【English Translation】Opinions Collection

[queen pendant]

Please English language keepers, leave any thoughts about English translation in the game in the comment section of this post.
including but not limited to: bugs, translation errors, expressions that are difficult to understand, suggestions...

We will check and collect everyone's comments one by one🌹

[safe plank]

Idk.. It's seems inappropriate

Also same name for different Wheels

[wanton pasture]

the correct translation should be Tohu wa-bohu (the images are just some quick examples, not all mistranslated part)

Tifhreid's correct translation should be Tiphereth

should be translated to "When The Stars Are Right"

[craggy bison]

After the translation update, some "Consume" effects on Exalts simply vanished (Note that Faint still has hers)

[wanton pasture]

The Gate of Extremes correct translation should be The Ultimate Gate

[wanton pasture]

Sanga Hyperplasia correct translation should be Coral Hyperplasia (?)
because Sanga is an awaker's name

[scenic birch]

this too 😄

and this

[paper knot]

怎么做到把“群星正位”翻译成“Celestial Align”的，校对组没有一个了解过克苏鲁神话是吗…至少改成“The Stars are Right”做个样子吧
顺便我相信中文版“自他xx黑暗的xx中”那句是想neta《自他女儿黑暗的子宫中》，既然都是英文原文的作品了翻回去的时候做个英文原名“in his daughter's darkling womb”的neta好吗
大小写也莫名其妙，Great不是大写但Arrival是？我切到英文客户端只看了墨菲这一个页面都这么多bug了，既然都准备修了，还是希望官方放出来之前能稍微哪怕看一下实际效果到底还原了多少中文原意

[wanton pasture]

this symptom translation is extremely inconsistent, previously it was delirium and babble, now it's somniloquy and muttering? afaik delirium and somniloquy are two different symtomp

Hameln's exalt display chinese text for english version

[scenic birch]

rose posse eng ver but chinese text

[hidden palm]

The Release text is misaligned now, the Follow one too, probably the Praise one too.

[eternal kestrel]

Black sigil drop rate vs "The black sigil has dropped"
For a covenant stat, the more concise, the better

[sour furnace]

the japanese from the pvs (2.0, ch6) is roughly「星辰正しき時」which does translate to ’time of stellar alignment’, the original chinese text still takes precedence in translation but if it comes down to synonyms or rephrasings then i think the current way it's translated is fine

[wanton pasture]

the phrase "When the star are right" is from Call of Cthulhu, and jp version is likely suffer miss from translation already, so going CN => JP => EN again is still inaccurate

[naive flint]

Helot catena skill name stay "Helot" even if after transform to Bloodthirsty type

[sour furnace]

This card's full name is currently 'master of the principles of all things' and it takes an extremely long time to finish scrolling, it would be nice if this was shortened to something like 'master of all things' like it was before or a middle-ground between the two translations like 'master of all principles'.

The name of the specified cards in Tawil's first enlighten is inconsistent with the name of the cards in other screens. The phrasing is also worded unnaturally, a better wording could be '「understanding the principles of everything」 reduces the arithmetica cost of the copied command card by 1, 「wings transcending time」places an 「inspiration」 into your hand.'

Tawil's second enlightenment can also be rephrased for better flow, an example is 'The cards discovered by 「All things return to one」 are granted Preparation 1.', but this description can also work fine if there's a hyphen between the name of the exalt and the description of the enlighten, but the word 'card' still needs to be plural. Example:「All things return to one」- The discovered cards are granted Preparation 1.

The description of tawil's third enlighten needs to have the word 'a' removed, if not then the translation also works if the word 'boost' is added after the phrase 'critical damage.' This effect could also be translated as "Using 「Basic Strike」 or 「Basic Defence」 increases Tawil's critical rate and critical damage by 3%, up to a maximum of 30%." The section regarding the secondary effect works well, but the word 'echo' in this kind of context is more commonly used in the plural form, so the derivative card could be renamed to 「Echoes of the Past」.

Tawil's exalt description isn't worded very naturally. A better translation for the card discovery effect could be "Discover up to 3 cards out of 5 skills from the current realm and grant them Exhaust, Preparation 1, and Retain."

the key words 'Preparation' and 'Retain' are translated inconsistently in different menus. In slay the spire, the effect of keeping cards in-hand is called retain, but if "preserve" is the preferred translation by the development team then either is ok, but it still needs to be consistently translated. The effect of reducing the cost of cards in-hand after the end of a turn as well as when discarded is sometimes translated as 'Preparation' and sometimes translated as 'Prepare'. In this situation, 'Prepare' is slightly unnatural.

The wording of the effect of gaining 「Silver key dawn」 as a card after using Tawil's rouse is slightly redundant, it could be shortened to something like 'Place one 「Silver Key Dawn」' into your hand.
The phrasing for the added effect of enlighten 1 for tawil's copying card is slightly incorrect, the proper grammatical usage would be 'this card becomes a copy with its arithmetica cost reduced by 1.' The end of the description can also be simplified to 'after playing, gain 10 points of aliemus'.
The description for 'Wings of Time' should have the word 'of' between the quantity of power and the word power, so the description would be something like 'Gain 8 points of Power and 1 「Inspiration」. Shuffle 「Wings Unfurled」 into the draw pile.'

The wording for the first part of celeste's exalt uses the verb 'gains' incorrectly. To make it more natural, the form of all the verbs can be changed (example: "Dispel Heavy Injury, restore 58 life and gain 1 Arithmetica) but this translation changes the meaning of the sentence from the effects happening because of a result of an action from the awakener (celeste) and instead has a different tone. To rephrase this while keeping the original tone, the verb relating to arithmetica needs to be changed. (example: "Dispels Heavy Injury, restores 58 life and increases Arithmetica by 1.") <- redundant words are also removed.
The second part of the exalt description regarding the resurrection effects can also have the verbs changed for better subject agreement. (example: "Revives upon receiving lethal damage during this battle, restoring X% Life and granting all Awakeners 25 Aliemus.") <- this translation changes the sentence to mean that the healing and aliemus gain are an additional effect of the revival. A translation that keeps these effects separate (so rather than the revival being the main effect, and the other effects are a consequence, all of these effects are individual) would be something like "Revives upon receiving lethal damage during this battle. Restore X% life, All awakeners are granted 25 Aliemus."

The talent effect of summoning a tentacle attack from celeste's talent is inconsistently translated across her skills. Any of them can be used, but the one attached to 'White Dream' has slightly incorrect grammar.
The description for the effect of 'White Dream' increasing healing based on the number of turns the card has been kept in hand has slightly incorrect grammar and can be slightly misleading. in this context, the sentence would be arranged as "For each turn Retained, the restoration amount increases by X." <- in the original translation, the phrasing can imply that the increased restoration amount happens in additional increments, rather than being added to the final sum of healing caused by the card.
The grammar regarding the tentacle damage boosting effect of 'Everlasting Phantasm' is slightly incorrect. In this context, the number should come before the effect, so a more natural translation would be "Temporarily gain 36 Tentacle Damage"

The effect for Celeste's enlighten 3 is phrased very strangely. The word 'when' has to be included at the start in order to clarify that the following effects only occur after the revival effect activates. (the current translation implies that this enlighten adds the revival effect to the exalt). An example translation would be "When 「Immortal Blissbird」 triggers revival, all Awakeners gain 25 points of Aliemus. The revival effect can now be applied again after 6 turns." <- Awakers is replaced with Awakeners for consistency across game screens, rounds is replaced with turns for consistency as well. The name of the exalt is also inconsistently translated in this description compared to other screens.

The description for Celeste's Over-exalt is currently slightly misleading. The current phrasing 'attach Exhaust to your hand' implies that all of the cards in the hand will have the keyword Exhaust added. A translation that addresses this issue could be "Add 3 「White Dream」 cards with 50% more restoration to your hand and attach Exhaust to them."

[sour furnace]

The name of this covenant is translated inconsistently between the different pieces

[zealous tinsel]

Both of these having the same name seems like an error? (even ignoring the fact that they shouldn't be named after the character)

[queen pendant]

@@zealous tinsel@sour furnace@naive flint@wanton pasture@eternal kestrel@hidden palm@scenic birch@paper knot@craggy bison@safe plankThank you for your feedback💗 . Goya has recorded them one by one~

[sour furnace]

Various errors in awakener basic information (credit to @trim belfry for discovering this)
Helot/Helot - Catena: 「Be ma」 and 「mina」 aren't units of measurement used in english
Horla: Possibly missing a decimal point for the inches? Otherwise if 5 feet 42 inches is the correct height then the proper way of listing it would be 8 feet 6 inches (8'6'')
Casiah: Inches only go up to 11, the 12th inch is regarded as the beginning of the next foot. If this isn't the same issue as Horla (missing decimal point), the correct listing would be 5 feet (5'), (is it a flavor text similar to ogier's height description and lotan's weight description?)
Doll - Destruction: The listed name and proper english name don't match

[hidden palm]

Little sovraposition on the wheel description

[midnight flume]

When encountering an event, this text is supposed to be "Hide Event"

I think this is supposed to be "Miss Sa, Miss Sarah" (chapter 1-4)

What is "Ji"? Is it supposed to be "Th" or "The"? (Chapter 1-6)

[midnight flume]

"Miss Sha" typo again (Chapter 1-11)

This resonance card has many names, yet they are the same card.

from "Innocent Return", "Naive Gift", "Innocent Gift", and "Naive Return Gift".

But, the one in battle is neither mentioned above, but instead "Innocent Return Gift"??

"Tiyug" name typo, mainly in chapter 1-12

[midnight flume]

"Tiyug" name typo again (chapter 1-13)

Chapter 1 resonance text says "Gift of Goodwill", but in battle it's A Gift of Kindness

Aiggis name turns into "Ai-ji-si" when the letters are separated. Better if it's "Aig... gis..." or "A... ig... gis..."

(Chapter 1-11, 1-12, 1-14, and possibly many more)

Sometimes, there are spaces after an apostrophe, found in many chapters.

[lusty bluff]

in simple terms please stop using AI

[midnight flume]

Goliath Awaker description and Exalt description is kinda different

(I know they have similar meaning, but I think "seize" is better)

[midnight flume]

Fr

||hire me instead||

Sometimes there is no space between username and pronoun, found in many chapters.

[midnight flume]

Oh yeah, this one too

Goliath Awaker and Exalt description it's "Lurk", but when releasing the Exalt, it changes into "Dormancy".

[queen pendant]

@midnight flume@hidden palm@sour furnaceThanks for your suggestions! Goya has recorded them one by one🥹 💗

[midnight flume]

In Assignments, in the "Choose Awaker Assignments" interface, there's an untranslated part here. It should be translated to "Extra".

Not "his", but "her" (cause Jenkins is a girl duh)

(Chapter 1-15)

[midnight flume]

In Chapter 1-1, Investigator Sean Anderson was written Shawn Anderson.

Too many names!! from Poorhouse, almshouse, orphanage, asylum, and many more!!

At least pick one of these words to be used in the story so we can coordinate the places easier.

(Chapter 1)

[hidden palm]

The option to go in to the Story mode etc is called Inves, i think it means Investigations.
Is an error or a problem of space?

[midnight flume]

It's supposed to be "Your Name" here

Wait, Your Name...

Mada kono sekaiwa~

[hidden palm]

The terminology for the Clementine special Leap effect is different in every card:

[marsh cedar]

Aigis's E3 has bit mistranslation. So I don't want newcomers to get it wrong with posse.

