Beyond the Shell

[unborn haven]

done :3

[fluid ridge]

thanks a lot!!!

[unborn haven]

np

[fluid ridge]

Okay so for anyone that will join in, this will be a thread to a story im planning right now. It will be mostly focused on what happens if Moon used her Seniority Privileges earlier and what follows. It will also mostly be Five Pebbles Centric.

Right now though i only have a script and it might take a while till i will upload the first Chapter.

This thread is mostly just here to keep me motivated and also so i can post stuff in here that i might need to look up later on (mostly it will just be some sort of log for myself).

Then again i might not be very active in here so im not sure how all of this will turn out

[maiden bear]

Joining

Looking forward to what you make!

[north herald]

boo (jumpscare)

[fluid ridge]

ahhhhhh

[fluid ridge]

So from now on i will try to make at least a small thing everyday which i will then update in here as some sort of daily goal.

Right now i have finished structuring 16/18 Chapters (number might change)
None of the Chapters have till now been written and the next goal is to write out most of the Pearl Dialog and Logs that will appear before i start with the Rest.

The script has also been completely overworked as to edit inconsistencies

The Script right now is 57 pages long and except the finer details on how i will write the ending, everything his been pretty much decided
I still might change stuff however, if i end up not liking it. There are only two parts in the Story i would change right now and one of them is the ending.

Daily updates will still be attempted but there will be some days were i might not have much to say.
Regardless i will try to keep it at least a bit active in here and will soon start posting Story parts if i think they wont spoil too much

[fluid ridge]

The Chapter count has gone up from 18 to 20 and it should stay that way until im done unless i have to somehow change larger parts of the story.

[fluid ridge]

First part done!

Oh, and in the first picture there is a slight typo. Its actually supposed to say [REFUGEUPONTHREEJEWELS], my bad

[north herald]

NGI seems like an maniac

[fluid ridge]

oh they are actually a cannon iterator

i just put them a bit more on crack

their all cannon and while they only write in anonymus chat rooms both PI and GS could be two other Iteratros whose name we know as Pleading Intelect and Gazing Stars but its not confimed. i just guessed that they could be because they have the same initials so i just went for it.

[fluid ridge]

Wow im doing more then i excpected today!

This will appear at the beginning of chapter 11 so im kinda jumping all over the place

i do have to add though that the first picture is actual in game dialogue (Pink 4 Chatlog_SI3). its not mine but i didn't want the chat to just start with them asking how things are going.

i will give them a discussion for the end too but i wont post that in here for obvious major spoiler reasons

[north herald]

3rd image should be "hear" not "here"

[subtle field]

This is pretty interesting so far 😄 . I am interested to see where its going

[fluid ridge]

thx!!!

but tbh those two parts are like 10 chapters apart TvT. Idk why the thirst thing i decided on was to write random side characters but now im attactched and they will be allowed to apear three times

[subtle field]

hehe

[fluid ridge]

daily update log [4]
didn't get the chance to do much today.
i finished the script for chapter 19 and one of my friends might draw a few things for the story

[fluid ridge]

daily update log [5]
mostly just kept writing the prologue.

i will also most likely stop posting pictures of what i write (minus maybe some pearl dialogue) because after im done with the prologue i wanna keep spoilers to a minimum

[north herald]

||so Moon and Pebbles are getting shut down is what i'm getting at?||

[fluid ridge]

kinda but not really. they will both lose direct access to most systems besides the memory conflux and moon will be just drifting in and out of conciseness because she has older water systems while pebbles will be more 'awake' and has to find a way to help both moon and him.

its the fist idea for a story ive ever had but heavily edited

[fluid ridge]

also one small addition.
the entire script is now done

[fluid ridge]

daily update log [6]
Ok so im done with the Prologue but now im not sure if i should already post it or not because the rest will take me so much longer. The Prologue itself will already be shorter then the rest and it was not as complicated to write but if i would post it, worst case scenario, it might take months for me to only finish the next chapter so im not sure if i should already post it or not

[fluid ridge]

ok so i may or may not have deleted my work in panic after accidently posting it and now lost a few important parts

[north herald]

uh oh

[fluid ridge]

yeah that sucks but after that i decided that when im done with everything again that i will atleast already post the prouloge becasue in the time that it was public a few already read some of the things i wrote (mannn i hope they didnt read the script becase that is just pure spoilers...) so i will mostlikely post it today

[fluid ridge]

https://archiveofourown.org/works/55855210
ok so the prologue is now out, hope i edited out all the major mistakes after my little mess up

[next temple]

read the prologue! ||silly Moon's engineers, why hadn't they set up a proper Permission control! How come 'role' didn't have 'role_permissions'! and were there even someone with the admin privilege around anymore to fix this...||

ah, another take at 'Worms off their strings', I wonder how and where will you take this story to? will surely check in from time to time. Keep up the good work!

[north herald]

Proofread jumpscare

||should be "consciousness" instead of "conscience" i believe||

[fluid ridge]

ahhhh

[north herald]

||also I find it funny that this is all very likely caused by the fact that the ancients did not bother to check for bugs and errors in the seniority previlages lmao||

[fluid ridge]

||not for Moon and Pebbs at least, their way closer then any other existing Iterators so they cant really just pull a refrence from anywhere||

[north herald]

||also the whole system crumpling after encountering a bug feels very realistic||

[fluid ridge]

thanks, i dont know anything about machines so i can only hope that it makes some sort of sense

[fluid ridge]

also just cause im not the smartest, what do i need to correct

[north herald]

Stated in the spoilered text section

[fluid ridge]

ohhhh i just didnt see that

thanks for the help as always

[fluid ridge]

daily update log [7] (no i did not almost forget )
huge progress has been made on chapter two and chapters 1 - 20 now all have names!

[fluid ridge]

daily update log [8] chapter 2 is done and only needs major editing, might post it tomorrow

[fluid ridge]

daily update log [9]
chapter 2 is done after and a quick proof read session from myself i will post it.
i think chapters 1-3 (maybe 4) will all come out relatively quick and after that the chapter should get longer so they will also slow down.
also my actual proofreader has important exams so they wont check over it until around 1-2 days so i hope i catch most errors myself.
not sure right now but i will most likely also start with chapter 3 today

[fluid ridge]

https://archiveofourown.org/works/55855210/chapters/142018573#workskin

second chapter done

[north herald]

Okay quick fire round

Wouldn't that be "anyone was"?

Typo, wrote "put" instead of "but" I believe

Two spaces after "body"

Two first commas not needed

[north herald]

Okay back from my interruption, here should be "build" not "built" I think

Here comfirmation i think

"This instant" I assume?

Honestly not many mistakes unless i missed something

Also pretty cool, I like where this is going

[north herald]

Oh also just realized that is clunky, maybe "not nearly as strong" instead?

[fluid ridge]

happy to hear that i at least start to get less mistakes

[north herald]

well it does mean less work for me so heh /lh

[fluid ridge]

also thanks alot
chapter 2 was mostly just setting stuff up so i was scared that it might get boring

[fluid ridge]

daily update log [10]
completed the rough outline for chapter 3

[fluid ridge]

daily update log [11]
Mostly just started the script for a Side Pov for Chapter 11

[fluid ridge]

man i should be writing but instead i made that

no one even has the context besides me but i just kinda think its funny

[north herald]

||Okay either FP goes on a trip to metropolis or gets a suprise visit||

Or this is not even coorelated idk

[fluid ridge]

Spoilers so if you dont wanna know just dont read|| but funnily enough both will kinda happen and neither has anything to do with the image ||

[fluid ridge]

dayily update log [12]
edited a few things i didnt like

[fluid ridge]

daily update log [13]
and i continue doing anything that isnt chapter 3

oh and i just saw the their there mistake on the second picture, whoops

[north herald]

||Should be "Citizen's ID drone", "don't see why not", "if there is no way out"||

[north herald]

Yeah

Also pretty cool

[fluid ridge]

wait omg yes, why did i write idea

i will just say that i only did those mistakes cause its 1 am, not planning to stop writing though

[north herald]

Okay I fumbled the 1st one like 3 times but it should be right now

[north herald]

Have fun, I am going to sleep cause it's 1 am as well, cya

[fluid ridge]

good night

[fluid ridge]

Ok so the side character Pov for chapter 10 is finally done. Hopefully i can now actually focus on chapter 3

[next temple]

||just read ch.2||
||The Overseer's POV was interesting... Apparently they're self-aware enough to have fear for their own well-being huh...||

[fluid ridge]

daily update log [14]
mostly just kept writing on chpater 3

[fluid ridge]

daily update log [15]
more chapter 3 stuff, wow so interesting

[fluid ridge]

daily update log [16]
more chapter 3 stuff (why is it taking so long )

[fluid ridge]

daily update log [17]
chapter 3 is FINALLY done, that one was difficult for some reasone.

https://archiveofourown.org/works/55855210/chapters/142547476

lets hope its good

[maiden bear]

oh man your stats! people are loving this

I need to read ittt

[fluid ridge]

im actually surprised how well it is going, but im not complaining

[north herald]

Nice chapter you got there, would be a shame if someone were to...
PROOFREAD IT

(Later)

[fluid ridge]

AHHH!!!

