fossil canopy
This is an idea I've had for a while. It's obviously much harder to write haikus in toki pona compared to any other language, but I think that's what makes it so appealing to me.
Given the phonology of toki pona, there are two ways to write a haiku:
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Using syllables: This is the way that haikus are written in English. Syllable final /n/ is not counted separately, and thus ko and kon are both worth one phonetic unit
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Using morae: This is the way haikus are written in Japanese. Syllable final /n/ is counted as a separate phonetic unit, so that ko is worth one unit, and kon is worth two. Japanese has other ways of distinguishing syllables from morae, like vowel length, but this is the only distinction that can be replicated in toki pona. This method is closer to how haikus are traditionally composed, but it makes writing them even harder.
Please specify which method your using As @silver rivet mentioned, the main point of haikus is their theme and observational, non-judgemental language. While I personally enjoy the limit of 5-7-5, especially as it effects toki pona, structure is not what defines a haiku, and you are more than free to stray away from 5-7-5.
You could try writing a tanka, which is like a haiku, but a little longer. Traditionally, there are two extra 7-on lines in a Tonka compared to a Haiku
With all that said, I'll start with a syllabic haiku I wrote around an hour ago, about the rain;
telo li anpa
laso li wawa tan ni
sewi li anpa
Good luck
grizzled moon
orchid hearth
mental totem
silver rivet
warm egret
pastel thistle
uncut osprey