Corroded Destiny

[unique patrol]

Back again

[steady whale]

wb :3

[unique patrol]

Had today a few funky ideas that could sprout out of the fact that Two Eyes of the Infinite Cosmos worked very closely together with Five Lives Unbound on project Far Whisper.

||We have already established that Lives has a fable for drones and everything remote controlled life. What about … What if Lives asked Eyes to establish a direct connection between their both Superstructures with the intent to work as closely together as possible. A strong connection that might even allow to feed one’s consciousness for a certain time into a stationed drone inside the other‘s can. So that Lives and Whisper can work together in semi-person.||

[sterile briar]

sounds interesting, would be nice to see how you would write that

[unique patrol]

Difficult. That’s for sure :p

[static pecan]

||just shove 2 iterators in 1 can || /j

[unique patrol]

You’re the boss

[unique patrol]

Iterator names are difficult. Especially when you need a few you don't plan on using for any other reason than them existing

Current idea for the remaining three Group Admins

[sterile briar]

i just go to a word randomizer, not the iterator name generator itself but a word one, i pick out a few words i like and smash them together

[mental cosmos]

I think of what they'll do, what they're like, and form a name based on that.

Or, if that doesn't work out, it has to be poetic.

[woven cedar]

There's also the dilemma of whether we should make their name similar to the Ancients or not( like, iterator name = half of the ancient name, etc) or do they have their own name system, or even if there are multiple systems (for different generations)

[sterile briar]

head empty, no thoughts given. they just sounded neat

[mental cosmos]

Right now, I have "Eternal Horizons", "Generous Interest", "Pale Serpent", "Indentured Servitude", and "Chains of Adoration".

[unique patrol]

True that

I do like Unreachable Process and Obsidian Wail from the three I've chosen.
Twenty Questions sounds more gen 3

[mental cosmos]

Generous Interest is mainly based on NGI. Pale Serpent is based on the Chinese myth. Indentured Servitude is a phrase from Cookie Clicker. Chains of Adoration is one I'm not sure where I came up with it.

The more poetic, the older the Iterator.

[unique patrol]

hm

[mental cosmos]

For my canon, anyway.

Write them however you want to!

[unique patrol]

Of course

[sterile briar]

Looks to the moon - beutiful name with a nice theme.
Five Pebbles - 5 rocks

[mental cosmos]

Also, Five Pebbles isn't as poetic as Looks to the Moon, in my opinion.

[unique patrol]

Five pebble's sliver name however is

[woven cedar]

There's an interesting note to make about Moon's name imo

There's no other canon named iterators with her naming scheme

[mental cosmos]

The Ancients cared very little by the end of it.

[sterile briar]

its edgy

[mental cosmos]

Erratic Pulse.

[sterile briar]

but yeah, its really good

[mental cosmos]

I like Erratic Pulse.

[unique patrol]

Well, the same can be said about No significant Harassment's name

[sterile briar]

just make on up than. more pretty names for us

[woven cedar]

NSH is still a noun

Looks to the Moon is not ?

[mental cosmos]

No Significant Harassment has the naming scheme of basically every other Iterator.

[sterile briar]

moon isnt a noun?

[mental cosmos]

Significant is an adjective.

Looks is a verb.

[unique patrol]

and what about the no?

[woven cedar]

Yeah I mean the whole name together
LTTM is the only name that's a half-sentence

[mental cosmos]

No is an adverb, maybe? I don't know, it's 'describing' an adjective.

It's inverting the meaning.

Looks to the Moon is oddly unique.

[woven cedar]

No Significant Harassment read together is a noun tho? (I read that as [no significant] + [harassment]

[sterile briar]

cause shes just special

[mental cosmos]

Looks to the Moon is a short phrase.

[woven cedar]

That's exactly what I am saying. From that unusual name, I headcanon her as unique in some way

[steady whale]

I’m terrible at integrator names ngl

[mental cosmos]

Yes, Banan, integrator.

[steady whale]

Pff

[sterile briar]

its casue shes a lesbian. they are just too powerful

[steady whale]

Phone always wants to autocorrect that

[mental cosmos]

She's an older model.

[unique patrol]

I also accept cameos :P

[steady whale]

For a second I thought you were replying to me and I was like ah, yes. It’s my lesbianism that limits me

[steady whale]

Same bro

[sterile briar]

you too of course

[mental cosmos]

I like the interpretation that she's one of the oldest.

Like, second.

Or even first.

[woven cedar]

Yeah, I would actually put her as one of the first generation

[mental cosmos]

That's the most common interpretation.

[sterile briar]

i like to think sos is just a bit older

[steady whale]

She’s oldish in mine. First gen, serial number in the 20’s

[mental cosmos]

I won't be touching the local group very much.

Pebbles will have to wait quite a bit before being introduced.

[woven cedar]

I put them both in the same generation

The way Moon talked about SoS ('they should let her rest') feels kinda vaguely personal...
Maybe I just overthink that

[mental cosmos]

I think you put it the right way for me.

Moon's a great friend of Straw.

Yes, I use Straw and not Sliver. Sue me.

[sterile briar]

no overthinking to be seen. at least if you look at how popular slivermoon is. your not the only one that sees sth there

[mental cosmos]

I also use Yui and not Inno.

[sterile briar]

one of the few were i think that both work fine

[woven cedar]

Oho. Interesting

[mental cosmos]

I use Pebbs. Because "Five" is a very weird name to give an Iterator, and I'm not doing that.

[sterile briar]

numbers in general is a weird nickname to use for iterators

[steady whale]

THIS moon seems emotionally invested in SoS

[mental cosmos]

Hara is another that I don't really use. I use the vastly more popular Sig.

[steady whale]

Like she’s personally hurt for her, and doesn’t like this entire situation where her friend has been turned into this…. Event

[mental cosmos]

It'd hurt, you know?

[sterile briar]

i thoght everyone just called him Harasment or sig, when i was hit with the hara i was so confused

[unique patrol]

sos indeed feels like a first gen. Although second gen would feel interesting from a children point of view.
The oldest child (gen) is the most revered
The middle child (gen) is ovelooked, but in the end the important one
the youngest child (gen) is full of angsty teens

[mental cosmos]

"...rifling around her old corpse, for what? Some grand, meaningless solution?"

Daszombes' Unbroken Promise.

[steady whale]

Oh yes, I definitely headcanon first gen as the one where the ancients still had so much hope and excitement. They were revered, loved, praised

[sterile briar]

angsty teens, looks to the boomers and the not important ones, makes sense

[mental cosmos]

Second generation, they lost out hope.

[steady whale]

And then the cycles went by and the ancients became more disillusioned

[mental cosmos]

Generation 3, they literally did not care anymore.

[sterile briar]

you see that in the names

[steady whale]

Might get into it a little in my fic some stuff about the first iterator… maybe

[unique patrol]

my interpretation of gen 3 iterators is not that they not care anymore, but that they just hand out building rights willy nilly hoping that something sticks

[mental cosmos]

I think in canon, they didn't have much of generational differences - more so that the technology became more streamlined, only minor improvements here and there.

Oversights got patched, bugs got fixed.

But really, nothing changed very much.

Which explains how Sliver got an answer, instead of the flashy newer generations.

[sterile briar]

i like to use first as the ones to solve problems.
second needed to be built since the rain forced them up but the first gen wasnt made to house people so they needed others
third is both first and second combined and optimized

[unique patrol]

the meaning of an iterator shifted from a divine calculator to a status symbol.

[mental cosmos]

Divine calculator. Didn't have to do them like that.

[unique patrol]

fine. Slightly-out-of-the-ordinary calculator with solar panel

[mental cosmos]

I think that's arguably worse.

[unique patrol]

scrap metal with functions besides repurposing

[mental cosmos]

That's more like it!

[unique patrol]

Perfect

Hm

New quintuplet:
Looks to the Moon, Approaching Sky, Promise in Veil, Obsidian Tower and
Destined Vice

[steady whale]

Ooo how about Veiled Promise

I think that sounds more iterator-y (also a very cool name)

[unique patrol]

Veiled Promise does sound better, yes.

