lean axle
I have a popular science project related to space and astronomy and I know I still have a lot to improve. However, I believe the quality grows with every video, and I need criticism on my title/thumbnail, video script/text and my voice (pronunciation, how boring / not boring it sounds). Besides, does the introduction hooks in any way? Even the harshest criticism will be valuable to me.
Edit: typo
lavish herald
I like what you've done with the thumbnail, but personally, I think the text could be modified. I think you could also do something cooler with the text, like transform it a bit. The other thing is for me the font almost pops off the image, but in a bad way. It doesn't look like it's part of the image. The Life below portion is actually fine, it's mainly the main ENCELADUS text. So maybe play with that a bit next time unless you plan on changing it out.
As for the title, way too long. Titles get cut off to ... past a certain point. Mr. Beast says it's 80 characters, but from my experience it's more like 52. I think it depends on where you're seeing it but to be safe I'd never do more than the minimum cutoff, which seems to be 53 in my experience. But generally, I like the title. I would just find a shorter way to approach it if you can.
When it comes to the video itself, I think your music could be lowered a bit or your voice could be increased because they clash a bit too much right now. Your actual presentation though is awesome. It reminds me of some of the bigger channels I've seen. I think the text at 1:20 needs to change. It just doesn't look right. Maybe experiment with other ways to modify the text and figure out where each works best. Same thing with the next scene. The name should probably be lower and the font should be like something you'd see on a plaque somewhere. Right now it stands out a lot.
I would say the video hooks me big time, but more than that, your presentation makes me want to stay. Way better than my stuff!
My highest recommendation, especially for the text problem, would be look at other channels similar to yours and see how they approach these things.
minor hedge
The intro is way too slow; the interesting graphic combined with the music is a good start, but you need to add in some sort of narration or text in the first couple of seconds to reiterate the interesting parts of the video so people keep watching. Remeber, once people watch for ~15 seconds, they'll probably watch the rest of your video if it's good, so invest in frontloading as much interesting and new content into your first ~15 seconds as much as possible
lean axle
I like what you've done with the thumbnail, but personally, I think the text cou...
Firstly, thanks A LOT for such a detailed answer. It will definitely be very useful for my next videos.
Regarding the text at 1:20: do you mean that it looks stylistically wrong and doesn't appear nice, or is it just not a good title for a chapter?
I will definitely work harder and more attentive on text parts next time. Thank you once more!
lavish herald
Firstly, thanks A LOT for such a detailed answer. It will definitely be very use...
It doesn't look right stylistically, like it doesn't blend in. Same problem as with the thumbnail, which I noticed you used similar text and effects.
lean axle
The intro is way too slow; the interesting graphic combined with the music is a ...
Thank you, I'll try to think on the concept of more dynamic and informative intros!
lean axle
It doesn't look right stylistically, like it doesn't blend in. Same problem as w...
I often experiment on the titles' style and still looking for the better one. This down here is from one of my previous videos. Same font, but different effects. Does it look any better?
lavish herald
I often experiment on the titles' style and still looking for the better one. Th...
Personally, I just wouldn't do the 3d effect. It makes sense on a poster but not in a video unless it's the title of the video in the video.