Beyond the Shell

[north herald]

all unique pearls hunter is up for grabs :)

[gleaming snow]

Nono

Do it

[fluid ridge]

lmao, my time would be so easy to beat, gourm movement is my final boss

[gleaming snow]

Eh, every run will be beaten eventually

[fluid ridge]

also is the exhaustion meter allowed in runs?

[gleaming snow]

No

[fluid ridge]

i need it so baddddd, i cant do with out it

[fluid ridge]

im doomed

[gleaming snow]

Oh by the way, Harbp0 did a gourm pebbies run

[fluid ridge]

ohhh

guess i was to slow

no free world record for me ig

[gleaming snow]

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Vc4ohOiYo3g

49:51

Not optimized, I think, so you can beat it maybe?

[fluid ridge]

mine would be even less optimized

i did gourm like twice, and my first run took 20 hours

[fluid ridge]

guess i have to go for that one now

[gleaming snow]

Do gourm any%

Nobody has run it I think?

[fluid ridge]

ahhhh perfect

gimmi that one day world record fame so i can brag about being a former world record holder

what is the pilgrimage run btw?

[gleaming snow]

Echoes and ascend

[fluid ridge]

oh, all echos i guess?

[gleaming snow]

No, only up to 10 karma

[fluid ridge]

ah okay

man i got so off track, its now almost midnight and i just did not continue with the script at all

meh, there is always tomorrow

[north herald]

Hm so the hunter pebbles% run seems quick and easy

Or monk moon%

[gleaming snow]

Ummm

[north herald]

Also a lot of the challenge speedruns have no submissions

[gleaming snow]

Moon% is notorious for horrendous rng

[north herald]

Jetfish?

[gleaming snow]

Yeah, you can do those

[fluid ridge]

is there a list somewhere for those?

[gleaming snow]

They would be very rng reliant though

Under misc categories

The arrow thingy

[north herald]

I kinda suck at challenges but I think I have a few of those done

[north herald]

It's basically in groups of 7, 1-7, 8-14, etc, in the other categories

Well the challenges are grouped, the speedruns are under some other categories

[gleaming snow]

This thingy

[fluid ridge]

ohhhhh, those chalanges

[north herald]

Hm, 22-28 is up for grabs but it does feature babysitting which i am yet to do

Idk i will look at speedrunning later

[gleaming snow]

If you want a fun introductory speedrun, do monk pebbles% or monk any% if you want a shorter run

[north herald]

Well it's not like I can play for the next week or so but I will think about it

Anyways, geez, it's late all of a sudden, cya folks

[gleaming snow]

Cya

[fluid ridge]

same her, night!

[fluid ridge]

daily update log [66]
ohhh lord....
im already at 54 check point for chapter 9 and im still only at the opening
i knew the next two chapters might get a bit longer than the rest, but this is just a lot more than i had imagined.
if i didnt have all the chapters contents and structure planned out already, i would have split chapter 9 into at the very least three separate chapters

[fluid ridge]

tiny update before i leave, my unfinished script for chapter 9 is officially longer than the entirety of chapter 1
im so fucked when i begin to write it all out

[north herald]

this is getting out of hand

[next temple]

Snowball phenomenon is real

[north herald]

1. How do you check the word count of an individual chapter?
2. Huh

wait what do you mean 20 planned chapters

[next temple]

1. Ao3 doesn't have that feature I think

[north herald]

Dang

[gleaming snow]

You could always copy paste the entire chapter into a writing program and see the amount of words in there

[north herald]

Okay, subscription emails show individual word counts but that's not retroactive

And one of the emails is missing cause maintneance i guess

Behold my chart (trust me it's real) :)

Made with the most top of the line tools

[next temple]

Time to buy stock...

[north herald]

Invest NOW

[ornate grail]

I REALLY GOTTA START BTSHELL....

[north herald]

Yeah BTS hell is a great fic you gotta read it

[fluid ridge]

for indvidual chapters i just copy paste them in a word counter

as for the second one, im as shocked as you that someone put my work in one of their collections

[fluid ridge]

just as it says

[fluid ridge]

if i had to guess it will look like that

[north herald]

Long road ahead?

[fluid ridge]

im still not sure if i should hate or love that nickname

[fluid ridge]

well after chapter 10 im definetly going on a break, if guess worst case scenaryo the end will be reached in 6 months

[north herald]

That's not how graphs work, I think

[fluid ridge]

i just have no clue how logn the chapters will be when i reach chapter 11

9 will be way to fucking long

10 should be a bit shorter

after that no clue

[north herald]

Ah, a new arc or sth?

[fluid ridge]

i guess?

one of my two major planed arcs (if that counts) is related to the scav stuff and that will end with chapter 10

[north herald]

||and the other is moon i assume?||

[fluid ridge]

well caling it a major arc may be a bit much, maybe more of a side story i had planed out since the start

[fluid ridge]

||i wish, but she will apear like not at all ||

[north herald]

||moon left in the dust? ||

[fluid ridge]

||i guess the tags may be misleading, maybe i should throw her character tag and relationship tag with pebbs out||

[fluid ridge]

||i had them since she was the main pov in chapter one but other than that there isnt much||

[tranquil yoke]

||UI walking all the way to pebbles in a funny RW roadtrip ?||

[fluid ridge]

dont tempt me

[north herald]

Not the other way around?

[tranquil yoke]

just saying I'd read that fic in a heartbeat

[north herald]

||so she's just "dead" until the very end, gotcha lmao||

[fluid ridge]

||who says she doesnt just stay dead
maybe she is off the cord too and is just walkiong around killing everyone ||

[tranquil yoke]

||Why do you think SRS wasn't able to reach UI at the end of the most recent chap's logs? I have my theories ||

[fluid ridge]

wow, you found out my biggest plot twist!!! how did you get your hands on my scritp

[north herald]

||well uh the prologue does not show her in too good of a position ||

[tranquil yoke]

A good twist is one the reader can conceivably see coming, after all

[fluid ridge]

i always love those twist where you have like the tinyst voice at the back of your head telling you that it might be the case, but you dont believe it only for it to than happen

it feels so great

you still get the twist but it doesnt feel like its out of nowhere

your like
"mannnnnn i thought that might be it but not for real!!!"

definitely my favorite kind of twist

[gleaming snow]

I love when you expect there to be a twist, but it never comes

[north herald]

||honestly this seems even more far fetched than that one CD theory so if it's real then... lmfao||

[fluid ridge]

||what is the CD theory?||

(not sure if that was a spoiler for sth)

[tranquil yoke]

||I think our author likes calloutpost too much for it not to be true ||

[north herald]

||the "shifting gales bodydouble" theory||

[fluid ridge]

ohhhhhh, lol i just got clued into that one receantly

[gleaming snow]

||This fic will end with FP and UI marrying, mark my words /silly||

[tranquil yoke]

||this one, Interloper, HFISH, hell, probably my fic too, somehow ||

[fluid ridge]

you all really need to stop tempting me, i need to follow the script, i need to follow the script, i need to follow the scritt!!!!!!!!

[north herald]

It's funny to rewatch something like the expanse where the authors like to throw a bit of foreshadowing everywhere, supposedly

[gleaming snow]

If they don't, you bet I'll write it myself

[fluid ridge]

||everything will turn out to be calloutpost propaganda||

[fluid ridge]

oh i have soooo much fucking forshadowing that im scared im acidantly just spoiling the entire thing

[north herald]

||epilogue of chapter 20 is UI barging into FP's chamber and kissing him ||

[north herald]

... oh shit

[fluid ridge]

like, i cant go 1000 words wihtout adding at least a tiny bit

[fluid ridge]

tho its getting better with the later chapters. less forshadowing, more random lore

[fluid ridge]

how does everyone have my script! darn you parry the script leaker

[north herald]

so what you are saying is go through first chapters again?

[fluid ridge]

i actually did add a tiny change in there after i had a little plan changer, but it definitly has some tiny things

and one big thing ig?

tho im not sure if that would be easy to spot

[north herald]

Curious

[fluid ridge]

but im still planing my big overall edit once i get up to chapter 10

do my maximum three months posting break and during that do some other stuff, but also edit all the chapters and finalize the script

i also did give myslef a hard deadline where i want chapter 10 to be out, wanna guess when

cause it is not nearly enough time, which is why im pumping out so much right now

[north herald]

Ehh, end of next month? End of holidays? (Sorry I was busy)

[fluid ridge]

nope, it has nothing to do with holidays or any of that stuff

actually, i could have started the fic whenever, and i would still have the same deadline

[north herald]

Well i'm gonna assume in like a month or two max

[north herald]

Hm this is quite something, then

[fluid ridge]

ugh, two months, i wish

why am i even doing this to myself

(because it would look cool)

[north herald]

what the hell is your date

Uhh

Hm

Some specific, cool-looking date...

