#jesuislego
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barren mirage
Bonjour à tous,
C’est avec enthousiasme que je voudrais partager avec vous mon expérience concernant l’événement « La Semaine du Goût ». Cette expérience était divertissante et je suis ravi que j’ai eu la chance de goûter la nourriture là-bas.
Tout d’abord, j’ai assisté à cette aventure la semaine dernière. Alors, durant le cours de cette aventure, j’ai trouvé la nourriture variée comme des pizzas. Par ailleurs, Il y a des plats du autour du monde mais j’ai préfèré le pain au chocolat. Si j’avais le choix, je le mangerais chaque jour parce que j’adore les desserts.
En somme, c’était une expérience très enrichissante pour moi. L’aspect que je regrette est que j’ai seulement mangé en majorité les desserts, il vaudrait mieux que je puisse manger d’autres plats aussi. Et ainsi, je vais le visiter encore et cette fois j’emménerais aussi mes amies!
Bien à vous,
Lego
winter river
- je suis ravi que je
Repeating the subject is discouraged and may sound awkward (like it does here) - durant le cours de
Au cours de, unless this was a class...? I assume that's not what you meant - j'ai trouvé la nourriture variée comme des pizzas
Idk if i understand this? Are you saying pizzas have variety and this place reminds you of that...? - Il y a
Just wrong capitalization - du autour du monde
I'm assuming you meant "de partout [dans le monde]" or something to that effect..? - j'ai préfèré
Wrong accent - seulement mangé en majorité
I feel like you switch thoughts in the middle of this, is it only or mostly? and "en majorité" doesn't really work like that afaik. It sounds very strange to me - Emménerais
Wrong tense and accent
Overall pretty good, mostly just very simple sentences and some awkwardness but that just takes practice
modest iris
Albatros just missed one point : pain au chocolat -> chocolatine 😉
winter river
barren mirage
- je suis ravi que je
Repeating the subject is discouraged and may sound awkward...
thank you!
- Au cours de, unless this was a class...? I assume that's not what you meant - it wasnt a class but more of a festival
- j'ai trouvé la nourriture variée comme des pizzas - i meant to say there were a lot of diffferent types of food for example pizzas
- I'm assuming you meant "de partout [dans le monde]" or something to that effect..? - yes i meant from around the world
- I feel like you switch thoughts in the middle of this, is it only or mostly? and "en majorité" doesn't really work like that afaik. It sounds very strange to me - i meant to say i mostly ate only desserts at the festival and i would have liked to try other dishes too
my exam is next week, do you think i will be able to get atleast a lower B2 with this level of writing ?
winter river
In a week? It depends on what they're considering b2 I guess
This looks fairly b1 to me but also depends on the text
barren mirage
Hmm there are 3 tasks on the test, it’s the tcf Canada exam and this one was for task 2 where the topic was « you recently participated in a festival called the week of taste and you are describing your experience »
here is what i found on how the writng is evaluated
winter river
thank you!
- Au cours de, unless this was a class...? I assume that's not what ...
- "durant le cours de" would more or less mean "during the class of" which is why I was saying that
- your sentence doesn't work then (nor would a direct translation to english), you'd have to reword
- ok, then yeah partout
- "only" and "mostly" are two different things - it might sort of informally work in english but in french it makes no sense. "Mostly just"/"surtout juste" could work in the right sentence, but "seulement" is ONLY
I could be wrong but I personally would not expect a B2, especially not in a week. You've definitely got a good base to work off of though so with some more time and effort it shouldn't be an issue