A couple things, and one of them might be fixed in a longer version. I am not sure what the numbers mean...OPAL GUARD ("56"...) and FAE KING ("33"...). Are those ages or do they mean something else? Also, I did not make the connection between the roman soldier statue and the soldier the Opal Guard drags off being the same thing. I thought I missed something, and there was another character (a soldier) in the room. I am also not clear if Anna is an actual statue like the rest or if she is pretending? The milk spilled, so that much is real, but the Opal Guard isn't acting any differently. Those are my thoughts!
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A couple things, and one of them might be fixed in a longer version. I am not su...
Thank you, these are great notes! I'll revise 👍