part of your world- feedback pls

[topaz saddle]

i think i was sick when i recorded this ☠️ you can probably tell during some parts but yeah ive been meaning to get some feedback on this !!❤️

[topaz saddle]

@toxic spear could u check this out whenever u get the chance? ur feedback is always good 🫶

[toxic spear]

Will do, once I'm back from work!

[topaz saddle]

thank you!!

[toxic spear]

Alright gorgeous.

First if all thanks so much for the submission and Secondly.

What I would recommend is taking your time with it. Pauses in songs have a specific meaning and therefore we want to make sure we keep them for the purpose of the dynamical flow of the song.

What I mean with that is, I could tell you were rushing? A bit in the song. Starting out a bit too early and cutting sustained (longer held notes) short.
That itself takes away from the dynamics of the song but also the emotional aspect.
So what I would recommend is to take your time with it and take the pauses the way they were intended.

Hope I was able to help

~ Ally

[topaz saddle]

thanks for the tips! i’ve actually been working on slowing down and beind more mindful about each note and my breaths. its good to know im taking the right steps!