#I need feedback on the intro part of my upcoming video.

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mint river
tame hull
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It might just be my adhd but I want to see the rest of the video now 😂

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I'm very into it

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I love the energy your voice has

mint river
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Thanks so much man that makes me super happy and motivated. Ill try to get it out as fast as I can!

tame hull
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Yeah! This is exactly the kinda content I love binging. Unhinged topics into media that I love

mint river
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Same I would watch this vid if someone else made it so thats my way of determining if its worth making

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i really appreciate the kind words they really mean a lot

thin flicker
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Now I'm also curious about the killcount of the Spongebob cast

mint river
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Lets go

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I guess my hook was ok then

gloomy fable
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I am curious as well

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But please don’t ruin my childhood further

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Lol

snow plume
mint river
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yeah youre for sure right

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lol ill probably keep it and hope people comment about it so theres more engagment

tame hull
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Won't hurt to take advantage of the meta just a little bit 😂

snow plume
mint river
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Perfect that could help a lot tbh 😆

gloomy fable
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I can’t wait for this question to kill my brain for the next day or two

mint river
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is the topic interesting?

snow plume
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definitely, it hooks you really well too

gloomy fable
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Definitely. I’m scared though 🥺

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It was like a fishing Rod

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A hook from that hook episode

mint river
mint river
snow plume
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people barely do that

gloomy fable
tame hull
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Yoho

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Near the hooks

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I'll never go

mint river
snow plume
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its good for hooks and shorts, i like my long form chiller

mint river
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Yeah idk if you can tell but ive been doing soley shorts for the last two years

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first long form in two years

tame hull
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It shows

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You're doing a good job at getting attention with just a few sentences

gloomy fable
mint river
gloomy fable
snow plume
mint river
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Yea it’s a concept I made

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I’m still brainstorming what to do for it

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If any of you have ideas let me know

snow plume
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this is a face of disgust it feels like he is calling us a murderer

mint river
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Yeah you’ve got a good point

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I’ll make a revision tomororw thanks for the feedback

snow plume
mint river
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Yeah I want to try to create a sense of Fomo with the thumbnail

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Btw the title will most likely be “The Surprising Kill Count of SpongeBob”

snow plume
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if you really wanna mid max it xD

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the key word first

mint river
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Oooh i like that tbh

snow plume
frosty sail
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Ok! Since this is a intro check, I'm going to go over your intro and it's aspects assuming the rest of the video is spot on!

***Disclaimer:***                        
*Keep in mind I am ALSO a tiny tuber who is ALSO asking for advice so... D:*                        
***I HAVE NO IDEA IF ANYTHING I SAY WITH CONFIDENCE IS THE COMPLETE, CORRECT ANSWER.***                        
Please feel free to disagree or correct me! I'm here to learn too!*                        
                        
✅: No comment! Acceptable!                        
☑️: Acceptable, maybe you can improve this but really it's ok as is as well                        
❌: I have a biased opinion on how you could make changes here                        
⚪ :    Not Applicable
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+-+-+-+QUALITY+-+-+-+
Literal Quality:
✅ ----- HD quality offered (Is 1080 HD offered? This is non essential but nice to have)
✅ ----- Audio clarity (Is the audio crisp enough to note different sounds apart and clearly understand words?)

✅ ----- Sound levels (Do you ears bleed? Is it too quiet? Perhaps both?)
✅ ----- Background noise (Is there notable noise or distracting background noises that aren't intended or part of the video)

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Editing:
✅ ----- Editing Style (Is there a consistent editing style? Does it add to the video without distracting?)
✅ ----- Transitions (Are transitions smooth and appropriate?)
✅ ----- Pacing (Is the pacing of the video comfortable and engaging?)
✅ ----- Use of Effects/Graphics (Are any effects and graphics used to effectively to enhance the video?)
Use of Music and Sound Effects:
✅ ----- Background Music (Is the background music appropriate and well-balanced?)
✅ ----- Sound Effects (If sound are effects used effectively and not overdone?)

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+-+-+-+EXPRESSION+-+-+-+

Personality and Presentation

✅ ----- Presenter Delivery (How effective is the presenter's delivery and on-screen presence?)
✅ ----- Energy (Does the presenter bring sufficient energy to keep the audience engaged?)
☑️ ----- Connection with Audience (Does the presenter connect well with the audience?)