[steady whale]

[unique patrol]

The other two?

[steady whale]

Sound good to me!

[unique patrol]

Destined Vice is something you call a failure when built

[sterile briar]

arent you being kind to your ocs

[unique patrol]

What?

Is it not kind to call your child a future doom? :p

[sterile briar]

oh but of course. my mistake.
lovely name

new nickname for my friend

[unique patrol]

Anyway. I will only use one of these names in the future, however. There are no plans to involve the other two groups under Lives' jurisdiction

Veiled Promise sounds like a good name for Suns' group admin

[sterile briar]

if you did your character roster would be bigger then my entire cast of all the things i ever wrote

[unique patrol]

I still have my 200+ Kingsmaker OCs

[sterile briar]

well they dont count, otherwise im never catching up

[sterile briar]

also only 200+?
i would have thought at least 500

that looked like a lot more to me

[unique patrol]

Let me correct that assessment

200+ Kingsmaker OCs with a decently complex backstory.

[sterile briar]

now we're gettign closer

i would have lost focus after the 10th oc

[steady whale]

Okay now I want an iterator named Failure Simulator

[unique patrol]

I don't count the names I just used as placeholders and didn't draw, like the author of the arcane arcanum Mauze Tung.

[steady whale]

Which is what I commonly call Rain World

[unique patrol]

Pff

[steady whale]

Named by a very bitter creator

[unique patrol]

Nickname for Crown

[steady whale]

@inner steeple

[inner steeple]

NOOO

[unique patrol]

Pff

[mental cosmos]

Banan, look! It's such a tragedy! It's Crown - the were hit by a stray insult!

[steady whale]

I KILLED HIM

[sterile briar]

nahhh, just being dramatic after the prisoners got another food ban again

[inner steeple]

LMAO
I didn't realize we were in Corroded Destiny

[unique patrol]

You got cited here because we found perfect names for crown
Destined Vice would be fitting as well :p

[unique patrol]

Rewarded myself after a day of learning and doing protocols with a session of writing on the second chapter of First Whisper.
Wellllllll, already 1800 words in, and that in one session.

[steady whale]

!!!

More whispy soon?

[unique patrol]

Probably :3
Also the start of something special which provides lives and whisper with something quite unique to make their relationship interesting and non-repetitive to write about

Let's just say one thing. Close cooperation

Gales has her entire story and an onimous secret.
Sky has his personality, or lack there of. More than enough for one (Suns) to handle ;P

Whisper and Lives need something to make them enticing to write about, especially as the local group here is more or less two mini groups tacked together.

[woven cedar]

The very idea of Lives' role is interesting enough

[unique patrol]

Oh, it is for certain, but it also comes with an issue for the story.
Her purpose is to look outwards and connect the dots that are individual Cans in her perimeter. But in terms of telling a story her purpose will inevitably lead to diluting the scope by introducing too many one offs. It is a role that is benefitial to the story in small doses.

Instead I wanna focus more on her drone hobby and what that might mean, especially as her only direct neighbour is Far Whisper.

[woven cedar]

Ah i see

[unique patrol]

I won't say more.
I tend to spoil too much for you lots

And I want to do less of it to at least keep some meat on the bones to theorize over instead of delivering polished bones, with everything bitten down and prechewed. Keep my excitement at least a bit in check

[naive radish]

BTW I caught up a bunch recently, || I'm worried at how Spearmaster and the acid boi will interact, I hope it goes well but I got a bad feelin about this||

[unique patrol]

Ohhh! Welcome to the now, Simon
|| Everything will go nice and dandy, as per usual. No issues whatsoever, nu-uh.||

[steady whale]

Oooo

Really interested to see what you have in store

Did amany’s little rant sway you?

[unique patrol]

Amany's rant did sway me, yes.
These two may only be secondary protagonists for CD, but that doesn't mean they should feel like plot devices

[steady whale]

Amany doing public service

[unique patrol]

Indeed.
But I think you will like this idea as well
Given you recommend an inspiration to it to me.

[steady whale]

[unique patrol]

Wonder what you think

[steady whale]

I suppose we shall see….

[unique patrol]

Fair

[unique patrol]

Made some progress in the morning. Now I will learn.

The progress in question: 500 words of a six iterators broadcast. What a headscratcher

wait, seven iterators broadcast even

[static pecan]

That seems fun

[unique patrol]

Even if I think that my brief LttM dialogues don't feel very LttM ...

[static pecan]

What's the issue?

[unique patrol]

No issue. I think.
I am just unsure, you know how hesitant I am with canon characters

[static pecan]

Well what's she like in those dialogues of yours?

[unique patrol]

Supportive and understanding

[static pecan]

Yeah I mean that sounds like moon

||remember to add a ~ at the end of her sentence sometimes ||

[unique patrol]

Already way ahead of you ~

[unique patrol]

whistles

[static pecan]

Well you sure have a pace

[unique patrol]

that will be my last hurray till I will be done with the exams.
...
Probably

[unique patrol]

Chapter 2 of 3 of Far Whisper's backstory is online. Meet Five Lives Unbound

https://archiveofourown.org/works/56815150/chapters/144660118

So, now I will rest

Rest easy I mean. Until I won't.
Hrr, the final chapter will be so exciting to write!

[small yoke]

the art for this chapter is awesome!!

[unique patrol]

Courtesy of @inner steeple. Compliments for you, friend ;3

[steady whale]

Great chapter

I like the new ending :3

[wet cedar]

Guf chapter

“a few ten thousand cycles ago”
Should be “a few tens of thousands of cycles ago”

“Tow Eyes of the Infinite Cosmos’ eyes appeared dim and weary behind his golden mask.”

[unique patrol]

Oop

Fixed

[unique patrol]

A bit more rounder than the non-ending from before, trusted beta reader :3

[steady whale]

Seriously though, good job on this chapter

I really enjoy all the dynamics at play here but especially between our main duo

And I feel like I’m getting a lot more insight into who lives is in particular

[unique patrol]

That was one of the main goals of this backstory.
If I would have started with Lives' backstory instead it would have been quite less insightful. As this here is the moment where she truly begins to live

And this will help me so well to write Whisper and especially Lives so much better in the main novel

If there will be any questions, I will remain the next 20 minutes available, then go to bed :3

[inner steeple]

||Lives and Whisper got that high-speed ethernet connection ||
||Lives is so, so sweet and playful, I would have never guessed from the base story alone! She and Whisper are perfect for each other ||

[steady whale]

Yeah!! I love getting a closer look at who lives is here

We just ship all the ladies with each other at this point

[sterile briar]

||"Spending an eternity at her side sounded not that bad at all"
“Patience, sweety."
"I love how your antennas blink when you are unsure. Such a delightful way of adding more expressions to your adorable face, Far Whisper."||

?!??!?!?

||what is this, a romance???? ||

propaganda to keep us away from gales x whisper????

well too bad casue it didnt work

pushes whisper aside

||"H- Hey Five Lives Unbound"||

[small yoke]

hey(louder than everyone else)

[sterile briar]

whats that supposed to mean

[small yoke]

nothing.........

[sterile briar]

we will see

[unique patrol]

Hehehehe

[unique patrol]

Well ||Base story Lives is grieving, so of course her playfulness wouldn't be as present as it would be otherwise. Rightfully so.
And of course. They were quite literally made for each other, even with a cable that binds ||

[unique patrol]

My plan comes to fruition

[unique patrol]

Nah, just platonic teasing
Lives has the 'darling' energy

[inner steeple]

||Ah yeah, that's a given
Now that the players of the inner circle are established, it's even clearer how Moon's collapse is a huge blow||

[unique patrol]

Yep, the warmest gal is gone

[static pecan]

The agenda

[unique patrol]

But I am glad you all enjoyed this chapter so much.
So you finally understand why I wanted to write out this backstory, eh?

[static pecan]

I'm gonna go read now

[unique patrol]

Have fun

[mental cosmos]

When she does it, she's playful, but when I do it, that's significant harassment? /j

[unique patrol]

Pff. But no.
You can compare Lives to the Incredibles' Edna in personality, maybe a bit more lighthearted. Especially as she allows Whisper to wear a cape

[static pecan]

She is

I'd put a comma after unbound

Throw out the comma after know?

