#Some Hook Reviews

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worldly epoch
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Guys, trying a new experiment on this video, can y'all pls give feedback upon the hook and the script (only 48 sec long video) and please if you can, become the part of this experiment (you will get to know what this experiment is about)

Link- https://youtu.be/ShfYlDpLHRY

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Yasious
This Video Only Works If You Do Something

Most videos don’t care what you do after you watch them.
This one does.

Every view counts automatically, but the rest only change if people actually take an action.
The idea is simple: keep everything moving together.

You don’t need to do everything.
Just one thing is enough.

Like it.
Comment anything.
Subscribe.
Or share it.

Do whatever...

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And reviews on the editing too (tried a new style)

verbal escarp
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The core content comes across a bit like begging in a way that will turn off most viewers, but the editing isn't half bad! Sound queues pop off when they should, the tracking on your hands from 0:14-0:17 is pretty good too. Your font choices feel a bit schizophrenic and non-unified. A key insight from graphic design is that the more fonts you use, the more you confuse the viewer's eyes. Try to pick a font or two that you feel represent you and stick with those throughout the video. The ending sound effect is also a little strange, I don't quite get the motivation for it, but it could be a meme I don't understand.

amber violet
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the idea itself is okay @worldly epoch , and the thumbnail is not half bad, still could be improved a bit by representing better the ''balance'' you want to achieve. These 50 seconds of video... they just feel like a diguised beg for interactions if you present the video like this. It's just... Incomplete. You explained the experiment you want people to take part in but... why should I, or anyone else, actually take part in it? What's the reason? Is there a study that says people can't maintain balance somewhere? you should mention it if yes. Give people a reason to take part in it, why you are conducting the experiment in the first place and explain other similar studies that exists. As you said, this is literally the hook... the rest is missing.

worldly epoch
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Guys, first things first...thanks a lot for the feedback, I really appreciate that.
Secondly, yup I got the points on which I should emphasize more and work on improving them.
Definitely a good learning moment though, and I’ll be more mindful of clarity going forward.

amber violet