【English Translation】Opinions Collection

[elfin nova]

for consistency, should be 'Mission objectives'

might sound more natural as 'you just did.'

italics causes the J to cut off

might sound more natural as 'Don't feel like talking?'

might sound more natural as 'They say I'm s-sick, needing treatment'

might sound more natural as 'A stutter?"

'washed into the gutters by the rain'

'Who, who shoved me--"

'When she comes back to her senses, she feels a cold, damp sensation on her palm.'

could replace almoner with philanthropist to use a more common word, but works fine as is

i think sounds better as 'emerge'

last bit might work better as 'SNAP!'

'Why do I only remember the bad stuff...'

'in the studio, not over there...'

'This confirms Rogers' suspicions' sounds like rogers was suspicious of something. should probably be something along the lines of 'This confirms our/my suspicion of Rogers.'

might sound more natural as 'Suddenly, I was able to move'

'this would be a delightful piece of art.'

[velvet thunder]

Thank you! We're actively working on the issues mentioned above!

To accelerate the release of our human translations, we've expanded our efforts on three fronts:
by bringing on amazing volunteer translators, hiring new full-time staff, and partnering with external localization agencies.

This collaborative push means we can release the story translation updates sooner.
We are now actively refining the text based on your feedback. Thank you for your invaluable support and patience as we continue to improve the experience!

[velvet thunder]

We will fix this UI issue next update!

[thin igloo]

typography error

[elfin nova]

might sound better as 'her face is flushed, and her breathing is extremely rapid.'

might sound better as 'their/they' instead of 'he'

'seemed to not notice' might flow better

'sense of the unknown'

since leigh is talking about herself here, cutting the 'the' might make it sound more natural

might sound better as just 'hell', but it still works

'You all fled?'

these lines express the same thought. maybe a new translation got pasted in the wrong place?

echoing this

wrong pronoun and 'pushes his head' is a bit of an unclear visual of what she's doing (maybe something like 'adjusts her head?'

'you**'ve seen** her smile.'

might sound better as 'it's time for Pandia's special announcement!'

assuming this is a cry of pain, might sound better as 'Ugghh...!'

'No, I already miss you now!'

posting just in case this is meant to say 'who' instead of 'what'

might sound more natural as 'I changed my mind!'

'You're really my sis?'

'So good...'

'The punch doesn't make 24 flinch.'

'you're' might convey the intensity more

'I couldn't move and barely stayed conscious, but I could still hear everything you said.'

this is correct but given the nicheness of 'that smarts', it could be better to replace it with 'that hurts'?

fine if this means a specific eldritch language, but if it's referring to human languages, should be 'Ancient Languages.'

'bathing in a golden sun'

not sure if this should say Rogers. I thought Rogers was the little boy?

this is probably referring to rogers, but since pandia is the one that speaks last it feels a little jarring. could be changed to 'them' maybe?

might sound better as 'He was riddled with holes'

could sound better as 'You're just letting us go?' maybe?

'I caused you lots of trouble.' (I think Jenkins omitting the first words of her sentences is probably intentional, but sadly it's a dialogue quirk that's hard to differentiate from improper translation. works fine for second sentences like 'Let me help. Can't stand being protected all the time.', but it sounds a little wonky with first sentences)

might also just vary on a case by case basis. for this one I feel like 'I might... not join you.' would sound more natural

'That's when I knew...'

biased cause I know the old translation, but I don't think this line really makes sense (poison and darkness have a very loose association). I know the original was a bit awkward to phrase in english, but I think something like 'Only evil grows in darkness.' would be an improvement

i think this should be 'personnel file'?

'To pay my respects to Jenkin.'

'I'll personally interrogate Rogers once we get/have him.'

cut the beginning 'That'

'not woken by your presence.'

chapter 2 done, chapter 3 soon

[zealous folio]

1 "Magnificent Spectacle" cards are added to *their hand.
*their -> your

Traphase

[abstract thicket]

Murphy is referred to with the pronoun "his" several times throughout Chapter 6, instead of "her"

[hoary canyon]

chapter 6 isn't human translated yet

[abstract thicket]

Ah, I see

[hidden palm]

Will be in the next update

[fleet apex]

Inconsistency between 'unblocked' and 'unblockabe' In boss of chapter 4-9, I guess the wrong one have to be the passive

[bitter lake]

It's crucial that the phrase "happily hitting the sandbag" is changed to something that conveys that she's the one getting hit. Something like

• happily getting hit while in the sandbag
• happily inside the sandbag
• happily taking punches inside the sandbag

Etc.

[wooden flint]

I dont remember what stage this was from but it is from chapter one when aigis was having a mental breakdown

Shes speaking in present tense when it should be past tense

Shara, protected little Mac, Protected jenkin. And protected the kind visitors

[keen schooner]

why does the sentence just cut off here

[velvet thunder]

Hi Keeper!
The whole sentence here should be: He protected me... And I will protect everyone. I'll protect Miss Sarah, protect little Mac, protect Jenkin. And protect the kind visitors.
This is why it is in present tense.

Could you help me confirm if this sentence was correctly displayed for you?
It could be a display bug causing the game to only show you the latter half of the sentence, but we cannot recreate the bug locally yet, and I'm hoping by gathering more information I can help our UX people fix this bug ASAP.

[elfin nova]

confused what about the 'ancient greek poet' is 'so-called'. are they not ancient? not greek? not a poet?

might sound a bit better as 'for the/a "Hellhound Cerberus"'

maybe better as 'it'll suit you just fine.'

'The words have hardly left his mouth when Lota and Ramona draw their swords'

'Its survival instincts'

got 'Mister' when my keeper is female

line cuts off

'kernel of truth' would fit better as a pre-existing phrase. could make it 'Reality or fiction, who can say? Rural legends often hold a kernel of truth, don't they?' if you don't want to repeat truth twice

'is this the adolescence?'

gut feeling is this would sound better with 'hasn't'

'maybe now' is a bit confusing, it's hard to imagine what would follow that, i think it'd work better as just 'maybe...'

missing a period at the beginning

missing a T at the beginning

given the use of 'a benediction' in the previous line, this might sound better as 'the Benediction'

'has passed'

[wooden flint]

No the first part wasn't shown to me lol

Thx for the clarification

[elfin nova]

'she'd stayed'. also sounds a bit awkward, but idk how to fix it

'doesn't' would fit the urgency better

'held by lily' here sort of sounds like lily is holding the spike

for some reason, a line between these two doesn't show up in the log?

missing a space after Helot.

missing the S

this might supposed to be 'tracer'? those it could also be traces and i'm just unsure what ramona's talkinga bout

posting just in case Eve got changed into Juliette

but if she didn't... 👀

just in case Silver Link is outdated, since I've only seen it referred to as a 'link' elsewhere

might sound more natural as 'These past few days have drained her mental strength.'

might flow a bit better with a 'But I soon reclaimed myself, and found what I wanted'

this could be correct but if it is the phrasing feels awkward. might be better with a comma after 'see'

[elfin nova]

ok ch 4 time

'nearly drowned out'

'just a surface effort'

a instead of an

D-Marks might sound more natural

i think this should be 'the Keeper'?

is this supposed to say leonia? i'm used to leo so idk if thats the new translation or not

might sound more natural as 'It's far more interesting'

'we are and always will be'

might sound more natural as 'why Silver Technology isn't working...'

not sure what 'ramona starts' here means

lotan's line here doesn't display properly, instead it shows francis's last line

[elfin nova]

the correct line for reference

'buddy' feels like a strangely distant way for doll to refer to ramona

also in the last part of 4-3, and this has also happened elsewhere a bit, sometimes I think the music doesn't trigger? I've had a few scenes where it's just sound effects/no background music

might sound more natural as 'I'm done. IF a problem like this stumped me, how would my brain be any different from Lotan's?'

'written in a near, precise script'

might work better without the emdash

'Technology from the Alaemyces civilization has fascinated me for ages.'

[elfin nova]

'You avoid questioning it/her, roasting'

'I knew you wouldn't understand.'

might sound more natural as 'Lily's tender feet, and they heal instantly.'

might sound more natural as 'recognize her, and even shot her'?

'As long as there's a cause, there's an effect.'

might sound a bit better as 'exist outside of time's dimension.'?

'This monster hunts methodically across all dimensions.'

'I havent' seen'

either 'We will wish' or 'we'll wish'

might sound better as 'ready to rest**. But a familiar figure**'

i think it'd work better as 'makes people forget.' forgotten makes sense but sounds awkward and forget conveys enough of the same meaning to work

doesn't super make sense since we see francis's past in the keeper's dreams, rather than francis's dreams. i think something like 'You saw her in your dreams' or 'You dreamed about her' (if ramona knows about the keeper's dreams) or 'You saw her past' would work better

miiight sound more natural as 'Empathy manifesting that strongly in you...'?

'Harsh or not, Francis's experiments on Lily were cruel...'

probably just a lack of context but 'new lifeforms' feels a bit unclear to me. doesn't seem to contrast with 'clinging to mortal flesh'?

'Easy now' (no comma)

[elfin nova]

'your body wracked with'

i imagine accurate but worcestershire sauce doesn't really bring burning to mind for me...

'meet your gaze' since signs of life is plural

might sound a little more natural either as 'you find the brooch--signifying your status--missing' or you find that the brooch'

not a translation issue, but at this point, with their amnesia, should the keeper know about the fishmen? I don't think they've seen one since waking up at this point

I think the convention for this specific instance (murphy stomping your boot) would be 'Ow--'

might sound more natural as 'Yeah... doesn't hurt now.'

might be correct but at first impression the 'don't die on me' feels like a weird expression to say with confusion/a question mark

this might read a little more smoothly as 'staggering to its feet, its bulging eyes'

might sound more natural with 'Sorry, I can't let you go.'?

[elfin nova]

not sure what this line is supposed to say but it doesn't feel right

'how many lurked'

'the Sona-Nyl sank'

'The circle shrank; you and Ramona backed up against the hull.'

could be intentional but it feels weird for the keeper's scalp to be numbed by the cold in their hand...

missing a period at the end

should be 'ears'

'slip into a frenzy'

[fleet sail]

was just about to post. Absolutely sent me. It may be confused between worcestershire sauce and a bloody mary, which contains that and tobasco, which is spicy

[elfin nova]

'and avoid fights'

might sound smoother as ''signaling the engine room that lay inside'

'to trample mountains, to devour sun and moon'. could also maybe go with 'to trample mountains, to devour the sun and moon'

'it was embedded deeply. His tone mocked, his gaze appraising you with keen interest.'

might sound more natural as 'Seafarers' forms makes blending in tough', but i'm torn on it

might sound more natural as 'The Seafarers are tied to them?'

'letting a Cataclysm raze your civilization'

makes sense but sounds a little strange imo. i think 'freak out' or 'panic' would work better

might sound more natural with 'birthing the new god, is just some insignificant pink-haired brat.'

'tight with miryam' makes sense but. it doesn't feel like it fits to me...