[fluid ridge]

no date actually

more like, a certain amount of time has been reached

[north herald]

12th of August?

[fluid ridge]

well no acutally, it is a date of course, but its not as if i picked the day because of a specific date

[fluid ridge]

uhhhh

let me just count for myself

[north herald]

That would be 3 months since the fic started

Orrrr since this seems like something to be done quickly... 28th of July? August?

[fluid ridge]

nahhhh, im could never write two chapters that fast while working

[fluid ridge]

wait nononono

i mixed up months

[north herald]

so it's somewhere in the brackets between 1 and 2 months?

[fluid ridge]

whoopse

[north herald]

Ah wait

[fluid ridge]

yep

also sry for late replies, my interent is dying right now

again

[fluid ridge]

[north herald]

It's fiiiiiiine

19th of August?

I think that's one of my last ideas

[fluid ridge]

warmer

[fluid ridge]

what would be your reason?

[north herald]

That would give 5 months since you would join the server

[fluid ridge]

nth to do with server joining, i originally only joined due to rainworld merch shipping issues

but your on the right track

[north herald]

wait what are the odds that it's on your birthday

[fluid ridge]

nope

also darn this stupid slow internet

oh come onnnnjn

wait im back

[north herald]

It sent, huh

Discord having a stroke i guess

[fluid ridge]

i think it works better now

well no, its still slow but its better than before at least

[fluid ridge]

but yeah, it is related to a certain amount of time passing at that day, but not related to when i joined

not months tho

[north herald]

One of my last-ditch ideas is "time since you first played rain world" but my advanced espionage techniques (one search on steam) got nothing on that

[fluid ridge]

but how would that be related to the story

[north herald]

So it is related to the story

I don't recall any dates, i'd have to sweep through

[fluid ridge]

want like the biggest hint i can offer?

[north herald]

Uh one sec

Okay no clue i did notice this funny thing in ch.2 tho lmao (I think "unplugging" would sound more correct)

[fluid ridge]

always on duty i see

[north herald]

I was looking for that one part in there and noticed it

Honestly I should prolly sweep all of them at some point again cause the conditions I was doing those proofreads in were funny

[fluid ridge]

and what i need to do is completly rewrite chapter two and maybe three

those two are by far my least favourits

chapter five is also kinda meh for me, but its a lot better than the other two for me

[north herald]

Okay yeah no clue on that date hint please :)

[fluid ridge]

its like 100% related to the daily update logs number

[fluid ridge]

which is why i had to actually do the maths first to get the date

[north herald]

oh

[fluid ridge]

didnt even know it myself before that

[north herald]

I mean 69 would be funny but I think you would need to dedicate your life for the meme

So... 100?

[fluid ridge]

ding ding ding

im basic ik

but it would be cool

[north herald]

I keep on overthinking stuff

[fluid ridge]

half way point met on day 100? heck yeah

[fluid ridge]

seems like it

[north herald]

That gives an average of 10 days/chapter

[fluid ridge]

if i did the maths right its on the 14.08

realistic enough for me to meet, but still a little bit to few for me to ever be able to relax

[north herald]

Wait then this was completely off lmfao

First was 12.08 and then 19.08 which was "warmer"

[fluid ridge]

wait ughhh

i switched up august and july twice???

im so dumb

[north herald]

I count 'em on my fingers

[fluid ridge]

i count them in my head... and i miscounted

back to kinder garden i go

[north herald]

Off to preschool with ya

[fluid ridge]

noooooooo not again

i refuse

[next temple]

Caught up again!
Hm
Nah
I'm probably overthinking it, the first bits totally didn't have calloutpost agenda behind them at all /j

[fluid ridge]

not at all

[next temple]

Now it seems quite a bit more mysteries are presented now...
||Why the rot is dying?||
||What's in the safe? What did the ancients hide? ||
||Whats the deal with the scavs?||
||Innocence just accidentally had turned on her own filter or something happened?||
||Arti and The Heart??||

||also that last one, why do I think of that green goblin from spiderman1 scene ||

||The Heart, Osborne, First we attack the heart||

[fluid ridge]

nooooo

why out of all the things

[fluid ridge]

also yes!!! i love it when people ask questions about what will happen

[next temple]

Also, it's pretty obvious but
||Pebbles mentioning he had modified id drone before ||

👀

[fluid ridge]

hehehe

well i need to bring that dude up somehow if i want to justify|| giving a pov to him||

okay and now that i mentioned that

im actually struggeling with that one right now

that pov was one of the first things i wrote since i thohgt the idea was cool, and i just thought i will put at at the end of chapter 10 so i can officially leave the scav plot behind, but than i thought that i want a certain other end pov for that chapter since its the mid way point

but then i would have to put the ||scav king|| pov at the end of chapter 9 which would work ig but just doenst have the same impact

spoilers for the pov of the|| scav king|| but it will be ||a flash back that will only explain what and why the scavs were so weird all the time||, but since chapter 9 and 10 will be a two parter i just dont know if it fits in there

overall, what pov will i put at the end of chapter 9???

i dont wanna just make random povs, they are supposed to tell the reader sth at least, but who will it be?

i thought maybe ||arti again||, but i think it would be to early for that

[next temple]

Glance upward to that graph showing ch.9 will have beeg word counts
ah... a lot of things will happen huh
Well, since it'll be ||flashback pov|| whats stopping you from putting ||flashback first, then follows with that other pov immediately?||

there's that 'Two lines, no waiting' trope after all

[fluid ridge]

but than i would have two pov and im all for breaking formular, but for chapter nine it would be kinda out of place

chapter 10? sure

its the mid way poitn but chapter 9

alkdjglkaösgja

wait wait wait

yes!!!

just have two povs for chapter 10!!!

i can do that there

its chapter 10! big number, middle of the sotry

i can do whatever i want

breaking formular wouldlnt be to weird

perfect!!!

[next temple]

this applies to almost everything actually! just do what you feel its right

another way you could do is separate the ||flashback|| pov as 9.5 or interlude or something

but that could... kill the momentum

[fluid ridge]

i just really want the chapter count to be exactly 20

soooo

who will get the pov for chapter 9 then...

maybe the overseer?

eh, not really, i want the pov it gets later to have a big impact so i dont wanna give it one this early on again

maybe another forshadowing pov

[next temple]

big impact

what, you mean the ||near death moments|| before was not a big impact moment already???

[fluid ridge]

||well but that wasnt an actual death, now was it ||

[fluid ridge]

tho seriously, thx for the help!
now i dont have to change my plans that i wanted to put thorugh since the start but i can also add the other pov that i really want to write

[next temple]

anytime! glad to be of help!

[fluid ridge]

than back to writing i go. i spent the entire mornign editing the moon chapter from my older work and since im now completly done with that one i can go back to script writing

[north herald]

Oh I forgot to ask, have you ran the earlier chapters through grammarly just in case?

[fluid ridge]

yep

overworked everything with grammarly but you know... that thing doesnt have the best track recoed so i will just hope its good enough

[north herald]

Aye

[fluid ridge]

daily update log [67]
chapter 9 is at 93 checkpoints and i think im around the halfway point now (hopefully )

[next temple]

dare i ask...

...how many word counts so far?

[fluid ridge]

gimmi a sec

[next temple]

time skip!!!

[fluid ridge]

ugh i wish you hadnt

4 k words of script alone

and its still not done

grammarly is also having the time of its life since i dont bother writing grammatically correct in the script

but i think i should get a better systems with these check points

some describe sections that alone might be 1k words long and others are just one sentence

like one of my check points is just, pebbels gets bitch slapped with a rock and curses. those are two sentences, while another have so much more things i have to describe etc

[north herald]

how many checkpoints did ch8 have?

[fluid ridge]

56

[north herald]

what

[fluid ridge]

im screwed

[north herald]

Yeah, maybe

[fluid ridge]

daily update log [68]
im debating if i should cut the later parts of chapter 9 and make them the beginning of chapter 10. this thing is just to big otherwise, and i think it would flow okay even if i switch it around a bit. some problems would come up with that, mostly the fact that chapter 9 would then mostly be walking around and the few big developments that would have been in chapter 9 instead being pushed over to chapter 10 which is already heavily loaded with big developments, but i think it would just be nice to read that way.
not sure if i will end up doing it, but it is an idea that crossed my mind

[north herald]

Well, if you wanna balance out the word counts of the chapters, then sure

chapter 10: the developening

[fluid ridge]

chapter 10: vulture party

[fluid ridge]

thats the idea, also i think chapter 9 would have to much going on otherwise

[north herald]

chapter 9 is exclusively building tension

[fluid ridge]

okay yeah, i decided to put some of the ending parts from chapter 9 over to chapter 10. it also actually works, since i actually messed up in my notes and forgot that Amany Fields is not the Head of the House of Brairds but the Head of the House of Comets, and since i kinda just wrote that wrong in my notes and only realized that now i had to switch up a few thigns, and now everything actual works smoother

it might also help, that chapter 9 isnt too long anymore and its not all over the place with way to many things happening

ALSO, now that i put some stuff from chapter 9 over to 10, the script for chapter 9 is actually done with its roughly 93 check points

i also kinda realized that chapter 10 didnt have much going on so it actually works better if i put that stuff over there, so overall only positives

[north herald]

Smooth.

