Rain World: Deserted

[abstract tundra]

Hosted by @final crypt

[final crypt]

tysm!!!

Anywho I'll be posting the prologue n all

RW: DRENCH, PROLOGUE

CHAPTER 1: How have a heart when its rotted away?

CHAPTER 2: I have no lungs, yet I must breathe.

CHAPTER 3: The Aeon

Please keep in mind this is for convienience for those who wanna read my fic n all and also for theories and stuffsc which I'f be glad to hear!!^^

I'll also be showing some art n all as well :]

[sinful fossil]

Good stuff :3 Can't wait to read where this will lead to. You have chosen some very inspiring themes here ^^

[final crypt]

I love writing stuff, I'm happy to inspire all!

And I should be dping chapter 4 today

I work pretty fast so

Also as chapter 3 promises the name of the itwrator shqll.be revealed

either in 4 or 5, most likely 5 though

[sinful fossil]

Looking forward to it ^^
I will soon finish up chapter 3 of my story as well. In a few days most likely, maybe tomorrow

[final crypt]

I look forward to it!!

[analog zodiac]

I read it!! New scug alert

Poor auto is going through it

What is this mystery scug’s deal?? very interesting

[final crypt]

I can't say much regarding his Iterator, but lets just say he's the Yang part of something..

[final crypt]

well, technically the Yin

[final crypt]

Hmm

Do I do chapter 5 todayxx

I mean Im on a roll but at the same timw

I might burn out cos of doin constant stuff

[gusty hearth]

||should there be a double "to" there? Also typo in "following"||

[final crypt]

That was my bad I'll go and fix it

Fixed

[gusty hearth]

||should be "a__n__ inside". Also, "an inside section/area" I guess? Feels kinda odd atm imo, do as you wish tho||

||also typo in "live"||

[final crypt]

hwuahh😭

[gusty hearth]

||shouldn't this be in past tense? Also idk this feels weird, maybe just "should retire if"? Idk||

[gusty hearth]

I come to torment yet another person with proofreading >:)

[final crypt]

i forgot into

soemtimes I think I type thingd and then it doesnt show up

[gusty hearth]

And also the tense i guess

[final crypt]

?

[gusty hearth]

Well everything seems to be written as if it was in the past and then this part is as if in the present

However honestly I can't help much in this regard cause I am dogshit at tenses

[final crypt]

Well the story does take place in the past

If you mean the after part

Its because their mission is to get to the top of the rig

well, for now anyways

[gusty hearth]

Yeah and then that one part with the retirement was written as it if was considering it like at this very moment

[final crypt]

Well, how do you suppose I fix it?/nf

AHG

my keyboard is fucking me up😭

[gusty hearth]

||"it was starting to think it should retire"|| is my guess

[final crypt]

oo ok

wait what

[gusty hearth]

Honestly i'm bad at tenses so I might be wrong here? But i'm fairly certain

[final crypt]

oh wait i read wrong nb

Wait

Isnt

'It was' the same as "It's" in this context?

ok then fixed!!

Anything else?

[gusty hearth]

This just kinda feels weird but idk

Here missing quotation mark after ||angler||

[final crypt]

screaming

[gusty hearth]

"lookit"? A typo i guess? Idk

Here should be "their's" I think

[final crypt]

not a typo, just how Angler said it

[gusty hearth]

Gotcha

[final crypt]

no apostro for theirs

iirc

[gusty hearth]

Right, yeah, so "theirs" instead of "there's"

[final crypt]

yeah

[gusty hearth]

Shouldn't it be "by themselves"? But tbh i am not sure

[final crypt]

Themselves would imply there is more than one, themself is like a pronoun, thunk of they/them

Technically its supoised to be theirself

i believe so

fixed

Idk if the story is interesting since youre helping me proofread so😭

[gusty hearth]

It is interesting so far but I just have this thing where i can't just see an error and not do something about it, no offence

||the King died :(||

[final crypt]

Nono its good

I need to be proofread, a friend of mine told me errors break immersion and I cant help but agree

[final crypt]

||Unfortunately yeah😭||

[analog zodiac]

BUMP

Now it is… undead!

[tender kelp]

Magic ✨

[analog zodiac]

(Oooo is this a Rain World: Deserted reference???)

[final crypt]

(Maybe?? Perhaps?? Coincedently???)

I just realized i cant commision ppl to do art for this because i dont have a payment method💀

[analog zodiac]

Yeah need a card for PayPal or something

[final crypt]

yeahh unless like cashapp

but still id meed a credit card

i surprisingly don't have one yet

[analog zodiac]

I think I got my first card around 16 when I started driving

[final crypt]

Nice

My mom unfortunately is late to every thing I need in my life(aka she kinda holds me back on shit untik she feels like letting me have certain things like a csrd)

[gusty hearth]

Fuckin uhh paysafecard

Only the finest payment methods

[sinful fossil]

Paysafecards. God, that takes me back.

[final crypt]

how the fuck do i put money on da card though(despite being almost a senior, i still dont know how to do basic human functions)

[gusty hearth]

uh so paysafe card is basically you go to a store chain which supports it, you ask for one with x funds, they give you a receipt with a code (you pay for it (duh))

then you can use that code to pay someplace that supports it or add funds to a psc account

[final crypt]

ohh