[elfin nova]

'she had nearly choked'

[elfin nova]

adult basics feels a bit unnatural to me. 'Keeping promises is the basics of being an adult.' might work better, but even that sounds strange to me

should and I'd are mismatching tenses, should either be should and I'll/can, or Had and I'd

[elfin nova]

'shields the celestial pull'

follow up line if you decide to change the previous one

should probably be 'Dimensional Hounds'?

'Coal slag was piled into mounds' might sound more natural?

'this place reeks of stale decay.'

'posed more of a threat than you'

should probably be 'dissing Lemuria'?

'the commotion was'

might sound more natural with 'is this all you got?'?

[hidden palm]

Sin Imprint used instead of Sin Mark

[undone cedar]

dishing on is an actual idiom it means to gossip about

It seems you have a preference for like very textbook standard english? Imo some of the lines you posted are fine

Also “commotion were” isnt wrong

Commotion were is actually grammatically correct

Because it expresses a hypothetical situation

But a lot of native speakers tend to use “was” too, so id say both are acceptable

[hoary canyon]

I agree with 95% of insigible's corrections

[velvet thunder]

Thank you keepers! We will compile and carefully consider your various feedback!
I regularly read your posts about story and stuff and translate them into chinese for our writers too.❤️

[velvet thunder]

We can make it "keep gossiping about Lemuria" so it's more clear to everyone!

[velvet thunder]

We will replace it next update!! Sorry, Pollux was buffed too soon we didn't get to human tl in time

[elfin nova]

yeah a lot of this is very subjective, i'm just trying to point out anything that feels odd to me at first glance and trusting Ace will sort out what's worth changing vs not

[velvet thunder]

Thank you so much for your time and effort!!

[elfin nova]

np, happy to help! can't wait to read the rest of arc 1 once 2.4 comes :)

[elfin nova]

anyways, finishing chapter 5...

'the Keeper risked everything'

'Miryam's obsessed with...?'

maybe more natural as 'the Sona-Nyl'?

paganism in general has been mentioned before in relation to the seafarers, and I can't say if this jives with the intent or not, but the way it's used here feels sort of weird to me. anti-paganism feels more like a christian/religious principle, so it feels to weird to me for a 'secular'/not closely tied to the chantry of life university to use 'pagans' as their name for evil cults. not that there wouldn't be ties/it couldn't make sense, but I think it implies a more religious nature to Mythag than I thought they had (i think something like 'barbaric' would work similarly without the same connotations)

'The Keeper'

'The worst that'll happen'

'Neither of you are allowed to die.'

'Their limbs were twisted, their half-faces frozen in the moment of death, their/with congealed blood forming incomprehensible runes, filling the air with death's fervor.'

'Who goes there**!?**' (also miryam's sprite here has her eyes closed/neutral looking. might work better if she's got an alert/open eyes expression?)

first one might be worth changing into 'let that one go' so that the last line works better

hardly anyone brings to mind the reactions of passerby. might be more direct with 'hardly any reaction'

'Tulu...' and 'Tulu...?' would give off different vibes. can't really put it to words but posting just in case 'Tulu...?' would fit the intent better

'Just'

'you can remain'

might sound smoother as 'your name will be etched in eternal annals'?

grammatically 'Our era, our Eternal Realm' and 'its fall is sealed.' don't combine properly. easiest fix i can think of is 'Our era, our Eternal Realm**...** Its fall is sealed.'

i think this would be stronger if 'thing' was replaced with something more specific

[mellow yacht]

Not a translation opinion but I don't know where else to send this but this should be fixed

[elfin nova]

'In that endless instant'

[elfin nova]

you're in the right place 👍

i don't know the feel of the original line so this is either weirdly out of character (doll's dialogue in the original is formal/cold) or absolutely perfect (doll says this in a way that's casual/funny)

might sound a little better as 'luring in'?

'date back to before the flood'

'Now back on topic.'

'funds will come'

'Should we stop them? It'd save us the trouble'

'was choked'

also, since this part is after the keeper recalls everything/is in the present, maybe it should be in present tense? idk

[velvet thunder]

Her name is indeed 伊芙/Eve! Yes, this part of the story does get a bit confusing, because Eve wasn't mentioned before or after this...

I went and asked our writers about this to help clear up the confusion!

According to our lead narrative designer:
Eve is one of the current "Divus" figures in the Church of the Lightbearers. The church's leader is Juliette ("Lady Lantern").
The Church has been conducting human experiments to create Awakener twins, referred to as "Twin Divi" (Divi=plural for Divus) to spread Dissolution.

Their known projects include:

Helot & Lily, Ramona & Tawil, and Pollux & Castor. Pollux & Castor's story was covered in Beyond the Skies: I & II. It happened before Main Story started timeline wise.

The currenct acting Divus is Eve. She has a twin sister (name not disclosed yet).

We haven't gotten around to write more about Eve yet, but we hope we'll be able to do so!

[velvet thunder]

It will be fixed next update! We finally fixed the codes

[fiery igloo]

is there any chance the text in the initial download screen will be re-translated too?

for example

[bitter lake]

The keeper refers to Casiah as "professor" here despite Casiah saying to call her "teacher." I think "professor Casiah" is actually the correct phrasing, you wouldn't normally use "teacher" as a title like this.

So I think Casiah's "teacher Casiahs" should be changed to "professor." I think there's one other one not shown in this screenshot as well.

[hoary canyon]

@vocal haven

Sorry to bother you with the worst question known to man.

Will ch5 be edited for the Ani update? ;-;.

[vocal haven]

uhh not too sure, you'd have to check with Ace as she's handling the main story stuff so I'm not sure if ch5 is going to be edited by anniversary

[mellow yacht]

Shouldn't this be "You see, I am not good at walking."?

Chapter 1-10

"I know foggy nights c-can be scary."

1-6

The yellow text seems to be missing a word too. I don't know the original text as I can't read it but maybe "The girl bows to everyone, ---"?

1-5

[mellow yacht]

the "street corner" forgotten 🥀

[velvet thunder]

We are editing it along with all previous chapters 1-5 according to every feedback here & fixing issues we found during our internal testing

The translation agency we worked with changed some lines lens translated in chapter 5 before and we think certain changes shouldn't have been made so we're also reverting some of those

Normally, we should fully test all translations internally before releasing them; we have been unable to do so due to time constraints and we sincerely apologize!
We are working overtime to test as much as possible before anni.

[hoary canyon]

don't overwork yourself, As always. Love every bit of text you bring to life Ace!

[bitter lake]

This exchange has two errors in it.

In the first image, it should be "I'll die" instead of "you die"

In the second image it should be "just to feed you" instead of "just to eat you"

[bitter lake]

In this image, the designated text box seems attributable to Sorel rather than the Keeper

Unless there's some kind of pun I'm missing here, this should be "insistent bites" (with an -ent) rather than "insistant bites"

[spice cobalt]

https://cdn.discordapp.com/attachments/1400750050208125010/1437667921731129434/image.png?ex=69141417&is=6912c297&hm=61220c23578e65e5df25a3d3e93889f560dd92eab5af991d9e78868562c85a71&

[kind solar]

Air

[bitter lake]

"Murphy stomped his foot" his should be her

Same issue here

[vocal haven]

the latter half of ch6 is still MTL at this point, but the human translation is done and will be updated with the anniversary patch!

[bitter lake]

Oh good to know, hopefully all these minor things will be fixed soon then!

[fiery igloo]

sorry if this was pointed out before, but

"Over-Exaltation" and "Command Card" are not capitalized
"Agony Redemption" should be "Atonement by Pain" I assume
same with "Holy Heart" and "Sacred Heart"

same errors here

[ruby hawk]

My apologies on popping up here, I got a question in regarding to Goliath’s tribe because is it the Perishites or Philistines?

In Goliath’s voice lines, WoD, and maybe another one I forgot: Perishites are used there
But in the archive-characters for Goliath and Glen, Goliath’s psyche deepdive, and Descrate/Miryam’s story thing: Philistines is used there

[vocal haven]

Philistines is correct

Perishite is the Japanese name for the Philistine people

so there are occasional instances of some text referencing the JP voicelines and being translated as Perishite

[ruby hawk]

Oooh, I see! I was confused because there was two different translations and was wondering

so Philistines would be like the default english translation one?

[vocal haven]

yep

[ruby hawk]

That’s good to know, thank you!

[torpid sluice]

Affix description for Ramona: Timeworn seems oddly translated

During gameplay, Castor’s Umbral Flight card shows a placeholder value

[sturdy wadi]

tangled -> bitten?

[mellow yacht]

Will this collab story’s translation be ever fixed in the future? It’s hard to read the MTL

[pale pulsar]

I don't have a screenshot unfortunately but in 1-5 there's a typo where you can tell they meant to put the word "she" but instead put "the"

[warped shale]

Somewhere in Chapter 3 Arc 2, Soulfeast was translated into something else with Banquet in it, and Ghoul King was translated to Lich King

both makes sense but just to be consistent across all chapters, I think those need to be changed

also the formatting here

"nodfirmly"

[torpid sluice]

In Pollux’s Overexalt description, it should be “Atonement by Pain” and “Sacred Heart”

[jovial nexus]

New to the game, but during the first mission the name of the missing investigator is spelled Shawn and Sean in different dialogues.

Shawn is used for the rest of what I’ve read so it’s a minor thing

[wanton pasture]

inconsistent use of the term Gate & Door
should be all Gate?
also iirc the correct name for Extreme Gate is Ultimate Gate?

[storm quarry]

Uh oh

[novel sedge]

its somehow both Akut and Yakutsk now

[elfin nova]

I think the entirety of the timeline entries are mtl rn

[hoary canyon]

When are we translating these bits.

Actual volunteer/intern labour.

[arctic basalt]

6-10. is the last line supposed to be Ramona's?
or maybe it is, but its translated incorrectly

[elfin nova]

Funny story, the update for the loading screen lines is in the update... but because it's in the update, it doesn't update the lines until you're finished downloading it

[hoary canyon]

LMAOOOOO

Add those kB to the pre download package

[velvet thunder]

Yeah, sorry, we'll put those data in the pre-downlad package next time

Thing is we don't replace pre-download package often so it may stay that way for a long time... but if enough people complains i might be able to pursuade light to let me do this

Known issue:

-The traphase description for Horla's Death Psalm is currently broken and the code is accidentally showing GMurphy's Traphase skill
We will fix this in one of the upcoming updates. Sorry!!

[bitter lake]

This says Mrs. Sorel but it should probably be Ms. as this conversation seems to imply she isn't married

[bitter lake]

Yeah there's quite a few of these

[velvet thunder]

We have confirmed that some Awakeners' in-battle skill descriptions fail to properly display numbers.
It seems to be related to an update we made about Tawil's ult;
We will fix this issue during tomorrow's hot fix!

[hoary canyon]

desecrate 1-1. Above above

[young willow]

Has the miryam story not been human translated? I thought it was.

