Just made my first video and I need criticism

[cyan anchor]

Just like the title says, any feedback or criticism on my first video would be very helpful
I look forward to your replies, opinions and criticism

https://youtu.be/IqdQ_nc720w

[raven sonnet]

The first main thing I'd love is an improvement in the audio quality.

You know, a bit more dept and richness

No need for a new mic or anything even some Audacity magic should do

you know just to get rid of that roboticness

[cyan anchor]

Thanks, for the feedback, the audio sounded a bit disturbing to me as well,
I'll work on that in my future videos
Was there anything else you wish i did better?
Like the storytelling, music, editing anything at all

[cyan anchor]

Thank you so much for the in-depth analysis
I'll work on that in my scripts
And thanks for the step-by-step tips as well, they were very helpful.
I'll apply what you said, and bring in something better in the future

I have some more questions, and ideas
would it be okay if i sent you a dm?

[white prism]

I haven't watched the video but just as an outsider I do not understand what "Blue lock" is or how the thumbnail ties into this. now maybe the two of these are very self explanatory to people who know about the topic, but you want to make the title and thumbnail in such a way that it can get people even outside of the group to be interested in it, thus widening your demographic

[cyan anchor]

You have a very valid point, i can't appeal to the search system and potential audience with that kind of title
You're also right about the thumbnail, i would improve it