That's not a logline. That's a logparagraph. You're gonna want to shorten that to about two sentences.
#Clue: Mysteries of the Codenamed - Mystery
polar roost
rapid nymph
That's not a logline. That's a logparagraph. You're gonna want to shorten that...
Done.
polar roost
Okay, now you're going to want to condense those two sentences into one really intriguing sentence. What you have is a great synopsis, but it still isn't really a logline.
Here's my attempt: When six young adults are transformed into children following a mysterious incident at a mansion party, they team up to form The Codenamed in an effort to dispel the curse and regain their adulthood.
It still doesn't pop, but it's closer to a logline.
Hopefully that makes sense.
Your goal is to create one sentence that describes your movie or show that really piques someone's interest to want to read your script.
peak flame
here is my suggestion to fix the Logline:
Six young adults are turned into children because of a magic bear statuette at the party.
rapid nymph
Your goal is to create one sentence that describes your movie or show that reall...
How does it look now?
polar roost
How does it look now?
In my opinion, it looks much better. I would change regain to regaining, but for the most part I think it's fine. Later, you may want to add a little more pizazz to it, but it's not horrible as it stands.
carmine wren
Personally I don't think all the specific details of how they were turned into children are really necessary, for example the magic bear statuette: while a unique catalyst it's probably fine to save as a cool, unique moment for the show, and the mansion party setting you can get away with keeping but might not even be necessary either. Also not really getting a sense of urgency/ticking clock or strong stakes? Sure being kids when they're supposed to be young adults isn't great but what's really driving them to get back to being young adults? Also how long do they have to solve the mystery, or can they take as long as they want until they fix it? I guess that then leads to asking how long the show covers. A day? A week? A month? You've definitely got a decent start at least!
rapid nymph
Going back to this, I got started in its script. So far, I've gotten the first page done and I'm also done with the second one. I might send over a WIP version of the script when I get the chance.