[hoary canyon]

it has... but... big... Eh

it's lacking a lot of oomph it's upposed to have

[young willow]

Idm self correcting all the mistakes myself but I would need my laptop before doing it, thought the translations would've been better

[arctic basalt]

so all of arc 1 is human translated now, right?
and some parts of arc 2

[undone cedar]

They said a voluteer helped translating it

Yeah it’s not quite there yet but I’m thankful someone did it for us

Maybe team should proofread miryam story again though there are still some errors @velvet thunder

[velvet thunder]

Known translation issues that will be fixed today:

-Misplaced skill descriptions: affected Horla's Traphase skill, Corposant's Lightning retribution, and some other monster skills;
-Numbers not showing up correctly in skill descriptions in combat;
-3-star achievement titles being misplaced in Interlude;
-Agrippa's skill description containing broken tags in Korean;
-Other issues mentioned above in the feedback channel

[velvet thunder]

[arctic basalt]

although, what i sent is not all of the errors

and following the story became a bit harder after the update

[velvet thunder]

Known Localization Issue Update & Hotfix
In Main Story Chapter 9-5, a bug may be triggered where a Horla's line expands to over 1,000 characters and contains misplaced text from later story chapters. Then the story stage would end abnormally.
We are urgently working on this fix, which is scheduled to be deployed during tomorrow's hotfix. We will also be addressing several typo issues within the story content at that time.

Future Content and Quality Plans
Please stay tuned for upcoming announcements regarding our plans for human translation of the remaining 2 Main Story Chapters (Astral Reign Chapters 1-2) and other story content.
Additionally, we will conduct an in-house re-proofread of Miryam's Dreamscape to further enhance its quality.

Issues Fixed Today
Please see the announcement post for the localization issues we fixed in today's hotfix.
Mainly, we fixed various display issues affecting skill descriptions of multiple Awakeners and Monsters (e.g., Doresain, Corposant, Horla, and Karen).

We sincerely apologize for the inconvenience caused. Thank you for your patience, Keepers!

[bitter lake]

"grazy" should be "crazy"

[torpid sluice]

Glad it's being fixed! I was a bit confused when Horla kept rambling until the screen faded to black, almost thought it was intentional lol

[storm quarry]

I don't think this should be Ramona's dialogue?

[novel sedge]

not exactly a mistranslation but are you sure this is the correct description for this relic?

the sentence is incomplete (petting what?) and the item doesn't seem to be related to the sea whatsoever

[lusty gulch]

Faded Legacy 6-8, should say during, not dring

[thorn gazelle]

Typo in 6-12
Early plot node has "Leep" where it should be "Keep"

[tranquil quarry]

Typo in 6-14: “itselt” should be “itself”

Also, the wording for how many stacks remain is inconsistent (written in 3 different ways)

[violet tree]

Not sure if it's been reported yet, but Faded Legacy 5-9 has a small typo with "Maiden"

[bitter lake]

"His nouveau riche" should be "her" etc.

The beginning part should be "They will" and then in the last sentence, "Awakener" should be plural (Awakeners)

[fading hare]

Recent update has two of the tentacle stances untranslated for English

[velvet thunder]

Known Issue: Currently, the text descriptions for "Tranquil Sea" and "Raging Tides" Tentacle stances may show up in Chinese in other language settings when Murphy: Fauxborn is in the team.
We are working on this bug and will fix it ASAP during today's hotfix!

[hoary canyon]

Finally enough i ran a team with sanga and Myriam. No gmurphy

It still was... In chinese

[shrewd arrow]

The Dorr i know, should be Doll, in the final Stage of the Arc2 Chapter 1

[gusty valley]

should be aliemus

[dusk meadow]

Learning that aliemus is the mistranslation was funny cause I'm 90% sure that m is gonna stuck lmao

Anw, Inspiration seems to be referring to Insight here.
Semi-related, but is Preserve a left-over from before Retain existed? Cause if it isn't then that's redundant

[fiery igloo]

was this maybe supposed to be "Hide!"

[fiery igloo]

"Aequor" got swapped again

[velvet thunder]

Yes, our writer specifically asked for the special spelling back then;

[steep ether]

spoiler bc this is 4-12 Astral Reign
||Paladise should be Paradise||

[undone cedar]

Missing a period in pickmans frenzy updated translation

[tawdry drift]

not sure if pointed but noticed a typo on the banner. Congratulations for the game, started a few days back and it's pretty awesome, dragged some friends already 🙂

[fiery igloo]

everywhere else in Miryam's kit it seems to be translated as "Obsession"

[thin igloo]

typography error - Astral Reign Chapter 4 Paradise:
Miryam's last line in 4-2 (Rite of Navigation) before entering the exploration section shows <Big: before the text without actually making the text bigger

[undone cedar]

First relic should be after gaining Counter not applying Poison

[eternal meteor]

chapter 8, should be "Power from the Aeon of Rapture", not Rupture

[fathom kraken]

Chapter 1-9 fight has this enemy. Surgeon is misspelled as Surgon

[bitter lake]

Should be "heard"

[oak vault]

'Menace' is misspelled as 'menance' in 6-12 Faded Legacy

[deep osprey]

CHapter 7.4, the last one contain a double 'A a' that needs quick fixing.

[fathom kraken]

In chapter 2 the wax museum is called "House of Rogers Wax Museum" which doesn't really make sense. I think they mean Rogers' Wax Museum? As in 'wax museum belonging to Rogers. House of Rogers implies there are many 'Rogers' living here.

Signs in the artwork also say "Rogers'"

Chapter 2-2. The phrase in English goes "Trade secrets".

[fathom kraken]

Chapter 2-3. "Mother, do I sing well?" Missing the comma and 'do'.
You could use "Mother... I sing well?" To push the idea that it's a small child who is hypnotized and ends up making simple, straightforward sentences, but then the rest of his dialogue doesn't fit.

Chapter 2-4. "It doesn't matter" would be more fitting phrasing. It's dismissive and a bit crude like the person talking doesn't care about the scared person's troubles.

"None of this matters" is almost nihlistic. Like nothing that is going on in the area at all matters. The kind of phrase you get from someone who has given up

Chapter 2-5. The first part should be "This confirms Rogers' involvement".
"This confirms Rogers' suspicions" means that Rogers was the one who was suspicious of someone for something and was proven right, but here it is Rogers who is being investigated.

I think mentions of "Wax Sculpture" here should be "Wax Sculptor"? As in a person who makes sculptures with wax. There was also a character called "Wax Sculpture" and I thought it was implying someone was talking to, or hallucinated that they talked to an actual sculpture. Not the person creating sculptures.

[mellow yacht]

There are still some missing punctuations and misspellings here and there, like it should be "Keep" instead of Leep

6-12

[fathom kraken]

2-5. Missing an 'and' or 'then' at "turned them into wax". Should be "and turned them into wax" or "then turned them into wax".

[mellow yacht]

6-12

Should be "crazy" instead of "grazy"

[fathom kraken]

In the communications with William after chapter 1. It should be 'an' instead of 'the'.

When you open the communicator it should say "New Messages" or something instead of "Latest News" since it's messages between the player and the characters and not a news board or announcements.

[formal cairn]

Ramona's Exalt

In the original chinese text, Ramona's exalt is named 世界演绎法. The voice line when she releases exalt is "以此演绎法，解读世界"

In english, her exalt is named "Mundus Decree." Her voice line is "With this deductive reasoning device, I will interpret the world"

I think this is clearly a mistranslation. First, it should be "deductive reasoning method" and not a device; the word "device" implies a physical object. Second, the chinese voice line clearly connects to the name of her exalt. Since the text is translated inconsistently in english, the connection is lost.

My suggestion for the translation:

Name of the exalt: "Universal Deduction" (or "Deductio Universalis" if you want a latin name)

Voice line: "With this deductive method, I will decipher the world!"

[winged zenith]

I don't know if this was intentional, but the character menu section that is labeled "Psyche Surge" on every other character is labeled "Personality Deepening" on Doresain

[steep ether]

Doresain: “I’m nothing like you all”

[winged zenith]

"Psyche? What is that supposed to be? I simply have what is called a 'personality'"

[fathom kraken]

Chapter 3-5. "Cause 58 Shield" should be "Obtain 58 Shield"

[fathom kraken]

Chapter 3-7. Not sure how Lily is supposed to fit into this sentence. Helot is the one trying to stab someone and retrieve Lily. "held by Lily" means Lily is holding the spike. Is it just to set up the scene so Lily is close to the player? Then maybe "aimed at you as you hold Lily close." Since there's a fight going on.

Sorry, not really sure what is supposed to be happening here so I'm not sure what alternatives to recommend. Doesn't make sense in English at least.

[fathom kraken]

Near the end of Chapter 3, when you can speak with Herbert on the communicator.
"Unless you confess to Mythag" should be closer to "You should surrender the association to Mythag." or something similar to be coherent with what is said when you choose the option.

[oak vault]

in the boss node's pre-battle story of 7-18, 'heardme' should be 'heard me'

[white dew]

In arc 2 chapter 1-5 jenkin is referred to as a male.

[fathom kraken]

Chapter 4-3. Missing "the" for "The Keeper disapproves-"

[tawdry drift]

Small typo

[fathom kraken]

Chapter 4-7 event. Koum is misspelled Koom and "Rake Koom" should be Pull Koum away.
Could also change "-subject twisted its head 180* like an owl" into "-subject snapped its head around like an owl" to imply how quick it was

[oak vault]

in Pandia's communicator event, the term 'phone' should be the more lore accurate 'communicator'

When unlocking Reproduction Frenzy, the item "Reality Verge' is mislabelled as 'Reality Starting Point'

[tawdry drift]

7-12 "Envoy"

[fathom kraken]

Chapter 4 resonance upgrade. "Preservation" should be "retain"

[shrewd arrow]

Is "by this awakener" the correct definition?

[fathom kraken]

Chapter 4-15. "Appear" should be "appears"

Chapter 4-16. Nymphaea has spoken formally like a classy lady thus far and looks the part as well. It was a bit jarring to see slang in her dialogue. Maybe "One moment" instead of "One sec" to keep her more consistant with her earlier dialogue.

[formal cairn]

Faros defense seems to have broken formatting

[fathom kraken]

Doll communication after chapter 5.
"So powerful" should be "Impressive" or "Amazing". Powerful is used to describe something with a lot of force like an explosive or someone physically strong.
"Did you plan this move long ago?!" Should be "Did you plan this from the start?!" or "Did you plan this move beforehand?!" Long ago usually implies multiple weeks or more in advance.

[fathom kraken]

Continued > Should be a when after even. "Even 'when' manipulating artifical bodies-"

"In summary" doesn't make sense because she isn't summarizing her findings, just skipping the less interesting ones. "crucial" implies that the gathered information is necessary in someway, but we don't have a specific goal in investigating Herbert at the moment, just generally gathering information on the opposition. It would be better to use a word like interesting to show that it stuck out to Doll who is very smart. Or use important to signify that it is consequential to Mythag as a whole.
Something like "Of all the intelligence we/I have gathered, the most interesting/important is a symbol."

