Script of the Week - Warzone (Pilot)

[tiny jackal]

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TITLE: Warzone
GENRE: One-hour medical crime drama
FORMAT: TV
LOGLINE: Warzone is a one-hour, character-driven medical drama centered on a doctor running like hell from her past who is forced to work at an inner-city hospital bankrolled by a charming but ruthless criminal. Inspired by real events. Tonally, think ER by way of THE WIRE.

NOTES: An Oscar-winning screenwriter is interested in directing my pilot, which recently was a Script Pipeline 2025 TV finalist. I’ve been pitching this show for 2 years, with Jonathan Frakes and Seal Team’s Neil Brown, Jr. attached, just curious which scenes and characters land or work for people and why? Also, would you watch it and why. Thanks.

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[hollow latch]

Thanks for posting this and thanks to all of you who read it. This pilot was a finalist in the Script Pipeline contest and it’s getting some noteworthy eyes on it, just looking to see what works and when folks felt it worked. Thanks

[faint owl]

Hey @hollow latch- Just wanted to say I took a look and think this is awesome. I'm not too big or knowledgable on the genre, but just wanted to say I hope you get some good feedback here. I think anyone who's interested in this type of material and format could totally benefit from seeing how it's done like a pro. Great job!

[hollow latch]

Wow, thank you very much for the kind words. I’m glad the pilot landed for you, that means a lot

[timid geyser]

Hi Phil! I just finished reading the script a little while ago - WOW! This is a helluva pilot!!! I think you have a magnificent story here. I'm not surprised to see it went so far in the pipeline. Here's my notes in a google drive link, let me know if you have any questions! https://docs.google.com/document/d/18bDB59UZVAstjCqdc6szhFGoMzWIShEeW54x7hKF2ls/edit?usp=sharing

[hollow latch]

Thank you so much! I appreciate you making the time for reading and for putting your thoughts in this doc. Very very kind of you!

[timid geyser]

It was a pleasure to read! Keep us posted on your journey with it. Wishing big things for you

[rigid beacon]

Downloading to read ASAP 🙂

[rigid beacon]

@hollow latch This was a fun read! Breezed through it. Would definitely watch this and watch more. Left some interesting threads for more that I would want to follow. I put some notes together after I finished reading, feel free to take a look. Great job!

[hollow latch]

Wow, thank you! I’m glad you liked it and thanks for making the time. I hope one day we get to see this episode in action, and I’m glad my intent with the pace of the read landed for you.

Usually I try to write in a way I want it to feel when someone watches it, and have the read reflect that in the structure of paragraph breaks or dialogue breaks. Something a screenwriter taught me is to try and break up every 2 or 3 lines of dialogue with an action line that’s either an actor-y screen direction or a piece of business that pushes the narrative forward with maybe a new shot or complication

[rigid beacon]

Yeah def think you did a good job with that