Cooperation I had

Access shaft lit up? Also I don't think you need a space between the "the" and the three dots

To the upper half?

Depicting Lives bobbing her head in excitement?

Lives' handwaving? Not sure here

Either "The drone" or "Lives' drone"

For a solid vision communication device?

For us to both have

Few tens of

As a coordinator?

Bucket with a head?
With the erratic movement of Lives' puppet?

To avoid repetition i'd write "and caused it to crash"

Here I would remove the space between "also" and the three dots

Would not be the worst

Here also no space between "you" and three dots i think

||"I look forward to this broadcast covering urgent topics again from now on, instead of us having to endure Lives going off-topic every other cycle."||?

"How many cycles i have left"? I dunno

[unique patrol]

Hoo boy

[static pecan]

Obligatory ||||

[unique patrol]

Nuu, I had no connection. Everything again

[static pecan]

[unique patrol]

So, now it worked

Thank you ^^
Now how did you like the chapter, Piotr?

[static pecan]

Yeah I think your moon came out well, you also shown the dynamic between FLU and FW |||| , I think it's a good chapter

[unique patrol]

Glad to hear that :3

[unique patrol]

Refined breaker a bit

The difference is … negligible

[static pecan]

I assume this one is the new one?

[unique patrol]

The upper one is the newer one

[static pecan]

Pearl: acquired

[unique patrol]

Yep

Lil presketch to give an idea of what could happen in the last chapter of First Whisper.
…
Only look if you want to be spoilered, it is kinda obvious

[static pecan]

NOOOO

My reflexes to click spoilers :(

[unique patrol]

Bad reflexes

Well, it is not that obvious, at least the buildup to that scene

[static pecan]

I mean ||I think I know why he would do that||

||... though this does seem radical, it's not like this was close to MA?||

[unique patrol]

Good
Very far off

I won’t say any more (primarily because I have not yet worked out the details)

[woven cedar]

I haven't even read ch.2 yet and I spoiled myself

Extremely potential spoiler so fellow readers don't click this
||... execution?||

[unique patrol]

I can tell you, epochs. You will enjoy ch.2 :3

[woven cedar]

Will catch up soonish, but now I have a deadline to make

[unique patrol]

Good luck with that

[woven cedar]

Thank, I probably need that luck

[sterile briar]

and i promised myself to never fall for those weird ai chats bots

[unique patrol]

what happened?

Also FINE, @sterile briar

The spoiler of all spoilers

[sterile briar]

ehehehheheheheh

yessssss

HAHAHHAHA

lesbians win today

[steady whale]

This is not channel appropriate!!!

You sir are out of control

(More please)

[unique patrol]

Checklist.
Point 1: Win over lesbian fanbase. ... Check

[steady whale]

Point 2: ????
Point 3: Profit

I’m laughing about how many fanatics ended up here though

Especially given how much of RW fanbase is male

The wlw coming out in force to bully soul lmao

[unique patrol]

One male to unite the
What did I do to deserve that?

[steady whale]

You wrote shippable gays. Whoopsie

[inner steeple]

CUTE

[steady whale]

We’re fucking feral we can’t help it

Tell him, Drymm

[inner steeple]

Tell wha?!?

[steady whale]

The gays will not be stopped

[unique patrol]

[inner steeple]

The power of gay compels thee

[sterile briar]

[steady whale]

Surrounded by lesbians. You’ve met with a terrible fate, haven’t you?

[sterile briar]

Power of friendship who?
I only know the power of the lesbians

[unique patrol]

Such profane language in these straight and holy halls

[steady whale]

Straight halls? Cmon, they’re at least a little bendy

[inner steeple]

(aside) Hand holding

[steady whale]

gasp

[unique patrol]

Fine, bilateral halls

[steady whale]

Marriage before handholding, kids

[woven cedar]

I was drinking a glass of water when I saw that. You almost made me do a spit-take

[unique patrol]

sigh The hints won't stop. Bad brain.

[static pecan]

||hm okay he either got removed from the position of admin and decided his life ain't worth it anymore or was forced to ascend?||

[unique patrol]

Someone is getting impatient

[static pecan]

||well if he's suicidal it better be for a good reason||

[unique patrol]

||He is everything but suicidal. Quite the opposite would be true. Too much even.||

[static pecan]

||well if he's gonna do it then something is up||

[unique patrol]

True

[static pecan]

Oh also forgot to mention not gonna lie he looks badass and cool

The cape and mask and shit

also gee his legs are messed up

[unique patrol]

That is just me failing at basic anatomy:p

[static pecan]

I mean I guess this could be some ultra religious thing where they mutilate their body

or they are just like that

[unique patrol]

The first thing.

But I mean more that I once again failed in fictional knee placement >.>

[wet cedar]

I like the curled oompa-loompa shoes

[static pecan]

Nah those are bandages i think

[wet cedar]

Then I like the curled oompa-loompa feet

[static pecan]

/j

[unique patrol]

Bandages, yes.

Great sacrifices had to be made so that Eyes could convince the Houses to build Far Whisper. A few of these were proofs of the spiritual kind to gain supporters to his claim.

[wet cedar]

they took his toes

[static pecan]

||... did he promise he will ascend himself afterwards or sth?||

[unique patrol]

|| He made many promises, some of them in grave conflict with each other.
But: This is subject to change till I actually write it. I do have to keep it in the scope of 4000 words||

[static pecan]

Ah

||"guess i'll die"||

[unique patrol]

Not that simple

[static pecan]

Guess we will see

[steady whale]

Why 4K words?

[static pecan]

I guess self-imposed or to keep it short since it's an offshoot?

[steady whale]

If it needs to be longer make it longer! No one’s gonna mind :3

Oh noooo more to read….

[static pecan]

Oh the horror!

[unique patrol]

Because I want to end with a round 10k <.<

Funny number for CD

No new kudos or comments in the past week however

[steady whale]

Mine’s been quieter than usual too, I think it’s partly because it’s summer

[unique patrol]

understandable

[unique patrol]

Found a way to begin the chapter

[naive radish]

Hm... "Wörter". My first instinct was to say German. Given its root similarity to "Word" and the use of ö like that, or just general gut instinct, I know thats european. Non romance root, our word for word in french is "mot", so Word has to be one of those words english got from either the keltics or the germans. The ö , though, and the general gut feeling, again, pulls me twoards the germanics. Knowing the history of england and some VERY rough lingustics, My final awnser is: Danish

[unique patrol]

So many words, and you could have spared yourself typing all of them.
First instinct is correct

[naive radish]

Pfft, ehehe- I felt it amusing to type out my logic

[unique patrol]

It was amusing to read

[unique patrol]

Am now already at 2100 words.
...
I think I was a bit too confident in my ability to finish this in 3 chapters

[steady whale]

Oh no, not more chapters

How awful for us…

[unique patrol]

Awful indeed.

[sterile briar]

terrible even, we get more chapter? how could you

[unique patrol]

As the next chapter will still take a bit.
Have an Obsidian Tower brodacast spoiler

[small yoke]

OH NO

[unique patrol]

[unique patrol]

No context. From @inner steeple

[static pecan]

I don't think she's the one in need of saving

[small yoke]

GAY ROBOTS

[inner steeple]

[steady whale]

this thread is now home of the lesbians

you know not what you have wrought

[unique patrol]

We reached the endgame. There is no turning back.

I have to start the Sky/Suns agenda. Faith x ace

[steady whale]

I'll ship it. I'll ship it all

[inner steeple]

Where is my Suns x self forgiveness

[static pecan]

Going for the whole roster, eh?

[unique patrol]

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=gTf5Ld2i9bc

[static pecan]

Gales x acceptance

[steady whale]

gales x standing upright

gonna be a slow burn

[static pecan]

Yeah this one will need like 10 chapters

[unique patrol]

oh boy

[unique patrol]

Don't just spoil a major arc

[inner steeple]

🛳️🔥

[static pecan]

Wha-

[inner steeple]

When the ship is fire

[static pecan]

-OH

[inner steeple]

YOU'RE GOOD I speak too much in emote heiroglyphs

[unique patrol]

You are all nuts

[steady whale]

the language of the youth (i have no idea how old you are)

[static pecan]

🥜 this you?