[eternal meteor]

the point of summarization is to skip the non-crucial information? "in summary" basically means "tldr", after which she efficiently states only the important bits. I believe it makes sense. I like this wording, the symbol is crucial because it tells us the identity of the enemy organization— it's not just 'interesting', the Keeper needs to know that the dangerous Lightbearers are behind these dissolution crisises— it's the lead that brings us to the start of the next investigation.

[eternal meteor]

Do you not think that a politician is powerful? It doesn't have to be physical. It can also refer to someone with great influence over other people/events. Being able to predict and control the encounter with Herbert so that no one dies, and she instead gains intelligence— this is powerful.

[oak vault]

Ditto on this, especially when Doll is shown to be rather straight to the point, and the sentence after the one of you're pointing out concludes that the only important part of the entire process is that what they've found matches with what the Keeper has drawn out.

[fathom kraken]

Chapter 5-3. Should be "The driver's a non-combatant-"

[fathom kraken]

Chapter 5-4. Stereotype isn't usually used when talking about personal opinions. Could instead use "definitely fit my 'idea' of a ghost ship." or "definitely fit 'the' stereotype of a ghost ship."

Chapter 5-4. This elite had a skill that said "summon a "Lantern" infront and behind you, but it only summoned one behind. Think it's supposed to be infront 'or' behind? Could be wrong

[velvet thunder]

Sorry this issue still persists!
We just did another round of QA check on 300k lines of gameplay text translation;
We are scheduled to release a fix including 265 lines of edits unifying terms and fixing code issues like this soon

issues I reacted with 👌 are fixed / will be fixed in the next update;

issues i have not reacted to are all noted and will be addressed asap!

[formal cairn]

the issue is that it doesn't sound like a natural line in english

"So powerful" is clearly a direct calque of the chinese 真强, and ithere's nothing technically wrong with it, but colloquially a native english speaker would use a different phrase

So i think something like "Incredible work, Professor Doll" would be closer to the spirit of the line

[formal cairn]

As military slang this sounds fine

[shrewd arrow]

Please, can the team check out the Chaos symbiosis effect, in the realm descriptions, for Caro?
The info about giving more Furnace for every chaos in the team has been outdated for months, and I already reported it multiple times.

[velvet thunder]

Sorry for the confusion!
We will fix it in the update after the next;

[shrewd arrow]

Thank you

[velvet thunder]

Thank you for your detailed feedback and insightful discussions on this topic! @formal cairn @fathom kraken @eternal meteor
Currently, we have human translated 2669 lines of communicator messages out of a total of 3796, and we'll strive to finish human translating the rest in the upcoming versions

[oak vault]

in the avatar description for "By the Silver Key: Murphy: Fauxborn", 'goddess mother' should be replaced with 'Divine Mother'

[velvet thunder]

Hi keepers,

A recent update accidentally exposed an internal code ("Arg3") within Murphy: Fauxborn's Defense English skill description.

Please note: **This is purely visual. **Different from the previous errors with broken codes, the code has no gameplay function, and you are not missing any information.
It was meant to track in-battle effect counts internally, not to be visible to players on the skill description interface out side of battle.
The text will be cleaned up in our next patch.

Sorry for the confusion!

[formal cairn]

In Astral Reign Ch2, Clementine often refers to the Keeper as "good child." I assume this is from the CN "乖孩子"

I know Astral Reign Ch2 is not human translated yet, but when it is, I suggest translating it to "good boy" or "good girl" depending on the Keeper's gender

Not only is this an accurate translation that flows better in english, a lot of keepers will appreciate being called that by clementine

[steep ether]

I like the problematic shaggai age gap so keep it that way

[deep osprey]

Did someone make the text specifically spaced out in Corpo's description?

[undone cedar]

Looks like a bug

Bug, or Temporary is somehow very important

[shrewd arrow]

It isn't a very rare occurrence, sadly

[undone cedar]

My guess is they set some text boxes to justified alignment

When it should always be left aligned

When you do justified, weird spaces happen. Maybe justifed works in Chinese but certainly not in English

[vocal mica]

Dreamscape Desecrate: Offering to the King
Very minor typo but in one instance, Miryam's father is named "Inos" instead of "Enos"

[short turtle]

In this fight (current D-Zone Wave 2 boss), the warning states that unblocked tentacle dmg will inflict poison, but the status effect states the opposite, that blocked tentacle dmg will inflict poison. My understanding is the status effect description is correct, so the warning is wrong.

[winged zenith]

...The notification for someone who recently followed you is a little bit terrifying, lmao, it even talks in first person (Maybe it could be something like "Followed just now"?)

[hoary canyon]

Get stalked

[indigo orchid]

friend confirmed that status was correct for him, warning was wrong

[white dew]

I think it's a lore thing since we're all gazes of <>><>>>>>

The description says rose script 3000, but the gift bag gives you 5000 rose script.

[eternal meteor]

'Keeper Kevel' instead of keeper level, sixth line

[winged zenith]

So should I expect to be deleted from existence soon? lmao

[eternal canyon]

your going should be "you're"

[fathom kraken]

Chapter 5-8. I clicked past before getting a screenshot, but it was the very last dialogue. It says you see Goliath "glance at Murphy's hiding crate". It should be "hiding place" or just "Murphy's crate"

[fathom kraken]

Chapter 5-13. Missing the for "The Keeper"

[bitter lake]

"Pony" is misspelled several times in Aurita's substory, including "Poni" and "ponny" (as seen here)

[bitter lake]

Inconsistent translation for "Shariki Market" and "Sharich Market"

[shrewd arrow]

Shiled

[tawdry drift]

Ryker's quest 1
I think this Narrator part is incorrect since it's suddenly a first person mention, as in "the narrator's face". Unless I'm missing something (still doing the quest)

[velvet thunder]

Thank you for your feedback! After double checking, the Keeper does say "我的刻板印象" / my stereotype word for word in the original CN text; so while a little uncommon, we might be keeping it intact for now to respect the original text.
If many find it jarring, we'll adjust it accordingly!

[velvet thunder]

Sorry, the sentence structure was unclear. We'll make itIncrease the Base DMG dealt by an Awakener by X% immediately before they unleash Exalt in the next update!

[dusk meadow]

The Loop effect on GRamona's Strike says that it does 5 DMG when it really causes 5 instances of the listed damage. "Deals damage 5 times" would be more accurate

[shrewd arrow]

Is Wraith a fitting description for this move?

It normally indicate a type of ghost, so it implies something dead, but i don't think there is appropriate?

[steep ether]

I think this mob name should be Garmr?

[bold vigil]

Either remove "she" or change "gain" to "gains"

[bitter lake]

Tohuwabohu (or however you spell it) is spelled differently here

Another, totally different misspelling here

This line is duplicated

Is Dopitoin supposed to be a real thing or is it some made up drug? It's not very clear from the context

[shrewd arrow]

Arc2 3-2 couse -> course

Arc 2 Chap 2, insect UI untranslated (click confirm without selecting)

[short turtle]

Arc 2 chapter rules description. Extra "1" in the word "by".
Seen on arc 2 chapter 1 menu if location is required

Lex Genis from Arc 1 chapter 8 buff upgrade tree, should use the orison description in-game, which states:

"When played, gain 3 additional Base Copies with "Retain" and "Exhaust", effective only once per battle."

[undone cedar]

Arc 2 chapters 1-2 is still machine translated

I recommend skipping those and reading arc 2 chapters 3-4 first, they said chapters 1-2 will be human translated in the following upcoming patches

[bitter lake]

Oh so they translated 3 and 4 before 1 and 2? Will I lose some context if I skip 1 and 2 story

[undone cedar]

You may want to still skim over chapter 1 a bit. 2 is more standalone

The translator was only hired right before chapter 3 so they started from 3 it seems

[bitter lake]

@velvet thunder should I coninue to report issues from chapters 1 and 2 or are the issues considered known because it's still MTL

[short turtle]

Hameln exalt description has a value that is not computing

[velvet thunder]

Sorry for the confusion!
We tried to fix another bug that caused damage instances/damage amount display error in Murphy: Fauxborn's description;
It seems that bug fix is introducing a new display error

We will fix this in an upcoming update next week.

The damage number here is supposed to be the same as the damage number at the start of his Exalt description.

[formal cairn]

In Faded Legacy Chapter 5 and 6, the boat is called "Sona-Nyl" but in Astral Reign Chapter 3, it is called "Sonaniel"

[strange relic]

Arc2 Chapter 3-7, Typo

Soon after, the Seafarers collapses
Seafarers -> Seafarer

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Arc2 Chapter 3-8, Typo:

shines -> shine

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Arc2 Chapter 3-8, Typo:

Is that -> Are those

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Arc2 Chapter 3-8, Typo:

Seafarers -> Seafarers'
or
Seafarers -> Seafarer

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Arc2 Chapter 3-9, Typo:

now uses -> now use

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Arc2 Chapter 3-10, Typo:

flows -> flow

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Arc2 Chapter 3-10, Typo:

streams of blood flows -> streams of blood flow
Line appears twice, incorrect twice

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Arc2 Chapter 3-10, Typo:

nodfirmly -> nod firmly
converged -> converges
blossomed -> blossoms

Gotta pick a tense and stick with it

.

[strange relic]

Arc2 Chapter 3-10, Typo?

I had no choice -> I have no choice

Or is he saying he had no choice but to use a ton of spirit energy previously?

And chapter 3 done. Impressive writing!! Chaps 2 and 3 were both amazing, mtl or not

[formal cairn]

In Astral Reign Chapter 4, the card effect translations for "Remembrance" cards are inconsistent. The title of the card should be capitalized and "Consumes" should be "Exhaust"

"Seed of Abundance"

"Choose a non-derived Command Card in your hand. Shuffle 3 base copies of that card into the Draw Pile. The copies have Exhaust and their Arithmetica Cost is reduced by 1."

[formal cairn]

This is confusing, i think it is supposed to read

"After losing HP due to receiving Active DMG, gain Shield equal to 15% of the lost HP and Temporary Alert equal to 5% of the lost HP."

[formal cairn]

In the end of Astral Reign Ch4-5 there are some formatting errors

[short turtle]

Astral reign 2-11, "The Sage" fight has a variable that is not parsing

Erica, E1.
I assume this is supposed to state "Exhaust" rather than "Consumes" for the cards being added. I dont have the Enlightenment, so I cant test.

Im not sure if this is a mistranslation, or just weird Phrasing, but I was informed that the R WoDs Astral Reign effect is not 100% chance for the character specific relic to appear, but rather *+*100% chance, as in, it doubles the base chance, or 100% of 5% (if 5% was the base value). Adding this as a suggestion to be changed for clarity if Im not misunderstanding.

