Misdelivered - 29 Page Workplace Comedy Pilot

[fleet stirrup]

Gonna take a look at this tn 🙂

[crude walrus]

Thanks, friend! I look forward to reading your notes if you decide to provide some.

[shell lynx]

Just read the opening and it got some audible laughs from me. Gonna read the rest tonight!

[crude walrus]

Great! I look forward to any notes you have!

[fleet stirrup]

I gave it a read, nice job! I can send you notes via DM or in this thread, just let me know which you prefer

[crude walrus]

Hey, thanks for reading and taking the time. You can post them here.

[fleet stirrup]

@crude walrus No problem, here you go! Hope you find them helpful. Please take with a grain of salt as I'm no expert myself 🙂

[crude walrus]

Hey, thanks again. I agree with a lot of what you said, especially about the resolution and the cursing. I say fuck a lot, so I think it just weasels it's way into my writing. Also, I do agree that several of the scenes/jokes could be shortened. Thank you for the notes. They're very helpful. On to the next draft!