(thanks as always)

[next temple]

||very sassy overseer haha||

[fluid ridge]

||it likes to be annoying whenever it can be ||

[north herald]

Okay here goes

Shouldn't it be "wouldn't" here?

"Contrary to his belief"

I'd move the comma to after the "now" but idk

||Wasn't it a Lock Down?||

Should be ||"Void's"|| in both cases i believe

Shouldn't it be "lying" here?

Wasn't it a ||General System__s__ Bus||? Both cases

I think that's all

Also ||the overseer adding all those arrows like it's a youtube clickbait thumbnail lmao||

[gleaming snow]

Finished reading chapter 3

[fluid ridge]

happy to hear

[fluid ridge]

daily update log [18]
started writing the broader script for chapter 4

[fluid ridge]

daily update log [19]
finished the more detailed script for chapter 4.

[fluid ridge]

daily update log [20]
cutely posts more random machine stuff that hopefully makes sense

[north herald]

"Has been sent"

[fluid ridge]

me again with all these stupid tense forms

[north herald]

Also maybe "seniority previleges couldn't be granted over the following..."?

Not sure tho

Overall i like it

[fluid ridge]

oh yeah that sentence felt weird

[north herald]

Ngl my english writing works on spit, tape, hope and guesswork, but hey, if it works...

[fluid ridge]

oh, im pretty sure it does. Im just going to assume that you better in English than i am so i will just trust you there. No pressure though. If something is actually wrong its not the end of the world

[north herald]

Well no i believe everything is good here i'm just remarking on my writing lmao

[north herald]

Also isn't UI also part of the local group?

[fluid ridge]

i think so

why?

[north herald]

Oh wait hold on i'm blind i thought there was no UI there lmfao

[fluid ridge]

if not i would feel pretty dumb casue i just wrote a huge chatlog with them xD

[north herald]

Yeah no it all checks out disregard what i have said i have had a 0iq moment

[fluid ridge]

lmao ok

i do have to ask you sth though, not rain world related

im just going to assume that you played one shot because of you profile pic. Did you know that the devs are planning to make another game?

[north herald]

Yeah uh i forgot the name but it was something about dreams and a moth person, no?

[fluid ridge]

i think so, i only saw parts of the trailer

it looked really neat

now that that question is done i will only have to ask HazardousRaven, later

[north herald]

Okay it's called Margin of the Strange, yeah

[fluid ridge]

sounds interesting, cant wait for it to come out

[north herald]

https://marginofthestrange.com/

Here's the website i guess

[fluid ridge]

yeah it looks really, really interesting. thx

[fluid ridge]

daily update log [21]
writing for chapter four has officially begun

[north herald]

Yippie

[fluid ridge]

not me hoping that i will gain 8 more hits and no kudos so i can have funny numbers for my brain
also omg 100 kudos?! wth im crying

[next temple]

Nicee! Congrats!

[fluid ridge]

daily update log [22]
A few edits here and there on the already available chapters. Mostly just minor stuff like the capitalization of words like 'Puppet', etc. A few things i didn't like were deleted and a few things i thought were missing were added. Overall not too much.

also slowly but surely closing in on the 100 10 100 goal

[north herald]

Oh, what parts were changed?

[fluid ridge]

i had that one sentence were pebbles mentioned the comfort of having the overseer near him, but i just kinda thought it was way to early for that. plus till now the overseer has only been mildly annoying and slightly helpful so i thought it didnt make much sense it retrospective.

[north herald]

Ah

[fluid ridge]

than there were also a few rough transitions where i just cut to the next story beat (funnily enough all in parts were i wrote sth afterwards between two parts) so i just smoothed out the connections

and sth else too but i dont remember right now

but sth i added casue i thought it might otherwise be confusing

[north herald]

Aye

[fluid ridge]

yeah, i should really stop stalling and just keep writing already

[north herald]

You do you

[fluid ridge]

i wanted to start 2 hours ago and im still just editing

so now i will just start, no more avoiding the main mission

[fluid ridge]

soooo close

[maiden bear]

Ahhh!!

[fluid ridge]

100 10 1000 im coming for you!!!

[maiden bear]

that would be an amazing screencap

[fluid ridge]

exactly

[maiden bear]

cmon pokes hits

Do it

[fluid ridge]

lol i refresh my page like 2 times a minute

[next temple]

Imagine tho, what if the next time you check, it's instead 1001.....

[fluid ridge]

i would cry and quit writing forever /j

but it would be fair, since all im doing right now is waiting for sth to happen instead of actually writing

[maiden bear]

Has happened to me. Ao3 cache system strikes again

[fluid ridge]

screams uncontrolably

[next temple]

Oh noooo

[fluid ridge]

rip me

guess i have to quit now TvT

[next temple]

[next temple]

Don't do it!

[fluid ridge]

as a punishment i now have to finish chapter 4 today and start on chapter 5

guess i will have to write

a lot

[north herald]

Wait so are hits like views or...?

[fluid ridge]

i think?

[next temple]

It's now count down to 2k !

[next temple]

Pretty much

[fluid ridge]

have to go for the 200 kudos 20 bookmarks and 2000 hits on the dot
easy /j

[next temple]

The curve is much harder though ( i think) you probably will reach 20 bookmarks before 2000 hits

[fluid ridge]

i think i will not get enough kudos before i reach the 2000 hits part anyways. cause one person can only give one kudo but more hits if i recall corectly?

pretty unlikely that its gonna happen

but hey i reached the 1k hits mark so i should stop whining

[next temple]

Iirc unless they delete the cookie/cache ao3 will remember the ip and try to not double count

[fluid ridge]

makes sense

[fluid ridge]

ok so since ive missed the 1000 hit part i now have a lot of work to do.

if i actually make it im not sure but hey

will work out somehow

[next temple]

Also, do you know that the shown bookmarks counts on the story is probably less than the actual number? There are some users who bookmarks privately so the public number is lower. You can check this out by going into your own profile>stats

[fluid ridge]

wait rly?

i did not know that

hmmm yeah the number is a bit larger, interesting to know

but what is ment with subscriptions?

ah no wait, now i get it

never really looked at the stats, definetly interesting

[next temple]

Subscriptions are always private i think

[fluid ridge]

yup

[next temple]

It could be a curse... It was tempting to check this every morning for a while for me

and I still do that

[gleaming snow]

Social media stats

[fluid ridge]

suddenly its way less interesting

might just check it out for bookmaks, who knows

[maiden bear]

Ugh I check stats all the time…

Especially after posting a chapter. It’s like a disease

[fluid ridge]

i can imagine its annoying

thankfully i dont have that problem

(yet)

[fluid ridge]

okay so im not getting the chapter done for today. for one i added so much stuff that wasn't even in the script and now ive just been browsing the merch store cause it restocked.

crys in mission failed

[fluid ridge]

The moment when you realize that chapter 4 is starting to get as big as the first three chapters are combined

(im kinda stretching, but its getting way bigger than i intended)

daily update log [23]
chapter 4 is done and im really happy how it turned out. i still have to proofread it of course, but it will most likely be released either tonight or tomorrow.

man im way ahead of schedule, nothing bad of course, rather the opposite but we will see how it turns out

[fluid ridge]

https://archiveofourown.org/works/55855210/chapters/142938505

aaaaanndd done!

now im really gonna take a break though

i have so many works i have to catch up on

[north herald]

1st sentence sent

Last sentence "sure feels like it" I think?

"May I remind you" I believe

You're

I think you can just say "sliverist groups"?

"It was my responsibility to" perhaps? I just dunno about this one tbh

1st paragraph "can't"

Last paragraph sent

"In the meantime" I think

"Don't know" maybe? Possibly

On his tail

[fluid ridge]

oh yeah that one felt weird. i think i originally wanted to write sth after that. like, ehhhh, We wont know what motivated them, until so and so.