[strange relic]

Arc2 4-2 Description:

within.In -> within. In

[strange relic]

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Arc2 4-4 Programming Error:

Previous line not updated. What should be displayed:

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Arc2 4-5 Typo:

him for him -> him for his

[strange relic]

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Arc2 4-5 Line Error:

Third paragraph (beginning with "Twisted limbs") was repeated twice, with different translation.

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Arc2 4-5 Typo:

Whatever this is

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Arc2 4-5 Typo:

engine -> Engine

[strange relic]

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Arc2 4-8 Typo:

grace upon your people -> grace upon Your people

[strange relic]

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Arc2 4-9 Typo?

rebel -> rebellion
or if referring to conducting his rebel subordinates
rebel -> rebels

Not sure on this one, perhaps rebel is fine.

[thin igloo]

rebel -> rebellion i think

[strange relic]

Arc2 4-9 Line Break Error?

This entire screenshot is displayed at once on screen. Seems to be a line break error - should've been split into 2 separate

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Arc2 4-9 Typo

Extremely picky, but might as well add it.
cling to the oars -> cling to the oar

They don't seem to be clinging to more than one

[strange relic]

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Arc2 4-10 Wording

Can something like 'taunt' spill out with a smile alongside pain? Does taunt even have an emotion definition, beyond being a type of remark?
taunt -> mockery or derision
Perhaps would be better. But taunt doesn't seem terrible?

[formal cairn]

Arc2 4-11

Should be "scalpel" not "scapel"

[formal cairn]

The SSR Wheel "Core Meltdown" still has a machine translated description

The description of the SSR wheel "Fouetté" says it "deals DMG as Poison." This is unclear and inconsistent with every other description of Poison application in the game. If it deals DMG and also applies the Poison status, it should say that. If it only inflicts Poison, it should not refer to "DMG"

Also, the most recent translations use the formatting "11% of the wielder's ATK" instead of "wielder's ATK x11%"

Some other terms that are not unified across wheels:

"HP Recovery" / "Healing effect"

"Shield Generation" / "Shield gained"

"Aliemus Generation" / "Aliemus gained" / "Aliemus generated"

"ATK" / "Attack"; "DEF"/"Defense", "CON"/"Constitution"

Formatting of "Exalt" is also not consistent. Sometimes there are quotation marks, sometimes there are no quotation marks

The SSR wheel "Song of the Bound" refers to the Ultra Round as "Ultra turn"

The SSR wheel "Eternal Requiem" says "Destroy" instead of "Exhaust"

[undone cedar]

It is Destroy

Like this one somehow just has a unique Destroy mechanism

[formal cairn]

[undone cedar]

Because i checked CN

[formal cairn]

then it should have a tooltip to say what destroy does lol

[undone cedar]

Well some CN players are also campaigning for a description improvement and sending it to devs. This games descriptions can use some unifying, I saw it in the chinese channel

True

I was confused too and i went around asking wtf destroy is

Idk why it’s called destroy not exhaust to this day i dont get it but it is what it is

Like it says 毁灭 not 消耗

Im betting they wrote it wrong in cn too

I tried using it and it works like if you use it it’s forever gone

Which begs the question: how is it different from exhaust

[short turtle]

maybe because it isnt a derived card, so it will stick around after the fight?

like the sticky wax card?

(i have no idea if this is the case)

like, its only usable once, but exhaust cards would be usable multiple times over the course of an expedition if they are added to your exploration hand

[formal cairn]

The SSR wheel Heart of Silver says "a Emergency Gnosis." It should be "an Emergency Gnosis"

[strange relic]

Arc2 4-11 Typo:

scapel -> scalpel

Note: typo appears twice at least

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Arc2 4-11 Line Spacing Issue:

Either these are meant to be two separate messages, or that space shouldn't be there.

Displaying both at once only results in the top line pushed out like so:

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Arc2 4-11 Typo:

Coding error

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[strange relic]

Arc2 4-13 Inconsistency:

Both 'His' and 'its' were used for the fetus. Maybe unify to His?

[strange relic]

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Arc2 4-13 Typo:

birthes -> births

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Arc2 4-13 Tense:

Sudden shift to past tense? For both this line and the one after, not in screenshot

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Arc2 4-14 Typo/Formatting:

The " at end appears as '. Could be a typo, or a formatting issue cutting off the rest of the "

[strange relic]

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Arc2 4-15 Typo

Sacrifice and Rebirth -> sacrifice and rebirth
Capitalization doesn't seem appropriate, considering not even the Divine Fetus's birth was capitalized

[strange relic]

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Arc2 4-15 Line Break

No screenshot, since no rewind. First line of dialogue after reaching final boss fight is actually 2 lines with missing line break. Same issue as here: #1350058928020656178 message

[strange relic]

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Arc2 4-15 Typo?

Confirming, is it really a 20 centimeter diameter? That's so tiny, the statue itself is bigger than that...

And finally at the end. Wonderful main story, huge round of applause for the author and translator teams!

[short turtle]

Corposant's posse refers to her "Pilot" card as "Navigation"

[atomic plinth]

typo on keyflare

[atomic plinth]

fifth - murphy fauxborn event

[velvet thunder]

Thank you for your feedback, keepers!
We will fix the latest batch of issues mentioned above in an upcoming update this week

[strange relic]

Chapter 7 Event Typo:

You waves -> You wave

[broken bay]

in curriculum giftbox description it says "spring in acushnet" instead of "spring in yakutsk"

[storm quarry]

mmm yes keyfalre

[atomic plinth]

no typo - but clown/jester should be consistent. I personally like jester more

[short turtle]

Aurita E3
States it will add a Gland Division to your hand with "Exhaust" and "Void".
"Void" should state "Fleeting" instead

[shrewd arrow]

@velvet thunder Check in dm, when possible.

[atomic heath]

Trial misspelled as Trail

[dusk meadow]

Nymphaea's 2nd chat: Should be "unexpectedly" rather than "unexpected"

[deep osprey]

Chapter 9.1
There is the / mark in the middle of the sentence.

[fleet glacier]

"separation of wisdom" and "spirit separation" in doll boss are supposed to be the same

Lex Genis from chapter 8 is also written quite incorrectly, using "consume" instead of "exhaust" and "of" instead of "with"

[strange lotus]

typo here, expirience

[winged zenith]

(Phrasing Recommendation): Since the frenzies are all translated now, the embarrassing task of making translation recommendations about them might as well fall to me... There are some points where I think that the phrasing is a bit unclear or unnatural in English.
For example (starting with Goliath's infamous Reproduction Frenzy), given what Goliath is suggesting here, I think "settle the score" (which is how you normally express getting even with someone, I don't think I've heard "settle accounts" before) and "You'll just have to bear it" (rather than "make do", which gives the impression of the Keeper wanting to do what he's suggesting right now, but just preferring someone else, instead of them not wanting to do it at all but being made to) would give a more accurate impression of the intent.

[shrewd arrow]

It is... really badly worded

[shrewd arrow]

In Jenkins' RF, one of the text boxes still has the wrong pronoun.

[strange relic]

Storm wall -> Storm Wall

[shrewd arrow]

it's supposed to be more like "What do you mean, brother and sister?"

[bitter lake]

Should be "her"

[fiery igloo]

why's card in all caps xD

[fiery igloo]

ok on a more serious note, this probably should be rewritten

"At the start of the next battle, shuffle one copy of each of the wielder's original Command Cards into the Draw Pile (excluding "Basic Attack" and "Basic Defense")"

[shrewd arrow]

Why the next battle in general?
In reality it is at the start of all battles, they don't stay in the deck

[fiery igloo]

Forgot about that mb

Then just "At the start of battle..."

[dark nexus]

All in Miryam Abyssal Prayer.
First image: At the end, it should just be a question mark instead of "?."
Second image: it should be "resembling an illusion" instead of "resembles an illusion."
Third image: There are two errors. "...feels that she has somewhat joined," instead of "...feels that she has somewhat join." The other is, instead of "She looked towards" it should be "She looks towards".

[thin igloo]

"CARD"

[fiery igloo]

More mistranslated Caro and Aequor + capitalization issues

[fiery igloo]

also this

[short turtle]

Unless im misunderstanding the suggestion, if im not mistaken, and its not something i can guarentee is correct, but there can be a distinction between the two here. Based on the wording, Easter Moment can give Aliemus up until a character can exalt, but wont give extra toward OE, while Proto Battery can give aliemus towards OE as well.

[fiery igloo]

I meant the fact that the condition is translated as both "at round start" and "at turn start"

sorry should've clarified xD

[formal cairn]

jenkin misgendered in aigis affinity story 😔

[novel sedge]

"energy serpents"

[hoary canyon]

We learn that the ||Hydra blood|| in lemuria was actually an energy drink brand

Drink the juice, grow the serpents

Is it very bold to make a guess that all lemurians had really high spirit power. That's why they never left lemuria, cause they immediately got ||dissolluted when they did||

[eternal meteor]

I thought they didn't left because of their fervent belief in the divine realm

it's been a while since I read desecrate, but if I recall, miryam was selected to become a priestesses due to her special high spirit power, so I can only assume the majority of lemurian citizens that cannot become priests are just normal people
-# sorry for offtopic 🙏

[hoary canyon]

Yeah I thought this was lore chat.

[strange relic]

Typo, Clem chat
dissappointed -> disappointed

[eternal canyon]

Thais "Trail" should be "Trial"

[atomic plinth]

after

[formal cairn]

Astral Reign 1-1 new english translation

missing "to"

[dusk meadow]

Desecrate part 2
"Boundless" is missing the L ("boundess")

Also in that same section, this bit is missing a 'the', it should be "in the next second"

[dusk meadow]

Okay finished Desecrate part 3 and if y'all don't mind I've caught a slew of typos. Sorted by image order:

1. Should be "whenever it meets someone's gaze". Also I'm not sure if "it looms out an invitation" is intentional wording.
2. "Occupy" should be "occupied"
3. Should be "all her efforts" rather than "her all efforts"
4. "Resembles" should be "resembling"
5. "Joined" instead of "join"
6. "Seems to be" would be better replaced by "seemingly"
7. "But" should be replaced with "what" to make "that's what we hope for" (alternatively: used in "but that's what we hope for")
8. That last sentence is a bit awkward. "Guess it proves you're extraordinary!" would be grammatically correct
9. "On" should be "to" ("what happened to you")
10. "Has" should be "was" ("was beyond her recognition")

Also give me feedback on my feedback - is this the type y'all are looking for? Is this too much at once? Did I crop the sentences too short?

[atomic plinth]

shield

[strange relic]

any Awakener uses Exalt -> any Lemurian Awakener uses Exalt
Or the wording is valid and it's a coding issue

Source: https://www.reddit.com/r/Morimens/comments/1pwr57c/am_i_crazy_or_does_this_effect_not_trigger_on_any/

[formal cairn]

"Keeper Kevel"

[fleet glacier]

There is a very bizzare inconsistence where "To ensure Continuity", a boss in ch7 stage 4 has a warning that refers to it as her, meanwhile the story after clicking on enemy refers to it as he

[opaque pivot]

8-3, the the

[twin portal]

When talking about the additional realms (Arcane/Occult and Aether/Ether), I believe "Arcane" used to sound better than "Occult". The new term ("Occult") feels too trivial.