[noble moat]

"Awkers" is most likely a typo of "awaker"
Found on elite of event investigation

[empty lantern]

All defence cards changed to DEF

Please retranslate Tawil Wing cards, they were better before:

Keyflare is written here instead of Silver key, Name of Tawil's exalt is also strange (Omnifex)

Aliemus at the bottom is broken:

Keyflare mentioned here too:

Name of 24 Exalt is awkward:

Extra space:

Beheading card changed names but card still references beheading:

Strange wording, suggest changing "Laudible":

Enlighten of Murphy references old name:

Spacing:

Refers to old name:

inconsistent naming between Jenkin's exalt and card:

Same situation for faint:

Inconsistent naming between the menu and the screen once you click in:

[jovial mulch]

There is a lot of issues like this in the story since the last update. Text is splitted in the wrong way.

[worthy garnet]

i like the tawil card names now they're just over the top and i lovei t

[wanton pasture]

the use of Gateway is strange because the Gates that can only be crossed using Silver Key are always called Gate in the books

Miryam's 2-cost were retranslated to Exalted Pyre but her Rouse 1 desc still retain Supreme Life Offering

oh ye, terminology translation remained inconsistent, "Power", "Strength", and "STR" all used for the same status

24 posse tooltip error

[wanton pasture]

I miss my Green Flame of Extinction

[noble moat]

confirming the selection of an awaker in the new thing has untranslated text

[noble moat]

random quotation marks around Awakers' names for :

• Clementine
• Ramona
• Daffodil
• Doll
• Tawil
• Helot

[wanton pasture]

since both Lily and Helot are Shoggoth's awaker, the correct translation is Tekeli-li

[noble moat]

<Aliemus:5> on Tawil card
(noticed it after getting her to E1, maybe linked)

[wanton pasture]

doesn't fit Tawil though, both in her Yog-Sothosery connections and her seraph image lol

[empty lantern]

recommended makes more sense than HOT here:

[empty lantern]

this should say 24 aliemus

[warped shale]

"When The Stars Align" was so much better. It had a nicer ring to it and matched the alignment ritual for Tulu. There's no need to match Cthulu or whatever reference they're using word for word.

[wanton pasture]

"Call upon us, worthy one, wake us from our slumber.
When the stars are right, when the moon shines bright"
from BP artwork

it's quite obvious that Morimens dev respect Lovecraftian lore greatly and I simply help them to work through the language barrier

[queen pendant]

Thank you everyone🙏 , Goya will take a closer look at your feedback later❤️

[wanton pasture]

[hoary canyon]

It seems that the translators just hit ctr+f replace on the word "Defence" because defence cards are also called DEF all caps. Kinda uncomfy

this gives me a really bad vibe, that they're not taking their time to methodically translate depending on the game's context

[wanton pasture]

or they are translating the texts slowly, since a majority of the game's text is still chat gpt version

afaik normally translators don't play the game they translate, they just look at the texts they have to work
at least they've proved they did read the books so I'm cool (for now)

[hoary canyon]

thats the thing, for ui elements you cant really just... translate in this case. Both the recommended on the banner screen and the auto weapon equip has turn to hot, so has all defence turned to DEF.

It's already quite obvious that the devs haven't used tags for basically any status effect on any card. seeing them have diffrent names on cards and tavil stil having Stenght instead of STR. Or the fact that clems passive on the card is diffrent then the name on the explanation when you mouse over it.

with this fact the trial and error here without having someone check for these errors in the forefront makes the game Significantly worse.

[wanton pasture]

Morimens got translator but they haven't got proofreader yet huh

[hoary canyon]

yeah... Time to throw more money at them.

[wanton pasture]

[noble moat]

I'm pretty sure this is just a placeholder and is supposed to be translated

[hexed dove]

https://discord.com/channels/1131791637933199470/1366749080042209330

[wanton pasture]

[sour path]

Orla
Horla's name is incorrect in her talent

[wanton pasture]

is this foreshadow that Corposant is also a shotacon like Sanga

[wanton pasture]

is the censored text mean Ghatanothoa?

[undone cedar]

I smell the Hotfix upcoming

[wanton pasture]

Akut seemingly got properly translated to Acushnet (?), though sems like Wheel description remained Akut

[wanton pasture]

since R'lyeh is confirmed to be Lemuria in Morimens, Luoyan's correct translation is Lemuria?

[noble moat]

random "Corrette" instead of "Colette".
Only this message, all the others in the conversation are correct.

[wanton pasture]

I'm unsure regarding this, but is the name of Polar Glow and its sister cards meant to be Polaris?

Tawil and N's orison have same name, probably another GPT hiccup

Chat GPT is extremely incompetent at translating Chinese version of Hebrew words, and because Morimens used the words for certain Outer Gods as their title instead of using their Lovecraft name outright, I'll list the correct translation for them (the screenshot is just some examples)

N = Malkuth
Thais = Tiphereth
Yog-Sothoth = Chokhmak - Da'at
Azathoth = Tohu wa-bohu/Tohu va-Vohu

[copper lake]

@queen pendant i think this is misstranslation. i think the right words would be "for each 1% death resistance from Corposant, the wheel of destiny and convenant increase base damage by 0,2% and shield by 0,05%"

[wanton pasture]

Erasmo? Should be Elmo, right?

[wanton pasture]

more card desc error

[wanton pasture]

text error

[chrome hearth]

Should be "Amidst"

[noble moat]

AYO WHaaaaat

(Corposant story chapter 1)

[noble moat]

Chapter 2 :

• Corposant / Kepersant
• Nautilus / Nodelius

Chapter 3 :
the ship changes name YET ANOTHER TIME

and another one

and another one (chapter 5)

[undone cedar]

It’s all machine translation

Lol thats why

[hidden palm]

I put it here too, in a lot of story and event you have strange cut in the sentence that continue in the next, this can be even more disturbing than the translation errors, please, try to fix it:

old 24 event, but is present in the main story too

[noble moat]

when you have x1 or x2 speed (automatically "turning the page" of the dialogs) it's even more unsettling because you get very little time for the huge chunk of text at the start then it jumps to the next 2-3 words and waits 20seconds

[hidden palm]

i made a post in the official q-a https://discord.com/channels/1131791637933199470/1372875454633214053 let's hope they fix it

[noble moat]

untranslated message
(survey related ?)

[midnight flume]

Note to the translator:
The correct word is "your" not "you're"

[hoary canyon]

Please change the "stars game right" logo on the log in screen.

[wanton pasture]

shoudl be Star Climax Right

[paper knot]

中文发言致歉，战斗文本优化过后关键词统一依然存在问题
米粒的【圣礼】，在狂气爆发效果描述里是“Consecration”，在实际战斗中是“Sacrament”，在超限爆发效果描述里是“Scared Rite”
怒涛状态在选择触腕界面是“Raging Waves”，在米粒狂气爆发描述里是“Storm”
这就是你们所说的优化战斗文本吗，英区新人能看得懂一点吗
顺便启灵描述里的技能名和关键词名也和技能界面不一样，暂且不知道是不是工作量过大导致暂时无法优化启灵文本（）产能慢一点可以，端个能吃的东西上来好吗

@viscid inlet 猫猫，不怪你，改改）

[wanton pasture]

Seliphis/Celaphis's correct translation should be Celephais?

[pulsar roost]

In the event "Beast's Ambition" the different difficulties of each level are not consistently named or numbered

[undone cedar]

#1377236011653795880 message theyre still working on it, lets be patient

👀

Please consider shortening the main story stage names when u get to them, bc sometimes it gets too long and the texts are tiny. About 3-4 words each would be good

[hidden palm]

yes, but reporting the stuff is still important for them

[wanton pasture]

shortening to 3-4 words would be simple for chinese or japanese but I doubt it would works well for english

[undone cedar]

yes definitely 💯

[undone cedar]

Fr. I wish there was a way. English/Spanish etc interface can get really ugly sometimes because the text can get sooo long. Meanwhile it looks all pretty in Chinese

[wanton pasture]

yeah the differences between two languages are too big lol

[hidden palm]

i really hope the program to integrate the volunteers translators goes well

[undone cedar]

Chinese interface is really pretty

[undone cedar]

I saw some other games on steam did it and it worked. O7 to the volunteers

I imagine We wont get better translated spanish, russian etc versions otherwise

A lot of the big budget gachas still have bad machine translation when it comes to one of the smaller languages 😦

[wanton pasture]

iirc somebody pointed out that Sarah's orphanage were translated using workhouse or poorhouse
in-game CG pretty much used Lilian Workhouse, so I think this is the correct translation

[wanton pasture]

found it, Lilian/Lilyan Poorhouse/Almshouse/Orphanage/Asylum lol

the decision to translate Gate into Gateway is wrong, because of the Gate's significance in Lovecraft's lore (and some translation still use Door)
I had said this opinion before, but back then I didn't gather much clue, so I want to bring it up again

[paper knot]

yep I know about that
when changing to English interface on small screens the introduction parts for stories is way too lengthy too
however I believe this can be fixed by human translation since there are lot of space to simplify

[wanton pasture]

in UI background text, the word Gate are used exclusively when it comes to Sivler Key/Tawil/Yog-Sothoth/knowledge-related topic, especially this poem are featured repeatedly in the game (not in the story)

"Silver begets knowledge.
Knowledge begets the key.
The key leads to reason.
The gate sets us free."

[undone cedar]

Yeah, i didnt mean to say u did wrong, sorry if i came off that way! I can tell you really love myriam and the game🔥

[wanton pasture]

another version the poem also appeared at the end of Hameln's PV

"Through Silver we gain Knowledge
Through Knowledge we gain the key
The Key shall lead us to Reason

The Gate shall set us free.
Perceive the truth of Silver.
cross the Gate of the Key."

what I wanted to say that the writers very likely used the term Gate, and I hope english version could be consistent with their decision

[wanton pasture]

btw Star Came Right is (prolly) their attempt to shorten long phrases into 3-4 words phrases (original phrase is When The stars are right)
the meaning is correct, but as you can see, it reads very strange

[undone cedar]

Iirc the correct phrasing is when the stars are right (as written in game now)? But the title is still “came right”😂😂

[wanton pasture]

well its a whole ass logo already so ig it's hard to change (the logo also appeared in arc 2 PV, so if they changed the logo they probably have to change the PV as well)

[empty lantern]

Regarding Horla's new card names, due to threnody being so long it is hard to tell what the card is quickly. Ideally the descriptor comes first (ie sorrow)

[pulsar roost]

Chapter 2 in Helot-Catena Event Story

[swift arch]

The new 1.5 character Castor's skill description has a wrong term used.
EN text says "Quasar" cards when pulled from Ultra Space have Aliemus (exalt cost) reduced by 1, but it should be Arithmetica (card cost) instead, as it says in CN.
Please fix as it's extremely misleading.

[noble moat]

it's been a long time, but may we get 1 more line for text -or even more- that Awakeners invited in the dorm say ?

sometimes when it's long enough it scrolls, but a lot of times the last line is just cut (Winkle has a lot of cut lines)

[pulsar roost]

male pronouns for francis all throughout chapter 4

[pulsar roost]

card should state "take 61 damage when played"

[mossy apex]

"This card triggers one more time", not Death Resistance

[slow spade]

original helot's talent 1 still says "strong damage" instead of "dmg amp"

[paper knot]

依旧是中文发言致歉，恭喜你游的本地化总算到了大致不影响阅读的程度了（）但是天赋这一栏的字实在太小了看着眼睛痛
米粒天赋最后一句话应该是“每1%爆伤提高[狂气爆发所提供的]xxx效果0.2%”，英文Exalt跑到某些效果前面去了导致还有点歧义（

还有些不影响理解的问题，法法这个驱散易伤表述稍微有点怪怪的，墨菲3费献祭关键词多了个ritual，各个角色天赋里“唤醒体自身提供的xxx属性”表述不一致，阿红这里是Sorel’s own米粒是Awakener（读着不太对），克莱的读着比较舒服或许可以按她的表述统一一下（
加油ps.羊妈觉醒翻译很惊艳孩子很喜欢

[paper knot]

羊妈专造[一回合打出3张羊妈指令卡触发xx效果]英文描述似乎没有强调[羊妈的]指令卡（

[wanton pasture]

subtitle from Arc 1 ED song doesn't match the actual lyric

[velvet thunder]

Thank you, Keeper. This issue has been fixed in yesterday's update.