[north herald]

Missed a space after weaker

Too late

"Get the job done" maybe?

Isn't sunlight written together?

Rare ones ||(yoo sm)||

Same ones

Here pearl's memory i think

Staring

Referred

[fluid ridge]

refereed???

really why does auto correction hate me

[north herald]

Ancient referees of the FP city

[fluid ridge]

whoops

[north herald]

Shouldn't it be "he had inadvertently" here?

[fluid ridge]

wait would it work if i just end the sentence with a question mark

im pretty sure that was the actual plan and i just forgot

wait no, that makes the rest sound pretty rough

i will just switch the two

[north herald]

Here "its"

[north herald]

Yeah it would work by itself but not here

Uh why the dash here? Seems odd

[fluid ridge]

ik exactly why. i edited the 'i suppose' after i was mostly done i there and with it the '...'

but yeah now its a bit much hesitation stuff

[north herald]

Rubble with double b

Exciting

[fluid ridge]

ah yes, all those exiting things happening.... wow

[north herald]

||five pebbles pulls off "worst pearl heist ever", asked to leave metropolis||

I like it

[fluid ridge]

glad to hear that

i dont even know why that was sooo much easier to write than chapter 3 since that one was much sorter and i actually followed the scipt in that one

like the entire ||overseer using pebbs old memories ||part was not planned at all and it just kinda happened which made it a lot harder to write. but overall it was so much faster

[north herald]

Maybe you just got in the flow idk

[fluid ridge]

Also whoops, still haven't thanked you for proofreading another whole chapter.
As always huge thanks! Im really bad at spotting all my own mistakes so the help is really really appreciated

[fluid ridge]

hope that will continue

[north herald]

Too much time on my hands

[fluid ridge]

I'm not complaining. However if you ever need some help with something just ask! I will try my best to help

[gleaming snow]

New chapter

[fluid ridge]

yep!

quickest one yet

(somehow)

[soft agate]

Finally got to this fic. Slowly catching up.
Really enjoyed the chapters :3

[fluid ridge]

lol i just read through all your comments

had to laugh at a certain one...

not saying which because spoilers

but glad you liked it, im planning to catch up to yours tomorrow (well today i guess) as well

[soft agate]

Catching up is good, I am running ahead. Nearly finished chapter 8 today, and I uploaded 7 only yesterday. :p

Also yes, I really like it. Should have joined the bandwagon earlier. But one can only stomach that many fics at the same time.

[fluid ridge]

tbh i think the story is only really now getting started (at 4 out of 20, ehhhhh, my bad).
Honestly while the first three chapters are necessary for set up only the forth one actually kinda did not mostly dump exposition in the end

Im just glad that the first three dont seem to be received as boring

[soft agate]

I liked them. They set up the situation nicely and pointed out the paths this fic will stray away from the canon development quite clearly. ||Still love that SM's big mission just got denied||

[fluid ridge]

pffft

||no spear master this time, they can keep their stomach pearl||

[soft agate]

||No heroic name either. Suns will name them less brave. Spearknave||

[fluid ridge]

||Spear-couldnt open a single door||

[soft agate]

||Spearn't||

[fluid ridge]

||their right for spears will be revoked||

[soft agate]

Hehe

[fluid ridge]

||Anyone want to adopt my child? I dont want them no more||

~SRS probably

[soft agate]

Brutal

[fluid ridge]

they will live

i hope

[soft agate]

||Your messenger days are over. You will now use your needles to pick up litter. My city is overdue for a deep-clean||

[fluid ridge]

||poor SM||

||disowned by their own parent and only used for cleaning services now||

[north herald]

||"Don't worry, you will NOT be sent to a freedom camp upon failing a mission. This is merely a rumor." - SRS||

[gleaming snow]

Chapter consumed

[fluid ridge]

daily update log [24]
ehhhh, ive been mostly catching up with other works today so i only updated the script with like 10 sentences

[fluid ridge]

daily update log [25]
writing on chapter 5 started with mostly Pearl dialogue which is really fun to write. Why cant everything be like Pearl dialogue

[soft agate]

Woo!

[fluid ridge]

daily update log [26]
more chapter 5 stuff and me panicking cause a03 wont show me anymore if a word is written wrong, and im not sure why

[next temple]

Pretty sure that is not AO3 innate feature? Did you use microsoft edge browser or some other browser that has that autocorrect feature before?

[fluid ridge]

i just switched from laptop to pc but i used firefox both times

[next temple]

(I think so anyway because back when I was still writing with Ao3 editor on a phone and a laptop, there's no autocorrect function on the phone )

Maybe it's a feature you have to turn on in firefox setting then?

[fluid ridge]

i did look there, you can check it on and off but mines already checked

[next temple]

Hmm I see. not sure then

[fluid ridge]

im cryign right now, that thing was the only reason why i didnt have around 1000 mistakes in my chapters

and even with it i stil had pletiful mistakes so now i dont even wanna know whats gonna happen

[next temple]

Just skimmed some troubleshooting article, maybe it's different version of firefox? Or, ad an article suggests, the one on pc doesn't have proper dictionary installed.

https://support.mozilla.org/en-US/kb/how-do-i-use-firefox-spell-checker

[fluid ridge]

hmmm

yeah i looked at that one, i just dont really get it

man that sucks, i even tried an addon but the best one i found said my text was to long for them to check unless i buy premium

and im not that desperate

guess i just have to write on laptop again (that thing is sooo slow )

[next temple]

Well, only a suggestion but I have that feature on the preinstalled Microsoft Edge browser without modifying any setting, you could try that out?

[fluid ridge]

yeah i can do that, gimmi a sec

ok yeah edge does still work
still crying because i hate the layout soooo much

thx for the help though

[next temple]

Lol I just don't really pay much attention to the browser layout i guess.

Glad to be of help!

[fluid ridge]

Ok so I took a bit of time to think and in the end its not the worst.
I can just write it on pc without being interrupted by my own want to correct mistakes and afterwards edit it on my laptop, easy

still kinda sucks but i can work around it

[soft agate]

You got that

[gleaming snow]

Looking forward to the next chapter!

[fluid ridge]

glad to hear
also makes me want me to keep writing, but im being lazy right now

[soft agate]

I say do it. A quick session of 500 words.

[fluid ridge]

(not me struggling with even 200 words alone )

[north herald]

Uhh... 100 words?

[fluid ridge]

wait

ok im just writng them now

i want a prearl for the end of the chapter so i might just do that

[soft agate]

Dew it

[fluid ridge]

i will

[fluid ridge]

It realized a shift in tone.

Where he was annoyed before, now there was a flicker of recognition in his eyes, a fond look, something relatively rare for him.

However, its own confusion was apparent enough for him to take notice. Pebbles seemed to be getting better at reading its emotions, wasn’t he? As he put the Pearl down and looked at it, his posture was no longer as stiff as before.

"You wonder what the Pearl contents I just read were, don’t you, little Spectator?"

It nodded. Yes, it did want to know. Such a look was reserved for rare occasions, after all.

"Well, if you insist..."

"This Pearl was created after some of my Engineers were sent over to Looks to the Moon to update her own [SPOILER] to be more on par with mine. It is a letter of gratitude from the Engineers' Guild to one of my lower Administrators, Swaying Flags encompassed by Sixteen Flowers. Let me just—"

It watched with a curious eye as he picked up the Pearl again.

"All Praised Swaying Flags encompassed by Sixteen Flowers, Member of the Administrator Board [Looks to the Moon AND Five Pebbles], Count of 0 Living Blocks, Counselor of 23, Duke of 1

We wish to extend our deepest gratitude for your assistance in coordinating our recent efforts. Our Engineers have successfully updated Looks to the Moon's [SPOILER] to align with the advancements implemented in Five Pebbles' systems as you so carefully asked of us. This achievement would not have been possible without your invaluable guidance and detailed instructions.

As you are (oh so well) aware, our team is accustomed to maintaining and enhancing Five Pebbles' infrastructure. The transition to working on Looks to the Moon's systems presented a unique set of challenges. However, thanks to your comprehensive overview and meticulous attention to detail, we were able to overcome these obstacles and ensure a seamless upgrade.

We have included a detailed report (42 Items) of the modifications and improvements made, should you require further information or wish to discuss any aspect of the project in greater detail.