[outer ivy]

I assume this should say “sick” instead of “suck”. Or maybe “stuck” would also make sense

And here in 3-piece set bonus it says “aliemus recharge” where everywhere else it is “aliemus regen”

[fiery igloo]

lmfao

[limber stream]

• the code for Male, Female keeper
• Hannah Peaslee, should be Hannah Peasley
• Misage should be Mythag
• Oretta is Aurita?

[hoary canyon]

Our journalist can't even spell her own name!

[fleet glacier]

Drunk for new year

[maiden gyro]

spotted this one, should be "you can buy someone a gift..."

[ancient robin]

Arc1 Ch5-1 Think that it should be ‘feels’ and not ‘feel’. And the stinging dryness line doesnt make sense either, my suggestion would be to add a “makes them” to result in “your eyes makes them feel…”.

Should be physical dimension I’m pretty sure

[digital maple]

Mouchette finale - "In Silver and Blood" translation nitpicks/typos

1. An invisible gateway cannot pulse with light - an invisible object cannot be seen. This might be better as transparent or translucent.
2. Salvador refers to Mouchette as Very special This probably should be Very strange? Very special is often an unkind euphemism.
3. scrub the filth away is unnatural - instead, scrub the filth off her
4. Shards of her humanity doesn't make any sense here. Maybe pieces of her flesh? It sounds like it's bits of gore hitting the portal? Another use of invisible gate here, also incorrect - see above.
5. Friend here is a bit of a strong word for the Keeper's association with , although it might be true to the original writing? Ally or new friend maybe.
6. The comma here is a typo. a solitary crimson tear. Adjectives only have commas between them when they are describing the same attribute of something.
7. A cruel thought is an evil one. Maybe horrible or horrific?
8. but none of them is her is a typo. This should be but none of them are her, because They is a plural subject in this sentence.
9. joked about death every week seems like a mistranslation. The Keeper has only known Mouchette a short time. joked about death all the time would be more natural.
10. Another use of invisible gateway.

11. Bugged string here

12. Typo here, missing space between of and Hazelnut

[fleet glacier]

In Astral reign im assuming this is supposed to mean "Each time an Awakener exalts" or "Each time an Awakener is roused"

Jade Imprint Relic says "Base Cpopy"

im not sure if these spaced out words are even meant to be there at all but its inconsistent

[ancient robin]

arc1ch6 boss fight one of murphys buff card things has itselt instead of itself, it is card 2 where it is trying to say the boss' tentacles attack itself

[fleet glacier]

code in description

[shrewd arrow]

This is a pretty misleading description.
This make you think that the effect of Fragile is reduced and that she or you get a shield from it, but is totally wrong.
In reality is just that the Fragile that she apply reduce your shield generation by 50% in place of 25%

@velvet thunder

plus, one passive calls the stack Fervor, but they are then called Frenzy

P.s.s the Intention Mortal Blast, is translated as Human Explosion

[digital maple]

Human explosion is what she does in the story

[night merlin]

Thank you, your feedback is exactly what we need.😊

[shrewd arrow]

Are you a new member of the team?

[night merlin]

Yes☺️

[shrewd arrow]

Nice, if you need assistance with projects or other things, always free to ask

[velvet thunder]

Thank you for your detailed feedback!

We will do our best to improve the English version's writing and correct the typos/stilted expressions.

On the other hand, when the original Chinese story decides to use certain expressions, we are not allowed to rewrite things in English too much.
But we will make sure to forward your suggestions!

most of these can be fixed on our end and were typos/mistranslations!

[digital maple]

Hello! No worries at all, I just wanted to report the two bugs and decided to be thorough on anything else I spotted. I used to do a little localization QA at a job so I know it can be tough.

Thanks!

[velvet thunder]

we will make it 'shapeless gate' instead

After talking to the writer, they confirmed they meant to say it's shapeless; while 无形 often means invisible, shapeless makes more sense here

[hoary canyon]

YEAH BBY NEW LOCALISER TO PRAISE

[wise pollen]

I'm doing Miryam's story "Descrate" right now and I heard it was english translated a while ago. But there are a TON of errors and weird sentences in it. I can post pictures if need be. But there are a lot of issues in multiple chapters.

[fiery igloo]

don't know if this was mentioned, but the "Tornado" in Mouchette's Exalt buff is in lowercase

[eternal canyon]

relic description

[vocal mica]

A little error I noticed in the Communicator message you get after finishing act 2, chapter 2. Awakeners is misspelled with an a instead of an e

[shrewd arrow]

Can this specify that the crit rate is Team wide?

[eternal canyon]

the text under her name is cut off, and it should be "my physical examination" not "your"

[strange relic]

Alright, take a look, then you can throw it in the trash -> Alright, just a look, then it's getting thrown in the trash

Or something along those lines. Either way, Pandia ain't tossing anything in the trash.

[short turtle]

Miryam's "The Chosen One" card: obtains -> obtain
Miryam's Enlighten 2, "The Ultimate Descent": grants -> gains (or something similar, grants seems like it grants prepare 1 to something else, rather than "The Chosen One" gaining prepare 1
Daffodil's Exalt: "this DMG enjoys 3 x STR" -> "this DMG enjoys 3x STR"

[short turtle]

Text for each unlock here is a bit off. If comparing permanent archives for previous chapters, the text phrasing used is a bit inconsistent as well, swapping between "Hard Mode" and "hard difficulty", or "Stage 3-6" vs. "3-6", but chapter 4 is incorrectly, stating "difficulty 4-6".

[short turtle]

Suggestion for clarity:
Rewrite the first portion of this relic description to be similar, or along the lines of "At the end of each turn, grant 20 Aliemus to the owner of the first Command Card played that turn."

Im not sure what exactly is off about the description as it stands, but it feels like it needs an extra comma or two and a bit of a sentence structure swap to keep the phrasing used.

"At the end of each turn, gain 20 Aliemus for the Awakener corresponding to the first Command Card played that turn." Could work as well, but feels a bit more cluttered.

[eternal canyon]

missing quotation mark after the interlude's name, bugged out reality verge text. this is the case for all interludes' pop up message which needs reality verges to unlock

[vocal mica]

the unlock confirmation for the song "Crimson Snare" from Blood and Sand of No Return also has a formatting issue

[woeful glade]

Could "When playing the first command card, the corresponding awakener gains 20 Aliemus at the end of that turn" work? It feels better for me

[digital maple]

This name is inconsistent.

As a note: Rye is a real place, near Hastings. "Rainy Town" isn't a name that sounds like an English village or town. Something like "Rainton" or "Rayneton" would be a good compromise. There is a village called "Egerton" 16 miles north of Rye, which means something like "Eger's Town"

Rennyton? That would also work 🙂

[digital maple]

Missing full stop here

RIP Keeper, LMAO. This should be "Its head is mercilessly severed"

Incorrect grammar. "You irritably brush aside" is correct.

"Is it in the wasteland to the north of Rainy Town?"

[digital maple]

Missing full stop here

Missing full stop here

[digital maple]

"You did me a great help this time".

"I am not a foolish merchant..."

[shrewd arrow]

The Madness from this attack is Permanent, not Temporary

This enemy put the Parasite state, but the last part of the description is strange, i should be:
For every stack, increase the HP by 10%

same as for this enemy

[strange relic]

Yup, seems like all Reality Verge unlock dialogue boxes have this bugged text, be they music or interlude

[bitter lake]

"Aspiring" should be "inspiring"

[deep osprey]

Missing spacing in the word, from the second last chapter 2.3

[velvet thunder]

Hi! The text we have on file does state it as "Temporary Madness"/临时疯狂;
I have forwarded this issue to the combat devs as a bug. Thank you for letting us know!

[left haven]

idk if this is the correct place for this but this is the english text for unlocking songs in the archive

[left haven]

and axioms pop up window are just not translated (atleast doll's and lotan's)

[velvet thunder]

We will address this issue in an upcoming hotfix ASAP!

[cosmic shuttle]

Same with Aigis, and the Assignments "Help" button is also untranslated now

[lapis shore]

Assignment "Help" is untranslated and in Lightless Realm Fissure roman numerals past "VI" have a different font. There are also a number of grammatical errors in card descriptions, mostly with lack of Present Simple postfix ("Erica obtains"; "Erica deal") (also Erica rouse card misspells her name) or Aurita's exalt putting her name in quotation marks for some reason. Ramona's exalt underlines "insight" even though I think it is never underlined in the game otherwise? Similar issues can probably be found in Traphase card descriptions

Sometimes a narration line is labeled as character's line, like in Faded Legacy 6-10

[lapis shore]

sorel special ops, part 5 Egg
"in the dead of the night"
referring to ramona as "guy"

that's all for now

[lapis shore]

in album and sometimes in text (mostly history tab) the text gets cut on the left

but yeah it happens a lot in the albums

[lapis shore]

9-2 for example

[lapis shore]

one of the mobile notifications is untranslated

[lapis shore]

faded legacy 9-8
doesn't

[ashen plinth]

Not sure if this is the correct place but in Xu's psyche deepdive (especially today's newly released one) there are text coding errors

I think there was also another one from part 3 or 4 that had the same issue with <shaking> or something similar

[vocal mica]

the over exalt description of Nymphaea during a fight has issues displaying the second and third numbers

[vocal mica]

The posse of Xu states that you draw 1 card as an effect, but instead you gain +1 Arithmetica

[lapis shore]

Aurita's psyche deepdive
no space after the quotation mark

[languid creek]

this is quite a minor thing in a vacuum, but as a nymphaea addict of late - her 3-cost card being called "Knell of Death", i personally have never heard anyone say it like this nor have read it in any books. "Death Knell" is by far the more popular way to say this (which also is also more fun and snappy to read in my opinion). it might be nice to consider this change if people ever have free time for such of course

[ashen plinth]

Tulu's posse: star's protection vs stellar protection (which I assume are supposed to be the same thing- I vote Stellar Protection, but either way would be less confusing to standardize this)

[fleet glacier]

Faros message says to suspend "him"

unsure if this is actually a mistype

[shrewd arrow]

Leigh is named Lea in the Phase change intention

[ashen plinth]

(Also “gains a shield would be better)

[lapis shore]

"Skulker" or "Scuttler"?

[sudden flint]

Mouchette's E2 is a bit oddly translated - it's understood that the "last played" Strike is another card. The card itself is just wrong - it does the opposite of what it says. For reference on how another card game phrases similar functionality: https://slay-the-spire.fandom.com/wiki/Follow-Up

Suggestions:
E2 description:
last played other "Strike" -> last "Strike" played

Mortal Blast:
a "Strike other than the last played "Strike" -> the last "Strike" played

[shrewd arrow]

Honestly, Mortal Blast is just really badly worded, just say: "other than Mortal Blast"

[sudden flint]

iirc it can dupe other mortal blasts if you have dupes, but itself could work yea

[shrewd arrow]

probably other than Mortal Blast is better because it can't copy other Mortal Blasts too

[sudden flint]

hm maybe I'm misremembering

[woeful glade]

Dropping 'a' in 'grants Helot a 25℅ temporary crit. rate" and capitailising C and R in crit rate

Also, Jenkin frenzy gender correction ('under her breath')

[shrewd arrow]

It's in ''Before Darkness falls'', the Corsposant deepdive, her name is wrong.