[velvet thunder]

Thank you for your feedback, Keeper! We are paying close attention to every suggestion here and they will be addressed in future updates.

[noble moat]

Polycus ?
that's Pollux, right ?

[marsh cedar]

sorry if this has been said already but in this chat it says "first off" and "second off" like the two sentences are connected when they're different options

[wanton pasture]

the term "Aliemus" is most likely a mistranslation from Chat-GPT (it handle Chinese-English, afaik, very poorly)
the correct term should be "Alienus", a latin word meaning "insane" or "mad", which is (probably) the reason why the term occasionally translated into "Madness" or "Frenzy" by Chat-GPT in old translations
https://en.wiktionary.org/wiki/alienus

[velvet thunder]

Hello, Keeper! The term “Aliemus” is indeed derived from the latin word “Alienus”. This specific spelling was designated by our lead narrative designer (so were most of the other terms like “Enlighten”, “Arithmetica”, “Exalt”, “Rouse” etc).

When we started our human English localization efforts, some of these terms were adjusted, while most stayed the way they are.

The term “Aliemus” will probably stay because this is the way our narrative designer intended it to be, and because a lot of people are already using it. We will continue to correct issues where “Aliemus” is wrongly translated into “Madness” or “Sanity”!

Also, while I’m here:

We’ve been recording issues reported in this channel daily, and here are some quick updates:

Tawil and Horla’s skill names will be optimized in a future update for better player experience. We’re also adjusting other skill names with similar readability issues.

Another big batch of gameplay-related corrections and unifications is on the way—thank you for your patience and valuable feedback, Keepers!

Translation issues in story text, text messages, and birthday mails have also been noted. These will be fixed a little later, once we’re mostly done with the gameplay adjustments. (Gameplay stuff will still be continuously optimized after that date should the need arise)
Currently most of the story stuff is still GPT translation, but we’re trying to correct terms whenever we can. It’s taking some time, but we’re getting there!

We’ll share more details on these in the second issue of English Localization Notes, with new progress, new glossaries, and a roadmap on future localization improvements plans!

[wanton pasture]

also don't forget to rest well-

[midnight flume]

They really should just choose one lol, I sometimes got confused with the places

[wanton pasture]

it's chat gpt fault

[midnight flume]

I hope they can finally hire an actual human translator, that will reduce many translation errors

[wanton pasture]

they're already hiring Ace, we're slowly getting human translations (and it's pretty good too, I was expecting quality to be 70% satisfied but it's 90% satisfied so far)

[hoary canyon]

if they choose just 1 word i'm slapping em. My ass needs multiple words in reference to a singular thing. I hope to good in cn it's also at least a couple of names in reference to things.

its completely fine if the rest of the writing can properly make you realize that that's what theyre talking about

books do this all the time. And my ass doesn't want an another baby ass hoyo, small words above made up term stolen from ancient civilisations type of situation.

almshouse - charitable housing/hospital, perfectly describes the orphanage as it... Also is... an orphanage and "takes care" of the sick. Whether the names were used in reference to different facilities in Cn. IDK

almshouse probably gets overwritten as poorhouse by Ai sometimes. Hospital is a more general term for what's done in the almshouse.

(Ch9 story is atrocious though. In regards to... names being diffrent every node)

[hasty wraith]

The Aftershock effect for Ramona’s Queen’s Sword gives Keyflare equal to the amount that would have been gained by playing the card, not the “amount of cards played”.

Also, the channel name says “mistanslation” but it’s honestly kind of cute and hilarious in a tongue-in-cheek way so I don’t think it needs to be fixed.

[wanton pasture]

dang now you mention it the typo has always been there

[velvet thunder]

Thank you, Keeper! This issue will be addressed in the upcoming update.

[velvet thunder]

Oh my. Typo eliminated!

[wanton pasture]

[worthy garnet]

can you bring it back it had some charm to it 🥺

[paper knot]

Just notice that Tawil’s skill names will be updated, here are some of my suggestions based on descriptions of Yog-Sothoth in Lovecraftian lore & impressions of Tawil in game:
Exalt: CN name for her exalt is “万物归一”，which directly refers to Yog-Sothoth as a well-known alternative name (exp. “The man of Truth has ridden to All-Is-One” in “Through the gates of sliver key”). Thus I think the English translation should be “All-is-One” or “All-in-One”, in order to make EN players recollect this connection easily.
Sliver Key Awaken card: the CN name “穿越银钥之门” is also a direct reference to HPL’s story “Through the gates of silver key”. So it may be better for the EN name to reflect the connection too. Yet the story’s name is a bit long for the in-game display, I suggest it can be abbreviated to “Through the silver gates” (however this may cause some misunderstanding) or “Through the Ultimate Gate” (in HPL’s story Yog-Sothoth lies behind what called “the Ultimate Gate”, to which the silver key was a passport, so I think this may be a valid substitution).

[paper knot]

OE: CN name “无限亿万光辉” may refer to a description of Yog-Sothoth derived from descriptions like “an All-in-One and One-in-All of limitless being and self” & “a congeries of iridescent globes”. (I think this is a term created by CN Lovecraftian community since it is well-known but seems to have no direct reference in HPL’s works.) Thus may be a translation like “Limitless Iridescent Presence (or Brilliance/Omnipresence? not very sure here) suits here.
Edit: another thought about the translation of OE is take some Kabbalistic lore here. The concept of “光辉” (omnipotent light) has a name “Ohr” in Kabbalistic mysticism, which describes the divine emanation of transcendent encompassing light by God. Since there are connection between Tawil and Kabbalistic mysticism concept (Chochmah-Daath) in game too, I think names like “Limitless/Transcendent Ohr” are also suitable.

[paper knot]

Skill names: for the card “纵贯时序之翼” (“Timestrung Pinions Unfurled” in the current translation), I’m not sure whether the difference between “pinions” and “wings” (in derived cards) is intended, but since CN version uses the same character “翼”, maybe change them all to “wings” let players understand better.
Also I guess the word “timestrung” is from string theory or some modern physics? Maybe that’s a little bit unusual in a Lovecraftian game for me HPL himself used words like “cosmic continua & transdimensional & coexistent with all time and coterminous with all space”… maybe a more blurred and mystical description fits Tawil better here. (Come up with “Wings of Time Contiuum” myself but not satisfied…just a suggestion xD

[paper knot]

As for the card “通晓万物之理”（”Master of Omniscient Verity” in the current translation)，I guess “verity” is a word not familiar to some players. Since Tawil and Ramona have something in common, and Ramona’s title “知者” in CN version have vague reference to Gnosticism tradition, I wonder if we can use “gnosis” to describe the concept of truth/knowledge here (while the term gnosis also used in ecogs, think we can have some overall resonance by doing so).

[velvet thunder]

Thank you for your suggestions, Keeper!❤️

[wanton pasture]

In "Character" section of "Archive", "莫测之物" were translated to "Unpredictable Object"
While "物" has literal translation is "Object", the noun can also mean "Thing", "Being", "Entity" depends on the context.
For example, a common Chinese noun "萬物" has literal translation of "ten thousand objects", the actualy meaning is "all things" (usually translated as "all creations" by English translators)
The characters indexed in 莫测之物/Unpredictable Object section were also prominent characters in Morimens, and so far none of them fit the "Object" definition
In short, I think the correct translation is "Unpredictable Being/Entity"

[steep ether]

Unfathomable Entity

Unfathomable > Unpredictable

[wanton pasture]

[worthy garnet]

this part from Pandia's wheel of destiny feels like something that shouldn't be there
edit: nevermind, seems like it's what's in the original chinese textx

[hasty wraith]

Just some feedback on the Tawil and Horla skill name changes...

"The Silver Key", "Omniscient Verity", and "Pinions of Time" sound fine. Please consider changing her wings back to "Dual Wings" → "Tetrad Wings" → "Hexad Wings". If the previous names were too long then "Ascendant", "Revealed", and "in Glory" can simply be omitted. "Twin Wings" → "Four Wings" → "Six Wings" is both inconsistent (Twin instead of Two) and overly literal/simplistic.

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For Horla, changing "Threnody" to "Psalm" is understandable, but please consider rearranging the skill names to "Psalm of X". Another problem is that a psalm is a type of poem/song and the words chosen are also a type of poem/song. The new names combine two variations of the same thing to produce something that doesn't really make sense, like "Cappuccino Espresso".

Horla's PvP cards are easy:
Death Psalm → Psalm of Death
Soul Psalm → Psalm of Souls
Life Psalm → Psalm of Life

For her PvE cards, I would take a step back. "Snarl Psalm" sounds so unnatural that it could be mistaken for a mistranslation. Elegies and dirges both express lament over the dead. Carols can technically mean "happy songs", but at this point it feels like these names were chosen by searching for a type of song/poem that matches an emotion then adding "Psalm" to it. I would suggest simply using the emotion or something related to it instead.

Snarl Psalm → Psalm of Delirium / Frenzy
Elegy Psalm → Psalm of Lament / Sorrow
Carol Psalm → Psalm of Triumph / Joy
Dirge Psalm → Psalm of Foreboding / Shadows

I've intentionally avoided using the "Anger", "Grief", "Happiness", and "Fear" since that seemed like a conscious decision.

[undone cedar]

Your suggestion is pointless because if you put the same word “psalm” at the beginning the cards are impossible to read again

Like they obviously decided to change this so the first alphabet is different. If the cards all start with psalm, we’ll only see a bunch of Ps when we have like 12 cards in our hand 😭

[hasty wraith]

That's a fair point, but there's still room for improvement. Something like Sorrowful Psalm makes more sense than Elegy Psalm.

There is no way a native English speaker is going to look at "Snarl Psalm" and think it sounds right.

[undone cedar]

It happens all the time though, sometimes to make the UI work they gotta do this. Like it’s pretty obvious they intentionally picked shorter words so they’d fit.

They should actually redesign the cards

So the cards have more space for longer names

[hasty wraith]

The new names for Tawil's cards don't even fit.

[undone cedar]

So are most of the names

I remember flare and a couple others asked for tawil cards change then the moment they said they’ll change them other people started saying we prefer the current one lmao

[hasty wraith]

I agree on the readability issue.

[undone cedar]

The cards having the exact same background art is really not helping

Like i remember the entire english channel were saying how they hated twin wings hexad wings tetrad wings

And it looked like everyone wanted twin four six😭

I guess it happens. Im fine with both i just dont want them to keep changing the names over and over again

[hasty wraith]

twin four six doesn't make sense for the reason I mentioned
two four six would at least be a consistent naming convention

and to be fair– dual, tetrad, and hexad is also inconsistent since dual has latin roots while tetrad/hexad have greek roots. it would be "dyad" for consistency but I'm not going to suggest that 😂

the path of least resistance here would be "Twin Wings" → "Two Wings"

[hasty wraith]

I can see your point about the initial letters in a large hand. The other half of my feedback still applies.

Delirium/Frenzy Psalm, Mourning/Mournful Psalm, Joyful Psalm, and Foreboding Psalm still make more sense than the current names.

I'm not partial to the exact words being used. The current names fundamentally don't make sense and the main improvement they have over the previous names is that they fit and have different first letters, which is a low bar to settle for.

[dusty arch]

For casiah overexalt it says after playing 10 command cards of casiah i gain strenght but it's suppose to be the next 10 command cards of casiah that gain strenght

[slow spade]

also "this aliemus dmg instance" should just be exalt dmg instance x2, aliemus dmg may confuse people

[wanton pasture]

correct translation for Bonape should be Pohnpei

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Pohnpei

Pohnpei is the closest location to R'lyeh/Lemuria (according to Rl'yeh's coordinate in Cthulhu Mythos)

another possible translation is Ponape, which is the fictional version of Pohnpei, used in various Cthulhu Mythos works penned by Lin Carter or Augusta Derleth in Cthulhu Cycle

this wheel of destiny's name is probably a reference to "Anatomy of Criticism" penned by Northrop Frye

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Anatomy_of_Criticism

[paper knot]

For this relic the effect should be “DEF obtain xxx temporary counter”. “DEF” missing here.

