solid saffron
Title: El Pícaro
Format: Feature
Genre: Acid Western/Arthouse
Logline: A drifter drags his beloved’s body through the lands, as a brutal killer and a resurrected outlaw, converge on his path.
his wife’s final wish is for her to be buried atop the tallest mountain in the west.
two killers impede on his destiny.
(think: the good, the bad, the ugly + el topo)
silk yacht
Seems pretty straight forward - there's a clear goal, protagonist, stakes, and antagonists. My only issue with the logline is that "killers, bandits, and gangs" all have a lot of overlap so it sounds repetitive.
solid saffron
Seems pretty straight forward - there's a clear goal, protagonist, stakes, and a...
I understand what u mean. I just wasn’t sure how to phrase that bit to be honest.
silk yacht
Nah, I get what you're going for. but overall this sounds really interesting!
solid saffron
Nah, I get what you're going for. but overall this sounds really interesting!
I was just watching a ton alejandro jodorowsky and fernando arrabal so I wanted to make an acid western myself
rocky kernel
I agree with Taylor on the repetitiveness of the killers, bandits, thieves part but other than that I can't spot anything I'd change. Nice story idea!
vast lagoon
The story have space for layers but, if it kils the emotional core this logline can be made
but it is very neat and predictable
but anyways nice idea
solid saffron
I agree with Taylor on the repetitiveness of the killers, bandits, thieves part ...
thanks!
solid saffron
but anyways nice idea
thank you
after writing on the story for awhile I’ve decided to make a central villain Instead of just “killers, bandits, thieves”
I was reading the blood meridian and always wanted a judge holden sort of character
vast lagoon
after writing on the story for awhile I’ve decided to make a central villain Ins...
nice if you try to unify the conflict but make the why for the villan stronger, follow those achetypes of heroes from My Story can beat up Your story" to make the villan memorable
solid saffron
which is perfect for this now because I’m doing a lot of surrealism
vast lagoon
I was reading the blood meridian and always wanted a judge holden sort of charac...
i dont know that charecter please explain
solid saffron
i dont know that charecter please explain
judge holden is a brutal, philosophical, scalphunter, that has little to no morals and does some extremely bad things
he’s based off of a real person that was a scalphunter responsible for killing many Native Americans
however in the book he’s written as a nearly 7ft tall, pale skinned, Demi god (hinted at)
vast lagoon
he’s based off of a real person that was a scalphunter responsible for killing m...
i am from india so i dont know him but the charecter is intresting
solid saffron
probably the darkest villain in any media ever
I really wanted to write a character like that. like a guy that feels inevitably powerful and has no weaknesses
vast lagoon
I really wanted to write a character like that. like a guy that feels inevitably...
charecter needs weakness to be intresting
solid saffron
charecter needs weakness to be intresting
I beg to differ
judge holden is talked about a shit ton AND wins in the story
yet he’s an unstoppable force in the book
vast lagoon
i really need to read that book
solid saffron
he’s interesting because of the way he talks, his speech, his appearance, the setting, his source material, his unknown history, etc
especially what he does
there’s a long episode of analyzing evil on him you should check it out
vast lagoon
he’s interesting because of the way he talks, his speech, his appearance, the se...
then its good presentation
solid saffron
it absolutely is
vast lagoon
there’s a long episode of analyzing evil on him you should check it out
okay lemme see it
solid saffron
vast lagoon
i posted my Below Zero and dreamnet, can you review it
solid saffron
El Pícaro - Acid Western/Drama
solid saffron
El Pícaro - Acid Western/Art House
El Pícaro - Acid Western/Arthouse
El Pícaro - Western/Arthouse
silk yacht
@solid saffron do you need help with changing the title?
solid saffron
<@1077812706301710386> do you need help with changing the title?
nah I figured it out eventually lol
thank you
solid saffron
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Title: El Pícaro
Format: Feature
Genre: Acid Western/Arthouse
Logline: A drifter drags his beloved’s body through the lands, as a brutal killer and a resurrected outlaw, converge on his path.
his wife’s final wish is for her to be buried atop the tallest mountain in the west.
two killers impede on his destiny.
(think: the good, the bad, the ugly + el topo)
silk yacht
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What was the big change?
solid saffron
What was the big change?
this was originally more of a journey movie
now its a 3 way game type movie
El Picaro (The Good) is trying to bury his wife on the holy mountain.
Tuca (the median) is racing to kill El Picaro because of the confrontation they had.
The Bastard (The Evil) Is trying to corrupt anything and everything in existence.
The Bastard wants to kill both (his reason for wanting to kill Tuca is a bit complex) but his reasoning for wanting to kill El Picaro is because of his reputation. El Picaro represents the good, the holy, and stuff. The Bastard wants to ruin all of that.
(also El Picaro’s wifes corpse has a deeper plot meaning then just a corpse. this relates to another reason The Bastard wants to kill him.)
so now it’s become:
the surreal, religiosity, el topo, the good, the bad, the ugly, blood meridian, all wrapped into one big arthouse western.