[unique patrol]

A wobble party

[static pecan]

An unstable relationship

[steady whale]

this ship's really heatin up

[unique patrol]

dance with me, my lack of balance 🎶

[inner steeple]

THERE'S the ref I didn't have

[steady whale]

walking simulator on hard mode

[unique patrol]

frontal view

[static pecan]

LET THEM COOK

[unique patrol]

An upper core strength to pulverize boulders, and legs that can't even stand a breeze

[small yoke]

the ancients were cooking

also i finally got around to reading this fic... im on chapter 2 ||i am so worried for gales||

[sterile briar]

( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°) (❁´◡`❁)

very Very VERY very **very ** ~~very ~~ very cute
im so mad that i missed the discussion about it

[small yoke]

me too

i love the gay robots

man this fic is making me wanna write about my own local groups

whispering paracosm and their oddball local group

[unique patrol]

You are in for a wild ride :3

[small yoke]

IM EXCITED

[unique patrol]

Also a chapter 3 spoiler for you especially.
My maybe only time I will let that snob talk

[small yoke]

FIVE PEBBLWS

🥹

i will accept this crumb with grace

im so invested in ur ocs

[unique patrol]

[sterile briar]

Hes such a little shit and still somehow my favorite

[small yoke]

hes so awful i would die for him

[sterile briar]

i like the way you think

[unique patrol]

Pff

[static pecan]

Bro's seething and coping

[unique patrol]

Hehe

[static pecan]

I think gales should make the trip to him to punch him, after visiting whisper

[unique patrol]

Sounds like a plan. Nobody insults her girlfriend

[small yoke]

give him two punches, one from me, with love

[static pecan]

Queue up, others want that too

[unique patrol]

One of the other recipients of Whisper‘s duties.
Final spoiler of chapter 3.

[small yoke]

IM EXCITED

[static pecan]

"That project was quite interesting to lead"

Also maybe "rely on your expertise again in the future"

[unique patrol]

Lead is correct

[static pecan]

Oh, lead, must have misread, but it's about the order of words regardless

[unique patrol]

Will do

And yes, a fourth chapter will definitely happen. I bloated this small summary up quite a bit :p

[mental cosmos]

Hello EXCITED, I’m Celestium!

[small yoke]

YOU.

[unique patrol]

Dad jokes in this lesbian comedy?

[static pecan]

||So I guess she's, like, piggybacking off of the works of other iterators and assuming the lead?||

[small yoke]

it's the butches

[unique patrol]

More like ||made to do certain tasks to pay off the debts Eyes took to realize her||

[static pecan]

||others don't take kindly to that, I think||

[unique patrol]

||Sky is the only one who actually appreciated the sudden assistance. Resident antipath being the empath||

[static pecan]

||he just does not know what to do in such a situation ||

[unique patrol]

||Because most queries had to do with taking over tasks the gen 1s couldn’t complete in a reasonable timeframe or not at all. The others felt very much offended by that||

[static pecan]

||gee that is a bit insulting, was it due to her profession in VF chemistry or just cause she's a gen 3?||

[unique patrol]

No, ||because Eyes begged literally everywhere to get enough benefactors to realize Whisper. And most of these agreements came in conjunction of them using whisper for some lengthy queries they don’t wanna bother their Iterator with.||

[static pecan]

||huh I never considered that iterators are "owned", actually||

||but like to assist in queries, since I don't think they would take issues with her doing something that the gen 1's were not doing?||

[unique patrol]

||Not were not doing. Were unable to do due to their inferior technology.||

The test in chapter 1 was meant to show that discrepancy

[static pecan]

Ah

[unique patrol]

||So it literally is an act of insult. But I won’t further elaborate on the reasons or I can cancel the whole chapter :p||

[unique patrol]

Already 3250 words in. One small epilogue to set up chapter 4 and I should be finished

[static pecan]

Hm yes time to totally not be sad about anything :)

[unique patrol]

That chapter is not yet the sad one. The scope exploded

[static pecan]

Hm so more than 4 chapters?

[unique patrol]

This will be chapter 3

I will try to end it in 4 chapters, but a 5th may happen.
But not a 6th

[steady whale]

Ah the slow chapter increase

Same thing happened to me

Just a silly oneshot, nbd.

Okay this has ballooned, but I’m looking at a nice tight 3 chapters to do what I need to.

Actually, 5.

6?

[unique patrol]

two idiots, one expanding situation

[static pecan]

this is gonna need a 2nd season...

[unique patrol]

https://archiveofourown.org/works/56815150/chapters/144837493

Chapter 3 of First Whisper. It just keeps on getting longer

[small yoke]

YESSS

im sitting in the therapists office rn but im still gonna read it

[unique patrol]

Enjoy :3

[static pecan]

Last sentence feels weird. Maybe ||"His azure eyes, usually glowing with energy, appeared dim and lifeless"||

Maybe comma after wordless? Not sure

They have already

Comma after sky? Not sure about this though

I'd move "was" to the very end here

||"A destination no sacrifice would be too great of a cost for"||

Comma after the 2nd "that" maybe? Also I think "The house now knows"

||"... from it, I will be unable to fulfil all the other debts i made with the houses"||

Not sure about the comma here

Don't need the "in" after ruin

Double space here

I'd move "from now on" to after "and", or i think to the end of the sentence

Remove comma. Maybe move "was" to before "simply"?

||"You think i am not aware of that!?"|| sounds better

"Getting to work" I believe

Not sure about the comma after "done" here

[unique patrol]

That's a long list

I'll get to work on it then

[static pecan]

"That point I did". Idk about the "after all" there

[static pecan]

Eeeeeh it's mostly me questioning order of words and commas :)

[unique patrol]

The usual then :p
I promise you, some day I won't do these anymore

[static pecan]

Hm, should the 2nd to last sentence have a question mark? Not sure, up to you

Still not fixed >:(

"Before that project was". I'd also add a comma after "before", maybe?

[static pecan]

Maybe one day...

||Eyes is taking a bath in the basilica, I bet||

[unique patrol]

That would be too generous of me

Aight, everything fixed

[static pecan]

||some random ass room?||

[static pecan]

Yippie

[unique patrol]

I give that much of a hint. || The inner monologue might give a clue||

[static pecan]

||... hm so either in whisper which is pure angst or in the 5th tower, gotcha||

[unique patrol]

you are thinking too small.~
Consider the fact that I added an entire chapter to explore it :P

[small yoke]

ok reading

poor whisper

[static pecan]

||hm, the underground?||

[static pecan]

Work hard, party hard

[unique patrol]

expand. Do not only focus on ||the end||. Focus on the ||path of peril||

[small yoke]

the pebbles cameo had me giggling and kicking my legs fr

[unique patrol]

So easy to please
Curtesy to banan for giving Pebbs the pebbs vibe rewriting my script

[wet cedar]

canon that pebbles takes an hour out of each day for some "me time" which is just him absolutely flaming other iterators at random

[unique patrol]

Today I chose violence

[small yoke]

LMAO

[unique patrol]

My favourite karmic sin

[small yoke]

i am desperate and will take anything i can get

[static pecan]

Uhh i dunno

I'll just wait for it to play out ig

[unique patrol]

Good choice. It will be delicious angst and include some further hints to CD's plot.

[static pecan]

Jokes on you i'm near-immune to angst now

[unique patrol]

I will take that as a challenge

[static pecan]

Uhh maybe???