[fluid ridge]

daily update log [69]
cut a few checkpoints here and there and i am now finished with the chapter 9 scritp with 87 check points. i did think about writing the scirpt for chapter 10 now, but i think i would rather begin to write the chapter itself and see how it goes from there.
lets see how far i can get today

i also got myslef an endign pov, more setup stuff for later but that is what it usually is anway so it will work

[next temple]

I think that's a good idea. If you wrote the outline for ch.10 first, by the time you got to write chapter 9, it might grow bigger than you thought and then you would have to rewrite the outline again

[fluid ridge]

lmao, i already added way too much new stuff for chapter 10 anyway. i dont even wanna know how the script will turn out and if i should add the vulture/dropwig hell tower or not

[next temple]

Have ceilings: Dropwigs
Don't have ceilings: Vultures

[fluid ridge]

go up: vulture gang is coming for you
go down: get ready for the dropwig mafia

tbh, i highly belief that pebbles woulf fall for dropwigs way to easy

like, huhhhh, a convinient pearl just laying on the floor? dont mind if i do
gets dropwiged

[unborn vault]

Pebbles gets tired of getting jumped by creatures, creates EM railgun.

[fluid ridge]

6 checkponts done and they together are 2k words

now with a bit of math and if you woudl imagine for a second that i would keep that word count up you would have...

jesus

29000k words

yeah, that will probably not happen, but it is something to mention

[gleaming snow]

29 *million *words?

[fluid ridge]

oh wait no

29k

im dumb

[gleaming snow]

Anyways, looking forward to the next chapter

[fluid ridge]

eyyyy wait!!!

you have a wr!!!

congrats

which one is it?

[gleaming snow]

Thanks, Monk OE, had it for a while. The run is quite bad so it isn't particularly hard to beat

[fluid ridge]

wr is wr, still sth to be proud off

[gleaming snow]

No practice
I think I'll revisit it once I get better

You're very productive by the way. Making great progress

[fluid ridge]

im on a timer now so i have to be
stress truly is the perfect way to motivate me

[gleaming snow]

Timer? Remember to take breaks, though

[fluid ridge]

i want chapter 9 and 10 to be done with the 100 daily update log which isnt too much time since i stil have to go to work almost daily

plus i have an extra little thing planned for that as well

[north herald]

Oh?

[fluid ridge]

not saying what casue if i dont get it i dont have to feel bad about it

[north herald]

Oh

[fluid ridge]

but i will try

casue i think it would be reall neat

[next temple]

full anime adaptation!!

[fluid ridge]

yeah sure, why not. with calloutpost kiss and all

[north herald]

||BTS collab||

[fluid ridge]

nooooooo

[next temple]

BTS^2

[fluid ridge]

i really will put a lot more thought into my next name

never again

[next temple]

'One Pursuit, Paths Amany' || ||

[fluid ridge]

||||

[next temple]

Now you can write a side story one-shot from the ancient's time period!

[fluid ridge]

im actually debating that, but that wouldnt happen until after im done

or at least not before chapter 15

[next temple]

'Later', but never 'never'!

[north herald]

'Keen Pursuit Of Paths'

[unborn vault]

On second thought, maybe not the best idea.

[fluid ridge]

okay, super random ik, but i just addded the dumbest refrence to the chapter cause i needed a certain something but i didnt just want to use a real world object so i used that thing from another videogame and now im really excited to see if people will notice

[north herald]

Hmm

(Gee there really is a hunter emote for everything)

[fluid ridge]

there really is

[fluid ridge]

daily update log [70]
using the same math i did last time with a momentary word count of roughly 5k words and 13/87 checkpoints done, i f i were to keep up the average it went from 29k words up to 33k words
again, that will most likesly not happen since some of the checkpoints will not be long but it doesnt speak in my favor when im hopign that it wont turn out too long

[next temple]

hmm, amany hasn't made the daily update yet today... (it's actually 17 now local time) is this cause for concern?

[fluid ridge]

still have four hours till im out of time and im doing it now, i just fell asleep cause its juts too hot over here

daily update log [71]
a question, what do you do when your on a timer and have to finish two massive chapters in a certain time period?
correct!
you dont work on the chapter at all for an entire day and instead just write 2 scripts for two side storys which i wont be able to release before at least chapter 15 for like the most massive spoiler reasons.
im still debating if i should make them like part of a series or if i should boost up the chapter count to 22 and post the two after im done but it will probably be the former

@next temple this one is dedicated to you
and now back to sleep, i have an early shift tomorrow and i will hopefully be fit enough to get sth about the chapters actually done afterwards
ugh, im just so tired, the heat is killing me

[next temple]

not sure if or since I now feel like I forced you to make the update...
get some rest tho! hope you feel better tomorrow

[fluid ridge]

oh nono, i actually just woke up and realized i still had to make it so i booted up my pc and all.
i would have done it either way, its just now specifically made for you since you already asked

but yeah, im falling of the chair as we speak
gn

[north herald]

two oneshots

[fluid ridge]

the moment when 42 two words of script turn into excaclty 1042 words of story. Would be a funny coincidence with the 42 if i wasnt terrified how much i overwrote that one checkpoint alone

[north herald]

Uh oh

[fluid ridge]

and im still writing the same scene i thought i wold be done with two days ago

[fluid ridge]

daily update log [72]
19 checkpoints are done and the average is now at 32k
were slowly going down (thank god)

[fluid ridge]

and yet that stupid scene is not done yet

[north herald]

How long is it???

[fluid ridge]

let me just calculate the average

okay, so with 32 checkpoints of which nine are done with a word count of 3k the average at the moment is 10k words

okay, again, the average isnt the end but 10k??? thats just too much for a scene i intended to be like 4k at max

[north herald]

10k for a scene holy fuck

[fluid ridge]

that entire thing could be its very own chapter but now im too stuborn to keep it at 20 chapters

[fluid ridge]

well scene might be the wrong term for it?
i have three 'scenes'
the opening thingy, the plot after which is the scene and the actual main plot for the chapter

but now its more like, big ass opening. one major plotpoint that was originally just intended to get the ball moving adn another major plot point more focused on the characters

[north herald]

sub-chapter

[fluid ridge]

im gettign less and less confident that i will be done when i want to

and i cant wait for my break afterwards

pull throuhg now and get your rewards afterwards
if i dont get it done i can say bye bye to my break so i will have to get it done or suffer

[north herald]

Don't burn yourself out

[fluid ridge]

thats what the break will (hopefully) be for

[north herald]

Yeah but what if you don't get the break?

[fluid ridge]

well then im screwed

but that thought will motivate me to hopefully be quick enough

[north herald]

Seems risky

[fluid ridge]

probably is

so i will just have to be quick enough

[north herald]

Yeah but the consequences of failing seem severe

Sure, motivating, but also possibly devastating

And at that point, for whom are you writing if not for yourselves?

[fluid ridge]

sadly i work best under immense stress. and im definitely still mostly writing for myself. i only set that timeing for me casue i think it would be cool to have 10 chapters in exactly 100 days

[north herald]

Oh lmao fair enough

But burnout is a possibility

[fluid ridge]

it is...but i think my hyper fixation has me covered for now
ive been workign on this thing for 72 days (plus a lot of scirpt writing before that) without a single day off from it and im still finding new things to add

like, that break of mine will not even be an actual break from the story. just me saying that there will be no update from the story for the next 3+ mounts so i can finalize the script adnd rewrite all the older chapters

if my boss sees me write scirpt ideas on copy pappers one more time when im supposed to work i will probably get fired /j

[north herald]

Hm yes you will take a break to take unpaid overtime

[fluid ridge]

the fact that i actually do that at my job tells you a lot

[north herald]

Uh oh

[fluid ridge]

its getting better but im definitely a workaholic

[fluid ridge]

guess who was bored again

wait, i only now see that i forgot to remove the silhouette of the miros bird

[unborn vault]

Why’d you have to point that out?

