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[versed carbon]

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[solemn iris]

les gens qui = ceux qui

it's not that "les gens qui" isn't used, but "ceux" is more natural overall, I'd say

but the best way to do this sentence would be to just say "Il y en a bien qui"

depends a bit on the style though

[sour terrace]

so uh

could u write the sentence with "ceux"? im a bit confused on how to implement it in the sentence😅

[solemn iris]

Il y a bien ceux qui

[sour terrace]

ohhh

so both Il y en a bien qui and il y a bien ceux qui are more natural?

[solemn iris]

yes

il y en a being the most natural

[sour terrace]

ohh okay thank you so much

[sour terrace]

tryna elevate my writing skills so this helps means alot

[solemn iris]

there are a bunch of mistakes in the rest of the text if you want me to underline them

[sour terrace]

sure

i tried to fix it but this is the best i came up with

[sour terrace]

À l'époque actuelle, Des entreprises fleurissent lorsque l'économie le oblige. il y en a bien qui sont à l'aise en tant que travailleur salariés mais il y en a d'autres qui ne le sont pas du tout. il faut enseigner des enfants pour qu'ils deviennent des propres chefs. il y a trop de malveillance venant du monde comme ceux qui n'obtiennent pas les résultats et la vie qu'ils veulent avoir à cause du fait que des enfants qui deviendront des adultes n'aimeront travailler dans certaines circonstances qui les permettent être seulement les travailleurs sans contrôle de leurs finances et leur croissance

[inland badger]

Les oblige
Travailleurs
Il faut enseigner les enfants à devenir leurs propres chefs
The last sentence is really hard to understand

[sour terrace]

its a bit long, also i only changed the les to des

because my teacher said "saying les is to specific"

it was les originally

now im just confused

[inland badger]

hmm both work

what was the last sentence in english?

[sour terrace]

there's too much malevolence coming from the world like those who dont obtain the results and the life they want to have("ig would like to have"would be better here) because of the fact children will become adults who will not like to work in certain circumstances which allows them to only workers out of control of their finance and growth

@inland badger

[inland badger]

but malevolence means wishing to cause harm

[sour terrace]

yes

[inland badger]

whos causing harm here

[sour terrace]

people in general, was just trying to make a point in the essay that there's too much malevolence in the world aka crime etc because children who grow into adults don't obtain their preferred job

[inland badger]

ohh

i'd be more like "malevolence in the world coming from those who..."

[sour terrace]

btw malevolence means having a desire to do harm or wishing ill upon others, but it doesn’t necessarily mean acting on it. It refers more to the intent or feeling rather than the actual harmful action. If someone is malevolent, they harbor ill will, but they might not always follow through with harmful deeds.

[inland badger]

and then you say the fact children become... but we're talking about the same persons

so why say children yk

[sour terrace]

because

the essay original point

is "Should we teach children to become entrepreneurs, yes or no and if yes or no then why?"

in the other paragraphs

its more clear that the children are the one's were speaking off so yeah the context would look a bit off with this one paragraph being by itself

[inland badger]

des enfants qui deviendront des adultes n'aimeront travailler dans certaines circonstances qui les permettent être seulement les travailleurs sans contrôle de leurs finances et leur croissance
if you mean children in general then thats les enfants
you should put the pas after n'aimeront
qui les permettent être seulement les travailleurs
qui ne les permettent que d'être des travailleurs

ou qui les permettent seulement d'être des travailleurs

seulement works but ne..que is another common way to say it

ig seulement is more formal so it fits here

[sour terrace]

ironically

my teacher is forcing me to be formal

so yeah haha i have to

but i do say seulement more than ne que when speaking 😅