[novel sedge]

the "Rules" hint in [Assignment] is displayed in Chinese. (the text box when selecting it is displayed in English, so that one is fine)

[lapis shore]

in traphase

[lapis shore]

also in traphase, needs a space after Prepare

misplaces spaces, traphase

[shrewd arrow]

This is from the 5-10 Seafarer guard and his Elite variant, the status should be Parasite, because he inflict Parasite stacks.
Is this intentional or an error?

From Ghelot E1 description, the defense Triggers Bleed, not inflict it

[lapis shore]

the name of jenkin's enlighten 2 doesn't fit inside the text box

[velvet thunder]

double checking with combat designers!

The actual effect is indeed similar to "Parasite", he said they wanted to call it Abyss Erosion because it's a boss ability and that would sound cooler

[shrewd arrow]

Ok, but you have to change the intention description when it says that it inflicts parasite stacks on you, same for the last intention of the spawn

P.s this should be present in the seafarer Elite variant too

[velvet thunder]

Do you mind clarifying a bit more?
So when the enemy is about to perform "Abyss Erosion", the intention on him says he's about to inflict Parasite stacks?
(sorry!! translators can only see plain text)

We'll record this issue and play test 5-10

[shrewd arrow]

Some say parasite, some say parasitized state, the status is called erosion

[velvet thunder]

Thank you so much! We will fix and unify the terms asap

[velvet thunder]

We have forwarded this suggestion to the combat designers; when they get around to improving the CN text, we'll change EN accordingly

[shrewd arrow]

considering the team is now active again, could you give a look, or forward this too? https://discord.com/channels/1131791637933199470/1463177915419332844

[woeful glade]

To my understanding, this is 'take 129 dmg'. Deal 129 dmg is misleading

[shrewd arrow]

same for this https://discord.com/channels/1131791637933199470/1457848108628054067

[ashen plinth]

Took the screenshot a step too late but in the new game mode, theres an option to “awaken” 2 random awakeners when the usual term is “rouse”

[lapis shore]

"which"

[eternal sleet]

Nothing huge, just lack of spacing.

[woeful glade]

New event, formatting issue. Apologies if it's the wrong place

[lapis shore]

lowercase Counter

[eternal sleet]

It's written a bit weirdly, I think it would be better to write it exactly as the other Strength tab, "For each Strength point reduced, [...]".

[novel sedge]

"Hidden" achievements are misworded as "hide"

[fiery igloo]

are they supposed to have the same name?

[sudden flint]

6-8: no -> not

[eternal sleet]

Chapter 1-9, I believe it should be "we will be fine" or "we'll be fine"?

[eternal sleet]

At an event tile on chapter 1-9, "Directly" is missing the y! (although I'm not sure if it's on purpose so if it is, I apologise... :[)

[patent cave]

Ramona's "First Doctrine" card might be better translated as "First Philosophy" assuming the title for the card is referencing Aristotle's Metaphysics and Descartes' Meditations on First Philosophy

[eternal sleet]

Jenkin's introduction at the Awakener Trial calls her a he :')

[eternal sleet]

(Also, about the Awakener Trial, there is a severe lack of consistency in the descriptions of the characters. I considered taking screenshots but it would be too many 😞)

[ashen plinth]

Corposant deepdive ch1 “your”

Ch2, different ship name from Nautilus?

Oop never mind this has been reported last year

[ashen plinth]

Double checking if Mexico is canon in morimens?! I have no clue what this is originally supposed to be if not

Ch3

Also a couple of misgendered pronouns throughout ch2-4

Final message from Corpo after you finish the deepdive is repeated

[bitter lake]

In Salvador's story, I think there's supposed to be an adjective after "greatly" here

Here, I think Salvador is supposed to say "I must help you" rather than "you must help me"

[gusty valley]

[bitter lake]

I think this should be "accept the light" instead of "accepting the light"

[eternal sleet]

(This is Ogier's Posse); I believe that instead of gun, it should be "weapon" or even "spear". He doesn't use a gun.

[vocal haven]

ah yeah that's supposed to be spear

spear and gun are the same word in chinese

[eternal sleet]

Also, I think this guy's name is supposed to be Wax Sculpturer (missing an R)? Or maybe I just lack further context for now..

[eternal sleet]

Clementine's first communication episode, the "Keeper" and "Miss" orders are inverted! (And there's a lack of spacing on the first one).

[lapis shore]

Extra period after "Barrier". In a lot of traphase cards there is no space before "Prepare" when there should be

[eternal sleet]

Chapter 2-7, it should be "their existence" instead of "his" since it's not referring to anyone in particular. :]

2-8 is written as "Get em! Brown!" on the selection menu but as "Brown's Charge" when the chapter starts.

[hollow pike]

Cité is a city name with a pun to sound like 'city'. Therefore don't say "the Cité" (example 1).
Example 2 is the correct usage.

[fiery igloo]

honestly that's a common problem with a lot of stages

where display name is very different from the cutscene name

[ashen plinth]

Probably cuz of the inconsistency with machine translation ;u;

Multiple variants of the Prof's name in Helot: Catena's ch2 event story

Helot catena chapter 3, the person hurt by ghelot should be Barnett not the keeper (and also minor grammatical errors) so should be “Even though you were hurt by Helot, you still speak kindly of her.”

Ch5 has more name inconsistencies for the prof!elvis

Ch 7; this sounds a bit awkward, so suggestion: “You're a coward who doesn't deserve to be called a warrior.”

[ashen plinth]

More errors in ch8 - incorrect pronouns (he for helot) and punctuation

[hollow pike]

As written, this could be mistaken for sexual content. Recommend changing to "She curtseys politely."

[hollow pike]

"Sculptor" is the preferred word. It is correctly used elsewhere in the game.

"Hiss" is not a spoken word from Male Guest. It's narration. If you want to include a sound that someone makes, you'll have to use narration (example 2). Otherwise, remove "hiss".
Secondly, there's missing punctuation for Lady Guest.

[eternal sleet]

Up!! I knew someone had mentioned this already.

[native plume]

even Genshin's translators write sounds inside dialogue 😭 and worse, in letters... so many correspondences with "Sigh" in the text...
nevertheless, I agree with you

[ashen plinth]

Eh, “sigh” is a pretty commonly used one in dialogue tbh

Hiss is deffo weird tho XD

[native plume]

the entire concept of separating dialogue from non-verbal noises is evidently unknown to most people, and the concept of the way characters speak being different from how they would write is beyond imagination

[ashen plinth]

Hmm would it make sense for a game to use asterisks as a notation for sound? Like “ *hiss * text....”

[native plume]

that's an option, yep
or [brackets]

it seems like a really small issue, but it can be so goofy and immersion-breaking when it's something like "Hiss" or "Waaah"
like watching a play and the actors are reading the stage directions aloud

[ashen plinth]

(Counter point, some people actually say “Waaah” out loud 😂 but yeah i get your point)

[ashen plinth]

Medal of rescue: Platinum

Makes more sense for the description to be “You saved almost the entirety of the research team” or something similar instead of “you nearly saved the research team”, since the latter implies that you didn't save them in the end? (Unless thats intentional)

[chrome warren]

Huru, you're shouting...
(From: Psyche deepdive Tulu, Childhood)

[regal portal]

Minor error at the beginning of Chapter 4. It says "an... bizarre encounter." in Francis' office when it should say "a... bizarre encounter."

[regal portal]

Francis' journal in the part 2 of the chapter also has a grammatical error:

"No need to worry, we're and always will be the happiest family."

Using a contraction here is awkward and lacks the parallel structure needed to flow properly. It should say "No need to worry, we are and always will be the happiest family."

[lapis shore]

babe or baby?

[novel sedge]

[retain] is repeated twice

[woeful glade]

Suggestion: remove the comma.
Deal 8 DMG to the enemy with the highest HP and shield, Charge + 1. Can be used 3 times.

This could work with just comma but I think it'll look better with a period.

[woeful glade]

Babe works. Hell, I'd argue it works more than the Baby because it's a bit dated (imo at least).

[zinc kindle]

Height and weight are off here

Gonna be nitpicky here as someone who really likes the game and has an interest in translation (: preemptive apologies for spam

Should be “You and Ramona”

Given my impression of Ogier and MC’s speaking patterns I would suggest “I shall do my all!” for Ogier and “anything else we should know” for MC

This is kind of oblique and there may not be a perfect 1:1 but “Will you feel fear?” is pretty clumsy for an English speaker imo. If the question is whether the possibility frightens William, then something like, “Do you ever fear…” or “Are you ever afraid?” could work.

In the same conversation, would suggest “I’ve never seen…” (prev: “I have never seen”) and “…can look past life and death, but I cannot.” (Prev: “…but not me.”)

Trivial consistency typo, Keeper should say “clickety” at the end

[woeful glade]

I think I'd disagree. "Perhaps one day we will..." and the 'will you feel fear?' is a hypothetical with that in mind. Keeper, for me, says "perhaps one day, we will [also going to die]...will you feel fear then?" whereas imho you're detaching the two trains of thoughts completely.

That could just be me though. I didn't see the CN text but could only gauge this understanding from what I read (in EN)

[woeful glade]

Remove the comma again, also a space before Prepare 1 (and remove the space between prepare 1 & the fullstop)

[zinc kindle]

Yeah I agree with you on the meaning of the text but just the phrasing seems off. Even your suggested “will you feel fear then” is better imo or maybe “will you be afraid”

“…your ears ringing”
“…or is it/this part of…”

P sure the “inside” can be omitted here (“I need to go find my sister”)

[woeful glade]

There could be a space before prepare

[zinc kindle]

“…walls caked in Londinium grime.” probably better here

[woeful glade]

Also, I think the commas could be completely omitted here.

It adds a bit more whimsy that way

[zinc kindle]

Omit the “is” from Doll’s line

“End of the corner” makes no sense imo? “End of the corridor/alley”, “around the corner”?

[woeful glade]

There's small mistakes here that I noticed, namely:

1. Target awakener gains
2. Less spaces
3. Last sentence generally feels a bit wonky.

I'd rephrase it as:

Target awakener gains 60 Aliemus (remaining: 2). Use upto 3 times in boss battles.