With sincere appreciation, The Engineers' Guild"

Pebbles paused, a rare softness in his expression. "Flags was truly one of the best. Efficient, meticulous, and always dedicated to the betterment of our systems. They were one of the few who treated both me and Moon equally. Her not as an outdated machine and me not as someone who divided our Citizens. They had also been the only one to take up the role as Administrator for both of us. It's a shame they’re no longer with us."

The Overseer continued to watch intently, processing the significance of the message and the emotions it evoked in Pebbles. It was a rare glimpse into a past filled with dedication and collaboration, moments that were now merely memories captured in these fragile Data Pearls.

"You know..."

The Iterator pointed at his cloak, still a bit crumpled up from its previous usage.

"...Flags was actually the one who designed both mine and Moon's robes. If not for them, they wouldn’t have been so similar, another reason why I prefer to avoid a repeat of what happened today if I can help it."

It watched as Pebbles smoothed out the few folds still left in the fabric.

"But the past can’t be changed. In the end, they too Ascended, not even gracing me or Moon with a farewell as some of the others had done. I tried to be mad, to be angry at them, but in the end, I still recall memories with them fondly, if slightly soured."

He placed the Pearl in one of the chamber’s corners, the one he used for the ones he treasured more than others, before turning back to it.

"Let's continue for now; we still have a few left."

AND DONE!

not counting but that should at least be more than 100 words

this will most likely not be the final version of the part, im pretty sure i will edit it over, especially since the part before and the part after it are not even scripted yet, but i like it so far

wait its already the next day i might just count that as a daily update log

daily update log [27]
that text i wrote above that message

WAIT, i just read throw it again and i broken my number 1 rule by mentioning our own scaling with time. How can i switch up the today, hmmmmm

maybe just a repeat of what happend without the today?

would sound a bit rough but its still just a sketch so it should work for now

[fluid ridge]

daily update log [28]
the extra pov for chapter 5 is done, now i only have to actually write the main part

but not today now i will go to sleep

[fluid ridge]

im counting what im about to send as a daily update log but being honest i just wanna know if it makes sense.

ALSO! this will have some really big spoilers for the upcomming chapter so if you dont wanna spoil yourself dont read it!!!

daily update log [29]

[north herald]

Ah yes, Five Pebbles user manual

[fluid ridge]

yeah it kinda feels like that and im not sure if i like it

to direct

just not sure how to get the information acros in another way without making it way to long

[fluid ridge]

daily update log [30]

edited the same part over, still not the biggest fan of it but for now i can live with it

also since its already day 30 i will just put a little extra in here as well

first thing for chapter 5

gosh i love writing pearl dialouge as long as its not actually a one to one manual for pebbs

[fluid ridge]

daily update log [31]
more work on chapter 5 while all i can think about is how much rather i would write chapters 6 - 20

(excluding chapter 8, i really dont wanna write that one )

and now that i look at the script, chapter 15 will probably just as annoying to write. lucky for me its followed by chapter 16 and 17, two chapters were i really like the script

but being real for a second, i just really wanna write chapter 12 and anything that follows, guess for that i will have to keep writing good old chapter 5

[next temple]

Or you can skip ahead then come back later!

[fluid ridge]

i could....

no! i need to resist the temptation

i already jumped around in chapter 5 a lot becuase the beginning and end where fun to write, its mostly just the middly part i struggle with, but now wrote more then once about stuff that happens at the end in the middle part. im losing the script as we speak

im just hape to pull throw with the pormise of writing the other chapters in the future

unless its pearl and chat log dialogue that was pretty much the first thing i wrote. im even done with most of chapter 20 already

[soft agate]

Giggles in writing chapter for chapter with no frontload besides some plot points I wanna reach.

The biggest downside of a pre worked script is the fact that it will limit you from integrating ideas that appeared in a whim. Good luck consolidating the future chapters regarding the consequences of that change

[fluid ridge]

oh 100%

sadly i would just lose the entire plot the second i dont have a script anymore

but tbh my script changed so much already after i first finished it and i have no problem changing it when i come up with sth i regard as better

[soft agate]

fair enough

[fluid ridge]

but when i write a chpater script im so done with trying to follow it

but it helps me work since i have a goal to reach

[soft agate]

[fluid ridge]

the funny thing is that script writing for me is the most fun part

but actually writing it out in detail is where i struggle

[soft agate]

We differ so much :p

[fluid ridge]

well, as long as you get somewhere in the end

but i will try a one shot at some point with as little sript as possible

should at least test it sometimes

[fluid ridge]

daily update log [32]
Actually getting into chapter 5. It feels like i finally know how to write it

[soft agate]

Woo

[fluid ridge]

hows writing going for you?

[soft agate]

Not particularly great :p
I devoured an entire 300 page book yesterday. Banan recommended Bobiverse to me and book 2 was just too good.
…
I will try to have a new chapter by Sunday at its latest. Already 1500 words in it

[fluid ridge]

Bobiverse?

never heard of it

might check it out

[soft agate]

Sci-fi story about a replicant spaceship AI

[fluid ridge]

definetly sounds interesting

that one?

[soft agate]

It is interesting. Space exploration, terraforming, space fights, first contact and what not

Yep

[fluid ridge]

yeah i think im gonna read it

but not before im done writing or i will never finish

[soft agate]

Hehe

[north herald]

Mood, I have times where i don't read and times where i go on a reading FRENZY

[fluid ridge]

daily update log [33]
more work on chapter 5. If im quick about it it might be done either today or tomorrow

[next temple]

You got this!

[fluid ridge]

daily update log [34]
only six more check points for the chapter left. Might finish it today, who knows.
Also, similar to chapter 4 this is getting way bigger then i planned

[next temple]

I assume because in the outline it didn't feel that long? Then when you actually write the chapter, it actually requires way more narrations?

[fluid ridge]

Well i usuall just structure my chapter with little check points. Example:

Random opening pearl dialog (maybe foreshadowing, maybe head cannons, maybe trash) which will be interrupted since some of the data is unreadable since to hang up the pearls the scavs drilled holes into them so some data is missing on all of them.

After that it turns out that Pebbes was reading that dialog to the Overseer, as he remarks, on how none of them had helped till now. (also give pebbs a moment where he recalls all the data they received so far [hint hint, nudge nudge,  he will mention the one the overseer recorded so i can tie that all together -> since cannon 5p thought it to be funny maybe make him regret that he didnt get it himself for a good laught -> that leading to him mentioning that it would be to late now since it was taken by scavs.])

those where the first two points of chapter 5 and i just continue that until the end before checking them off one after another.

my notes for the chapter were pretty short so i didnt think it would be to long, but now i made up so much extra stuff and its getting out of hand

but now i only have 6 more so i should be done at the very least in 3 hours (if i dont distract myslef all the time)

[next temple]

It's fun kind of getting out of hand tho!

[fluid ridge]

four left

[fluid ridge]

three left

two left
(lmao that one part was only one sentence)

[next temple]

Dang I predicted you would finish 1.5 hrs from now

[fluid ridge]

well i still have to prove read

but i will probably finish today

i also want to post it today so i will not stop now

one part left

[gleaming snow]

Crazy!

[next temple]

Such speed....

Is soulwing's enthusiasm contagious or something, now I wanna catch some of that lol

[fluid ridge]

i wish, but the parts im writing right now are relatively short

soulwing writes so many words in such a short amount of time, i could never replicate that

[soft agate]

Soulwing writes nothing at all

Because Soulwing is stuck at how to do that interaction. The options are endless ;.;

[fluid ridge]

and thats why i write my story with only one person that can actually talk

two way conversations are to hard for me right now so i just simply dont have them

[soft agate]

Fair

So we have something confirmed now

There won't be any other Iterator in the story because the amany is scared of dialogues.

[fluid ridge]

ehhhhh

whoops

i mean- ehhhh. baseless lies

[soft agate]

proceeds to irreparably break moon's vocal box so she can at least participate

[fluid ridge]

nah, if one vocal box has to go its pebbles'

never hurting my girl moon

[soft agate]

The silent protagonist returns

[fluid ridge]

unless i want some more angst

[next temple]

Me, who is somewhat socially inept but trying to write a story that has a lot of deeply personal interactions

But venturing into unknown territory can be fun as well

[fluid ridge]

oh yeah, its not like i dont have any dialouge, i just keep it to chatlogs since they are easier

i will write actual dialog some day

just not for now

[soft agate]

I am venturing with Suns in unknown territories. First time I work with lore not set up by me, written by me and directed by me

[fluid ridge]

everyones starting sth new, its seems

[soft agate]

I mean corroded Destiny is something new for me in general given I spent the past 4 years on developing my own setting from the foundations on.