[fluid ridge]

no clue, i think its funny

ugh, now that i think about it i could have made the os project those signs instead of them just floating there, that would have been so much better

overworked version, now with overseers and no miros bird silhouette for only the cheap price of my sanity

[north herald]

Subliminal messaging

[fluid ridge]

man, i should have had a silhouette of pebbs and ui kissing then

[north herald]

Every image is actually a gif in which FP and UI kissing show up for 1 frame every few seconds

[fluid ridge]

daily update log [73]
teeny tiny progress was made with two new check points, now time for work

[north herald]

Well, progress is progress, isn't it?

[fluid ridge]

thats the spirit

[north herald]

Still no log, unease at all time high

[fluid ridge]

i could do one now, but i would continue writing after so it will not be up to date

tho yeah, its about time i do the daily log

[soft agate]

se german has still 2 more hours left :P

[fluid ridge]

knowing me, i would forget and just not do it before so lets better be safe then sorry

let me just count them check points real quick

daily update log [74]
25/87 check points are done and the new average for a possible chapter lenght thankfully went down again and is now at roughly 30k words, lets hope it stays that way and doesnt go up again
also, the scene is STILL NOT DONE, im so slow

[soft agate]

that reminds me. I still have to catch up

[north herald]

one must imagine Amany happy

Also, holy shit, 30k estimate, that's still a bit

[soft agate]

only like 10 chapters of mine

[fluid ridge]

very reasonable, 50k for 8 chapters and put 30k on it with a single one, makes sense

tho if i had to guess that word count will drop at least under 25k, maybe even 20k since the short checkpoints are aproching now

[north herald]

Only like maybe a whole fic no biggie /j

[fluid ridge]

plan for today: write for the next 9 hours minimum with short food breaks here and there but nothing else
what will probably happen: i get distracted and will not write more than 2 hours

[next temple]

Highest threat:

[soft agate]

'Creators' and 'Structure'
||located right after the section with Amany Fields'||

[north herald]

Huh I recall pointing out that one

[fluid ridge]

hmmm

[north herald]

the writing grind

[fluid ridge]

either i forgot or i just made the same mistake twice

[soft agate]

||So...the section in chapter 6 about the Overseer getting speared ... now it makes sense. Hm, the order is a bit off then, because I had no idea how to even piece that section in. Now with chapter 7 it does make sense, I know of the content, the leading up to it.
...
Pebbles, that one is on you. You had to bring a target to face intruders. <.<||

[north herald]

||pebbles took the overseer to a back alley and put it out of its misery trust me bro /j||

[fluid ridge]

||im still mad at myself that i didnt realize that it could be read as pebbs just offing the overseer, like i knew it was scavs and even tho i wrote it expicetly without naming them in the end i just thought everyone would be on the same terms with me ||

[north herald]

||with how pebbles behaves it is not entirely out of the question he could spear the only company he had ||

[fluid ridge]

||"fuck the overseer, im the main character here!"
~probably five pebbles||

[soft agate]

||"The Overseer is getting more popular than me on rotten tomatoes!? I am the star! Time for you to see stars!"
spears threatening soon-to-be main character||

Time for chapter 8 and then I will be caught up again

How to characterise a character in a few broadcasts, 1o1.
||Gosh, that barrage of broadcasts around UI is gut-wrenching. Talked herself into stupor until blocking them all out of sheer frustration or even worse. So much character growth ((or regress)) in so few lines! Hats off!||

[fluid ridge]

wow, thats some high praise, thanks a lot

[soft agate]

Found an amusing typo

'House of Comments'

Fitting name for exposition head :3

[fluid ridge]

they keep commenting all that darn exposition, curse them, its all their fault

[soft agate]

||Ohh, Soothing Whispers, A caustic embrace. There you are :3||

[fluid ridge]

||put more effort into the name of a one off character then checking if i wrote the name of the main house correctly ||

[soft agate]

German word spotted: Granit is granite in english

[fluid ridge]

wait really?

[soft agate]

Yep

[fluid ridge]

i just thought you spelled it like that, i did not even try to translate it

[soft agate]

Caught up :3

[fluid ridge]

saw the comments, welcome back in the game

[fluid ridge]

also, im almost 2 hours in and spent 1m 55s 76ms writing since i started, wow, amazing

[north herald]

I read it as 1h 55m 76s and was about to congratulate you

[fluid ridge]

now that would have been great, only 5 minutes distracted? sadly couldnt be me

[unborn vault]

It’s not being distracted, it’s called gathering inspiration.

[north herald]

"Taking a break"

[fluid ridge]

the moment you have a little idea for sth you can add in an earlier chapter but your to lazy to rearrange the sentence so you just insert three sentences out of nowhere

[north herald]

Mandela effect generator

[fluid ridge]

i dont get it

[north herald]

It's some effect where you believe you remember something different iirc

[fluid ridge]

oh you will have that alot when i start overworking the entire thing

i still just really want to delete chapter 2 and 3 entirely and replace them, i hate them so much

5 needs some work too

[fluid ridge]

okay, so ive been listenign to the metropolis day threat theme for the last three hours so i can feel the scene better but all it does is make me crazy and now i cant here the track anymore without screaming

[north herald]

"Man if only there was another track like that"

Metropolis (Night):

[fluid ridge]

nahhh, no more metropolis threat themes for me. i did play that for like 10 minutes and that was already enough to make me bang my head against my keyboad

its also funny, i put on the night track and suddenly wanted the main asshole for the chapter to be a little bit more sympathetic but than i switched trags again and i thought taht that just sucked and deleted everything i wrote during those 10 minutes

he would have been all:
||awwww sowwy pewwels i know i was a bit of a dick this entire time but you see i actually will pray at you now so please save my ass ||

like the idea sounded neat in my head and than i switched tracks and i was like, what did i just write

like dude can have one moment that makes him less two dimensional but thats it

[north herald]

Your metropolis (night) alter ego

[north herald]

Hm yes he does not seem like he's fearing for his life at all

[fluid ridge]

metropolis day
metropolis night

[north herald]

Day
Night

Also gee there are few arti emotes here

[fluid ridge]

its funny cause in that scene the sun is actually setting as well

[fluid ridge]

there are like none, it hurts

[north herald]

||the scavs do get quirky at night||

[fluid ridge]

[fluid ridge]

aaaaaaandddd time!

never using a timer while writing again, i forgot to stop or turn it back on so many times, this time is so far from being accurate

but yeah, the scene is finally done so let me just do the daily update log and i will maybe write a bit more after that

daily update log [75]
43 checkpoints are done, the word count is roughly at 11k and the average is down once more at 22k words (finally far away from that horrible 30k prediction)
im really tempted to end the chapter right here, but i cant. well, i can, but i dont want to. i like the 20 chapters and i would throw a large part of the planned structure out of the widow if i would do so, so it will have to stay

now the last big plot of the chatper and than only chapter 10. 25 days should probably be enough time for that, i can do it

[north herald]

yippie

[fluid ridge]

daily lesbian update log [1]

a certian banana forced me to draw instead of work so thats all i have for today /j

(actual daily log sometimes later)

[maiden bear]

Yes, excellent

[north herald]

"Pack it up boys, we are done here"

[fluid ridge]

wati omg, i just realized if forgot to give moon her stupid head dot, how did i mess that up

[north herald]

Now she is just "Looks to the"

[maiden bear]

Bald

[north herald]

Hey, look, it's natural, happens to everybody at some point

[fluid ridge]

moon, now no longer bald and with one ugly ass head that should not work with her antennae but i do not care

[north herald]

New pfp jumpscare

[fluid ridge]

i was bored, plus pfp that i actually made myself so no stealing anymore

the moment i have my drawing pad i wanna make an actual pfp, proably an ancient again sicne they look cool

[north herald]

A design for Flags (the ancient)?

[fluid ridge]

probably not flags and instead feilds cause i actually plan to draw her for the fic

or maybe just some random unnamed ancient

who knows

[north herald]

Uhh wait who was fields

[fluid ridge]

ehhh

the head of the house of comets

[north herald]

Ah

[fluid ridge]

she gets some actual lore later on

and she and flags will both get a side story respectivly

cause why not

[north herald]

As oneshots or in some chapter?

