#Warped Realities

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take your chapter 1

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fluid shell
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New fic hath appeared

pine bane
fluid shell
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Wonder what mischievous things will pour forth from The Rend monkdevious

vernal ridge
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Sait timeline

pine bane
vernal ridge
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A quick fight but good saintunyoy

pine bane
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ngl i might post chapter 2 tmrw

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just to get a bit of a start

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before i switch to ao3

vernal ridge
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saintunyoy write on, writer

pine bane
fluid shell
pine bane
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oh and i think ill take the text from google docs and paste it here

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for c2

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instead of sending images

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bc thats uhh

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kinda weird ig

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to just

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send an image

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my wording is horrible please forgive me

vernal ridge
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Don't worry, we are all wording monkcheese

pine bane
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im gonna start working on c2 now

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here we go

vernal ridge
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saintunyoy sometimes hombre, we cool with broken English because ain't even my first language

pine bane
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alr heres a chapter 2 draft.

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shit its too long

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welp

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gonna split it up

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Dusk woke up with a start this cycle, feeling the cold breeze once again. He exited the shelter, heading deeper into the Icy Monument.

He took his spear off his back, the tip stained with dried blood from the earlier fighting. He could hear more fighting a few rooms over, but he decided not to investigate.

He traveled upwards, before he saw two laser sights. Dusk sighed, knowing what was to come.

A King Vulture swooped down, pointing its tusks at Dusk. He quickly stepped out of the way, dodging the first harpoon, but the second one managed to graze his arm.

He quickly took action, grabbing onto one of the tusks and getting to the large vulture as it pulled back its tusk.

A brutal killing followed, with Dusk angrily tearing through the Vultureā€™s head, with tooth, claw, and spear alike.

The King Vulture soon dropped to the ground, dead. Dusk ate from the carcass, before he left the room and entered the Monument again.

He went through room after room once more, fighting scavengers and lizards along his way, before he saw a lone slugpup being restrained by a centipede.

The slugpup was clearly scared, and it showed as it tried to struggle out of the centipedeā€™s grip. It was too strong, however, and it began to close in on the slugpup with its other head.

Dusk immediately went in for the kill, slicing through the centipedeā€™s shells with ease. It eventually dropped dead like the King Vulture.

The slugpup slowly walked over to Dusk, before climbing onto his back. Dusk gently took it off his back, before slowly etching a message into the wall with his spear.

ā€œScraps?ā€ The message said. The slugpup slowly looked at the message and back at Dusk, before nodding. The slugpup, now named Scraps, climbed onto Duskā€™s back once again.

He went along with his journey, making sure Scraps didnā€™t fall off his back, before he noticed a smaller centipede walking on a wall.

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Without thinking, Scraps went for the centipede, grabbing it off the wall and sinking their teeth into it. The centipede struggled slightly before falling limp. Scraps walked back over to Dusk, centipede blood staining their fur.

Dusk picked up Scraps again, putting them on his back before he continued his search for a new shelter. He was walking through a room, before a sudden growling stopped him. He turned around, finding a massive lizard with a scythe-like growth at the end of its tail, and a growing rift behind it. The lizard instantly charged at Dusk, knocking his spear away from him. Scraps, out of fear, ran and hid.

There wasnā€™t a choice now. It was a life or death situation.

Dusk went for a strike, slashing at the lizard with his claws. He managed to stick his claws through the lizardā€™s tough skin, before biting at it. The ā€œReaperā€ lizard responded with a few slices with its tail-scythe. Dusk couldnā€™t dodge these, since his claws were still in the lizardā€™s skin, and as a result he was thrown off, bleeding from his eye. Dusk pushed through the pain, biting and scratching at the lizard.

This back and forth went on for a while, but eventually Dusk managed to grab his spear and plunge it through the lizardā€™s armored head, killing it. He then collapsed from exhaustion, too tired and weak to move.

Scraps exited their hiding spot, running over to Dusk. They grabbed him by his arm, dragging him through the Monument and leaving a trail of blood behind until they found a popcorn plant. Scraps ate from it before continuing their journey.