[atomic plinth]

@urban breach
#1350058928020656178 message

[urban breach]

Thanks for the ping, I’d be willing to go through the game line by line to check translations if I get sent the text files. We can negotiate fees but I won’t ask for the exorbitant market price of a real translator.

[hoary canyon]

Go Ace, we're cheering you on

[novel sedge]

[Uvhash Chat 2] pretty sure the 2nd last line should be "I'm risking my life just for you to eat" because the current translation implies.... something completely different

[wanton pasture]

yeah, it imply our friendly local Azathoth is top which is impossible

[hoary canyon]

??? How

[wanton pasture]

😭

[cold lagoon]

im sorry i just cant take tulu seriously now when he's saying "This One" all the time

[wanton pasture]

it's cute isn't it-

[cold lagoon]

also i think there might be a mistranslation on the va's name

when i copy past the name from the chinese wiki iinto google i found the va's portfolio

https://morimens.huijiwiki.com/wiki/图鲁

and uh

https://amuleto.jp/talents/miyazonomiumi.html

maybe "Miyazono Miumi" ?

[slow spade]

what is skill:4645

[hoary canyon]

So many of the proofread lines.... feel really un-natural. combined with the issue of some of the dialogue still being cut in half, having to click again to see the rest. And some that build no intrigue and make no sense. I wont be the only one seeing ramona say "...Record the history" only to go "The history? that's a weird as statement" only to see the next line be "...erased by dissolution". from this point on i'll be fetching the actual examples that irk me and talk about em.

Albeit still thank you for the collosal translation effort

A very bandaid solution would be to have a little flashing arrow appear a the end of the lines that are continued in the next line. Or transferring the sentence over to the next line as to not leave it cut in half.

[hoary canyon]

GAHH It's SO closE WITH HOW hefty THE SENTENCES ARE THE LINES BEING SPLIT PAINS me sO bAD

[wanton pasture]

Duleolin should be Doresain?

[hoary canyon]

I'm stopping at chapter 1 node 2 for now. I have to genuinely say great job on the translated lines, and choice of words in general.

my one complaint is still for the prologue, if sentences cut off till next line, they should be cut off somewhere where it's obvious that the sentence hasn't ended.

there's a couple of places where the sentence structure has caught me off guard Ex:

"Dexter" rings a familiar bell; Ramona's surname....

it's a grammatically correct sentence, very well put. But man i had to double take since it's not

the last name "Dexter" rings a familiar bell...

This in the end isn't for me to judge, we'll have to see how it's received by other people.

[hasty vector]

the amount of event currency requested here is incorrect. It's 750 not 850.

[hoary canyon]

1-3 Distracted girl seems distracted

"next body check up in the next"

jenkin still reffered to as him

Keys in fact, do not open. The line is in reference to the trapdoor.

1-5 saying "no patron wants money wasted on fraud" is a very weird way to send the message. It's small, but these small, slightly strange sentences stack up. Even more this time since it's almost right after Ramona's out of nowhere deduction about Jenkin's. the latter is just how the story is. it be what it be.

I will in-twine couple of compliments. BECAUSE DANG MAN. DATS THE STUFF. Skeletons plural. In twined for meeting Rogers. Clever

i do wonder how much i'm complimenting the GPT but still. The choice to keep or edit parts is worth admiring

[hoary canyon]

1-9 final line is "tell you about these heals" Loud huh? buzzer

[hoary canyon]

hurted 1-12

[hoary canyon]

1-15. I'm guessing this is supposed to be the name of the workhouse.

[hoary canyon]

I've stopped before ch2. Since ace did day there's gonna be a fix.

Is this even helpfull? Should I go ahead and do some more free labor and read ch2?

[loud plaza]

Oh I didn't notice there was a channel dedicated to this. I opened a thread in QA, but I'll post here instead. I haven't been keeping track of all the mistakes since 1-1... but I'll be posting here regularly I think.

"In the eternal chaos, a pale, lidless eye's gaze is unrelenting." Is probably what I'd go with. Unless the original meant an empty eye socket, but I can't imagine that's the case since they call it pale.

[velvet thunder]

We are sorry this new UI design is troubling you, Keeper! I am working with our UX designer to see what I can do to improve your reading experience. I’ve opened an issue on this and we will try to fix this issue once we have the manpower

[velvet thunder]

Sorry, Keeper! This issue along with a couple other instances of wrong gender code/characters like Jenkin/24 being referred to as “he” has been partially fixed in yesterday’s hotfix and we are catching the rest in an upcoming update

[steep ether]

Will we see another localization note soon?
And great work btw, we appreciate it 🙏

[storm bolt]

friend found this in 2-12

[velvet thunder]

Thank you for your invaluable feedback, Keeper!

Initially, we aimed to fix and redo the main story chapters as quickly as possible so more Keepers could enjoy the story. However, we realized we didn’t leave ourselves enough time to catch every issue before the update went live, and some problems still remain.

We’re now dedicating our efforts to continuous hotfixes and translation improvements. This has been a learning experience for us, and we’ve decided to slow down the pace of releasing main story localization updates moving forward.
When we announce that a chapter’s translation has been updated, we want you to find revisiting it worth your time and truly enjoy the story as intended. We will do everything we can to not let you down. Thank you so much for your patience and support! ❤️

[velvet thunder]

We are working on it!

[wanton pasture]

another Doresain mistranslation in case you missed

[velvet thunder]

Looking into this! Currently we still have to mtl first for development/UI testing purposes, then we replace mtl with human version. It seems sometimes that replacement fails. We will hotfix and update you on our progress soon!

[wanton pasture]

it's from his reproduction frenzy
anw thanks for your hard works

[velvet thunder]

Aaahhh I think I know why that happened now… previously some of the Chinese lines in his reproduction frenzy had his Chinese name 杜勒赛因 misspelled as 杜勒塞因, my colleague fixed it by editing the Chinese lines.
I was supposed to re-upload the corresponding human translation in time. I forgot so the mtl resurfaced for those lines
I’ll make sure these get fixed in the earliest hotfix patch

[loud plaza]

Does anyone know who we should contact if we want to volunteer for helping with the English localization?

[native plume]

Is this meant to be a bit confusing? "Guests" and "visitors" is usually synonymous. Is "visitors" supposed to be "proprietors," "owners," or "curators" maybe?

Either "sweetie" or "honey" is incorrect, since Jenkin is supposed to be repeating what Pandia said? Pandia says "sweetie" again later, so "honey" is probably the incorrect one.

[native plume]

Judging by the clock bell sound attached to this line, it should be "Bong—Bong—Bong—"

[loud plaza]

I made a thread volunteering to help with the English translation. Maybe that way we can get in touch with one of the developers. All the easily fixable typos, wrong pronouns, inconsistent terms, etc make the nitpicker in me want to curl up and cry.

[native plume]

I'd wonder how they get through, except... I write, and I'm very careful, yet every time I reread what I've already posted, there are always more typos, skipped words, and mis-autocorrections that I missed before. 🥲

[loud plaza]

Yeah, it's why it's important to have someone else proofread, since we train our brains to skim over text we know well and end up letting things slip.

In this case it's mostly because this is a ChatGPT translation that got touched up a bit by volunteers.

And the developers don't seem very comfortable with the language, or have the budget to hire a professional localization team.

[native plume]

Tbh, a volunteer proofreader team of fans would probably improve even the most professional translation, since fans are obsessive and don't have deadlines.

[native plume]

mice -> rats, since the previous page of this event said rats

[undone cedar]

They do have like one single professional localizer

But there are tons of GPT translations left

The best translation so far is probably Agrippa and Uvhash’s short event story, shows what they can do when they have the time and budget

I think they just started inviting volunteers? Theres like one single volunteer so far, who helped them with miryam side story, but i heard they’ll be recruiting more soon @native plume

Liz Side Story, Agrippa & Uvhash event, Gdoll & doresain voicelines read better than the rest

[velvet thunder]

Yes, We have the volunteers project ready and the formal announcement will be made on Monday!

[velvet thunder]

Thank you so much for your thoughtful feedback, Keeper! I am currently working to properly check everything in the first three chapters again.
We promised to deliver Prologue - Chapter 3 human translation this patch. Then I got accidentally hospitalized for a week and ended up crunching to make up for it. We will make sure to not rush things like this again. Main story translation updates will be released slower as we aim for higher quality.
Currently, Prologue - Chapter 1 is somewhat more polished (there's still some issues - we're on it!), Chapter 2-3 is eh, and everything after Chapter 3 is entirely GPT. We're striving to make the first 3 chapters actually good next patch.

[native plume]

Oof, sorry to hear you got hospitalized!

[storm bolt]

Stage 7-7

[torpid sluice]

Not sure if this is the right thread, but I noticed the Tentacle DMG tags are broken for Goliath and Tulu, similar issues with Miryam and Salvador

[elfin nova]

Assorted awkward phrasing in the Miryam dreamscape:
Prophecy:

might sound better as 'leaving her in' or 'leaving her with'

precipitous and shivering typo, pours down

maybe just my brain but i'm having a hard time making sense of this

should be crumples

this might be accurate but 'when awake' doesn't really make sense to me. is it supposed when born?

not a translation problem, but i think it'd sound better as 'calling upon deities' instead of 'calling upon the deities'.

should be 'he never manifests himself for her. Still, she can do nothing but pray.'

though it might sound better with but instead of still

not sure what stones creaking to fall should be

should be trembles

the pillar cracks apart

embraced or embraces

idk how to explain why but this sounds unnatural to me

only by relying on the lord's generosities

past tense, then present

[hidden palm]

can put it in here too https://discord.com/channels/1131791637933199470/1180845276823564288

[elfin nova]

did you fall asleep?

i was just thinking of the past, or i was just reminiscing

maybe its how enos speaks, but i feel like it'd be more natural as 'weren't fond of these topics back at home. I can't help but wonder if you're not interested...'

i think it should be 'thinks' instead of wonders?

than their own

chance for her to become to become a high priestess in the future

a grand honor like that

stopping by

hear, admit, open

past then present tense

i think it should be eyes>

a gaze mixing

grown indifferent to

she is just tired

didn't have the fortune to serve as a priest

hands wre never absent

on his robe and flows like a river

permitted an audience

silences the congregation

i think this is meant to be awestruck?

wouldn't

disappearing

be back here with it in seven days

inform them of

[urban breach]

This is what happens when a dictionary is used for translations instead of actual knowledge regarding the native usage frequency and applicability of words in a way that sufficiently conveys both denotation and connotation.

[storm bolt]

found this one in Miryam's trial

[native plume]

this is a great example of a problem that's probably not under the control of those who edit the text, but should be simple to fix for whoever works on the interface: the weird spacing comes from a setting for text display called "justify," which forces paragraphs to have perfectly even sides and mangles the word and letter spacing to accomplish it

[noble moat]

uh, that looks more like "TentaclePowere" should be "TentaclePower" for it to be parsed properly.
The main problem is not the "and 13" being stretched.

(also those who edit the text have said that they could do or ask the devs to do a lot of things regarding text layout)

[native plume]

I know that's not the main problem being pointed out in that screenshot, it just happens to be a really good example of an unrelated problem

[noble moat]

I mean even then, the problem is that you have an extremely long string with no word boundaries in it (and the justify wasn't set to split it) which makes the remainder of the line be stretched out.