[fluid ridge]

oneshots so i can keep my 20 chapter count

[fluid ridge]

daily update log [76]
57/87 checkpoints are done, the next few checkpoints will be one the longer side agian which worries me a bit but i would like to finish the chapter on next tuesdsay. will i get that time frame? eh- probably not, i only chose that day casue i dont have too much work there, but besides that im not sure if i would make it. i will try but no promises

[fluid ridge]

No, I did not almost write Dropwig with a b again, your imagining things

Also, man, this chapter is rough, the first section went smooth, the second was okay but not as quick as the first, but the third? Im struggling with this one, probably a sign that i should just split the chapter

[tranquil yoke]

which will win... common sense and pacing? or that sweet even twenty chapters? it's the match of the century

[fluid ridge]

b- but i cant have my chapter 10 dialouge of the group in chapter one agian if i do that

same with chapter 20

i want them in chapter 1, 10 and 20

cause it would be neat

plus mystery pov at the end of chapter 10 since its the middle point

i want it all

[tranquil yoke]

you can make whatever choices you want with your structure... but you shouldn't impede the story in trying to have things go off at certain numbers. I dunno, maybe you can manage to have it both ways?

[fluid ridge]

i already scratched the ending section of chapter 9 already, like they shelter much earlier than i had originally inteded so i can have a simple ending

also, im only doing that since chapter 9 and 10 belong together, othewise i wouldnt have done that

[tranquil yoke]

hmmm... cutting stuff is not bad, I say. If you think a chapter can work without a scene, then you should always think about maybe taking it out.

[fluid ridge]

oh im terrible at that

i like to add a lot of random lore to the chapters filled with little head cannons and all that

its 50/50, some have there reasons to be there, mostly forshadowing stuff, but others are just there since i thought they were neat or the planned forshadowing for them got scratched

like, i originally planned to give pebs a walking cane with one of the sm spears, but then i scratched that since i thought it was annoying to write

now you just have pebbs yapping about canes in chapter two for no reasons other then random head cannons

[tranquil yoke]

if its fun or interesting and people enjoy reading it, then it's probably fine to leave in. I just suggest becoming more 'trimming focused' because it's a very good way to make sure the structure and pace of your fic remains where you want it going into the second half.

[fluid ridge]

i really need to get better at that

but for now i still have the excuse of this being my first big work

[tranquil yoke]

hey, if you ever wanna send a draft my way, I'd be glad to give some suggestions on what you could clean up

[fluid ridge]

draft as in?

the script?

[tranquil yoke]

as in, the written out chapter that you have before you post it

[fluid ridge]

i could send you the google doc link i have so far

[tranquil yoke]

if you like

[fluid ridge]

sure, just dont be confused, i go off script a lot during writing so when the check points say one thing and i write another dotn be confused

[tranquil yoke]

that's understandable

[unborn vault]

Characters who write themselves are easiest to wing the story for, but hardest to keep on-track.

[north herald]

||Dro🅱️wig strikes back ||

[fluid ridge]

daily update log [77]
okay, so lets all take a deep breath

a certain someone (its cy, the writing genius himself, duhh) may or may not have opened my eyes about the fact that my pacing is kinda bad and that i keep losing my focus to quickly in my story
its with a deep pain that i will have to say that i will push up the chapter count to a for now unknown number (its not that bad, im just being dramatic, i accepted that fact during work already)
i will also say that im not sure anymore if i will keep the chapter 10 on daily update log 100 goal since right now im decidign how much i will split chapter 9 and 10 up. it will be either be 4 or maybe even 5 and with that the word count will definetly drop which is 100% for the better pacing wise etc.
i will however keep the break im planning on the 100 day since i still want to overwork and finalize my script with no stress of havign to write chapters during that.
maybe i will plan sth for that day, im not sure tho, and im not guaranteeing anymore that it will even be a chapter
ehmm, im kinda not sure what to write anymore.
i will have to overwork all the published chapters for now and that will be my main focus.
bs hell is my first big project, yes, but i still want it to be polished and nice to read so i want to be happy with every chapter i post what im just not right now.
i guess thats a bye bye to the two chapter goal for day 100 for now.
but hey, cy said that my plot was cool so im at least happy that that seemed to be a good idea from me

lmao, rant over
now if you excuse me, im pulling an allnighter so i can plan out how i will structure the chapters now

ughhh, i take it back, i was not ready, it hurts

goodbye structure, you will be missed

[north herald]

Rip, but if it's for the greater good...

this really is a bs hell

[fluid ridge]

not the one liners when im already struggling /j

[north herald]

It is a title drop tho /j

[tranquil yoke]

I feel a bit bad
But I do think these changes will make the story much better going forward!

[north herald]

Well there is surely gonna be some cool halfway point or sth, no? No point in crying over spilled milk or sth

[fluid ridge]

they will 100% so dont you dare feel bad, you saved my ass here

[fluid ridge]

well i will probaly still put the secret pov and the ks pov at the end of the entire city thingy and all the other sutff after that too, it just doesnt have the luxury of being on chapter 10 anymore

[north herald]

... so currently the focus is redoing the first chapters?

[fluid ridge]

overworking, yes. mostly refrasing stuff i dont like, addign stuff that has to be added after the script changed and tryign to find a way for me to finally like chapters 2,3 and 5

god, if my chapters were my children, then i would put 2, 3 and 5 out for adoption

[maiden bear]

Should I hold off on reading

[fluid ridge]

probably

[north herald]

Hm I guess that's a reason for me to sweep them again later

And I guess treat then to grammarly if you have not already, I forgot

[fluid ridge]

did that

i just hate them pacing wise

it feels so rushed but also as if nth is happening at the same time

5 is okay ig cause stuff is actually hapening , but chatper 2 and 3? ugh, kill them with fire

[north herald]

An author's note or sth is prolly in order, ye?

[fluid ridge]

maybe i will just push out the chapter i have right now. with me splitting the chapters i already have chapter 9 complete by now. i would just prove read it and then pump it out with one extra large authers note

[north herald]

could work

[fluid ridge]

daily update log [78]
chapter 9 might be done for now? i still have to edit it over and i will probably not post it until ive changed all the things i deem important in the earlier chapters but it is done.
right now its at 13k words and i will look it over, maybe cut some stuff, maybe add some stuff (im sorry cy, im weak )
but yeah, now for the editing grind
also funfact, i will add one more side story which will probably be uploaded before chapter 9 but i dont even have a script for that yet so it might take a while until the next big update

[fluid ridge]

daily update log [79]
i took a really small break and wrote sth else, sryyyy
i need to recharge before i throw myself back in the story for the rewrite process.
maybe i will try to relax for day 80 as well, but after that i will push through until day 100, i promise

[north herald]

[fluid ridge]

daily update log [80]
break time!
also got another neat promt so that will be the focus of today

[fluid ridge]

daily update log [81]
officially getting back to bs hell again
the rewriting process has begun and i think it would be neat if i would be able to finish till Sunday. It will be a goal for me but if i will get it done is anohter thing since ive been writing a lot slower these past few days

[fluid ridge]

daily update log [82]
chapters 1 and 2 are rewritten and posted

[north herald]

I'll comb through tmr

[fluid ridge]

lmao, thx but dont stress it

[north herald]

fucking around with a new method to correct stuff, it sucks, but i started this one so i might as well finish it

i thought it would be easier for at least one end but i don't think it is?

[fluid ridge]

wtf

[north herald]

yeah i dunno i got struck with "inspiration" but realized 1/4th of the way through "man, this fucking sucks"

[fluid ridge]

its definetly is an idea
tho i do have to argee that it might not have been the best

[north herald]

next thought is just to copy-paste the whole thing into notepad, correct it there and then mark the corrections somehow

[fluid ridge]

do whatever is easiest for you!

[north herald]

this one sure wasn't

i'll fuck around in challenge 70 and then do the 2nd chap

[fluid ridge]

oh lord, good luck with that, i still have to beat that as well

[north herald]

apparently rebind everything helps out, according to dasz at least, but i still mostly get stomped on phase 2

[fluid ridge]

lmao, i saw that video too, i just always die in phase four so i might try rebind as well

[north herald]

i mean this is like just my 2nd day of attempting this and i did not put much time into it so eh

[next temple]

~~Just screenshot page by page, print out then correct by hand, then scan it back into pdf ~~

[fluid ridge]

keep going, enough attempts will hopefully lead to success

[north herald]

suggest changes before it's written

[fluid ridge]

~~at that point piotr could just do the writing for me while i sit on the side ~~

[north herald]

just got to phase 3 and instantly died, i think i dread phase 4 the most

[fluid ridge]

it is pretty bad, i never passed it once

[north herald]

okay at least i think i can mostly nail phase 2 so far, rebind really is god tier

[fluid ridge]

you can do it

[north herald]

i think this might take a few days unless i'm willing to sit for several hours on rw (i likely am not)

okay i got through phase 3 for the first time

aaaaaaaaand dead

[fluid ridge]

get ready to see that a lot more

[north herald]

yeah

[fluid ridge]

but hey, your already making great progress!