[next temple]

4 years?

[soft agate]

Yep...well 3.5 years. Started in November 2019

[fluid ridge]

Eyyyyy

last part done

now i only need to proveread

but i will probably rush that part, dumb ik, but i reall just wanna post the chapter

[next temple]

Better do that quickly before your own perfectionism catches up!

[fluid ridge]

im gonna use that as an excuse so i cant call myself lazy

[soft agate]

@north herald You will have much to do this time :p

[fluid ridge]

oh no

now i feel bad

but no, i just wanna be done

[soft agate]

[fluid ridge]

@north herald sry in advance

i will try my best, i swear!!!

[soft agate]

Boundless lies. Prove us wrong

Just a big tease rn, ignore me

[fluid ridge]

no worries

yikes

8k words

thats a lot more than planned

[soft agate]

That's a decent amount of gravel

[fluid ridge]

more than my usual amount at least

but it also took a few days

[soft agate]

So much sand to form five pebbles

[fluid ridge]

ok im proofreading now

until we meet again!!!

[soft agate]

Soul out. I try to get my marbles together and figure out how to start the chapter

[next temple]

Good luck on your endeavor!

[next temple]

In a shower can be a surprisingly good place for ideas to spontaneously form

[fluid ridge]

omg

finally done

and that was only the brief check

now i only have to copy paste the text into ao3

https://archiveofourown.org/works/55855210/chapters/143665546

BUMM

and now i can read it over again and will probably immediately find sth i missed

also funny word count

[north herald]

welp time to get to work (eventually)

[fluid ridge]

i tried hard to patch out all my mistakes
lets hope i did an actual good job this time

[north herald]

Space missing after again

Typo in itself

Comma after end maybe?

There instead of their

[north herald]

Also useful with just one l

Typo in couldn't

Either "in an unpleasant way" or "unpleasantly"

Safety measure(s) i presume? Also typo in failures

Typo in behind

Typo in wasn't. Also, eerie silence

Lots to list here. Was devoid i presume. Typo in light source and I think it is written separately? Then typo in hadn't. Accommodate. Then ceased. I guess "coated in darkness"

Maybe a comma after decision. Also kinda doubting ludicrous but supposedly by definition it fits?

Okay so this one is kinda uhh. 2 possibilities "He sent out another Signal to the Overseer, and after waiting for a bit, when nothing happened, he continued." or "He would send out another Signal to the Overseer, and after waiting for a bit, if nothing were to happen, he would continue.". Also typo in happened in the 1st case

[soft agate]

Was an very interesting read :3
Left a comment with my thoughts on AO3.

[north herald]

Typo in structure. Scattered on the ground i believe?

Typo in another

[fluid ridge]

glad to hear, i will read it if im done correcting all my mistakes
(yikes i thought there would be less )

[north herald]

"But i'm not done yet!"

[soft agate]

You ignited the piotrism of that unit

[north herald]

So near it or so close i think

Since I can't really scroll up or i will get lost in the progress, wasn't it referred to as the recursive transform arrays before?

[fluid ridge]

oh

the s is actually the typo then

[north herald]

Ill pull up the wiki

[fluid ridge]

i just did

no s

i had like four different maps pulled up the entire time i wrote the chapter

[north herald]

Okay yeah checks out

Even though? Not sure

[soft agate]

Sorry, but the temptation was too great, Amany :p
||Naming the pearl by how it would be named in game code ||

[fluid ridge]

which one? i just have to many

[north herald]

Led him. I think you can get rid of the "to" after down? Not sure about that again. Climb back up from? Or maybe return trough?

[soft agate]

I mean the one ||that sent pebbles to the gravity reset device. How oddly convenient. ||
The remaining are interesting to read, but I found the probability of an actual helpful guide amusing

[fluid ridge]

it really is just a guide
even more convenient that it just happened to be the very last pearl he had left

[north herald]

Typo in spectator. Prominent. Pulsed in sync maybe? Don't think you really need a comma before "and". Not sure what is going on at the end there

[north herald]

||"Iterator system reboot for dummies"||

[fluid ridge]

||but the worst offender in my mind is still the random exposition pearl explaining that he can control it with his antennae ||

[soft agate]

||It was all for naught!? I got scammed by delayed exposition pearl #0||

[north herald]

Sentimental. Process

Laid. Also, moon's

[fluid ridge]

||there will be so much more exposition Pearls in the future, its not even funny. maybe i should add more junk pearls as well ||

[north herald]

By his creators i guess?

[soft agate]

Tip, from exposer to exposer. Write your exposition devices a bit less direct and you automatically have more content to write over, with the protagonist interpreting the possibilities instead of following set paths. Adds also more suspense as you don't give away the solution in the preparation

[north herald]

Missing space after overseer

[fluid ridge]

i will try that

[soft agate]

You got it

[north herald]

It's. Your kind. Also maybe "to keep your kind from entering"? Typo in attempt. Also is it "attempt from" or "attempt by"? I think the latter but not sure. What's

Closed in on i think

Missing quotation mark before you. Typo in comment

Cringed

Comma after hands?

[fluid ridge]

cringing at my many mistakes right now

[north herald]

Annoyance

[north herald]

Plausible

[soft agate]

Do you use grammarly btw, Amany?

[fluid ridge]

doesnt that cost money?

[soft agate]

Nope

[fluid ridge]

if not that i will probably do that

oh

perfect

[soft agate]

I mean yes, but no

[fluid ridge]

would probably help

[north herald]

This cycle or these cycles

[soft agate]

It costs money for structural tips, but the free browser extension marks down all grammar mistakes and structure mistakes for free. The grammar mistakes can be corrected via the press of a button, the structure mistakes only show error locations but don't explain the cause

[north herald]

I don't think you need the comma after him?

[fluid ridge]

i really should use that

[soft agate]

I rely on it now for 4 years :p

[fluid ridge]

well in that case

[soft agate]

And the AO3 textboxes support grammarly

[fluid ridge]

perfect

[north herald]

Memories of them?

Its

Damn this is like an average SCP article lmao

Also ||pebbles factory reset?|| lmao

[fluid ridge]

when im to lazy to make actual text up /j

[north herald]

Wait what

Uh, teaser?

[fluid ridge]

ehhhhhh

no!

all just in your imagination

you misread

[north herald]

All in le head

[fluid ridge]

let me just
quickly delets tag

[north herald]

Anyways uhh, "Cave Johnson, we're done here"

[fluid ridge]

realizes that changing tags sucks so doesnt do it

[fluid ridge]

man and i thought i edited out most mistakes before you read it

i was WRONG

[soft agate]

So you want more complicated dialogues instead? Between sapient splody scug and headstrong god? Chaos ensures

[north herald]

34 images AAAAAAA /lh

[soft agate]

Brave

[north herald]

Anyways gtg cya y'all

[fluid ridge]

byeee

[fluid ridge]

well shes not gonna talk either, sooooo

[soft agate]

My work here is done, I can finally rest climbs back into grammarcula coffin

[soft agate]

Still difficult. Indirect talking is sometimes way more difficult than direct talk

[fluid ridge]

hmmmm, true

we will see, maybe the tag is just a red herring. no arti for any of you

also funny number again

[soft agate]

Neat

[fluid ridge]

daily update log [35]
script writing for chapter 6, what else
not much tho since im going to sleep now

[fluid ridge]

daily update log [36]
more script writing.
I outright scratched the exposition pearls i had planned for the end of chapter 6 / the beginning of chapter 7 since i really need to stop putting so much in (curse me and my urge to put in random lore that isnt even that important).
The only negative that change might have, is that Pebbs might look like a fucking maniac in one specific chapter since i wont excuse a certain action he will take, but hey, desperate times call for desperate measurements

also im pulling an all nighter to not completely destroy my sleep scheduled, so i should finish the script not to long from now.

[soft agate]

I wouldn't scratch all the pearls. They still are interesting and add flavor. The search for useful stuff among all those useless ancient thank you letters :p

[next temple]

Finally caught up, now my backlog isn't as massive now...

Love the conversation in the local group! You really brought out each of their personalities very well!

And of course, the antics between the little overseer and Pebbs Pebbles finally got the chance to 'personally' care about someone else in this way...