[inner steeple]

||Eyes makin his way downtown, walkin fast, faces pass--probably not homebound ||

[unique patrol]

Afraid I don't understand 😅

[static pecan]

||[-1000] karma, your execution is scheduled for [TODAY], your last meal will be [HERBAL TEA AND GRAVEL]||

Actually, i forgot to mention, man, eyes is really dedicated, and the heavy religious beliefs of the ancients kinda suck

Like ehhhhh i dunno man i don't think self mutilation for religious reasons is cool

[unique patrol]

He is really dedicated, but not for the reasons you think. His love is bound to his craft and by extension Far Whisper. Him squabbling in the religion is for him more an act of sacrifice than an act of true believers

[static pecan]

Ye

[unique patrol]

And that false faith is an issue

[static pecan]

Still, i wouldn't like to lose some of my fingers' functionality

[unique patrol]

Neither does he. But hey, Whisper is now reality. Worth it

[unique patrol]

Behold

Two Eyes of the Infinite Cosmos

quick 40 min exercise

[inner steeple]

He
40 min exercise bruh, that's like a finished art!

[unique patrol]

With messy lineart

[small yoke]

BIRDY

love this guy

[unique patrol]

Kobold birdy

[static pecan]

Yooo it's the lizard people

[unique patrol]

Yess

[unique patrol]

Quick 60 min design sketch. Will probably refine her in the future.
Concept design of the currently nameless high priestess of the House of Forgiveness.

[static pecan]

Why do I feel like she is not forgiving

Also I really like her design

[small yoke]

me too

[unique patrol]

Oh she is forgiving.
Forgives you your desire to hold on to the vices through acts of total absolution

[inner steeple]

Ah, manipulation

[unique patrol]

Noooo

[steady whale]

How generous

[unique patrol]

After all your highest desire is to give up on everything to accept salvation. She just takes a bit benefit out of the process,

In the name of the House

Name is still in the air

[inner steeple]

What a beautiful name
/j

I'm blanking on ideas

[unique patrol]

It doesn't urge. I either way won't start writing on the chapter till my exam queries of next week are finished

[steady whale]

Numerous names, up in the air

[unique patrol]

Plentiful Vices, none Forgiven

[inner steeple]

Gilded Heart, Unspoken Fable

[unique patrol]

That sounds nice :3

[steady whale]

This is lovely

Almost like you’re a writer or something

[inner steeple]

PFFF
I don't know man, your name is a pretty good contender too

[unique patrol]

Facets of Fate, Scattered Fable

[inner steeple]

The fates tell me you need to provide the salvation-granting three digits on the back of your card-

[steady whale]

Mine has four digits, can my soul still be redeemed?

[unique patrol]

Your path is a path of reoccurring echoes, reflecting your even path. Only the odd digits escape their reflection of vice

[inner steeple]

Four??? I've never heard of that
Extra redemption points

[steady whale]

extra redeemed

Take that, losers

[unique patrol]

"For your redemption do I sentence you to work on the spire of company."

[steady whale]

stands there and repeats ‘this is my bubble’ to any who pass

[unique patrol]

Pff

[sterile briar]

hisssssssss
your lucky your design is pretty mam, but my trust you have not

[mental cosmos]

What is it with hissing?

Banan’s condition is spreading.

[small yoke]

hissssss

[mental cosmos]

I have to run.

[sterile briar]

she keeps biting people and spreading some sort of infection, might be a side effect

[steady whale]

bitten

[mental cosmos]

Which part of me did you bite?

Because if it’s somewhere in my legs, I’m cutting that off.

[steady whale]

Not telling

||i bit you in your soul|| Outer Wilds Spoilers

[mental cosmos]

Someone’s profile is an OMORI spoiler.

You know who it is.

Not mine.

Mine has an advert for my fanfic and who I’m matching with.

[unique patrol]

Eh?

[mental cosmos]

I accidentally clicked this, and I’ve been tricked. You disgust me. /j /nsrs

||Please don’t take that seriously, I just like the line “you disgust me” so much.||

[unique patrol]

Added a few more details and started cleaning up.
The last hour of the day however I will dedicate to learning, so thats the state for tonight

[sterile briar]

"the last hour of the day...."
buddy, your fifteen minutes late for that
study!!!

[unique patrol]

Yeah, yeah

[sterile briar]

dont yeah, yeah me
you have important exams coming up!

[unique patrol]

Yeh, yeh

[sterile briar]

bite bite bite

i just chewed through the cables of your (insert devise that you use) so now you better get to learning

[unique patrol]

You fool
I need to be connected to the net to learn

[static pecan]

I shall make my reappearance to say this looks really good and also GO LEARN GO DO IT NOW OR ELSE /j

I shall now leave again

[sterile briar]

ehhhh

my bad

[unique patrol]

What a few small golden clips all can do

[sterile briar]

but i dont care, do it anyway!

[unique patrol]

I have finished my repeating round.
Tomorrow I shall meet with friends to talk through the content and then the day after the, oh joy, oral exam

[sterile briar]

it begins

[sterile briar]

also i do agree, little details are always great

[static pecan]

Good luck, leaving now, for real this time

[pine shuttle]

yummy fanfic read. 10/10 would recommend

[unique patrol]

Oh hey, fancy seeing you here ^^
What a high grading :3
Have you read the backstory as well?

I would love to hear what you enjoyed the most / look forward to

[pine shuttle]

hello!!
i havent read the backstory yet, im just taking a short break for now
as for enjoyed most? i did enjoy the entire fanfic but i liked the far whisper pov parts the most

[sterile briar]

ahahhahahah

yes!!!

another far whisper enjoyer

let me platonically marry you

[unique patrol]

Introducing the culprit for me cranking up the whisper focus to write an entire backstory about angy chemical bug

[sterile briar]

well hello to you too

[pine shuttle]

im looking forward to the backstory alot tho!!

[unique patrol]

hey, I am very thankful for your extended criticism

[pine shuttle]

no problem

[unique patrol]

that was meant to amany ^^'

[pine shuttle]

AH

sorry

[sterile briar]

no problem
glares at Volkswagen /j

[pine shuttle]

its hard to tell when the msg isnt replying to the person it was directed to 😭 i apologize!!

[unique patrol]

no need to apologize.

[sterile briar]

for your apology to be real i require calloutpost art

[static pecan]

Every oppurtunity is a good oppurtunity to ask for calloutpost art, eh?

[unique patrol]

shakes head

[sterile briar]

~~blackmail ~~ asking nicely is quick and easy too

[pine shuttle]

im getting kidnapped by the calloutpost cult fanclub pls help

[sterile briar]

lets not call it kidnapping, shall we
lets say, friendly nudge into the worlds most beutiful things

[unique patrol]

Force ascension equivalent

[pine shuttle]

what if i cannot art but i can model

[unique patrol]

model as in blender or model as in cosplay?
There is also clay modeling, and all other crafts of 3d art, digital and physical

[pine shuttle]

model as in blender model

[unique patrol]

ohh

my blender experiences are very miniscule

[sterile briar]

and i dont even know what blender is

[pine shuttle]

3d modelling software

[sterile briar]

ohhhhhh

ok

[unique patrol]

This is as far as I went. Low poly with bones, but no surface work

[pine shuttle]

it looks p good imo! especially for a beginner

[unique patrol]

was my second ever attempt, The first went even more poorly

can't find a screenshot

Only screenshot I can find

I like to start at a level that is way above my payrate

Heck, my art career I started in the animation department. Made a few short animations before realizing I should probably first learn anatomy :P

[pine shuttle]

i dont find these to be exactly poor, i just find them as needing a bit more work and theyll look pretty nice (altho, the first one is a bit of a mess)

[steady whale]

Whisper stans unite

[unique patrol]

the bug one was a mess because I only had tutorials for normal bonework. This monstrosity has bones in her antennas and thorax

Also two segment legs

[pine shuttle]

[unique patrol]

yep, I started with rigging a model by myself.

[static pecan]

Eyes?

[static pecan]

For me i use blender to shitpost and to make my PC cry out in pain

[unique patrol]

Nah, that is Evamal, a kobold from my own narrative universe

[pine shuttle]

subdivision 20 😇

i love using ancient torture techniques on my computer

[static pecan]

"Hm yes time to render in cycles"

PC fans go WHIRRRRRRRRRRR

[pine shuttle]

music to my ears

the sweet sound of computer screaming

[unique patrol]

pff

anyway, back to educational waste treatment videos.
Cya

[pine shuttle]

cya!!