Engagement:

✅ ----- Audience Retention (Does the video keep the viewer's attention throughout?)

✅ ----- The Hook (Is the first 5-10 seconds hooking the audiene?)
✅ ----- The Intro (Is there a quick intro that preps the audience that doesn't go longer than 30 sec?)

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+-+-+-+TLDR COMMENTS & SUGGESTIONS+-+-+-+

This shouldn't be much of a surpirse lol., but I absolutely LOVED this intro. The hook was fast but evenly paced with the viewers interst, the graphics and sound effect really carried the viewers attention (it's very fast paced, but you're energy matches with it so it works!) Not to mention your not so serious but deadly serious attitude toward sthe topic gives the viewers an immediate and clear snippet of your personality.

They know exactly what the video is about and what the expect over the rest of the video. Which is... EXACTLY THE GOAL MET~! 😄

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  1. So... what IS Spongebob's kill count?! I'm catching up with chat now
frosty sail
frosty sail
# mint river

This issue with this thumbnail is it's not clear and it's not the topic. Like, did spongebob murder or is he judging someone else for murder? Is it a spongebob game or a murder mystery reaction of a spongebob epsiode?

You're here to make it clear that there have BEEN crimes commited and you're getting down to solve/prove/accuse/count them once and for all

mint river
mint river
frosty sail
mint river
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Thoughts on this thumbnail instead

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Added glow

frosty sail
# mint river

Ok, you're def getting the concept of making the topic clear

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Maybe change the spongebob character to express mor eof the intent in the video?

Like right now he's angry, but should be angry? HE'S the killer

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Maybe put a line across his eyes, or have him in his jail uniform

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And if it's accruate maybe repalce the text with something like "Serial Killer" or something like that

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These are all ideas thougth! Take them as you see fit and toss the ones you dont want/need/etc

mint river
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Ok third version

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thoughts?

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also here is what all three of them would look like on a pc if you were browsing

frosty sail
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I'd also be creeped out a bit as to why my YouTube hub is full of spongebob video suggestions D:

mint river
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yeah i think the third one is best too

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is there anything i could improve on the third one

mint river
frosty sail
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Maybe add the word secert? Like secert serial killer? That might be a bit much though

frosty sail
mint river
frosty sail
snow plume
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yep this

snow plume
mint river
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Is it good enough tho?

snow plume
mint river
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What would you change

snow plume
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i really like this one as a thumbnail

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it's subtle but see the expression is kinda sus

mint river
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yeah i saw that photo was using it as inspo but i dont wanna just copy them

snow plume
mint river
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is this one too weird

snow plume
# mint river

Alright here's the thing, I'm so sorry I'm being so nitpicky

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we would like a face that makes SpongeBob look suspicious

mint river
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yeah i know its just hard to find that 😭

snow plume
# mint river

this, and the first 2 thumbnails all have expressions that look the SpongeBob is judging us not being judged by us

mint river
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is this suspicous

snow plume
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wait I'll help

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where are u looking for these

mint river
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this reddit thread lmao

snow plume
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i like this, it's like he is being accused

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But i love these. If you cut off their eyes with black bars or something

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it looks really creepy and unnerving

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and then add murderer to it

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and it'll look like he is awkward laughing because he got caught

frosty sail
frosty sail
mint river
snow plume
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why is bro silly like that XD

snow plume
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but with this face

mint river
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Ill have to ask

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sash made that thumbnail and i think it looks really good

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he for sure is better at it then me

snow plume
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love how it takes the entire thumbnail

frosty sail
lament raft
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i like this actually its very good

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cant think of anything lol

mint river
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Ok lol thank you I know youre telling the truth

lament raft
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could use background music

mint river
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Its got some?

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if anything i felt like it could be too loud

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maybe not tho idk

lament raft
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i struggle finding background music as well

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that matches

mint river
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wait are you saying it could use better background music or use background music at all

lament raft
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too quiet i think

mint river
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oh ok i was confused because i was like there is some 😭

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ill mess with the loudness of it

gloomy fable
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Omg I'm scared

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Serial killer intrigues the most

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“Murder theory” or “how many kill” isn't as clickable

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Just saying

gloomy fable
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I still love that third pic you did