It's the fault of a word that's the size of a line in this context (& not setting for the word break), more than the text being justify-ed

[velvet thunder]

Thank you for your input, Keeper!
Yes, I've been communicating with our UI team to change all justified paragraphs to left-aligned for better reading experience;
They currently have a lot to work on, but we are always recording issues like this to fix them over time

There are also instances of texts overlapping/being cutoff after v2.3.0's update. And that one issue where the story text linebreaks are being funny interrupting reading experience. We're on it!

[velvet thunder]

Hello Keeper,

I'm truly sorry the current Miryam story translation hasn't met your expectations.
We're immensely grateful for our first volunteer translator, who polished and edited some parts of the story.
However, other sections are still unedited machine translations. We picked up where our volunteer left off and proofread what we could, but we unfortunately ran out of time before finishing this round.

We take full responsibility for the quality of the translation. While our volunteer has been a great help, any quality issues ultimately fall on us.
We will be introducing the volunteer localization program soon and bring in more volunteers (thank you!), but we won't ever shy from this responsibility.

We'll be thoroughly reading every piece of feedback and are committed to continuously improving this, and all other story texts.
Thank you again for your valuable feedback!

[urban breach]

No worries Ace, I have full faith they tried their best. Translation is no easy work.

[native plume]

I've seen it before with normal words that happen to be long.
I guess it works well with hanzi. It's interesting how the differences between alphabetical and character-based languages affect UI. ^_^

[velvet thunder]

New translation fixes Thank you for your patience, Keepers!

[mossy apex]

Chapter names for normal mode and hard mode arc 2 ch3 are translated differently

[paper knot]

The UI for team info-Realm Mastery is broken (cannot scroll up and down)

[hidden palm]

Another UI problem with challenge

[paper knot]

description overlapped

[native plume]

(Veilles is my character name)

[native plume]

Unless it's alluding to a specific person, it should probably be "their existence" and "They have never been in this world." (It might be period-accurate to default to "he," "him," etc. in written works, but to actually capture that vibe you'd have to heavily change almost all text in the game.)

Opinion: change "researching some topics" to "researching certain topics" to make it sound more natural. (It's hard to explain why. "Some" in that particular context just feels too casual, like he's saying "to join him in shopping for some shoes.")

[native plume]

"I have fully grasped your story, so..." would be better as something like "Now that I've heard your whole story..."

If I could rewrite this line, I'd make it something like "We make their dreams come true by sculpting them in wax."

their -> her? I'm not sure. Does Jenkin remember what clothes Mason wore? I thought she didn't, but who would they be?

Leigh's name shouldn't be visible that soon

[velvet thunder]

Got it! Thank you for always helping us ❤️ .
Currently a lot of the machine translations still have this issue with pronouns and gendered titles. They're using a wrong outdated rich text tag developed for chinese. we're replacing them with the new one specifically made for English asap!

[hidden palm]

Glad to see new methods being introduced, still, if they are changing the machine parameters or programs for the translation, I suggest to, potentially, use the proofreading volunteers before pushing the updated translation in the larger scale.

[paper knot]

cannot preview the upgrade data for this relic (base DMG is increased “by 15%/30%”, the last line is missing)

[storm bolt]

This should be Rose Script, right?

[native plume]

nah, scrip is a real word for currency
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Scrip

[storm bolt]

that's a surprise

[native plume]

(yellow is my highlight)
no clickable link

[hidden palm]

it is reported, will be fixed

[velvet thunder]

Hello Keeper, we just fixed this issue in today’s update

Today’s fix mainly focused on the pronoun/title issues. We will continue updating the quality of story translations!

[velvet thunder]

Hello Keeper, we are striving to fix these UI issues asap!

[torpid sluice]

In chapter 6, the Utopian Veil card has a broken tag and odd punctuation (double periods)

Salvador has an issue with the Crit Rate value and Crimson Furnace tag

[torpid sluice]

Relatively minor, but there are missing spaces in Doresain’s Exalt description, and I think the derived card should be Evernight’s Revel

[torpid sluice]

In 24’s Exalt description, there’s an extra colon and overlapping/unreadable text

The Psyche Surge levels preview has untranslated text at the bottom. This seems to apply to all characters

[native plume]

in cases like this, "Sigh, shortcuts" should be "[Sigh.] Shortcuts"
it can be argued that putting "sigh" inside the dialogue isn't meant to be taken literally and is just a style quirk (Genshin and some other professionally translated games do it too), but that doesn't make it look less silly (because no one says "sigh")
ideally, all non-dialogue text would be in brackets []
(I'd be more than willing to do that work if I had access)

[torpid sluice]

Thais Strike card says “Strength” instead of using the STR tag

[languid creek]

Faros' Ocean of Elation has this keyword mistake on it

[torpid sluice]

Aberrant Devour mentions both “Clown” and “Jester” but should be standardized to use the same term

[native plume]

since this is an alternate version of England, "Mom" should probably be "Mum"

[native plume]

to apply to both the male and female Keeper, "is not gentlemanly" could be changed to "is uncouth"

-> "My secrets? What are you referring to?"

[pseudo lava]

I think it's supposed to be 'hide event' not 'hidden event' right ?

[torpid sluice]

I think mixing British English spelling into the translation might be more confusing since I haven't noticed it being used in general

[native plume]

good point

[native plume]

Today I learned several east Asian cultures have a thing about sneezing when someone is talking about you behind your back. It might also be part of Greek culture, and there are hints in my searches that it might be worldwide to some extent. Anyone else heard of this?

[wooden cliff]

I'm in Canada and it's pretty common here

[languid creek]

yes this is in British and American English as well, it's just a little archaic but far from unheard of

[native plume]

formatting weirdness

Ahh, so it's just something I managed to miss. ^_^

[hasty vector]

when clicking on Chapter 2 in Astral Reign story arc while its not unlocked, the message says "I need to complete chapter 2, to unlock chapter 2" in a nutshell. It should say I need to clear the last stage of chapter 1, no?

[native plume]

I do know children referring to themselves by name is a thing specific to east Asian countries. Elsewhere, it's really weird. To be fair, Lily is weird...

Similarly, westerners don't really speak to children this way (using their name as if they're speaking about the child to someone else) unless they're trying to be extremely condescending.

[storm quarry]

Seems to be a minor error in faros' card

[wanton pasture]

its 3rd person speech, japanese children often used this kind of speech when they were still elementary afaik

[native plume]

Yep. That's what I was referring to.

"Bitten by what?" ?
Only equivalent I can think of right now is "Where's the fire?"--a jokey response to someone being alarmed.

[wanton pasture]

overall its normal here lol, most of asian did refer themselves with their name instead of I (tho they use both), i guess only japanese go all the way through and use 3rd person

[native plume]

Ahh, I understand now. Thanks for letting me learn about that difference. ^_^

[novel sedge]

YAHOO!

tq Localization team!

[undone cedar]

https://discord.com/channels/1131791637933199470/1405864369371349072

Full post is here

[deep osprey]

small error:

[noble moat]

Sacred Mending / Special Healing

[loud plaza]

The button on the top left says "Misssion Report"~

[zealous folio]

In traphase, "stagnation" is applied and text shows "stanation" with no "g"

[hoary canyon]

Stan nation

[rancid crypt]

The boss’s description from 2-4 and an enemy’s description from 2-5 are cut off at the end

[velvet thunder]

Known Issue
there's a rich text tag error in Kathigu-Ra's About the Keeper line - we'll fix this along with issues mentioned in player feedback above asap in an upcoming hotfix!

[elfin nova]

Not sure if I should post this here or in qna, but so far, the text scroll doesn't rescroll, which makes the beginning of long lines impossible to read since it scrolls so fast. This isn't an issue in most of the game since you can read the log, but in the prologue, you can't access the log, so I noticed a few lines that were cut off. Can go back and find where in the prologue if that helps

[hidden palm]

Yeah, the scrolling think is useful but you some times just can't read it, you said the it was a problem implementing the scrolling?

[marsh cedar]

Is the development team looking for additional fluent English speakers to help with translating the story's dialogue/prose? I've loved the game, but the quality of the translation is very poor from chapter three onward. I'm a writer and an English expert, and I'd be happy to help smooth out the dialogue + paragraph sections to read more naturally/be less confusing.

If you're not looking for additional help, no worries! I'll look forward to when the translation is further along. :")

[elfin nova]

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[marsh cedar]

Submitted! Thank you. :D

[elfin nova]

np!

[elfin compass]

"ralic"

also agree that sometimes it still scrolls too quickly on the multi-line entries. if you could scroll back up like elsewhere in the game it'd be fine, but otherwise the implementaion feels wonky

[native plume]

autoscrolling is just a bad idea for any language that isn't really fast to read

[hoary canyon]

The scrolling text issue was solved by visual novels years ago. Just display the text that fits. Then tap again to scroll to the next part.

[hidden palm]

Different text for the Gluttony R wheel option

[velvet thunder]

Hi Keeper! I talked to our UX designer: She said the scrolling speed issue thing is a bug and they’re fixing it

[hoary canyon]

i'd still like the discussion to be "2 lines are displayed by the texbox maximum. So per tap, we scroll down a max of 2 lines, So If a line is more then 2 lines, it takes more taps to get through. Also after the scroll, there should be a 0.05-0.2 second delay before the input to scroll is taken again" It's how Vn's have done it for eternity in english

Kathyguras event currently holds dialogue that is 6-7 lines long per node. Which is absurd. there's one where 2 paragraphs are one message. Inevitably with the penmanship of morimens, this sort of thing is inevitable, And i would like the universally accepted solution for it.

[smoky dove]

Beer:Beer

[hidden palm]

UI overlap

[deep osprey]

It's 'lady Daffodil'.

[steep ether]

Idk if this count as mistranslation
but this is Miryam banner hidden texts
somehow it appears on Horla banner (guess Horla is secretly an Aequor)

[night grail]

[ios] Info for Team Mastery leaves the screen and scrolling is impossible

Don’t know what the correct translation is, but „Path Forsaken“ and „Team Unique“ sound weird

Favor: American english
Favour: British english
Not sure how it’s done in Morimens, but usually things are translated into British english

[native plume]

That's not true, many things are translated into American English.
British English would be nice for flavo(u)r, though.

[night grail]

From my experience the international standard is British English

Not saying that nothing is in American English, I’m just saying that most is in British English (why is auto correct capitalizing everything aaaaaaaaaaaaaa)

Not sure if the rest didn’t fit so there are those 2 dots or if there is just one too many on accident

Change but to and as there is no contradiction whatsoever, also I would leave the word instead out

Change will to can as it doesn’t need to happen, it just gives the player the ability to exalt twice

Would change „choose one“ next to prerequisite to something like „one needs to be fulfilled“ or „fulfill at least one“

[native plume]

FWIW, all the Chinese gacha games I've played use American English.

[night grail]

Ok

[noble moat]

Morimens uses American english

[torpid sluice]

I've also played many gacha games and they all default to American English. I agree it would be neat to see British English, but it's not really the standard

[torpid sluice]

Path Forsaken fits in a flowery/dramatic way imo. Team Unique does sound clunky, but idk what would be an improvement. Actually, I'm not entirely sure what Team Unique means

[night grail]

Team Unique prolly means that it affects the entire team and not just the unit holding the wheel

[torpid sluice]

That's kinda what I assumed, but in Path Forsaken, it says it only affects the wielder. So Team Unique doesn't seem to make sense there

Okay I just checked and Team Unique is on every card. I think it's closer to "Unique Skill" in meaning

[night grail]

agree

weird that that is even there to begin with as its clear with all the wheels that those are the skills

[native plume]

maybe it means if you put the same wheel on 2+ team members it only takes effect once?

[vocal haven]

yes, Team Unique means that the effect is unique across the entire team (i.e., you cannot equip the same wheel twice on different characters to double the effect)

[night grail]

then it would be better to write that into the tutorial page for "Wheel of Destiny" and just remove the "Team unique" part from the wheels cus that is confusingly written + writing that into every wheel seems like unnecessary repetitive information

[torpid sluice]

Agreed. Wheels are already grayed out when they're duplicated within a team, so the descriptor doesn't add much value

[hoary canyon]

...wheel with same effect like... like fucking +2 hand size...