[static pecan]

Cya

[unique patrol]

Quick 20 min sketch to calm my nerves for what comes tomorrow

not the best, not the worst. There.

[static pecan]

she's balling

Good luck

Also damn since when did she have those red strands

[steady whale]

are those her wires??? they look sick as hell

[small yoke]

LOVE

[unique patrol]

They are her wires, yes

Only two because she doesn't need more. ||Given her Can's processing power is comparable to a damaged gen 1||

[static pecan]

Huh yeah I did not think of that, she was really done dirty

Wait why are they loose in this artwork tho-

[unique patrol]

Because her umbilical arm contains arm + internal umbilical cord. She only uses the free wires to connect to external sources.

That's the main reason why she disconnects at the tip of her umbilical arm and not at her back.
It is one of the few advantages her puppet has

[static pecan]

Hm those two loose wires must be annoying at times, then

[unique patrol]

They are annoying. But Gales does not care.
Especially as they turned out to be very useful ||to connect her puppet to her staff||

[static pecan]

Oh right

[unique patrol]

They are acting like extending cables. What you see is her default range, but she can crank up the distance to roughly 3 times that length if necessary. The cables are connected to her body via rotation chambers in the back of her head

[static pecan]

Huh they seem long already that's funny

[unique patrol]

Necessary when she moves back and forth on her rails while being connected to a static point. Iterators after all have issues with floating still in one point

[static pecan]

clumsy bastards

Anyways i'm leaving now, cya

[unique patrol]

And I go to bed. Exam is after all in 11 hours.

Night

[steady whale]

good luck!!!

[unique patrol]

https://www.worldanvil.com/community/manuscripts/read/3157063673-soulwing98-first-whisper

While AO3 is down. You can also read my stuff over on wordanvil :3

[unique patrol]

Wrote the first 750 words of chapter 4

[static pecan]

Yippie

[steady whale]

Already back at it

[unique patrol]

More or less. Currently on a rivulet crack run.
Already visited moon, got a shelter near submerged and am now on my way to pebbles

Shaded citadel with shelter failures is hell

[static pecan]

You going through underhang?

[unique patrol]

I am going nowhere apparently

The bridge from shaded is near impossible with shelter failures

[static pecan]

Whoops

[steady whale]

It’s not too bad riv can make all those jumps in the rain. Just stop and crouch when the heavy rain comes and do the jumps between the waves

[unique patrol]

wait, riv is immune against the heavy rain?

[steady whale]

It won’t kill you

During shelter failure

It might knock you off platforms and stuff though

Just crouch and kinda fight whatever direction it’s pushing you you’ll be fine

[unique patrol]

i see

[unique patrol]

1800 words in. It is getting hotter

[sterile briar]

@unique patrol i just had the idea to explain a certain matirial existing due to void fluid chemestrie and i really want the name of the ancient to do that to be related to whisper and acid seas in some way
would that be to obvious as a little refrence

[unique patrol]

I have no objections to it ;3

[sterile briar]

hehehe, thats all i wanted to hear

[sterile briar]

Whispers over endless Acid Seas

is that a good enough name?

tbf, im not the best at naming any original characters, so i just wanna make sure

hmmmm

or maybe sth like Whispers of (some sort of emotion?) over endless Acid Seas?

Whispers of delight over endless Acid Seas???

i think that works

[unique patrol]

How on the nose
I like it

[sterile briar]

advertising

[woven cedar]

Suggesting Acrid/Biting/Caustic in place of just 'Acid'

[sterile briar]

Whispers of delight over endless Acrid Seas

does that work?

[woven cedar]

Yeah, but maybe double adjective is a little long, maybe just endless seas or acrid sea?

Another suggestion would be moving the adjective to the front of Whispers instead

Delight(ed/ful?) whispers...

Or, another suggestion, Soothed Whispers over ....

[sterile briar]

Delighted Whispers over endless Seas

[unique patrol]

Soothing Whispers in the Caustic Embrace

[woven cedar]

I think making the extreme contrast between the first and latter parts is a good idea

[sterile briar]

Soothing Whispers, a Caustic Embrace?

[unique patrol]

Oxymorons are my bread and butter

[sterile briar]

had to google what that ment but now that i know i have to agree

[steady whale]

V good

[unique patrol]

Let me share this 20-25 min sketch here as well.

||Whisper, suspended by the strings of Fate. So easy to just cut down.||

[unique patrol]

The mirror tool is a powerful weapon for the lazy ;p

[small yoke]

my program doesn't have a mirror tool so i have to constantly flip my canvas to fix things or just copy paste

[unique patrol]

Not even a symmetry ruler?

[inner steeple]

Don't you dare slander my best friend symmetry tool

[unique patrol]

Is a fun tool when you are too lazy for perspective

[static pecan]

Oh so that's why it felt so symmetrical huh

[unique patrol]

It is litererally the lazy artist way.
I mean I could add some asymmetrical elements in it, but I was too lazy

[static pecan]

I knew something was a bit off in this image

[steady whale]

I’ve never used mirror tool

[unique patrol]

Quick sketch between learning units. You want heights, you get heights

[woven cedar]

Lives being tall is expected, but darn, Sky is also a bit imposing
then we have tiny Gales

how tall is Suns in your headcanon btw?

[mental cosmos]

Again, don’t want the “cutesy” Iterator puppet to be taller than you.

[unique patrol]

Suns is somewhere between AS and FW, being a gen 2 Iterator. I would say 1,89 m

[mental cosmos]

Am I not correct, Epochs?

[woven cedar]

I see
(I was wondering would a 'religious figure' iterator like Suns be extra tall or not)

[woven cedar]

the implication that really goes against the idea of iterators = being to be revered

[unique patrol]

The official reason for Gales' size are complications with the extended mobility. She needs to be light and small so that the mobile gravity nullifier can keep her in near 0_G

[mental cosmos]

Wait, am I misremembering what that word means?

[unique patrol]

fanservice is a term usually used for showing extra skin

[mental cosmos]

I thought it meant “pleasant to the eye in a less family-friendly manner”.

[mental cosmos]

Oh.

Oh.

[unique patrol]

hence why swimsuit skins are considered fanservice

[mental cosmos]

Oh no.

Dear me.

Oh no.

Back to writing I go!

[unique patrol]

pff

[mental cosmos]

Wasn’t she built to look less intimidating, though?

[unique patrol]

but the cutesy aspect is true. She is primarily built to be more expressive and pleasant to the eye.
... well that is only half-true, but oh well. Can't telll everything yet

[unique patrol]

Hmm... that is honestly better. lets say a nice 2,67 m then

[mental cosmos]

I wonder how tall my characters would be.

[unique patrol]

who knows

[woven cedar]

Majestic

[inner steeple]

The squad!
No wonder Gales was intimidated by Lives, look how small that pearl is in Lives' hand

[mental cosmos]

Drymm, ignore my fuck-up.

Thank you.

[inner steeple]

I'm on mobile, no fuckups witnessed

[unique patrol]

Was a quick speed sketch of three 10 minutes sessions between learning units :P

And yep, gales be tiny and therefore pearls and orb be big

[static pecan]

Wait so Sky has those wires for connecting to external equipment and systems as well? Why?

[unique patrol]

because he regularly had to integrate external devices into his system. He is less of a god, and more of a laboratory leader working with outside forces

[static pecan]

Is it cause he's special or cause he's a possibly early gen 1?

[unique patrol]

because he was never meant to host a city. His superstructure is essencially a megacity sized laboratory for all purposes

[static pecan]

Ah so those devices were life support and stuff?

And I guess they were sort of physhical control systems?

[unique patrol]

more means to upgrade his software on the fly

[static pecan]

Ah so like hard drives and stuff?

[unique patrol]

yep

[static pecan]

Does make me think why did they add that functionality if they did not expect him to be a city (I assume) and if there was no easier way to upload data, like pearls, but ehhhh

[unique patrol]

he was still a beloved workplace. All ancients who worked there on whatever project used his expansive arsenal and sometimes brought upgrades from the main grid to keep him relevant. All scientists came from diffrerent cities, partially even from different continents

[static pecan]

Ah so it was easier that way and was originally meant for easier improvements of science systems?