Also, not sure if I understand correctly but ||Is the Taboo room the Core?||

Also, not sure if this was pointed out yet but possible typo? 'even'?

[north herald]

Shit I think I missed that one

[next temple]

!! To think there would be a day I outdid the Great Proofreader! /j

[fluid ridge]

tbh, the story can do without that single one. and it will definetly not be the last, but it will help that i just dont have one each chapter

[fluid ridge]

mini spoiler,|| but no. the taboo room is just that really huge room at the upper right side of the general systems bus. i think the room is cool so i wanted it to have some sort of reason to exist||

[fluid ridge]

that one

[soft agate]

that reminds me. I always take the unfortunate development route. Never been in the GSB

[fluid ridge]

definetly a choice to make

[soft agate]

Unfortunate development is easy to navigate

[fluid ridge]

i hate it, i always go wall

[soft agate]

fair. I never go wall

[fluid ridge]

hows it going with riv?

[soft agate]

didn't start yet

[fluid ridge]

pfffttt-

well take your time

[soft agate]

But I just started with chapter 13. A quick 300 words broadcast to start things off

[fluid ridge]

also i just got grammarly (should have gotten that much earlier)

[fluid ridge]

already back in action i see

[soft agate]

I shouldn't. I have other stuff to do <.<

[fluid ridge]

then do that first

[soft agate]

I don't know where to start ;.; Statistics

[next temple]

yeah you already narrated that clear enough! I knew immediately what you meant, just that I thought ||The Core = where Taboo module is since that'd be fitting for the Ancients to name that ironically||

[fluid ridge]

when i wrote it i actually thought that i just make the ||taboos a part of the core ||but in the end i kept it like that.

[fluid ridge]

ok seriously, that thing is great. im leaving Piotr without a job now

[soft agate]

it still has its issues, but it helps at least with the basic shortcomings of us being non-natives

[fluid ridge]

well, guess someone still has a job after all

[north herald]

/j

[fluid ridge]

daily update log [37]
Script for chapter 6 is done and i already started with the script for chapter 7. After that i will most likely also script out chapter 8 before i actually write them out again.
I did think about putting chapter 9 and 10 in there as well but those are a two-parter so i thought it would be better if i do them on their own

oh yeah, I also changed a few things around the earlier chapter again, mostly just minor foreshadowing and editing a few sentences that i still didn't like

[gleaming snow]

Story consumed

[fluid ridge]

@soft agate you get your report 15 minutes early since im at a point where i think its a good thing to stop

daily update log [38]
more work on chapter 6 instead of scripting (all souls fault, im innocent)
im done with 8/47 check points so far with roughly 2k words in the last 4 hours. Im not even nearly done with the chapter since all i wrote so far was the openign and more pebbles overseer shenanigans.
of course i aslo went completly of script and made up some extra iterator rot lore (which then proceeded some actual good connection for later parts of the story) because i can

the openign so far (will probably change some stuff, not sure) with more random lore that noone asked for

https://discordapp.com/channels/291184728944410624/1229507095485747321/1250804524768034836 also thx again for the motivation soul the start is always the hardest part to write so now that i have that out of the way i should be maybe done withing the next week (no promises)

[soft agate]

Hrr!

That is a GOOD opening

[fluid ridge]

glad to hear

kinda completly ignores the last chapter but i do not care so pebbles does not care

[soft agate]

Screw it, we are going off-script

[fluid ridge]

pretty much

instead of spending my time writign more i had to come up with more iterator names

[soft agate]

Pebbles: My situation. Irrelevant. I am upset that I am not special

[fluid ridge]

question is now if i will use them again

i did set up a bit with Simplicity (you can see i did not put much thought into their names since the nicknames all kinda suck ) but that is so minor that i can ignore it if i change my plans

[soft agate]

One thing I learned in past stories I wrote was that there is a sweet spot relating main story unrelated lore. Too much of it and you lose your red string, too little of it and the story is too straightforward.
The more side lore you introduce the more difficult it will be for your reader to remember the things that matter.
So, if you want to let pebbles reflect further on the rot victims later, this can be seen as a setup to his situation. If you don't want to pick it up again you might want to dive a tiny bit deeper into it to finish the micro arc

[fluid ridge]

we will see

i didnt even use Forked Crossroads at all till now (lol i dont even know all their names, i always have to check what i made up ), like hes the first iterator ever to get the rot and we know that the ancients just kinda shut them off but other then that no clue

again, similar to Simplicity I could tangle them a bit into a later plot, mostly just to compare some stuff, but not more will probably happen

[soft agate]

sounds like you have a plan

[fluid ridge]

ehh-

kinda

i have like two huge side plots that will be brought up as the story goes on

one the 'what is the deal with the scavs plot' and another one i wont name due to spoilers. i already set them both up and in both cases if i were to use the rot iterators again it would only be for the secodn side plot

but maybe calling them huge is a but much

they will span over more chapters, thats it

the second one will be the longer one but it is also the one im less confidant in, we will see where it goes

[soft agate]

good luck

[fluid ridge]

thx! (please for the love of all that is holy, give us the monk sign thx sticker back you cowards!!! it was so useful )

[soft agate]

We have this. >Doom

[fluid ridge]

i dont even know what that stands for

[soft agate]

the end time novel 1984

[fluid ridge]

wow, ive never heard of that

[north herald]

When you say 1984 you mean censorship, restriction, etc

[fluid ridge]

so that a certain thing needs to be cencored?

[north herald]

No like excess censorshop

[fluid ridge]

ah, ok

but i still watn the monk sticker back

[gleaming snow]

1984 is a famous novel by George Orwell, author of animal farm.

Thematically, it centres on the consequences of totalitarianism, mass surveillance, and repressive regimentation of people and behaviours within society (wikipedia)
The phrase "Big brother is watching you" comes for said book.

[fluid ridge]

sounds interesting

adn like i missed some important book in school

[gleaming snow]

Tragic book but interesting. Worth a read

[fluid ridge]

i love tragic stuff

sign me up

[fluid ridge]

daily update log [39]
skipped a bit ahead in the chapter and finished the end pov.
im now done with 19/47 parts

[next temple]

...are those 47 parts for overall or only for this chapter?

[fluid ridge]

overall, i wish. nah its only my checkpoints for the chapter

[fluid ridge]

overall im done with one fith (if we onyl look at the chapter number) but since the later chapters will probably be longer that doesnt really count

[next temple]

longer

[fluid ridge]

i think?

not sure right now. the last two chapters and chapter 15 might be on the shorter side but all the others have a lot of stuff to put in

well 9 and 10 are a two-parter, so those might be not as long as well

but 9 also has the potential to be the longest out of them all, not sure really

[next temple]

...I have a suspicion that it probably will be even longer, since everything that has initial outlines, things always get out of hand

[fluid ridge]

exactly what is happening right now

5 chapters and im at 25k words. originally i excpected the work to not be longer then 60k at max

if you were simple you would say, 15 left so 100 k words, easy, but since the others will be longer im actually shocked at how many words that thing might end up with

[fluid ridge]

daily update log [40]
wow a big number, Amany will definitly have a big update, right

WRONG

i was weak and started yet another side project and wrote that script instead

but so i didnt do nothing i did a few minor edits

but the amount of stories im planning is gettting out of hand.

in short:

this one right now (big project)
the moon Rango crossover (one shot)
the Zombie Apocalypse one (big project)
UI and FP dynamic explore (one shot)
role reversal between moon and pebbs (big project)
saint and enot god stuff (one shot)

and those are only the ideas that i somewhat developed so far

way to much stuff

but i wanna write it all really bad

and then i get sidetracked from the story im writing at the moment.

i think my next big project i will have mostly complete before i start posting anything
and while the daily update log keeps me motivated to work i will probably make a private one for the future
i will lose so much motivation tho to do at least even a tiny thing each day

[fluid ridge]

crying right now cause i closed my text without saving and now its all gone

[soft agate]

Automatic saving?
Or do you not write on word?

[fluid ridge]

word saves text automaticly?

and no i write on ao3 directly and usually save like every 10 minutes

[next temple]

dont use ao3 editor directly! its so risky to lose everything

[fluid ridge]

ik....

but its just more convinient

and usually i really save a lot inbetween writing

[maiden bear]

USE GOOGLE DRIVE

I’m BEGGING you

It has version history too

You will never lose anything because everything you write in it automatically syncs

[fluid ridge]

but i like writing in ao3, only lost my stuff twice now

[maiden bear]

You can write on your phone, pc, all shared

[maiden bear]

ONLY TWICE

You and @unborn vault are peas in a pod I stg

[fluid ridge]

if i count all, then four times, but those times it was like only one sentence

[maiden bear]

Google drive….