(Or "Can be used upto 3 times in boss battles", either works)

[zinc kindle]

“…from a distance you see a line of several children and workers awaiting your arrival, led by a nun.” Could be smoother?
“lack of echoes” is just not a common phrase, could technically be kept but “irritated by the children’s silence” or such could be better
“We’ve” instead of “We have” for Aigis
“…brother, Ogier, one of the heirs of the family.” The “and” would only be used here maybe if phrased as “This is Ogier, my younger brother and one of the heirs…”

Would suggest “hardly” instead of “merely” here

“Panics” instead of “panicked”
“Silence” instead of “silent”

As an aside, the meaning behind “You’re still too young for this” is absolutely clear but an English native would probably reach for a phrase like “The adults are talking” or something analogous. “This is grown up business” etc

“shouldn’t” instead of “don’t” for Keeper’s line
“…this is the East District.”

Technically, “…for it doesn’t exist” is probably more correct
“Slowly opens” (present tense)
“…real trouble if it hadn’t been Aigis”
“…confirming the corridor is empty, then slips through the door and closes it behind them.” Or such. The “out” should definitely be omitted

[lapis shore]

no full stop at the end of description

[fiery igloo]

typo here

doesn't the card specifically generate a copy of the last played Strike?

[shrewd arrow]

yeah, should be:
1 temporary copy of the last played "Strike" other than "Mortal Blast"

[zinc kindle]

One can't really be "too lost", it's sort of binary. Would suggest aimless/adrift/purposeless or similar, or just drop the "too"

[lapis shore]

wording of uvhash's exalt in traphase is very misleading, it reads as if it deals 35 DMG and applies Bleed when it only applies bleed. A better example is Sorel 3cost in traphase where it's very clear what it does and how. There are many inconsistencies with the way effects are described, from "Gain 2 Arithmetica" vs "Restore 2 Arithmetica" vs "Obtain 2 Arithmetica", or "Apply 36 Bleed" vs "Apply 36 stacks of Bleed" which is relatively unimportant, to stuff like Pandia 0cost in traphase not being clear that the target gets delay: aliemus, to the order of "x damage y times" being inconsistent with "y times x damage" present or even "damage y times x" for some reason. A lot of cards (in traphase especially) have misplaced periods and commas and extra spaces due to affix names, on wheels of destiny too, but not only in traphase. I will try to send as many examples as I notice but I neither want to flood the channel nor go through all hundreds of cards. I can try compiling a list to make it more compact but I recommend manually going through the skills and seeing how many formatting mistakes there are. Especially comparing how the card works vs how it's described (back to Uvhash Exalt example)

against*

[ionic saddle]

This seems fine mortal blast is a strike so it counts last played strike as itself

[shrewd arrow]

but is so strangelly worded

[ionic saddle]

I don't think those words would fit lotan

[ionic saddle]

Not really

Mortal blast is counted as a strike

Play 1 strike before it

Then it

Doesn't count itself

[shrewd arrow]

but is also more correct how i stated, because you can't dupe other mortal blasts

[ionic saddle]

Then makes one

[ionic saddle]

True

[fiery igloo]

the wording discrepancy is just weird

"generates a Strike other than the last played Strike"

[steep ether]

it’s correct
Helot uses a different measurement for height and weight

[vestal iron]

...When the wielder fist triggers "Resonance"...

7-9 Remains
*covers

[lapis shore]

"Porse"

[fiery igloo]

the lowercase T in "the"

also the lowercase c in every "Counter" here

[fiery igloo]

unrelated, but I've also been wondering about the consistency of how "Strike" and "Defense" cards are referenced in the game, because for example, I see both "Strike" and "Basic Strike" being used in regards to the "Strike" card (same for "Defense")

[ashen plinth]

Oh, I thought “Strike” refers to all strike cards including those that are “treated as strike” like mouchette's special cards or during the investigation when you get the relic that treats a card as strike;

While basic strike refers to purely “strike” cards and excludes those special/changed ones?

[vestal iron]

7-12: Storm Wall formatting error

[lapis shore]

salvador's exalt name is inconsistent

[lapis shore]

mist sequence collab story, Between Dimensions
no hard stop in the sentence

[fiery igloo]

I think I might be partly guilty here xD

Dream of Medicine's description was rewritten a while back according to my feedback, and it just uses "Strike/Defense" without the "Basic" part to refer to those specific cards

[lapis shore]

same here

[lapis shore]

corposant psyche deepdive
your

her

inconsistent ship name many times in corposant psyche deepdive
assuming Nautilus is the correct one, parts 2 3 and 4 got it wrong

"Body" capitalised for no reason

the keeper seems to say corposant's name, but "coper" is not part of her name

"Dream" capitalised for no reason

her face

[lapis shore]

lily special ops
no full stop

not sure why put the sentence in the quotation marks

extra blank line

no full stop

nymphaea, daffodil, or some narcissus?

calling casiah a guy

calling casiah a guy

[lapis shore]

no full stop

no full stop

nymphaea or polonaise

calling lily "it"

[lapis shore]

Lily

calling lotan a guy

extra blank line

[light axle]

The comma after 'Entrall' on Xu's Overexalt tooltip, and her Rouse has two "Retain".

[lapis shore]

agrippa deepdive
her hands

no full stop

her chin

no full stop

[fiery igloo]

the comma is probably fine

unless you meant that it should be outside the quotes, then maybe they could change that (same with Betroth)

[light axle]

Yeah, that's what I meant. I didn't notice it was the same with Betroth, though.

[bitter lake]

"housands" should be "thousands"

[woeful glade]

"Then, do you want to see the outside world, brother?" (First line in castor's wod)

[shrewd arrow]

Different names for the dreamlure stacks of Wanda

[ashen plinth]

Extra “source”?
24's chapter 1

Incorrect placement of > in the logs conpared to the displayed text

Incorrect pronouns for Winkle

Incorrect pronouns for 24

[ashen plinth]

Ch 2 more incorrect pronouns

I think a lot of the pronouns referring to Mason is wrong in this chapter so I'll just stop posting the pics lol

Myth... thag... might be more appropriate

[near flower]

posse written as porse in this tutorial

[lapis shore]

in the chat with corpo after completing her deepdive is doubled

[ashen plinth]

Final chapter of 24's dreamscape - text formmating error?

[bright merlin]

Thousands,not housands?

[fiery igloo]

inconsistent descriptions

[fiery igloo]

was this supposed to be "do not gaze directly"?

[ashen plinth]

24 event (Memory's Curve part VI)

Im guessing “sinful relic” refers to “cursed relic”?

EDIT: never mind, I just never realised sinful was a higher grade/different version than cursed because of the colour. I would suggest making the difference a bit more obvious/intentional, e.g. a different colour

You gazed at-

Doesn't really make sense when connected to the selectable options, not sure what the original intention was?

Or “you gaze at it, and -

• pause music
• talk with it
• listen quietly

[thin igloo]

inconsistency between name translations: Cranial Predator/Skull Hunter
found in Phantom of Rainy Town/Serendipity

[digital maple]

Survey mail thank you message is untranslated!

[thin igloo]

text error in Serendipity "<shadow>"
also ramona's lines there don't exactly fit context of her not being present at the scene:

"Let's follow" -> implies she is also there
also "May Silver Key light our path" is missing "the"

[shrewd arrow]

In the Liz fight, the stacks are called both Verdant Spark and Emerald Ember, plus is strange that the Eternal Flames description list first the evolution consuming 6 stacks and then the one using 3 stacks.

In the Snow Offering fight, in this intention he doesn't say where the Stagnation is applied (it seems 1 on 3 random cards from draw or discard pile, but need to be checked)

same thing for the last intention of the Expedition Leader

[fleet glacier]

i know someone already mentioned the wrong pronouns in 24s deepdive but there is a ton of them

[zealous vector]

Complete Dreamscape vs. Complete the Dreamscape - the name (green) is correct, they are just named very similar.

Similar achievements have different text structure, personally I like >Find N extraction points in the main story line Chapter X, "Title"< best, makes it easy to find what to do with one glance.

inconsistent capitalization & sentence structure for similar achievements:

This might be a "me" problem, but this sounds like the achievement asks for a 1-turn win, but maybe it's meant to say to use the embryos in the same turn, and win the battle?

inconsistent capitalization, lower case is correct I believe

"Possess" is better

has/possess and 4 vs. four inconsistent over all realms. again, "Posses" sounds better, and even though low numbers should be written, I find the number easier to read in the case of achievements

inconsistent sentence structure over similar achievements (occurs many times)

wrong event name

outer quotation marks are not needed

hard mode/difficulty inconsistency. I like "difficulty" better because once madness is added, "madness mode" sounds weirder to me than "madness difficulty", but dealer's choice

special record would be consistent, but I haven't checked if that one is really in a different category

hard/Hard inconsistency. It's a "special" term, so maybe always upper case? (occurs many, many times, lower case more often)

wrong name of the stage. it would probably be prudent to check them all

inconsistent sentence structure

I don't think it really means "turn" here, but it's possible.

login/Login

different sentence structure int he achievement family

have/own and similar achievements ask for "Possess"

there is also "gain", but at least it's consistent in that family of achievements

Inconsistent use of "receive"

[novel sedge]

"email"

[woeful glade]

Extra unnecessary fullstop in the end

Space before Takes, unnecessary capitalisation of W & P in "When Played".

[shrewd arrow]

Tawil exalt say Discover 2 times, and the first doesn't have the special description

[shrewd arrow]

In the 24 exalt description for Pure Chaos, there are 2 "." at the end

[lapis shore]

Salvador's special ops
a surprising strength

his eyes are covered by a white piece of cloth, not black

although it is black in other sprites

[lapis shore]

like here

[lapis shore]

no space after Oh

[undone cedar]

I think it’s because he’s supposedly still a human?

Like it became black when he turned into an awakener

I guess

[lapis shore]

the sprite still has white

[ashen plinth]

Uvhash psych deepdive blood and sand ch1

• name inconsistencies (youwu --> uvhash; prin --> purin)

• using “bro” here seems overly familiar and modern, perhaps replace with “Brother” or “Guide”

“Roar” and “Hiss” used incorrectly, could replace “roar” with “argh!” or use asterisks hiss to denote that its not verbalised out loud

[ashen plinth]

Ch2- more name inconsistency issues especially for purin

Other corrections
“Golems do not need to sleep.”

“since I last tasted blood” instead of “since I last tased that blood”

Just “Nothing” instead of “Do nothing.”
“Just helping you to run a bit faster” instead of “just help you run a bit faster”

Replace “Howl!” with Argh or Ow or whatever sound fits?

[shrewd arrow]

Noticed a small typo in the new WoD's English description, 'at the sart of battle' (should be 'start').

[fleet glacier]

Gain 1 arithmetica instead of power
Exalt instead of frenzy burst

[shrewd arrow]

from where?

[fleet glacier]

in the new event battles

[shrewd arrow]

because frenzy burst is the old name for Exalt, they should change that too

[cosmic shuttle]

I forget, is this where mistranslations are reported?

[cosmic shuttle]

"24"s Special Ops "Serene Fission" keeps referring to Mason/"24" with male pronouns.

[ashen plinth]

Agrippa psych deepdive (pale descendant; all chapters) also has incorrect pronouns