graceful spoke
I've wanted to start making a new style of video, kind of "Video Essay/Informative -esq" with Funny Moments within the video, or after the video essay part.
I would love feedback on it, especially for the beginning parts, as it's the "new" style I'm trying.
I appreciate any and all criticism!
ocean tusk
I have lots of things to say, but I promise it is out of love! I thought this video was great and I really think you got some great things going on here. First, your scriptwriting for the beginning portion is good. I do think though, and this will come with time, you could do a better job enunciating your words. Also, it may be worth it to invest in a pop filter. A lot of those p and other strong sounds really "pop" in your audio. Your style is your style, but I think you could incorporate some more jokes in the scripted section. For the gameplay funny moments, you guys have a great dynamic, I would just try to find some more ways to keep your audience visually engaged with the edits, it was pretty minimal. The caption work was good, I think maybe a slight tweak is to make them a little bigger, and again, make them more DYNAMIC. Another thing is I think maybe colour correction could be a good idea? I know it isn't true to the game, but it makes it look a lot better, and since you aren't doing a "serious" review, I think it is a good idea. Finally, the thumbnail I don't think is the best, it is hard to give suggestions to improve it without just saying what direction I would go in, but I think the kermit looking characters are funny and I would probably use one of them in the thumbnail. Lots of yapping I know, but I hope this feedback helps!
graceful spoke
first and foremost, thank you so much for taking the time to read, and thank you for taking the time to write this in-depth message!
First, your scriptwriting for the beginning portion is good. I do think though, and this will come with time, you could do a better job enunciating your words.
yes, that is very true, experience helps a-lot! and thank you for the tip on enunciating as well, i have a bit of a slur to my speech, which i have to work on, but i feel as if that would come naturally with experience, as i don't talk much outside of youtube.
Also, it may be worth it to invest in a pop filter.
i completely agree, i actually used to have one, but it ripped and i never replaced it, but thank you for the input, and i will get one for my next recording :D
but I think you could incorporate some more jokes in the scripted section.
will keep that in mind, thank you!
would just try to find some more ways to keep your audience visually engaged with the edits, it was pretty minimal.
yes, i completely agree, and that's my main goal is to stay motivated during edits and rewatch [while editing] to find new ways to make an edit "better" in a sense.
The caption work was good, I think maybe a slight tweak is to make them a little bigger, and again, make them more DYNAMIC.
duly noted!
Another thing is I think maybe colour correction could be a good idea? I know it isn't true to the game, but it makes it look a lot better, and since you aren't doing a "serious" review,
i'll give it a shot! i always thought the same with gameplay, keep it kind of true to the game, but i'll tweak around with it next time!
Finally, the thumbnail I don't think is the best
that was my main concern when finishing the video. i kind of wanted the video to be a bit "clickbait-y" to those who play that game and be like "oh really? a dbd competitor?" i had a few drafts but went for that one because it was straight to the point and could gather clicks
graceful spoke
I have lots of things to say, but I promise it is out of love! I thought this vi...
once again, i can't express how grateful i am for you to reply to my post, i really do appreciate it and i will work on it!
<3
ocean tusk
It’s no problem! With the editing, I’ve found it to be a unique way of creative expression and almost like art. And it’s also nice to do stuff new and create a product I’m proud of. Maybe that mentality will help you stay motivated