Works only with... 1 of the wheels... but you can equip two...

I think it's the end of translation opinions "guys I hate that in a new game I don't know a term that I don't know" is the end.

I do think... it should be treated as a keyword with explanation. Because of its existence outside of wheels.

The covenants are the only reason I learnt of what it does

Which is... fine by me.

[night grail]

nice ragebait

[hoary canyon]

I Mean hey, the middle was rude. But the keyword has a point in passives like the one of "further evolution".

Who knows maybe we'll have some wheels with repeat pasived and diffrent secondary effects one day. The keyword is there, the devs already planned for the option.

I gotta play devils advocate when someone gives feedback, with a solution idea. when the devs probably didn't add the words without intent.

[zealous folio]

2th -> 2nd

[velvet thunder]

Hello, Keepers!

About Team Unique:

Yes, "Team Unique" is directly translated from 队伍唯一 and it's supposed to mean "you can only have one of this Wheel in your team", like in WOW TCG.
I just asked our producer Light about this. You guys are right: since the game's default rule already prevents equipping duplicate Wheels (by graying them out), the "Team Unique" text is redundant and only causes unnecessary confusion.

We will** remove 队伍唯一 (translted into Team Unique) from Wheel descriptions in a future update**. Thank you so much for pointing this out!
@night grail @torpid sluice @vocal haven @hoary canyon

I'm not sure which update yet, but we're on it

[torpid sluice]

Thanks, I appreciate the update!

[neat turret]

Speaking of templating changes for Wheels of Destiny...!
I think the R Wheels could have a clearer boundary between their effects in act 1 content vs. act 2 content.

    [full line break]
In "Astral Reign" Stages: {get dimensional image relic}.```
-# oh! and I gotta make sure I tell you you're awesome today ![LUV](https://cdn.discordapp.com/emojis/1003188300036702229.webp?size=128 "LUV")

[night grail]

The text is so long that I cannot accurately see how long I have until the storage is full. Sure, not the biggest issue ever since I can still see the hours remaining, but it shouldn’t be that way nonetheless

[unique delta]

So I just installed the game on another pc, and it looks like ALL the flavor texts during installation is still based on GPT translation, which is quite bad (Misagga university instead of Mythag, Corrosion instead of Dissolution etc etc... and I don't think silver core source liquid and rhombohedral silver core are correct either)

Since it's the first introduction to the game while waiting during installation, it would be nice to make sure they're correctly translated

[night grail]

Shouldn’t the bonus increase instead of decrease when the attributes grow?

[hoary canyon]

they possibly mean that it's diminishing returns, a soft cap. elabortaon is needed

[hidden palm]

Yeah, having a vague explanation on something that one can invest quite a lot is a bit annoying, should be clarified at least in the glossary guide

[robust perch]

small mistranslation after the boss battle in 7-10, ryker says "I was" instead of "It was"

[hoary canyon]

every sentence in the last 2 messages doesn't really make sense. What is it in cn.

Since you know. Thais gives us the seed in the story. So you makes sense. To some extent.

[night grail]

Uhhh what

What happens to the poison? Like do I poison for a certain amount, do I trigger it, what’s going on?

Upon playing this card, a message appears next to the fielded character which reads „+1 Arithmetica Limit“ when it should be „-1 []“ instead

[hoary canyon]

should be "the card triggers an additional 2 times" if i'm not mistaken grieving ink does that for every one of the cards except the strikes. so it's also a bit of a wasted description that could be in the status effect o given by the ult

[night grail]

When dying you get the option to "Retry" or to "Temporary retreat". I suggest changing it to just "Retreat" since temporary doesn't mean anything here, it's just a normal retreat.

[night grail]

I suppose that Obtain means Draw here but I’m not sure

[night grail]

Text does not fit into the box

[zealous folio]

Using

[hidden palm]

Wrong text in the wheel

should be STR equal to the wielder ATK

[unique delta]

I'm confused about this part in Horla's event story, on the first stage "Home", showing Nymphea speaking, but on the context I'd believe it's rather Hannah saying this sentence? Like she's willing to pay for the poems, not Nymphea. But even on screen it shows it's Nymphea's turn speaking and Hannah greyed out when this line appears.
And if "if you have it" refers to the poems, then it should be "if you have them, I'd be willing to pay a high price for them."

[loud plaza]

C h a l l e n g
e

[night grail]

isnt Challenge correct english?

[hoary canyon]

The line break is silly.

#1412857053671850156 message

[night grail]

same with the one for the numerals, like they dont need to be alone in a new row

[green mango]

pikeman and kuangxiang 🙂‍↕️

[night grail]

First message from keeper sound straight outta some mtl manhua

Should be translated as „up!“. This happens no matter what wheel/ realm I choose and is only the case for the standard banners. All other banners have it translated correctly and it was also fine for the standard banners until this update

[hoary canyon]

3-11. Mismatching words in Lines.

i'm mostly posting this in regards to check in on the promise of chapters 1-3 having more refined translation this update stated in the #1405864369371349072 .
Will changes come in a hotfix mid update? Next patch? WILL WE GET MORE NOTES TO SEND MORE LOVE TO ACE. Are they doing well? many questions.

[night grail]

Achievement description always cut off

[vocal haven]

I think Ch1-3 is still WIP currently, but as of this patch I believe the prologue should be fully edited, and the entirety of Ch4 should now be fully updated with a refined edit/translation done by a human

if you happen to be revisiting the story, please let me know if you find anything off or incorrect in chapter 4 so I can make sure it gets fixed!

[hoary canyon]

Aight thank youuuuuu

i'd still prefer a full front to back translation, rather then this back and forth of checking TL as the audience. Makes it still impossible to recommend the game to peeps

[vocal haven]

I definitely get where you're coming from, but it is an in-progress project so it may take a bit to be fully done

I will definitely try to get all of act 1 done in its entirety within the next couple of patches though

[steep ether]

wishing you and the team all the best

also can I ask about Sorel wheel english name?

[vocal haven]

do you mean being listed ingame as "By Rose Alone" instead of the original of "In the Name of the Rose"?

[steep ether]

By Roses Alone is not very good in my eyes
since her wheel is a reference to In The Name of Rose (a murder mystery, fitting with her story)
By Roses Alone is not really fit

[vocal haven]

I believe that was a conscious decision done by Ace and team quite some time ago (long before I started playing, unfortunately)
I'm unclear as to the specific reason myself, you would have to ask Ace to confirm

[steep ether]

sounds like a lot of works need to be done
hopes all goes well

I’m excited to re-experience the story again with new translation

[steep ether]

thank you for your explanation 🙏

[hoary canyon]

Nah i mean as in not just proofreading the AI and then selectively changing Lines. I mean front to back as in, line by line. Because hoooleeee when the ai line randomly hits, immersion plummets

still good job 0^0/

[hoary canyon]

Read 4-1 and 4-2 No notes. Fucking incredible Unironically

really good

[vocal haven]

[hoary canyon]

Oounfolds

[native plume]

Oounfolds

[hidden palm]

do they give you a time estimate on when the submitted reports will get addressed? just to know

[vocal haven]

You'd have to ask Ace on timeline/estimates, I don’t think we're in a position to say

[green mango]

from pickmans story 🙂‍↕️

[torpid sluice]

Pickman’s Wheel has broken tags

Salvador’s Crimson Furnace tag is broken

Agrippa’s Devour description has misplaced brackets

Pickman’s SR event wheel also has a broken tag

[hidden palm]

In there exalt is still called burst

[hidden palm]

Some other errors, incomplete word in the missions

[night grail]

I think it might help to give the chapter for the first pic so it’s easier to find it. I only worked with Crowdin so far and I don’t know what the ppl behind Morimens use, but it’s probably helpful to add that

[hidden palm]

The first is Story 3-4

[hoary canyon]

More Ux Errors: The log doesnt show the full scrolling message. ch4

[hoary canyon]

scratch that, line doesnt appear in a log at all 4-8

[hoary canyon]

So... 4-8.

Idk if this input is proper, since I can't read mandarin and can't cross reference.

But man the dialogue between Doll and Herbert feels plain. They smack talk each other, but it feels like it's missing some personal pzzaazz in how they phrase their statements.

If it's how it is in cn. Then it izzz what it izzz.

Actually I'd put it as "it's hard to intuit what sort of intonation Herbert has saying most of his statements"

[hoary canyon]

4-14. Lily does in fact, have brown hair

[vocal haven]

hmm, I'll revisit it but I think I know what you're talking about and I think that same sort of feeling did come through in the original chinese text as well so it should be intended. I can probably refine it a bit though, so I'l take a look at it

[vocal haven]

yep that will be changed! was a mistranslation, was supposed to be white-clothed girl and not white-haired girl

[hoary canyon]

Outside of that, in my eyes. Great work. I await my favorite chapters 5 and 6

[deep osprey]

mistake here:

[velvet thunder]

I hear your frustration, Dom, and I'm genuinely sorry that our team hasn't been able to deliver a fully completed translation yet. We know how much this impacts your experience.

I want to be transparent: When we first launched this game on Steam, we did so with a 100% machine-translated text and no consistent terminology. We published the game this way as a last resort, as it was on the verge of EOS. We didn't have high hopes. But our amazing players decided to support us despite the very bad translation, and we were only able to survive and continue working on the game because of you. We can never thank you all enough for giving us that chance.

The good news is that the situation is improving. We're doing everything we can to get the translation to a state where you'll be proud to recommend the game to others.
Starting next week, another full-time translator will be joining me, which should significantly speed up our progress. We’re also completely re-working the entire Arc 1 story with a professional localization company, which we expect to finish around our second anniversary.

Finally, a huge thank you to our amazing volunteers like @vocal haven who recently joined to help us with this effort. Your support and patience mean the world to us.

When I joined the team five months ago, the game had over 130,000 lines of text (one million characters) that were machine-translated.
As the sole translator, I've managed to edit about 70,000 lines, though it still needs a lot of work.

A lot of the early translation decisions were not perfect. I had to work fast to get the game to a "somehow playable" state ASAP, and as you noted, some term and chapter title translations could use improvement.

[hidden palm]

P.s Are you better now?

[velvet thunder]

Yes! I'm feeling okay now.

[hoary canyon]

just like we've heard the story of the choices the dev team was forced to make many times, you've heard my same complaints a 1000. I do wanna say as always, a genuine thank you, and good job for all the work you've and the team have done, for the sake of making the game more playable, with what you have at hand. And it's wonderful to see everything rolling towards a full fledged finished product!

[native plume]

(I hadn't heard some of that before, since I started playing only a couple months ago.)

[hidden palm]

Story 3-7

[hoary canyon]

...so the current solution... to the scrolling text... is to make the text... write speed slower...

It still doesnt work with my style of reading, since my ass reads at mach speed. I always tap the screen so it writes out the whole line.

Only to be 2 lines above.

We'll keep going back and forth on this discussion. Since cutting lines at sentence end. And having no pause when displaying the next part of the sentence. Caused ya'll to make this scrolling text system.

You didnt even steal the ability to scroll up the rougelike choices have.

[steep ether]

same…

[cold lagoon]

.... um... please... have Tulu say anything else but "This one"..... I've completed chapter 9 of arc 1 then reopened the game to be met with the arc 2 trailer. I was so hyped to finally read the official translation until Tulu said "This one" ..... it killed the hype and i burst out laughing....
i want to take him seriously but ever since the english translation became "This one" i can't for the life of me take "this one" seriously.