[north herald]

rebind 🙏

wait why is there just an empty paragraph at the beggining of ch2

[fluid ridge]

???

gimmi a sec

[north herald]

whuh

[fluid ridge]

OHhhhh

that

i always start and end my chapters with an empty paragraph

so its not to cramped

[north herald]

ah

[north herald]

okay this is way more convenient, lines with corrections have had them applied unless i had doubts, any changes or thoughts were written in square brackets at the end of their respective lines

yes this is ch2 copy pasted

[fluid ridge]

oh god, and how do i know what i will have to change

ah, no wait, im dumb

i saw it

[north herald]

look for square brackets and compare lines

well this is easier but idk how it is for you, would be harder on phone tho

[fluid ridge]

nah, it will work just fine, tho i will finish my edits for chapters 6-8 before i will overwork 1 and 2 for hopefully the last time

[north herald]

aye

hopefully

[fluid ridge]

im so close to being done with the editing, then i can finally focus on chapter 9

also, since i split the planned chapter nine into four different chapters, i now already have chapters 9, 10 and partially 11 done, the only thing missing is smoother connections and end povs

[north herald]

wait so how long does it take to put out the fixes, usually?

[north herald]

four

[fluid ridge]

right now im relativly quick since the most stuff that needed changing was chapter 2

ive done 3-5 so far already and all i do is add minor stuff adn fix stuff i dont like, its relativly quick

[north herald]

neato

[fluid ridge]

original plan was 2 but the wise cy gave me a better idea

it just flows better like that

tho the 2 parter city arc may have just turned into a 6/7 parter

[north herald]

"split them. keep splitting them. SPLIT THEM AGAIN."

[fluid ridge]

i will have to come up with so many new chapter names

[north herald]

"Metropolis district [insert random number here]"

[fluid ridge]

my original names were metropolis 1 and metropolis 2, i cant just all call them metropolos 1-7

[fluid ridge]

god, i wish

[north herald]

"metropolis exploration log [number]"

[fluid ridge]

if things would be so easy...

[fluid ridge]

ugh

wait

nonono

its midnight

i missed the daily update log, nooooo

gimmi a sec

ah dang it

[north herald]

Welp, time to start the streak from 0, maybe you will get ch10 by day 100

[fluid ridge]

daily update log [83]
editing progress is going great, im finishing up chapter 8 adn then i will finally go back to posting

ihsalkgdjas

perfect

noone saw that

[soft agate]

You missed your daily login. You have to restart to get to the 100 days login bonus

[fluid ridge]

nooooo

that doesnt count

i wanted to finish up chapter 8 before doing the log

i didnt look on the clock

[soft agate]

Complaining adds a buffer.
Please start at [-83] and count down

[fluid ridge]

never!

im getting that 100 day break

[soft agate]

How German

Working for a day off

[fluid ridge]

ohhh come on, i only had to edit the arti pov and then i would have been done, what is that

[fluid ridge]

i want my well deserved break, ive been working non stop on that story for 83+ days

[soft agate]

You know how strict the rules are in our laws. If you don't want a fine of be guilty in front of court, you better start at 0 again. Don't want to risk the fun police, do you?

[fluid ridge]

our laws suck, if i hear one more time that im not allowed to get rid of the whaps nest on my window im moving

[north herald]

a break during which you will still work on the fic?
I shall now disappear again

[fluid ridge]

maybeeeeee

[soft agate]

You can remove all whaps nests. The law only cares about wasp nests :3

[fluid ridge]

please help, im being bullied

[north herald]

Wait wait wait, nests or nets?

[fluid ridge]

nests

[soft agate]

Stop painting targets on your belly

[fluid ridge]

okay, im finishing up the chapter and then i will have to sleep, i have work today

[north herald]

What, why can't you get rid of wasp nests

[fluid ridge]

stupid laws

[north herald]

This is very intriguing, I don't need sleep, I need answers

[fluid ridge]

actually, i dont know, sth about protecting wasps ig? let me google

[fluid ridge]

Wasps, like hornets, are protected. To remove a wasp nest, you must first contact the responsible nature conservation authority and wait for approval. In some cases, the city administration or district office must also be contacted to issue the permit.

copy pasted and translated

[north herald]

God, protecting wasps and hornets?

This sucks for sure

[fluid ridge]

yeppp, espesially since wasp come back to my window every summer to built there nest there.

like can they just get the hint already? i cant keep bying citrus oils just to get rid of them

each and every year

[north herald]

Set up a net?

[fluid ridge]

i have a large diagonal window, we tried once and it just fell off

[north herald]

Oh well that's a real shame

[fluid ridge]

you dont say

[north herald]

Anyways i should prolly be going now, a bit overdue for sleep

[fluid ridge]

yep, i still have to finish up and then sleep as well

[north herald]

Uhh some option to get a special one fitted? Or just. Decommision the window. Forbid anyone from using it

[unborn vault]

Good night to the both of you.

[north herald]

Okay now I will sleep

[north herald]

Thanks

[fluid ridge]

thx, tho i still have to do a bit of work before i deserve my well earned sleep

[fluid ridge]

daily update log [84]
(i dont care, im keepign my streak )

chapters 1-8 have now all been overworked, and besides chapter 2, most of the changers are pretty small. even chapter 2 didnt have all that much in the end so i think it will be fine overall.
i still havent posted the overworked versions from 3-8, since for one, im tired, and im also waiting for that aprovel note from the great legend himself, cy

now i will just have to officially post the changes which will probably happen today or tomorrow and then i will finally go back to writing new stuff, finallyyyy

[unborn vault]

Reworked, Karessra.

Reworked.

[soft agate]

Poor overworked chapters. The job in the correction mines is just too harsh on them.

[next temple]

< judging

[fluid ridge]

everyone bullying the poor karessra

[fluid ridge]

||its behind me, isnt it?||

[fluid ridge]

everything has been edited, thx for the help

[fluid ridge]

IT IS DONE

all the chapters have been updated!!!

[unborn vault]

Congratulations!

I hope they weren’t overworking themselves. /j

[fluid ridge]

Huge thanks to cy, he helped alot and also helped me realize what i want to do with the story even more

[fluid ridge]

i was probably overworking poor cy

[tranquil yoke]

not anymore than banan does... or anyone else when I have to get in the thick of it with them...

[unborn vault]

You. Good ending or bittersweet ending?

[fluid ridge]

who knows

[unborn vault]

No, just pick one. Not for this story.

[fluid ridge]

i surely dont, still deciding who to kill off

[fluid ridge]

ohhhh

whoops

bittersweet all the way

[unborn vault]

Alright! More bitter than sweet, perhaps?

[fluid ridge]

ah, cy, one question, do you can pin stuff in threads as a story helper?

i still havent pinned anything in here

[tranquil yoke]

ye

what do you want pinned?

[unborn vault]

||Was thinking I’d let someone off easy. Guess she’ll have to suffer.||

[fluid ridge]

ah perfect, gimmi a sec

Beyond the Shell Ao3 link
https://archiveofourown.org/works/55855210/chapters/141822178

[fluid ridge]

that one please

thank you very much

[tranquil yoke]

can't believe I gotta do actual helper work, I just signed up for that sweet, sweet blurple name

[fluid ridge]

it does look pretty neat, maybe i should sign up too

nahhh, too much responibility, plus i like the pink

[unborn vault]

It’s my favorite helper colour.

Maybe I should, but some of my stuff may get borderline rule-busting, and we don’t want that.

[fluid ridge]

MODS!!! its this one, get them!

[tranquil yoke]

it's true that you're not allowed to have any fun once you join the fun police...

[fluid ridge]

that sounds depressing, a hard sacrifice to gain the pretty color

[tranquil yoke]

honestly, I think the best helper color is the community helper's dark blue

[fluid ridge]

the blue is really pretty, tho i think the story helper has the best scug icon, the other ones all look the same with only different colors, the story helper gets cute little glasses

[tranquil yoke]

i got the freaking nerd emote scug attached to my name

jk, I like it

[fluid ridge]

there there...

[tranquil yoke]

I also got to survivor rank the very day I got the helper role... so I never got to have next to my name, what a tragedy

[fluid ridge]

you got the in spirit

[north herald]

Can't go offtopic in #stories-discussion

[fluid ridge]

i could never

[north herald]

nobody will know of your achievements

[tranquil yoke]

it's like having shackles around my limbs, pulling me to the bottom of the ocean...
||I still go off topic in stories-discussion ||

[fluid ridge]

||so evil||

[north herald]

Uhh ||you will soon be proposed with either gracefully resigning or being removed from the spot || /j

[fluid ridge]

it was fun knowing you cy, you will be missed

[tranquil yoke]

it was good while it lasted...

