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grand orchid Jan 26, 2025, 7:32 PM

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<@&698916665710215209> The OPC is a weekly event, challenging all to write and submit a single page corresponding to that week's Elements. While the page needs to be enjoyable on its own, it does not need to be a complete story.

All entries must be standard screenwriting format and must not include a cover page. Entries based off of existing work will be disqualified on weeks with prizes.

Last week @zenith briar took top prize, congrats!

oscar 🖊️ 📄 ONE PAGE CHALLENGE #241 📄 🖊️ oscar

This week's Elements (which must be incorporated) are:
▫️A rug

Submissions are now open and will remain open until Sunday 10:00PT/13:00ET/18:00UTC. Vote on your favorite submissions with the plus_one emoji. Good luck!

If you would like to help come up with prompts, you can do so via the following form (full credit will be given!): https://forms.gle/FCfd9K59QPtp27Fu7

tulip bone Jan 26, 2025, 8:35 PM

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Excellent work last week!

full plover Jan 27, 2025, 4:06 AM

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Missed the last 1-2, but I'm in for this one. I took a different direction on "rug"

📎 Built_To_Last.pdf

zenith briar Jan 27, 2025, 4:47 AM

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full plover Missed the last 1-2, but I'm in for this one. I took a different direction on "r...

Love this line: the floor RIPPLING like an accordion.

full plover Jan 27, 2025, 4:52 AM

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zenith briar Love this line: the floor RIPPLING like an accordion.

Thanks! Tbh, I was inspired by your action/thriller scene on the airplane...tried to get some kind of intensity while hinting at humor

zenith briar Jan 27, 2025, 4:53 AM

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I went a different route this time...

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📎 OPC-Toenail.pdf

full plover Jan 27, 2025, 4:54 AM

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zenith briar

Lol. well done. What a horrible thing to imagine

zenith briar Jan 27, 2025, 4:55 AM

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😛

hybrid mural Jan 31, 2025, 1:53 AM

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full plover Missed the last 1-2, but I'm in for this one. I took a different direction on "r...

Lol, I went in a similar direction

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📎 The_Piece.pdf

full plover Jan 31, 2025, 3:03 AM

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hybrid mural

Ha! I'll give it a read here

full plover Jan 31, 2025, 3:05 AM

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hybrid mural

Fun...."Swigs"...ha

hybrid mural Jan 31, 2025, 5:07 AM

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full plover Fun...."Swigs"...ha

Thanks for reading!

reef sleet Feb 1, 2025, 11:04 PM

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I did not expect this to go where it did, but I'm glad it happened. Feedback very welcome!

📎 OPC_241.pdf

reef sleet Feb 1, 2025, 11:24 PM

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Absolutely love this.

I'm not completely sold on the "Like a Venus Flytrap" line. It costs a line and, unless you really like the foreshadowing, doesn't add a lot.

Not about writing style, but if Mr. Matt were dressed up in a brighter colored suit -- Mr. Clean-eqsue -- I think that would be hilarious. I'm imagining his character like Vector in Despicable Me but more mysterious.

The rug is amazing, very Alexa. If you had more space I would've loved to see it say something like "I could not hear your request. Please try again."

tulip bone Feb 2, 2025, 12:10 AM

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reef sleet Absolutely love this. I'm not completely sold on the "Like a Venus Flytrap" li...

Love this feedback!
||I won't lie I totally thought i was hot shit with the venus flytrap line and worked really hard to get it in. But based on your feedback it doesn't seem to work, I was going to move it to the end when the rug is wrapping him up (ex: The Rug begins to ROLL ITSELF TOGETHER with GREG in IT like a VENUS FLYTRAP.) instead of using it as foreshadowing.||
I am curious if that would work better?

reef sleet Feb 2, 2025, 12:12 AM

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tulip bone Love this feedback! ||I won't lie I totally thought i was hot shit with the ven...

Yeah I like this better because it adds to the way you want it to look visually, not just as a metaphor. I’m also a sucker for foreshadowing too

tulip bone Feb 2, 2025, 12:13 AM

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I'll switch it to that, thank you so much for the feedback!

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Updated based on feedback!

tulip bone Feb 2, 2025, 12:34 AM

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Updated on feed back (again!)

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