Please let tulu say anything else for example: the royal "we", "thy", or even just "one". Anything will do

[vocal haven]

Tulu specifically uses the archaic first-person pronoun 余, which is a very formal/theatrical pronoun so "this one" is sort of the closest that English has to it

it's more of a modest/humble pronoun that has a kind of literary/cultured reflection to it, so the royal "we" doesn't quite fit since that tends to be a bit more superior/authoritative

Kathigu-Ra does use 吾 though, which is also an archaic pronoun that's more authoritative so that kind of fits the royal "we" better

(just some fun language trivia!)

[elfin nova]

another vote for this, the scrolling system makes being a fast reader a pain

i end up having to read everything through the log

[vocal haven]

everyone reads at different speeds so no matter what the scroll speed is, it's never going to work for everyone

which means the most important feature that needs to be added is simply the ability to click and drag to scroll the textbox back up if it went too fast

honestly I think 90% of the issue would be solved with just that

[hoary canyon]

yeah

tho it's still different from the VN norm, so it would still off-put peeps a bit. But the plot is worth it

[noble moat]

"Counterattack ?"

[native plume]

scrolling text is never the best solution, but if we could scroll up, I'd accept it. it's not nearly as bad as Path to Nowhere, which forces you to either wait for multiple long paragraphs to autoscroll (on the System Incidents) or skip and scroll yourself all the way back up to start reading

would be better to have options: toggle autoscrolling, set autoscrolling speed, set text box size, set font size

[hidden palm]

Her

The description is now right, tnx, but is very slightly cut to the left, and the first one formatting can maybe be optimized

[hidden palm]

From Murphy Frenzy, His

[torpid sluice]

I'm also not a fan of the scrolling text, not sure why the standard VN solution of just adding more text boxes wasn't acceptable. Adding the ability to scroll up would alleviate the issue, but it shouldn't have been that complicated in the first place imo. I just miss having the option to double tap and make all the text appear at once instead of having to wait for the auto scroll

[torpid sluice]

Tawil’s Four Wings card is missing capitalization

For Queen’s Edict, is exile of aliemus supposed to be Exalt?

[steep ether]

yeah it’s exalt

[neat turret]

so is Voices in Your Head, apparently.
May have something to do with the new STR wording.
Hopefully I get my hands on all the lines for these soon, I'll set them straight!

[velvet thunder]

Hello, yeah it would seem so... I'm on it fixing this!

Also fixed the issues mentioned above; the corrections will take effect next update!

[void topaz]

this relic says awaken when i assume it means rouse

[hidden palm]

when possible, can the description for the Chaos symbiosis effect be update for caro and fixed for aqua?
The current caro is just 35% embryo fusion when they exalt, the 2% hp on furnace was removed, and the aqua one is 1% of max hp, not 0.01%

[native plume]

3-6: Koum/Koom inconsistency and Francis's name being revealed before she introduces herself

-> Apparently you should speak up.

"life safety" is an awkward phrasing, it can just be "safety"
Also:

• I'm not sure whether this means they'll send a distress signal themselves if there's any "discomfort," or provide "you" with a distress signal you can use in case you get separated from them.
• What do they mean "leave" inventory? They're putting a supply cache somewhere? They're giving you supplies? They'll send supplies with whoever finds the distress signal?
• Does "process" refer to the expedition, or is some kind of specific, singular procedure being referred to?
• "Discomfort" is a weird word for the context. That's like if you get a headache or you're a little chilly, not for when you have an emergency that requires a distress signal and supplies.

don't -> didn't

Bless/bless -> Blessing/blessing

"However" usually isn't how someone would start a reply to another person; it's usually used for continuing your own line of thought. I almost didn't notice this line wasn't said by Cecily.
-> Elworth is remote, though, [...]

"Before reaction" -> something like "Before you can react,"

-> Fortunately, you find a frozen lake that helps you get your bearings.

[hidden palm]

I think the last thing is an error? Pickman 2nd Story "Sapient animals"

[hidden palm]

Arc2 3-6, "Dulcein"

[night grail]

Of „the“ next turn

[bitter lake]

In 5-1, should be "Be"

[bitter lake]

In Caecus's communication event, "borrow" should be "lend you"

(Also, maybe a question mark at the end, but not sure if this is supposed to be rhetorical)

[elfin compass]

what is annihilation in this context? Exalting? Posse?

[hidden palm]

is the ultra mechanic

that let you remove a card from the ultra space for an insight

[hoary canyon]

my ass didn't know that as well. it would be nice for this to have more clarity

[elfin compass]

oh right. I completely forgot about that since I don't play ultra often

[hidden palm]

well, that is not knowing the term for that realm, not much you can put in the description for that

[hoary canyon]

it's the same old feedback, of me hoping more of these mechanics having keyword pop ups

it would help avoid these missunderstandings entirely

my last run would have been so much easier if i picked the one that gives sheild on annihilation

[hidden palm]

That would be an interesting addition, if they can implement it well

[night grail]

I think it means crit rate for this turn only, a bit unclear

Keyflare equal to what

Extra Strength affix description for no reason, other cards don’t have that

[hidden palm]

plus, in the 2 cost there are 2 dots after the 15

[night grail]

btw, am I remembering it correctly, but didnt light tell us that the whole "team unique" part of wheels would be removed next update? just wondering cus its still in the game so maybe im misremembering stuff

[hidden palm]

someone said that it was indeed not useful so would have been removed later, i don't remember if they specified when

[night grail]

#1350058928020656178 message

guess it will be a later update

[torpid sluice]

Yeah they didn't specify when, just sometime in the future

[torpid sluice]

I think it means Keyflare equivalent to if you played the card directly, though that requires an understanding of how Keyflare is generated. Either that or just 32 Keyflare instead of Realm Mastery. Maybe they could change it to show the actual Keyflare amount like they do on Thais cards?

[night grail]

my hypothesis is that its keyflare equal to the damage she would have dealt, meaning it would go up if you play the card making it impossible to put a flat number down since damage numbers unfortunately arent variables meaning they only show what the card itself does ignoring all buffs/ debuffs

[torpid sluice]

Ohh that would be interesting. In that case, saying "Keyflare equivalent to base DMG of this card" or something would help clarify. Either way it's really unclear

[night grail]

yeah there are a bunch of cool ideas but they will prolly not come out before the game, you know, ends, since there isnt enough manpower

[torpid sluice]

Isn't the game in a pretty good spot financially now? I want to be optimistic about the longevity, especially as a spender lol

[spark kraken]

game is doing fantastic, some ppl just love to doompost

[hoary canyon]

Yeah, ace already gave the confirmation that the story should be translated properly by the 2nd anniversary.

So at least the most agregious part of the game will be sorted.

[night grail]

well, we dont got any official numbers, however considering that the game almost EOS'd last winter we know its not good. now, they did get a small investment, however the CN server is in a 1984 situation now so Im not sure how the players liked those changes. also, from the EN community the game is perceived as a game with terrible, terrible english translations shying a lot of potential players away, so the influx from here is prolly not that high either. But I also meant, that a lot of stuff will never getinto the game not cus its gonna die tomorrow but because with such a small team the priorities have to be set different from what one might want.
Anyways, I dont think that we are close to EOS, buuut I also think that a really bad mistake can put as back to the brink of it.
But I believe in my goat Light

[hoary canyon]

I'm not a fan of the back and forth of us having to call out translation/errors over and over as much as the next guy.

[night grail]

also, lets not make this offtopic thing too long

[hidden palm]

1:1 damage to keyflare would be absolutely broken

[hoary canyon]

Yeah good feedback above.

#1350058928020656178 message

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[night grail]

I would take it

but would it actually be broken?

[spark kraken]

no clue why you'd go around spreading misinfo, light already made announcements that they've secured considerable funding and are guaranteed service for at minimum the entirety of arc 2 AND are expanding staff, on top of the english channel seeing new players almost daily

[night grail]

Thais 2 cost gives over 100 keyflare

[night grail]

mb for having an opinion

sorry

[spark kraken]

every time i see u ur complaining about something and ur discord history said u were gonna quit a couple weeks ago

not an opinion when all u do is go around doomposting and claiming the game will eos

lol

[night grail]

gimme 1 example where I said the game is gonna EOS

[hoary canyon]

Every time Yannic speaks I hear the fear and hunger coin flip

[spark kraken]

yes? do u even play this game? it would be beyond broken

[night grail]

aside from this one post now

tho i didnt even say we are gonna eos but lets count it

[hoary canyon]

You have 0 self consciousness about what your words imply. In around 50% of the statements.

We can't prove this to you... cause well. You don't know. Except this is the 3rd person confronting you about it.

[night grail]

Dom you are unable to write properly...

also no shit a game is conna end at some point

what a crazy take

[hoary canyon]

It's 1am

[night grail]

ok

then sleep

like am i supposed to tuck you in or what

[torpid sluice]

I appreciate you giving additional context as well. I also feel very positive about the game's recent growth and funding. Ultimately only the devs know the full picture, so I won't take any one person's view of the situation as the source of the truth

[night grail]

#1350058928020656178 message
anyways imma call it, no need to waste time on this

[hoary canyon]

You're supposed to have the basic understanding that when you bring up. Both "a lot of cool ideas won't be explored" with a topic that requires a small fix. Followed with "the game will stop existing" people assume soon. Not forever later.

Didn't light also promise an offline client sometime after the game EOS's?

[night grail]

btw Queen's Sword seems to give 93 keyflare even if you play it (it does in Thais's Awakener Trial)

[hoary canyon]

[hoary canyon]

Dats pretty good

[night grail]

Since Queens's Sword gives keyflare even if played I suppose we are just missing the part where it says that above the aftershock part

maybe it was from the translators trying to discourage ppl from playing it by hiding a play effect lolol

[torpid sluice]

It gives Keyflare as a 3-cost card, since Keyflare is generated by Arithmetica consumed. 93 sounds around average assuming ~30ish Keyflare Regen

[hoary canyon]

Lmaoo. The 93 is prolly from the 32RM - GDAMIT OYASUMI GOT TO IT FIRST

61/3 is 20.33 per arithmetica

[night grail]

still a terrible card to play (nvm it gives temp Realm Mastery best card in the game)

[worthy garnet]

It's "Keyflare equal to the amount of Keyflare you would have gotten had you played the card"

Basically, it's [card's Arithmetica cost] * [Ramona's Keyflare Regen]

[night grail]

24 is missing the colored markers

[winged owl]

虛無瘟疫是熔燬朵爾的關聯鑰令，目前「虛無」這部分的翻譯是illusory
我感覺用nihilistic會比較契合熔朵的意識型態

[noble bolt]

Some players are complaining about the current English translations of the wheels.
In particular, Corpo's SSR (triggers “Resistance” instead of “Death Resistance”) and Kath's event SR (Crit Rate is not indicated as temporary when it should be).

[lost acorn]

I think the banner titles needs an update.

[night grail]

What’s a Lemurian

[native plume]

Certain Awakeners are from a place called Lemuria. I'm not sure if there's an easy way to check which ones, though.

[novel sedge]

currently the only awakeners with the Lemurian tag are Tulu, Miryam, Goli and Faros iirc

[torpid sluice]

You can check by clicking Archives for each character, Lemuria is listed as a characteristic under Basic Information

[warped shale]

I don't know if this is the right channel for this but in Ryker's dive, there are random quotation marks where they shouldn't be. Like this:

[warped shale]

The spelling of Karnak's name is inconsistent. Before this chapter, he was always referred to as Karnak, but here it changed to "Kanak" and "Karnahk"

[bitter lake]

In chapter 5-7 , this saysing "We're go somewhere safe," but it should probably be "We're going somewhere safe"

Also in 5-7, this should read "some level of intelligence," currently missing the "of"

[warped shale]

"Dulcein", in Arc 2 chapter 3-6 Oath

[bitter lake]

"lacking" should be "lack"

[night grail]

The strength part just sounds really confusing, all that happens is that you gain 8 instead of 5 strength when playing the card

Should be „additionaly“ instead of „also“ since the ult already reduces the cost by 1

The „In the Caro Realm,“ part should be left out since it is unnecessary

[night grail]

…

„1 point of Aliemus“

[velvet thunder]

Hi Keeper! We're working with the UI team to fix this issue!