[unique patrol]

yep, improve directly at the core

[static pecan]

Ah

Though why couldn't they use pearls? Were they too slow? Unreliable? Not big enough?

[unique patrol]

pearls for data and content, cable connection for direct updates to his very programming. Sky was more or less open source if you want to say it like that

[static pecan]

Kinda suprised the ancients used hard drives but tbh it was prolly some PO, no way they used a normal, physhical hard drive that we know today

[unique patrol]

Imagine it as a black box of content meant for this Iterator alone. Absorb the genome-alternating data rendering the black box useless after the content was installed.

[static pecan]

So kinda like an injection?

Though idk how that would go through a wire but hey, ancient bullshit

[unique patrol]

the wires lead to the puppet's brain, the most sacred place of the entire structure

[static pecan]

And the wires can transfer the genome?

[unique patrol]

in this case, yes

[static pecan]

That's pretty cool, is it like a feature most have or is it near-exclusive to sky?

[unique patrol]

it is pretty much exclusive to Sky and other Gen 1 Iterators of a similar purpose, being a research plant. His main purpose is biotechnology.

[unique patrol]

ok

[static pecan]

ok

[unique patrol]

There we go. SRS added as well

[static pecan]

oh shit he's big

[unique patrol]

gales looks now even more ridiculous

[static pecan]

srs is almost twice as big as her

[unique patrol]

yep, they are tall. Blame Epochs for that :P

will probably clean it up and properly color it after the exam tomorrow...or somewhere in the weekend after work

[steady whale]

gales is the chihuahua of iterators

[unique patrol]

Now with Suns it is even more apparent :P

[steady whale]

tiny gf

[unique patrol]

Micro gf.
Just Pocket her

[sterile briar]

why does it look like lives has a goattee and a mustache from this angle

[steady whale]

oh noooooo now I see it

how could you have done this

[sterile briar]

and you will never unsee it again

also damn, suns is like really really tall

[unique patrol]

I like it. twirls eye mustache

Suns be a religious figure and therefore taller than any ancient

[sterile briar]

now i must ask, how tall is the average ancient?

[wet cedar]

2 ||million|| meters tall

[steady whale]

2.5 scugs = an ancient

[wet cedar]

Americans will use anything but the metric system

[steady whale]

eagle screeches in the bg that's freedom baby!

[unique patrol]

Well ...
We do have a good hint. Eyes is roughly as tall as Whisper

[sterile briar]

but eyes could be like really small

[unique patrol]

True

[static pecan]

or really big

[sterile briar]

avarage ancient smaller then gales confirmed

[static pecan]

well at least she does not behave like one...

right?

[unique patrol]

I do base them on kobolds after all <.<
||The average kobold from my narrative universe is between 90-120 cm tall, with some hybrids reaching 150 cm ||

[sterile briar]

not me headcannoning them all over 2 meters and now im taller than all your ancients

[unique patrol]

Hehe

[steady whale]

has anyone made her mad yet

[static pecan]

Uh not yet?

[steady whale]

hmmm

[unique patrol]

What are you thinking, banan?

[steady whale]

huh? I don’t think

[unique patrol]

Nothing new then

[static pecan]

Is it terminal?

[steady whale]

idk lemme think about it

[static pecan]

something's wrong

[unique patrol]

Lil sketch I will shade after the exam tomorrow.

Have a first glimpse at Seven Red Suns' local group admin, Obsidian Tower

[static pecan]

Huh he looks quite simmilar to gales

Esp with the head

Very nice

[unique patrol]

He does?
Gales has goat-like handlebar antennas while his are obelisks

[static pecan]

Eh ot's close enough

The colors, eyes and the antennas are not identical but kinda simmilar if you squint maybe

Or it could just be the artstyle idk

[unique patrol]

Artstyle too dirty, I understand

[static pecan]

What, dirty? No, idk, might just be me

[unique patrol]

I mean gales do not have much horizontal movement. A downwards crescend

[static pecan]

I mean usually you see antennas going up and both of them breaking that trend already makes a fammiliarity

[unique patrol]

fair

Tower is btw already hinted at here. Look up left :P

[static pecan]

The one more to the right at the top?

[unique patrol]

yep, mister vertical

[static pecan]

W I D E

[steady whale]

Foreshadowing!!!

[wet cedar]

In the form of a literal shadow, no less

[unique patrol]

It is a trope I love in long running media like for example one piece.
When the four emperors got spoilered quite early in the manga, but when they get introduced they only somewhat resemble the introductory shadow.

[unique patrol]

The golden cable in his umbilical cord he brought his Administrator to replace and repaint to honor the only one in the group he truly respected. His protégé Golden Hysteria.
With Seven Red Suns on the other hand he had not much to do at first, They might be in the same local group, but Suns direct connection to the House of Forgiveness caused them to exist farther away from the group as he would have liked. And even after all Ancients ascended his connection to Suns never went past the professional levels.

[unique patrol]

Added a further 750 words to chapter 4. Am now at 2700 words and it slowly closes to the ending I want to stop on

[unique patrol]

Final Chapter of First Whisper! This fic is done!

https://archiveofourown.org/works/56815150/chapters/145309204

(Ended at a good 3937 words :3)

[inner steeple]

Gasp!!!

[unique patrol]

Enjoy

[inner steeple]

||EYES.... GONE. BATH-ED ||
||Poor Whisperrr - kept in the dark for so long, hoping and wondering whether Eyes will ever confide in her, only to find out his disappearance that way. God, it's brilliant||
||That last bit... did Eyes get chucked into some component of Gales or something?||

I lov Far Whisper

[unique patrol]

||Gone, but set up to return, probably. Oh no, I thought I was very clear with the location Eyes reappeared in. Only Whisper has a Memory Accelerator Ring.

And yess, that was honestly my very first intuition when introducing the coded pearl. To pick up the first interaction once more and not make it a pointless piece of lore without significance in the side story it got introduced in.||

[small yoke]

||finished!! poor eyes :( i guess it was inevitable though. why must our ancient ocs all suffer||

[unique patrol]

It is in their DNA

[inner steeple]

||You're good, I don't pay the closest attention to iterator components but I really ought to ||

||That makes for some interesting theories now....||

[steady whale]

||we knew it was coming… poor eyes. Echo eyes, though…||

||wonder what the other conditions will be?||

||unceremonious end for eyes. Poor whispy didn’t get to say goodbye…||

Congrats on finishing this last chapter. Completing a fic is a huge accomplishment!

[unique patrol]

Will get to you in a bit. Mom just returned in a leg cast after she fell yesterday. Is quite the predicament to transport her. >.>

[woven cedar]

Oh no! Is she ok?

[unique patrol]

Splinter fracture at the leg bone near the ankle.
She will need to get operated.

[woven cedar]

Darn, that's awful.. gonna take a long while for that to heal. And then there's rehab/exercise...
hope everything goes well

[unique patrol]

Well, it took 1 hour to get her from the car to her bed. And that at 3am
Fun
Stupid hospital let her wait 7 hours

[unique patrol]

I keep it simple.
Gales has a Memory array. Essentially the standard box around the core, but in her case it is built horizontally and not much vertically to assure the ability to walk in lowered gravity.
Lives and Sky have an array as well, but more vertically oriented.

And Whisper has a Memory Accelerator ring. Like a particle accelerator. Built for focused and fast thoughts, less for many thoughts at the same time.

[unique patrol]

||I can tell you one already that has already been fulfilled. Confirmed ascension of the last ancient.||

[unique patrol]

||I was originally opting for an active ascension scene, but opted against it because i struggled too much to write it.
But I never intended for Whisper to find it out actively.
In the first draft she would have found it out after her administrator got replaced and informed her that Eyes regretfully was ascended alongside all other citizens of his block. Whisper would have called out his bullshit and show the origins of her anger issues.
But I opted against it, as that option couldn't work with Gales being shoehorned into the story.||

[sterile briar]

@unique patrol sorry but i couldnt help but think of that meme after what Facets said
(also left my opinion in the comments)

great chapter overall and nice ending for the side story

[unique patrol]

Pff.
Also holy macaroni! That is a mammoth of a comment. And so rich of theory material:3

[static pecan]

Read: finished
Status:

Anyways, back to the task like nothing ever happened...