[north herald]

Anyways, i'll prolly sweep through most if not all of them today, the changes are small, yes?

[tranquil yoke]

pretty small, I'd say... a few lines here and there, from what I saw.

[fluid ridge]

i also edited mistakes i already found

some of them were so obvios that im not sure how i didnt see them the first time around

[north herald]

Ah, well, for good measure

[north herald]

Grammarly being grammarly?

[fluid ridge]

yep.

we have a toxic relationship, grammerly and I that is

[tranquil yoke]

the first 8 chaps of this fic are gonna be on their 10th draft by the time all's said and done

[fluid ridge]

i will try to not change them ever again tbh. editing sucks

[fluid ridge]

(not counting grammer and spelling stuff)

[tranquil yoke]

realllll

[fluid ridge]

the cycle repeats

[north herald]

Oh I did not notice, here in ch1 the "]!" at the end here is not italicized

[fluid ridge]

was about to leave for work, now i still have to edit one last thing before that

[north herald]

the edits never stop

[fluid ridge]

that imiage just keeps gettign truer with each moment

[fluid ridge]

and done now i can go for work satisfied

[unborn vault]

One need not imagine me happy, for I have the spite to be.

[north herald]

Aaaaaaand i was busy and then forgot

[fluid ridge]

daily update log [85]
i actually have to recap on my own story before i get back to writing so for now im slow. i started the chapter 9 end pov but im struggling
the urge to just run back to woaf is strong but i must resist. only 15 days left

[north herald]

i might have overestimated the "do them all in one day", but here is chapter 3, now every line which has been altered or has a note is marked with a [!]

[north herald]

hm, i think one chapter a day is a reasonable pace, gonna finish ch4 in like an hour maybe?

[fluid ridge]

the way your doing more then i am right now

[north herald]

[soft agate]

and you say you only write 50 words per day.
You singlehandly extinguish and nurture our german tendencies to use false grammar ;P
Be it Simon, Amany or me

[fluid ridge]

piotr, saviour of german grammer mistakes

[soft agate]

I take that personally :P

[north herald]

i don't do that everyday tho, but i do have a chance to write everyday

[soft agate]

the true calloutpost was piotr the whole time.
Unveiling our nationalities

[fluid ridge]

i thought the true calloutpost was the friends we made along the way

[north herald]

me, i'm the friend /j

[north herald]

i'm starting to like this method, more "on the fly" and fast

[fluid ridge]

daily update log [86]
i wrote almost 2k words today, too bad that those words were used for a comment instead for my story
for what i actually did today, im still trying to find a nice way to write the end pov for chatper 9, not much more

[fluid ridge]

okay so i just started, and that was sth were i changed my mind mid writing, its supposed to be without the space if after the dash there wont be a second one.
its either

Blablabla - Capitalized blablabla - blablabla.
or
Blablabla- not capitalized blablabla.

if its correct like that i doubt, but thats just how i decided to do it

[north herald]

[fluid ridge]

[fluid ridge]

one done, a second to go, and only 20 minutes before work, sure, lets risk getting late today once more, why not

[north herald]

Maybe try to not be late for work

[fluid ridge]

nahhhh, its fine, im only the shift manager today anyway, they wont need me

[next temple]

Don't be late for work!

[next temple]

Also you need long dash for —xyz— I think?

[fluid ridge]

but they look ugly

not using them

[unborn vault]

How do I do those?

[fluid ridge]

copy paste /j

[unborn vault]

Epochs.

[north herald]

Well on phone i can hold down the dash to do a —

Idk how to do so on PC

Oh it's got 3 options lmao

• – —

[unborn vault]

Long dash—because why not—is new to me, but I like it.

[fluid ridge]

second edit done as well, now i gotta bounce, work is calling

[next temple]

Sorry was running late for a train
And yeah I use phone keyboard

I think long dashes are for when you need to provide context for something in the middle of a sentence

[next temple]

This is 20 mins after when you said '20 mins' before work?

🫵🚘
👉🚘

[next temple]

(dang i love this format )

[north herald]

🫵⌨️
👉⌨️ /j

[next temple]

Also google doc should auto change -- into —

[north herald]

i have not even started sweeping through the next chapter yet

[fluid ridge]

worded that wrong, twenty minutes before i would have to go to work if i want to be somewhat on time

tho today was so bad, i should have probably just called in sick

[tranquil yoke]

stay strong, my friend

[fluid ridge]

for the money... for the money

[fluid ridge]

daily update log [87]
progress on the end pov is being made, im also setting myself a deadline for this sunday to get the chapter out, and if i dont, i owe everyone fan art of the highest quality

[north herald]

Okay yeah i'm not sure if I will be able to wrap this up today, maybe, but I have no promises, I have done a bit already tho

[fluid ridge]

no worries, take your time

[north herald]

welp i did not manage it today

i am about halfway tho

[fluid ridge]

It pains me to say that i have no idea how to write a fight scene at all, help

my notes arent helping either

[next temple]

a general advice is to use as little words as possible in high action scenes

[unborn vault]

To this, I say, JoJo.

[unborn vault]

Break sentences fast.

[next temple]

to emphasize the dynamic and pace of the scene

[unborn vault]

One shot. Then another. And again.

[fluid ridge]

but how will they even fight???

[unborn vault]

Who fights who?

[fluid ridge]

my notes just say insert fight scene but i fell like i can write two spear throws before it gets boring

[fluid ridge]

||arti and sk||

[soft agate]

There are many ways to write a fight scene

[fluid ridge]

so it has to be somewhat even

i like onesided fights, they are much more simple

[next temple]

hmm
if it's first person perspective you could describe how they want to go about the fight

[unborn vault]

To be honest, I don’t like writing fight scenes because of this.

[next temple]

if it's third just describe the actions and consequences i guess? im also not very good

[soft agate]

I did a whole introspective short fight dragged out to a meaningful confrontation in the latest installement of CD.

[unborn vault]

Isn’t BtS about ||Pebbles’ new life||?

[fluid ridge]

lmao, my tendencies to side line, but its the end pov for chapter 9 so i think it works

[unborn vault]

||I feel like Arti could just go in expecting a full fight… and get an unfulfilling one.||

[fluid ridge]

uhhhhh

wait that actually works pretty good

[unborn vault]

||She feels hollow after the fight.||

[soft agate]

Insert devil artemis' rex 'fight me' scene

[unborn vault]

||Sweet irony. Her only task? Murder. Her only reason? Revenge. And what does she taste after? Nothing but god and void.||

[soft agate]

You expected a fight, but you only found me, DIO Pebbles

[fluid ridge]

||oh lord, that means that i will have to rewrite the stuff i have for chapter 11 so she doenst look to happy||

[unborn vault]

||She pretends she is. She’s not very good at tricking a god.||

||I feel like Arti could easily have just felt hollow after the SK fight. Nothing changed after—the fight was just that, a fight. Just another act of violence. And at this point, she doesn’t feel anything from it.||

[next temple]

I think it's mainly up to what do you plan for her in the storyline.

[fluid ridge]

with the way i plan to sturcture it that might be a bit hard to convey but i can try

[unborn vault]

||Not for lack of effort, by the way—she really does want to be happy. She wants to feel fulfilled. But she isn’t.||

Or, you know, challenge yourself and write that fight scene.

[fluid ridge]

i have a rough idea, it will loosely tie into it, if not all that much, more of a prolouge for her arc ig

[next temple]

||For example, in my story I have her experience the fight as a nightmare of a possible future instead, so she didn't have to actually kill SK and the plot could move on||

[fluid ridge]

nahhhh

chalanging myself is sth i do with promts for now until i fell save enough with them

[unborn vault]

Reacted as I would.

[fluid ridge]

i try to tie in all plots with pebbles main action that he will take per cys recomendation, so that everythign is connected

the problem was that i had so many side plots that had nth to do with the main story and cy said that i would loose focus pretty quickly, so we decided to just connect everything, if only loosely

[unborn vault]

Do I try and write a fight scene?

[next temple]

it's a good advice, everything introduced in a story should serve some purpose

[fluid ridge]

100%
and since i was to far in to scratch certain stuff like the scav side plot i just had to connect it to the main plot somehow
bless cy for saving the script before it was to late, tho i cant do certain things anymore that i would have liked to do now

[next temple]

keep them for side stories perhaps?

[fluid ridge]

the scavs?

[next temple]

I mean the other things?

[fluid ridge]

they still are a side story, only there to keep the plot moving with a loose connection for the themes

[fluid ridge]

the ones i had to scratch?

[unborn vault]

Yes.

You could make them addon stories.

I would never have fit Indentured Servitude into Unraveling.

It’s an add-on.

