuto peaks students’ interest and always happy smiles and hand raises."

obviously dont take what i said word for word just take some of the differences in dialect i use and edit how you see fit!

i feel like a similar issue is present in the villain interview where the villain seems more of a descriptor than person, i recommend using things like the demons speaking about the Pillars (from demon slayer) to get the sort of vibe i feel is missing

mellow solar
# pine epoch <@1319512482129252486> i have more griping to do, i dont feel like the interview...

‼️ you're right!
to be honest i didn't actually reword anything i just removed words relating to nezu yesterday so im definitely gonna have to rework it
do you mind if i use your depiction to replace the original?
also with the villain segment ur right, i'm not TOO great at actual verbal conversation writing so yeah... definitely made sense that it felt like a descriptor isntead
dekuthanks!!!
i'll be sure to work on em rn
then i'll do maxaraki

pine epoch
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and its no problem!!

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i always like reading the updates to your oc's page

mellow solar