I'd move "a gigantic door" before "at every wall"

"Were both leading"?

Personally i'd switch it around to be "which was still a solid wall the last time he visited the Basilica"

Not sure if you need the comma after "figure"?

I dunno about this sentence, can't tell what the last part really means

[mental cosmos]

Oh, and after you’re done with this, mind paying my document a visit?

[static pecan]

Yeah sure i'm just gonna need some time

"That was the goal"

Maybe ||"The day Shifting Gales will go online, the Void Sea will await your arrival"||?

||"However small that influence might turn out to be was, however, an entirely different question"||?

This section seems to be missing a visible indication of a change of POV?

||"but also High Preistess Fate who decided to accomodate that special day of them"||?

Conclusion: ||bartender, please take this drink fic back, it's got emotional damage in it||

[static pecan]

Hm yeah it's improving, I like it

[mental cosmos]

Grammar check?

[sterile briar]

no grammer check means you were just to good and made no mistakes

[mental cosmos]

Nope! Cy covered some for me.

[static pecan]

Did not see anything so far

[mental cosmos]

Cy really ironed out that for me, thank you, regardless!

[unique patrol]

Is it evil of me to say I am happy that it has that effect on y'all?
That means I have delivered

[static pecan]

||||

[unique patrol]

Will get the fixing the issues after breakfast

[static pecan]

Aye

[unique patrol]

Hehehe

The payoffs of this side-fic will in some way be immediate in CD, some other setups are however for way later.
The fact that Lives and Whisper have the drone program for example will get used once I let them both combine their research :3

[static pecan]

@unique patrol for (potential) future reference, what color would whisper's overseers be?

[unique patrol]

Purple with green highlights

[static pecan]

aye aye

[unique patrol]

Errors fixed

[unique patrol]

I am curious why you are asking

Also update on my mother...not a simple bone fracture, but multiple. A complicated case.

[static pecan]

oh dear

[static pecan]

uhh nothin :)

[woven cedar]

Oh, darn. At least it's the lower leg that got broken, right?

That'd still take a while to heal, but better outcome than a broken femur at least

Hope everything goes better from here!

[woven cedar]

Damn, called it...
||Eyes got basically a glorified execution anyway, he did not ask for this now. Forced into it.||

[static pecan]

yeah he got done dirty

||wonder how things would have turned out if he were to not question SG's design and go along with it from the very get-go||

but that would have been out of his character

[unique patrol]

Lower leg. 6 weeks of zero pressure on the leg.
Joint is quite fractured

[woven cedar]

Also ||This line 'The Void Sea is hungry for the hopeless' gave me a flash of anger for a moment. How pretentious of them.... Who were they to dictate how this all works? Weren't them supposed to detach from All to ascend? But here they acted like they're the most important body, ruling over everything, even Ascension itself.||

[woven cedar]

I think ||the HoF would want to remove him from the picture anyway, his fate was pretty much sealed, no matter what he did||

[static pecan]

||maybe, but maybe they would have forced him to retire if he went along, who knows||

[woven cedar]

Ouch, joint is involved? With metal external fixations i assume. That is rather a hassle and very inconvenient ...

[unique patrol]

Yes

She will be bedbound for quite a few weeks

And that will be hell for her, because she can only sleep on the side

[woven cedar]

(please dont mind that misclick there )

[unique patrol]

||The House of Strings has shared their power with the wrong House it would seem.
Fate is hypocrisy incarnate. As is the whole reincarnation of a way to ascend that has been already proven to not work before the void revolution.
The House of Forgiveness does not forgive.||

[unique patrol]

||Pretty much. They wanted from the get-go more control over Far Whisper, because she is still young and influenceable and the imposed best friend to Lives, the gate of communication.
Eyes wants to spread useless chemistry, they however want to expand their influence over whisper. Eyes Fate was sealed the moment he had to involve that House.||

Answered all comments on the fic

[static pecan]

||the pearl is a contingency for that for sure||

[unique patrol]

||What if the message was never important? But the conditions for getting to it were.
To feed the anger of this angry bug, fueling her cravings for independence. :p||

[static pecan]

||oh so kinda a way to keep her up to date and anger her?||

[unique patrol]

||It can be a short term solution until all conditions have been met and the true gift finally matters and she is still she to receive it.||

[static pecan]

Ah

I wonder if we will ever find out what's on it

[unique patrol]

Maybe?
I do dislike introducing strings without tying them together in the end.
Sure, there might be a few red herrings, but I can tell, this one is none

[static pecan]

Also I wonder how many conditions are there

[unique patrol]

Can't tell. Don't know yet.
More than four at least

[static pecan]

Gee that's a lot

[woven cedar]

5, 1 for each Karmas

[unique patrol]

The ones I have already connived:
||Departure of Eyes.||
||Confirmed departure of Fate||
||Announcement of mass ascension + 10.000 cycles||
||A certain big time frame without any Ancient imposing Administration over Far Whisper or Mechanics tinkering on her.||
||Unknown conditions that might have to do with her connection to Lives.||
||A critical mass of Equipment manifest errors.||

To make sure she is truly alone.
A gift that matters only if the Iterators fail to comply to his kind's impatience

[woven cedar]

The last one is ominous...

[static pecan]

Uh oh

So it's like an ||end of the line|| thing

[unique patrol]

Pretty much. Or a ||second chance||

Or the most elaborate troll

[static pecan]

Though I imagine it wouldn't be shown in SG since this seems far off and something not really focused on gales

[static pecan]

||yeah it's taboo removal for sure||

[woven cedar]

Really is the last contingency

[unique patrol]

For the epilogue in 20 years :p

[woven cedar]

Chapter 2000 lets goooo

[static pecan]

Right after Whisper says "well, Gales, you sure had a Corroded Destiny"

[unique patrol]

And gales retorts with "This will neither be your First Whisper, nor the Last."

[static pecan]

... Last Whisper

Hm, sounds like an epilogue name

[unique patrol]

And the Retreating Sky

[static pecan]

Static Gales

[woven cedar]

The real Destiny is the Friends we made along the way✨

[unique patrol]

Five Deaths Restrained. (The end of the meeting of six)

Everything will end in ashes

Huh, how curious

FW does not get any new kudos, but strangely enough CD now does

[static pecan]

Well either you got new readers or FW was the first thing people read

Or they just don't know you can kudos it as well

[woven cedar]

CD has much more visibility so it's natural the new readers will see that first

[unique patrol]

But it didn't got updated now for shocking 17 days.
Huh...
I really speedran FW

[static pecan]

Yeah 17 days for 4 chapters is quick

[unique patrol]

Not even

I published the first chapter exactly 2 weeks ago

[static pecan]

Impressive

[steady whale]

FAST

[mental cosmos]

He’s an Iterator. I keep telling all of you this!

[steady whale]

Good discussion in here

Sorry to hear about your mom, soul. I hope she recovers as quickly as possible, that sounds really frustrating and painful…

[mental cosmos]

I’ll keep trying to convince you just like NGI did.

Right, forgot about that…

[steady whale]

Luckily she has a good son to help her out :3

[unique patrol]

Beep, boop, maggot!

[static pecan]

somebody please take away my rights to make art

[unique patrol]

Someone wants somebody to apologize:3

[mental cosmos]

Soulwing, mind answering me for a second?

Is Zeich a valid German word?

[unique patrol]

Zeich is a variant of Zeug, used in a specific dialect. It is not valid in standard letter German

Could also be used as 'Ich zeich(ne) dir was'. (I draw something for you) or 'Zeich(Zeig) mir den Weg.' (Show me the way)
Both examples are however botching standard letter german, but could be spoken like that.

[unique patrol]

I shouldn't have sketched that.
Now I have something I can't share until WAY later >.>

[steady whale]

That’s called motivation, baby

[unique patrol]

;.;

[static pecan]

Or spoilers :)