Google drive. fades into the distance

[next temple]

maybe if google doc have the same editor (displaying rich text/html) you would consider that?

not that I know how

but i think its possible

[maiden bear]

You just copy paste into rich text

[fluid ridge]

i should really do that

but ao3....

[maiden bear]

ao3’s editor is horrible

Get google drive app on your phone and use it in the browser on pc

You can even use markup in google drive

for italics etc (god getting the stupid asterisk to show on discord… lmao fucking nvm)

[fluid ridge]

@maiden bear

i just cant

[maiden bear]

I cannot save you from yourself

[fluid ridge]

thx for trying tho

[soft agate]

Stubborn

[fluid ridge]

sadly

could make it easier for myself but i wont

[maiden bear]

what if you... tried and went back if you liked ao3 better

[fluid ridge]

...

is there a link?

[maiden bear]

use google docs app on phone

https://drive.google.com/drive/u/0/home

here's drive for pc

right click -> new doc

can make folders etc for your different stories

you can turn on markup for quicker formatting ( asterisks for italics etc)

and if you enable it when you give people the link to a doc they can comment/annotate for you

lots of useful features! Anything you write in it--any change will be automaticaly saved and synced to gdrive as long as you have an internet connection

[fluid ridge]

why is there already stuff in there?

[maiden bear]

what stuff?

you must have made docs before

[fluid ridge]

The Cradle part 1-3

[maiden bear]

or other files

ah because you read it

[fluid ridge]

Emergence map call script?

why is that in there?

[maiden bear]

it includes the stuff you've opened from google docs/drives as well

those are owned by other people though

[fluid ridge]

the rain world momemnet guide???

[fluid ridge]

ahhhh ok

[tranquil yoke]

Anything that’s been shared with you that you clicked on yeah

[maiden bear]

anything you make will be private unless you set it to be shareable don't worry

[tranquil yoke]

But also, don’t listen to banan- losing all your work because you forgot to save is cosmic fate telling you to rewrite

[fluid ridge]

bruuhhhh

there was one of me

i dont remember ever doing that

[maiden bear]

art

[tranquil yoke]

Realest google doc

[fluid ridge]

so if i write in there and copy paste over to ao3 i wont lose the formating, right?

casue it did with word

only reason i stayed on ao3 besides the autocorecter not working

[tranquil yoke]

If you copy to rich text it keeps most of the formatting

[maiden bear]

it'll keep it

[fluid ridge]

ugh

all?

[maiden bear]

will need to edit line spacing

it'll keep italics etc

[tranquil yoke]

It gets rid of indents for me for some reason

[maiden bear]

ao3 doesn't use indents

[tranquil yoke]

Which I find strange

[maiden bear]

paragraphs + indents is one standard way of handling paragraphs, but ao3 is based on paragraphs + line breaks

[fluid ridge]

i just always forget what formatic i used and if i have to edit anything afterwards im just annoyed

[tranquil yoke]

If you write the same way you would on AO3 on a google doogle, and then copy paste, you will have no issues

[fluid ridge]

so it will keep it if i put the text on the left for example?

[tranquil yoke]

I’m going to say yes, but I’ve never tested it

[fluid ridge]

[maiden bear]

yes

[tranquil yoke]

[fluid ridge]

ok then i will try using it

man i hate switching the stuff i use

[maiden bear]

actually maybe not

testing it it doesns't want to keep alignment

but its not hard to adjust that

[fluid ridge]

still annoying

but i will try nonetheless

[maiden bear]

less annoying than losing work :p

[fluid ridge]

that...

i can not object

ig i could also ask for feedback/proofreading before posting it on ao3?

[tranquil yoke]

That’s my biggest reason for using google docs. Sharing is super convenient.

[maiden bear]

yes!

and people can annotate (fix specific mistakes)

[fluid ridge]

they can just edit my stuff?

[maiden bear]

if you allow comments

[tranquil yoke]

You can give them commment or edit permission

[maiden bear]

they can mark parts as needing correction

and then you can accept or refuse the correction

[fluid ridge]

ah, ok

[maiden bear]

by default they can only read if you allow sharing

DO NOTE if you're using your primary email that is connected to your legal name

anyone you share with will be able to see it

[fluid ridge]

is it possible to give spesific people the right to edit?

[maiden bear]

you can use an email that doesn't have your name though

[maiden bear]

yes

you just need their emails

[fluid ridge]

already uses my second email i use for writing anyways

[tranquil yoke]

If I trust you with my RW fics I trust you with my name

[maiden bear]

perfect

[maiden bear]

yeah I use my main email idec

[tranquil yoke]

My cybersecurity practices are very poor

[maiden bear]

ohhh no.... you know my name... I don't even facebook lmao

[maiden bear]

me, trying to get into cs field: same

worst thing you could find is my linkedin maybe

[tranquil yoke]

My goodness! Linkedin

[maiden bear]

right?? gasp

what are you gonna do... give my info to a recruiter?? (actually, please do that)

pff my linkedin isn't even updated rip

[tranquil yoke]

“She’s got great qualifications, but she writes Rain World fanfic, so hard pass”

[north herald]

drop it during a chat every once in a while as a powermove /j

[fluid ridge]

eyyy, writing rw fics is a great quality to have

[maiden bear]

“She’s got great no qualifications, but she writes Rain World fanfic, so hard pass”

[tranquil yoke]

[north herald]

That makes it sound like writing RW fics is a redeemable quality

[fluid ridge]

is it not

[north herald]

Uhh maybe???

[fluid ridge]

maybe...
sobs in the corner

[tranquil yoke]

Of course it is! My fics are my greatest accomplishments

[fluid ridge]

that is not much of a high bar /j

[tranquil yoke]

TRUE

[north herald]

resumé material /j

[fluid ridge]

to my great pain i slipped up once and my boss knows im writing fanfiction

and then he saw my order of the rain world plushes since i opened them during my break

[fluid ridge]

but since he didnt fire me yet it might be

[maiden bear]

me showing my interviewer HFISH

[north herald]

Oh my god lmao

[tranquil yoke]

Who needs a resume? I’m a professional fanfic writer!

[maiden bear]

I haven't slipped the fact that I've been writing ff to anyone irl yet

I considered telling some of my friends but no one's into rw and tbh i'm kind of embarassed lmao

[tranquil yoke]

I have friends who are into RW and I’m still not telling them

[fluid ridge]

i told one. and onyl after i forced her to play the game

[north herald]

so freelance, then?

[maiden bear]

writing feels especially vulnerable and i'm not sure why

[tranquil yoke]

My salary is 2 kudos a month

[north herald]

Yeah I think it's easier to share such stuff with people on the internet than people you know in general

[next temple]

exactly the same situation lol. Like, I have 1 (one) friend who actually is interested in RW (only themes and story) whom I often bounce ideas with, but I wouldn't ever mention I write FF

[tranquil yoke]

Baring the soul, expressing your emotions, it is very vulnerable at times

[maiden bear]

also I'm writing a crackship fic that no one irl ever needs to see

hfish is one thing lmao

[north herald]

I have 1 friend who seems semi-interested in rain world (interested in lore of the rot and thinks the combat is cool) but I can't for the life of me get him to finish a single campaign

[tranquil yoke]

I have to see this

[north herald]

slap it on to a separate account

[maiden bear]

oh my god the dissappointment when one of my friends went "oh this looks cool", downloaded rw, and played through outskirts and never picked it up again

[next temple]

it do be like that, it feels like I am revealing what's in my inner heart/mind

[tranquil yoke]

That’s about 80% of players or something tbh

[north herald]

I mean like i managed to get him to shoreline but he was fucking around with mods and called it boring. Lately he played arena a bit but that's it. Still trying to convince him

[next temple]

gameplay is just too unforgiving

[maiden bear]

listen, listen, it was supposd to be a jokey fluffy nonsense thing for fun but then it spiralled out of control and now its four chapters long and extremely fucking serious

[north herald]

Calls it "boring" and "pointless"

[tranquil yoke]

You’re just making me want to read it more!

