#Need help with outlining the story

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torpid iris
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So I'm wanting to improve my videography skills, starting with a short film about how you can only change things within your control and how you have to sometimes just accept things outside of your control. This film will focus around me getting incredibly bad luck. My plan so far is to have me encounter one bad thing after another, rapid fire, walking in rain, being late for an important exam, someone running into me and spilling coffee on me. this will then be contrasted by me going home, kicking off my shoes, changing clothes, lounging back, scrolling tiktok, when I get a notif that my therapy appointment is cancelled. Then I'm imagining a flashback to some pivotal moment, something that will change my outlook. I was originally thinking something from my childhood but that would require a child actor and I'm a college student. So maybe a first person POV of child me asking someone in my life a question and getting a very important answer? I don't know. How do I go about this? This will need me to realize "omg ive been going about this wrong! I need to start changing this I can control, like carrying an umbrella, setting multiple alarms, carrying backup clothes, etc." Maybe a flashback to me and a friend having coffee and i would be complaining about my day and they'd say "well why dont you do xyz?" and at first I laugh it off but then end flashback go to present and im like "Yeah... why dont I do xyz...?!"

but now looking back at this entire story im wondering if this just sounds preachy and should I rewrite this? i feel like im questioning most of this story at this point and if i were to rewrite this i dont even know what to rewrite it about. also this was kinda inspired by stuff my own therapist says. that you cant change other people being jerks but you can change how you handle the situation which is what im focusing on. basically a story to show how you should attempt to better your life. idk i feel like this is a mess.

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this is also my first short film if you couldnt tell 😭

torpid iris
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bruh should i just do a music video instead? my main goal it to just improve my skills and id probs enjoy a music video more

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fuck it im doing a music video

brisk venture
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improve your videography in what way?

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something specific about it orrr

torpid iris
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this is my most recently produced work, I made it for a company which wanted a sample instagram reel to see what my work looked like and by making this i realized my work was ass

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hence why i want to change it

bleak prism
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Hello! I hope I'm not too late. 😓 A music video may help you write more fluidly and easily as you don't have to come with dialogue (if that was your initial thought). Some people may find it easier to write the script with a song- letting yourself be guided by it.

I think your initial idea is good! 😊 But I believe you should try to go deeper with the whole "only change things within your control." You should show the duality of the pain and desperation that comes with not being able to control some things- even using the child idea you wish to use! -And also the uncomfortable feeling of learning that for so long there's been a situation you can control, but brushed it off.

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