[fluid ridge]

the problem there is that its mostly build up, i wanted the os and pebbs to have a bit more moments before ||offing the os|| for dramatic effect, but also that a certain thing would make more sense later on

[unborn vault]

I should learn more to subvert expectations and shit.

[fluid ridge]

one chapter between 5 and 6 where they cna just, idk, do dumb stuff, but that is a little late now

[unborn vault]

Actually, I do want to write.

I have some muse.

Some.

What do I write?

[fluid ridge]

do the fight scene

or~~ calloutpost ~~

[unborn vault]

And then let you use it? Good idea.

[fluid ridge]

if you cant write it, make others do it for you /j

[unborn vault]

Also tempting.

[unborn vault]

||Plink. Plink. Plink.

The Artificer made step after step through the hall. Her face was steady, battle-ready. She was holding a bomb in one hand, and a spear in the other. Not that she only had those, of course - the ground was absolutely littered with spears, bombs, and pearls.

Pearls jingled from the steady wind blowing against her, and they glistened in the air, ebbing about in it. And though she didn’t look, she knew. She understood that this was where the god-machine directed her. The god-machine named Five Pebbles, or something of that sort. What a powerless god, she thought - for all his grandeur, he couldn’t help her the way he wanted. Typical. But even so, even though he was appalled by her way of life, and she of his, he offered her something.

Something truly… wonderful.

The residence of the Scavenger King. Her mortal enemy, although she’s never seen it, and neither does she know anything about it. Her unseen nemesis. And she’s found it. Everything she’s been waiting for, right in the palm of her weary paw. She took an explosive leap ahead, hearing the pearls jingle from the shockwave.

Plink. Plink. Plink.

Crash.

She leapt into a mountain of scrap, rolling over the mounds of metal. With a swift stab, she planted the spear into the ground, using it to halt her movement. She landed on her feet, tensed her arms, and plucked the spear off the ground. Her eyes darted up the tall throne, expecting to see a furious warrior strike her.

But nobody came.

Instead of the warrior she was looking for, she found an elder. Who she expected to be furious with murder of its kind, calmly demanded her to leave. It, who she felt would be a fierce, young combatant, was instead an aged, elderly chieftain.

No matter. A king is a king, no matter how it looks. And she was about to ravage straight through it.||

||
The Artificer tensed her feet, and leapt between the throne’s legs deftly, surprising the emperor with a spear to the face. It parried with a spear of its own, and lunged towards her. While they were falling, weapons in hand, both exchanged glances. One of hatred met one of… pity?

No. She couldn’t be distracted. Not now, not in a fight. She came back to her senses, and threw her bomb at it. However fast the king was, it wasn’t fast enough.

Bang.
||

I’ve got some basics done. Will refine when I have the time.

[north herald]

Damn that's good

[fluid ridge]

Im being flexed on in my own thread, oh how far i have fallen

but that is really good!!!
i like the idea of the sk just being some old guy

[north herald]

Proofreading > being flexed on > outsourcing the writing to sb else

[fluid ridge]

and the writing, lasglksajf, the writing, very crispy, i like it

[fluid ridge]

it just keeps getting worse, aint it

[unborn vault]

Not “some old guy”, a great fighter that’s grown old.

[fluid ridge]

i would also like to clarify that i did not copy that sentense after reading it, i swear
its funny tho that they are so similar

[north herald]

coup and author switch /j

[fluid ridge]

true

[unborn vault]

Listen. I think it suits what we have in game.

[fluid ridge]

i already have pebbles call him old fool, may i kindly steal borrow that idea from you

[unborn vault]

Are you aware of that one god-scav?

[unborn vault]

Go on. Take the entire thing if you want to.

[fluid ridge]

dont tempt me
but no thx, i should at least still write the story on my own

[unborn vault]

This - https://youtu.be/AMJbg68WeLc?feature=shared - I mean.

Would you rather him be the chieftain?

He’s already well on his way.

If he gains the armor, best of luck to anyone trying to beat this fucking menace.

[fluid ridge]

now if only his fur was a dirty green

[unborn vault]

I would rather we fight what is in canon, an old man.

[fluid ridge]

gosh, now i cant imagine the sk without like a really long beard

[unborn vault]

Scavs don’t grow beards, do they?

[fluid ridge]

probably not but it be funny

[fluid ridge]

okay, i only just started watching, but a fricking red centipede??? yeah, i choose the old man

[unborn vault]

One-fifth of the time, it can kill a red Centi.

This thing as chieftain would probably ruin Downpour.

[fluid ridge]

for me its more like a 1/20

[fluid ridge]

no shit, my odds at killing the sk a so much better then a red centepide and here this normal scav just kills one with ease

[unborn vault]

Good thing this creature can’t spawn naturally. I think it can’t, and I sincerely hope it doesn’t.

[fluid ridge]

it feels like the only time it would spawn is during a world record pace speed run, just to spite you

[north herald]

Every arti playthrough is personalized

(Btw i think sk also has some varying stats??? Somebody correct me on that)

[fluid ridge]

(no clue, time for the wiki)

[unborn vault]

I think it’s the same.

[fluid ridge]

seems to be the case

[next temple]

I think SK has a unique creature ID since the ID tells the game all physical traits like colors and such too

So every SK has the same stats

Iirc their Empathy is maxed out too....

[unborn vault]

Tragedy.

What inspired me to put “pity”.

[north herald]

okay time to get it done

[fluid ridge]

exactly my thoughts with chapter 9

[north herald]

except i'm just slightly over halfway with all the chapers whole

[fluid ridge]

please dont force yourself tho
im serious, dont stress youself about fixing my mistakes!!!

[north herald]

oh it's more of a me thing

[fluid ridge]

good to know, tho if you ever feel like you must do it, just know that you dont. i will be forever greatful for all the help you already provided but i will never expect from you to continue if you dont wanna. if you want to take breaks, do it

[unborn vault]

Karessra!

Behold - https://docs.google.com/document/d/10BcwVvKAjVI4EzaOAIi7XXv8kFnncz4aolntfp5keQY/edit?usp=sharing - I have something for you!

[fluid ridge]

yes?

eyyyy

funny google docs name

[north herald]

fight scene at cheap price? /j

[unborn vault]

Please criticize the thing.

It looks like I can't write Arti as a truly evil character.

Karma thinks of her as beyond redemption. I do not.

[fluid ridge]

now i feel bad cause you mainly wrote it becasue of me but i wanna wait with it until i have finished my own fight scene, otherwise, im worried i might end up subconsiously copping the entire thing

[unborn vault]

I mean, it ends differently.

It's not the most intense fight I could've made.

And it definitely didn't end with Arti being happy about it.

Wait.

I can turn this into content!

I'm joking.

I don't mean to.

[fluid ridge]

well, ig since mine|| wont really end|| it should be fine
time to read

[fluid ridge]

why not?

[unborn vault]

Not sure, I don't really want to show this off just yet.

I'll see what Cy and After-113 thinks.

[fluid ridge]

should i wait with reading?

[unborn vault]

Up to you.

It's polished enough to be shared among friends.

[north herald]

||neverending battle ||

[fluid ridge]

if you plan to still overwork it i would wait a little bit more, also erases the risk of me just stealing all your ideas

[unborn vault]

I'm done with working on it. It's just that modifications may be made after.

Also, Banan - she's got the feel for emotions.

[fluid ridge]

you have to learn fightscenes somehow
plottwist wasnt that calloutpost happens in the end, but that from chapter 9 ongoing everything will be|| arti vs sk||, nth else, pebbles who

[next temple]

As a remorseful arti stan, I approve

||I see you have a similar idea about the id drone communication||

[north herald]

we've had 8 chapters of pebbles tag, now it's time for 8 chapters of arti tag

[unborn vault]

Also, fucking obsessed with Hadestown's Epic III.

[unborn vault]

Anything you can criticize?

[next temple]

If you want detailed crits then wait a bit, got to do some choirs first

[north herald]

well that's that, correcting commas sure is anxiety inducing cause you never know if you are saying something right or completely bullshitting

[fluid ridge]

cant be worse than what im doing with my comma placement i reckon

[north herald]

you fix some, you break some

[fluid ridge]

to be fair, the fact that nouns are capitalized in german definetly didnt help, but i like to capatilize words that i think would be like important enough to be. there is also the fact that it relies on context. Pebbles' Antennae get capitilized cause they are like an important part of an iterator, but the yellow lizards antennae arent since why would they
tho im inconsistent with it. sometimes i just forget what words i deemed important enought and which i didnt

another factor is that i think sentenses with no capitalization just look wrong to me

[north herald]

it certainly is, uh...

interesting?

perhaps a bit funny