[fluid ridge]

that was me at the begining after beign stuck in outskirts for 17 hours and then i picked it up a month later and got to play it for real

[next temple]

I mean, I can see the argument for 'pointless' if you already finished every campaigns, but 'boring'? Excuse me?

[tranquil yoke]

If you’re struggling with the game it gets very repetitive

[maiden bear]

it was inspired by that hornet/moon ship fic lmao help me

[north herald]

He based that on the fact that nothing happens (that was based on him playing monk and "all the creatures" (read: green lizards) were stupid)

[north herald]

He wasn't even struggling maybe it was too easy cause I was guiding them, interactive map at hand but idk

[tranquil yoke]

Should read that, I’ve only heard good things

[maiden bear]

it's a good time. Very non serious/fluffy/funny

[north herald]

Wait you mean hornet from HK x LTTM?

[maiden bear]

yes

[north herald]

Holy shit what

[tranquil yoke]

It also just really isn’t a game that everyone will enjoy. Sometimes you gotta accept that

[maiden bear]

mine is, however, no fun at all

[fluid ridge]

its good

read it

[next temple]

I got another friend to try it for like 15 mins and he gave up, saying it's too unforgiving and he does not really like the platforming

the irony tho, since this guy finished Hollow Knight P5

And I didn't even finish P2...

[tranquil yoke]

Mood. Trying to make something light and silly but being like “this plot needs more drama and tension!” And then it’s not light and silly anymore.

[fluid ridge]

p5? pffft- easy! but rain world outskirts?!?!

[maiden bear]

I genuinely do not think I am capable of writing fluff

[north herald]

I mean he enjoys the combat but he also plays monk and because of thag finds it boring??? Also he wants lore but refuses to understand that this game does not tell you shit by itself (he saw the rot when we were goofing around in arena and I said "yeah it's cancer" and now he wants to know more but he thinks it will just all be explained in a campaign or something)

[north herald]

GREEN LIZARD?

[maiden bear]

this ended up being a hornet character exploration annnnd me venting an idea I had about the void of hollow knight vs the void of rw

[fluid ridge]

same but with crack. im surprised people think the overseer is funny. i just feel im terrible with humor

[maiden bear]

ANYWAY I'm really sorry for derailing your thread amany lmao

[fluid ridge]

quivers in fear

[fluid ridge]

lol i dont care

i really just use it to keep myself motivated

becasue if i said i would post a update in here everyday i will do that

[tranquil yoke]

Threads were meant to become main chat (secondary)

[north herald]

I think it's something like humor based on behavior

[next temple]

good discipline!

[fluid ridge]

just forcing myself to promise myself to do sth and then having to keep that

[fluid ridge]

humor is just so difficult to write

[north herald]

Accidental humor

[maiden bear]

I don't intentionally write humor funny things just happen idk

[fluid ridge]

is there a way to obtain this power?

[maiden bear]

me, alone in my room, writing: "heh"

[next temple]

Emergence writing: these just happen!

[tranquil yoke]

The scene where Arti doesn’t look at the explosion behind her

[maiden bear]

i swear it just happened to me

also her fucking faceplanting onto the floor in the first chapter

[fluid ridge]

i actually get actively triggered by the word Emergence now

[maiden bear]

I think the explosion is the moment she actually wormed her way into pebbies' heart

[next temple]

oh? is there something I dont know?

[maiden bear]

(ba-dum-tish)

[tranquil yoke]

🪱

[maiden bear]

see! funny!

banan so funny....

[fluid ridge]

name of a rainworld fic (comic on tumbler) that i really really really love but its so hard to get into so i dont have anyone to talk about it with

[north herald]

Some fanfic i believe

[next temple]

I see..

[north herald]

Sleeper agent being activated with codephrase

[fluid ridge]

anytime someoen writes it im like
OMG you know Emergence????
before disapointment comes in

[tranquil yoke]

“Sounds cool! Where can I read it? Oh… two pages? And a lore write-up scavenger hunt? I’m okay… thanks.”

[fluid ridge]

exactly!

it took me like a week to get the entire story

im not expecting anyone to do that- not to mention that it isnt all that well organized

but the story, ughhhh.

i love it so much

[maiden bear]

creator wants me to read the comic? they gonna have to make the comic

sorry I don't make da rules

[fluid ridge]

well the map call is finally closed so we might finally get some cannon stuff again

[next temple]

ohh that's promising to look forward to

[fluid ridge]

semi cannon ig. i count the suns pebbs animatic as semi cannon and the map will probably get the same verdict from me

[fluid ridge]

the problem there is that without the tumbler context there will be some stuff you just wont get, again, whats up with this organizing?

like i read the script and the first scene will have A Plausible Link, who is an oc, so what will people who read the first to comic pages and watched the other animatic do with that???

ignoring all the shit between APL and the ancient dude

[next temple]

maybe they think if this gets people interested enough they'll go back to search for more?

[fluid ridge]

i actually just realized that a few days ago, that ancients short is valley and all i thought was
huh? why are they suddenly in a valley???

[fluid ridge]

oh that is what happend to me with the first one, but that wont be the case for most people.

[next temple]

hmm, I might actually take a look later, not this week tho, the reckoning of my procrastination is imminent

[fluid ridge]

if you ever want some help with finding info pls ping

i want to talk about that thing with others so badly

also i do have to mention that most of the story is told in the map call script

i only checked that out after going throw the tumbler tho and it was actually really satisfing to get some of my questions answered with that

but maybe dont check out the script first things first, might be a bit overwhelming and confusing with no cotext at all
(even with context its still confusing points at valley)

[next temple]

...requiring followers to actually read the script is... unorthodox yeah

[north herald]

"Want more lore? COME AND GET IT"

[fluid ridge]

ig its not required? it just confirms a lot of stuff

[fluid ridge]

felt like that

[fluid ridge]

okay there is also some additional stuff. like all the grug lore but not much else i think

the rest you could piece together by yourself, its just a hazard to do

i would probably not nearly love it so much if i didnt enjoy that kind of stuff

[fluid ridge]

daily update log [41]
wrote a bit more on the chapter but ive been mostly editing on what i had so far. im also planning to edit most of the older chapters so that might happen before i finish the chapter

[maiden bear]

Can I ask how the rango fic is coming along? :3c

[fluid ridge]

oh that, yeah sure

i have finished the first act so far but not much else

wait

i actually wanted to ask for feedback without releasing that

now i can do that

would you mind take a quick peek? right now its only 1k words so its not to much

because the way i wrote it is actually kinda starnge and i wanna make sure its not to annoying to read

oh also, i mentioned before how much i suck at crack, but i really tried to make it somewhat funny. if some stuff just feels off or more (and i hate using that word) cringe worthy pls say

[maiden bear]

I’d be happy to!

I’m right about to run an errand though so it will be after that if that’s okay?

[fluid ridge]

sure

im trying the arti run right now so im not doing much myself

i will just send the link

[fluid ridge]

https://docs.google.com/document/d/12fySlapDxzR1EyeijkkM_lcc-aPpmcPLP6HVmCU9UqU/edit?usp=sharing

i think that works?

not sure

[maiden bear]

You need to change permissions

Are you pc or mobile atm?

On pc click big ‘share’ button and change general access to those with link can view

On mobile it’s this button

God why is that huge lmao

[fluid ridge]

does it work now?

[maiden bear]

Nope

[fluid ridge]

ehhhhh

[fluid ridge]

but now right?

[maiden bear]

There we go! Yes!

[fluid ridge]

ah perfect

[maiden bear]

I will check it out as soon as I can

[fluid ridge]

yep

and i will hopefully get sth done with that nice pink speedrun score

[north herald]

Eyes peeled when entering the leg unless you wanna get ambush predator'd

[tranquil yoke]

Nah, I’d concussive blast

[gleaming snow]

Arti story% goes through industrial actually
If you quit and reenter after the intro cutscene the scavs at the scav toll will despawn

[north herald]

"Well, crypts sure were stressful, at least now I can kick back and relax, as I am 1 room away from the shelter"

[north herald]

Huh

wait what do you mean you got them to do a speedrun

[gleaming snow]

Speedrunner role is pink. You get it by having a verified run on speedrun.com. Your run doesn't have to be "good". You should try, it is a lot of fun actually!

[north herald]

Oh. Huh.

Well if i'm doing rain world as of recent then it's likely progress towards 100% achievements but I will consider it

(3 achievements left, coincidentally 2 of them are terrible)

[fluid ridge]

i accidetnly ended my recording after dying and keyboard smashing

and i was already at wall