They eventually found a shelter, pushing Duskā€™s body inside before they entered. They curled up next to his bleeding body, falling asleep again.

vernal ridge
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Scugpup strong to drag Dusk around hunterthinking

Also I'm bad at criticizing tho but I find it neat

pine bane
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i didnt want to just

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kill dusk off within the first 3 chapters

vernal ridge
pine bane
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i will admit

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anyways im prob not gonna do c3 until i get my ao3 invite

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so around a week

vernal ridge
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And also when invite?

pine bane
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so in a week

vernal ridge
pine bane
vernal ridge
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slugheadboom I forgot Barren Conduits

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It seems I never went to that place anyway hunterthinking

pine bane
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i forgot if it was forgotten conduit or barren conduits

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and then i just searched it up

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and realized forgotten conduit was the fucking gutter

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and i also forgot the gutter existed

vernal ridge
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yeah i need to relearn the rw regions

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for some reason i can remember pipeyard but not the gutter šŸ˜­

remote beacon
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šŸ’„

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boom

pine bane
pine bane
pine bane
vernal ridge
pine bane
vernal ridge
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A true writer man saintunyoy

For the sake of character development, and for content we must kill our ocs

pine bane
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god damn it idk what to write for c3

pine bane
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k chapter 3 is done

vernal ridge
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Also, sometimes the forum would disappear after a few days without chatting rivflabbergasted

pine bane
vernal ridge
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It is sometimes an inconvenience rivflabbergasted

pine bane
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have you lost your forum a few times because of that or

autumn dirge
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it doesn't get destroyed, it just no longer appears on the little popdown on the side there

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ohh

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got it

vernal ridge
autumn dirge
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By the way, I've been meaning to say, your writing is good! You have good structure and your descriptions are pretty vivid. Though I think it would benefit from more detail and length, as well as some more characterization of our protagonists.

pine bane
autumn dirge
vernal ridge
pine bane
pine bane
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yall

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should dusk die?

vernal ridge
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At the hands of the author rivevil

pine bane
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interactive wr, real

vernal ridge
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What fate awaits them rivevil

pine bane
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just take a vote

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ill check back in a few mins

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yknow what ill just spin a wheel

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with some emphasis on no but

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it is what it is

vernal ridge
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Coin flip hunterglee

pine bane
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wheel chose no

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bc i gave it a 67% chance

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should i redo with a 50-50

vernal ridge
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Coinflip
Coinflip

pine bane
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k

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coin flip coin flip

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wheel chose no

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even with 5050

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should i just do a coinfli

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coinflip

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instead of a wheel

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k fine im doing it idc

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heads is kill him tails is nuh uh

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here we go

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welp

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it said tails

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hes not dead

vernal ridge
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Aight

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Fate already decided saintunyoy

pine bane
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discord really needs a mass delete option

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also should i tag wr as interactive or not

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or maybe wait until i make another fic

vernal ridge
pine bane
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it would be cool if i made a completely interactive fic

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like a permadeath one

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where if you make the wrong choice you die

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and it ends prematurely

vernal ridge
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But, do they have super turbo cancer? slugeyessad

pine bane
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no

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you just

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play rw

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in a story format

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kinda

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idk

vernal ridge
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huntershruggy works for me

pine bane
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ofc ill make it after i finish warped realities

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im not gonna manage two fics at once

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nuh uh

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alr 200 more words have been written

pine bane
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chapter 4 is done! 1500 words, whew

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or at least the draft. i'll go through it again

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eh, i think it's good enough

pine bane
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well uhh

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guess ill post c3 here?

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i wont make you guys wait for it

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oh, and just a side note

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im gonna try and make every chapter from now on at least 1500 words

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so you guys get more stuff to read

pine bane
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bump i guess? i dunno

vernal ridge
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E x t e n d

pine bane
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well, i have a goal for wr now

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thats good

pine bane
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gonna bump this so it doesnt disappear

vernal ridge
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Must type saintsmirk

pine bane
pine bane
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the writing continues

vernal ridge
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Do remember to take rest when needed huntercool

pine bane
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bump

vernal ridge
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You can extend the days in the settings saintunyoy

pine bane
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i think ill alternate between 1 month of WR and 1 month of AtW

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speaking of which i should make a forum post about atw

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nvm i wont

pine bane
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wr bump real (why am i doing this)

vernal ridge
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To keep it alive

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-# i should be safe here

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-# i think so at least

vernal ridge
pine bane
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hey!

fluid shell
pine bane
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this is my territory

vernal ridge
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Welp, gonna disappear for a moment monkcheese

pine bane
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you cant barge in here

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and expect to get away with it

vernal ridge
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-# latah disappears

pine bane
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bumping up wr until atw and atw 2 finish

pine bane
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wr bump, again