We're also addressing all the bugs listed above. Sorry for the confusion!

[hoary canyon]

At this rate nominating Yannic for the volunteer team, wouldn't be a bad idea.

Man has pointed out more discrepancies then anyone else, for the entire duration the game has launched.

[velvet thunder]

We've had human professionals retranslate Chapter 5 and these lines should be updated in game by now! We'll continue fixing the other issues you mentioned

[night grail]

I should get the title of number 1 complainer lmao

[hidden palm]

some time ago i have reported that the chaos symbiosis section has been outdated for some time, if you can, remind them of it

[night grail]

prolly just takes them a while to get the stuff done, backlog is prolly ungodly large and I suppose that the focus is the story rn

[hidden palm]

yeah, but story is one thing, mechanical inaccuracies can impact the gameplay decisions, that is still pretty important

they already updated it to fix the aqua one

just strange that they didn't include that too

[night grail]

Maybe they lost sight of things with such a massive backlog. After all, it’s a team of volunteers trying their best to help, not people that do this as their job, meaning that the volunteers have a limited amount of time at their hands for this work.
So I suppose it just went under in the mountain of work that they still have in front of them

[hidden palm]

yeah, i don't doubt that, just wanted to put a reminder for it

[azure monolith]

i straight up dont understand what this does (until someone explained it to me)

[hidden palm]

yeah, is just not worded correctly in the second part

[velvet thunder]

Sorry! It should probably be “places 1 Lightning Retribution with reduced Arithmetica Cost” and we’ll fix it in the next update!

[azure monolith]

👍 thank you

[night grail]

I suppose this means Death Resistance and I would leave the „Elixir“ part out since it is usually referred to as just Emergency Gnosis

Also, its „the“ Arithemtica cap

[hoary canyon]

1-10

"I not good on walking"

[night grail]

Would change to something like:
Playing „Strike“ and „Defense“ draws 1 random skill card from deployed awakeners. This effect can activate once per turn.

General thoughts: I do think that keeping skill descriptions short is a good idea however often it leads to things being written in a weird way instead of merely being shortened. Having things a bit longer but in good english could be better than forcing things to be shorter while making reading it a lot worse

[hoary canyon]

"at this for this one time"

[night grail]

I suppose this should mean that the damage of Frenzied Slash is increased by 33%
Also the additional at the end is redundant

[unique delta]

There are 2 things:
I invite you to see how texts are written in magic the gathering, and you'll notice that the text is very "dry", but once you get used to it, is actually very clear thanks to that, leaving few room, if at all, to personnal interpretation.

As for the second part of the text, my assumption for this is to be future proof, in a case some posse or wheels could increase that number of occurrence, so it would be easy to change it to "up to 2 times" instead of having to replace "once" by "twice", programmatically speaking

[native plume]

as long as they never use the word "state," their descriptions are still clearer than Hoyoverse descriptions lol

[night grail]

Top sentence change mythangs to Mythag. Also, in the archive it changes between Silver Key and silver key, would be nice to decide on one of them.

Change to Strike and Defense ….

That way you write it only once, shortening the description by a lot

[night grail]

They don’t increase dmg but have theirs increased

[night grail]

Its 2 <= Arithmetica not 2 < Arithmetica

I suppose the same goes for the 4 Arithmetica

[upper sinew]

D-Tide Wave five's '' Protector'' boss
One of the boss passive effect showing as 4 different translations in its cards and description.
Ashes/Ancient Embers/Remnants of the Ancient Days/Ashes of Yesteryear

On the same boss we have Swarm Prey/Hive Predation on different attack intentions to describe a single card names ''Hive Predation''

[night grail]

The at the start of the sentence isn’t capitalized

[proven plinth]

in chapter 2-2

[hidden palm]

@velvet thunder

[night grail]

Didn’t know Ramona could speak code

Guess she’s chill like that

[night grail]

After triggering [Death] Resistance

Also maybe reword it to „and you draw 3 more cards per turn“ since the current writing makes it sound like you choose how many extra cards you draw per turn on a range from 0 to 3

[hidden palm]

This message in at the end of the last battle in arc 2 1-1 is repeated 2 times and is cut in a strange way

At the end of 1-1 i don't know why winkle said "Doll" in the last phrase

[hidden palm]

same strange cut on 2 phrases of arc2 1-2

[void topaz]

i'm not sure if the titles of these dreamscapes are identical in Chinese, or if there is some pun that isn't getting translated, but the current titles of the last two dreamscapes feel very odd. in English i think there might need to be more difference between them?

[fleet apex]

Ch 6-3
S at seafarerS and cut dialogue

Ch 6-4 cut dialogues

Ch 6-5 cut dialogues

(there is more in Ch 6-7 onwards)

[elfin nova]

disregard this if the new translation (first) is more accurate, but I think the old translation (second) made a lot more sense, even if it was more awkwardly phrased

[vocal haven]

the second one is more accurate, not sure why they changed that

I suppose conceptually they are quite similar...

[velvet thunder]

It's an old issue! Not sure why it's popping up again, we'll fix it asap!

[hidden palm]

is this the same? in arc2 1-8

p.s have you seen the strange cuts in the text above?

[velvet thunder]

Yes, it contains a pun in Chinese;
再见永无乡 -> See You in Neverland
再见，永无乡 -> See You, Neverland

The titles contain identical Chinese characters except for one comma

We tried to convey that in English. Hopefully it's working!

[fleet apex]

to me it feels like 'See You in Neverland' is a promise of adventure and 'See You, Neverland' is the farewell at the end of said adventure

[hidden palm]

is there a misplacement or lack of text?

[void tangle]

Arc 2, 2-3
This guy is repeatedly called Cloud instead of Claude

[velvet thunder]

Yes! It looks like the new text scrolling function we added?

so when there's too many lines of text and we can't fit them all inside the textbox at once, it scrolls up automatically

is it keeping you from properly reading the story text? i'll let our UX people know!

[hidden palm]

I mean, the problem is that the scrolling doesn't go all the way to the bottom, so it is stuck half way, cutting the words #1350058928020656178 message.
So it is a bug that should be looked in too, other that the fact that, sooner or later, a manual scrolling feature, or an alternative separation method should be implemented, even just that it scroll down automatically but just after you click again, in place of a timed scroll

[velvet thunder]

Thank you! I will forward it to the UX people to have them look into it ASAP

[velvet thunder]

Thank you! We will replace Arc 2's first two chapters' AI translation asap!

[velvet thunder]

Yes, Arc2's Chapter 1 is still machine translated and it sometimes does that. We'll replace the machine translation in future updates once we're done with Arc 1!

[hidden palm]

mmmh, Ace, i don't know if this is right or not, but it should maybe looked in to (it seems that it doesn't happen every time, but multiple people have reported it):
In the Arc2 1-13 Gdoll final fight, she will have an initial transformation that will activate a dialogue\cutscene before doing it, that start with this discussion

But then she has a second transformation, or phase, that activate the same exact one, literally the same dialogue\cutscene.
Idk if it is intentional, but even if that is the case, maybe it should be updated to make it at least slightly different

[round roost]

I noticed that the covenant coffer descriptions still use their old names, which could potentially cause some confusion. It’s a pretty minor issue, but I thought I would report it. Here are a few examples.

[hidden palm]

In the Psyche Surge Preview, to see the effect of the dupes, it says that at E+4 the OverExalt will be "Unlocked Soon", and Unlocked at +5, that is a bit misleading considering you will have it unlocked at +4, maybe it need to be explained better

[upper sinew]

Inconsistency in translations/names on the Blesser boss (Images taken from D-Tide variant if it matters)
''First Variant'' enemy is also translated as ''Neophytes'' in Turn 5 Intention. // ''Metamorph'' enemy is also translated as ''Deteriorator'' in Turn 1 Intention. // ''Ancient Embers'' effect is also translated as ''Ashes of Yesteryear'' in the Hive Predation card.

[mighty haven]

Inconsistencies with player profile avatar descriptions. Usually is "Unlock(s) after acquiring Awakener (name)" Castor's seems to be especially inconsistent. The event exclusive ones are also inconsistent and again, Castor's is more off than the others.

[velvet thunder]

Hi Keepers!

There is a known issue where Pollux's Traphase mode Exalt skill name shows up as "Display Multilingual Key". It's caused by a technical issue.
The correct skill name should be "Sinless Verdict".

We will fix this issue along with a bunch of others we found & the ones you've mentioned above in tomorrow's hotfix! Sorry for the confusion!

[hoary canyon]

Has any more of the main story been translated this update?

[velvet thunder]

We have finished human translating Chapters 6-9 (so, the entire Arc 1) at this point, but we did not released it this update
we're still testing and further refining it. We will release human translation of the entire Arc 1 during the next version update!

The human translation for Prologue - Chapter 5 has been live since the last update;
We fixed some errors in the translation of those chapters in this update.

List of story content with English human translation at this point:

Main Story
Prologue
Chapter 1
Chapter 2
Chapter 3
Chapter 4
Chapter 5
Astral Reign Chapter 3
We're still working on Chapters 6-9 (human translation will be released next update) and Astral Reign Chapter 1-2!
Astral Reign Chapter 4 (upcoming story) will be released with full human translation.

Special Ops/Psyche Deepdive
Liz's Psyche Deepdive
Salvador's Special Ops (by Volunteer ghostboots)
Miryam's Special Ops (by Volunteer lyaistra)
Culinary Dominion
Castor & Pollux's Psyche Deepdive have been partially human translated but is still considered WIP.

Reproduction Frenzy
Doresain (voiced)
Pickman
Kathigu-Ra
Murphy (voiced)
Miryam
Castor
Pollux

[lime token]

In the belated funeral section of horla’s story a lot of the text seems to have been scrambled, repeating itself and having nonsensical attributions like having characters apparently talking to themselves (‘miss keeper, look, it’s the stars!’ line coming from the keeper significantly after the keeper and horla have arrived in the garden, or colette’s line about ‘this isn’t just some count’s garden horla, this is our garden’ repeating itself without attribution after she has already delivered that line once)

[thin igloo]

Pollux's pv in the archive has its title untranslated, along with a line in Beyond the Skies Part I where he's referred to as Polyx, and overall inconsistencies regarding the plural of Divus/Divu's/Divi through both texts

[velvet thunder]

Hi! We will fix the Archive in today's upcoming hotfix!

"Divi" is the plural for "Divus" and the possessive should be Divus';
we'll fix instances where the possessive is incorrectly spelled as Divu's

[thin igloo]

thank you!! i'll try to find the specific line for polyx (i know i took a screenshot somewhere)

[velvet thunder]

We'll look into it! dw, thank you for letting us know!

[velvet thunder]

Thank you we'll look into this!

[lime token]

There certainly was an error…certainly was!

[velvet thunder]

Sorry!

We've identified that there is a technical formatting issue in Horla's Special Ops story causing the translated lines to be misplaced;
We are fixing this issue today!

[dense prairie]

The new player welcome survey accessed from the mailbox has two issues:

1. The rating chart is backwards. The positive response (I like this game) should be on the right with all the stars filled up.
2. The automated response after filling it out isn't in English

[thin igloo]

Clenis turned into Kereni somehow in today's unlocked story and there's a short section where it goes into 1st person (i) for a single sentence, just checking if it's intentional or not, since it was a sudden change (but i understand if it was intentional)

[hoary canyon]

can we please get the ability to scroll through the long lines of dialogue. With 2nd ani. It would be a gift. A treasure.

[elfin nova]

that or increase the text box size

[hoary canyon]

Reduce font size on pc.

It's the same suggestions as always

I'm here assembling a multi people stream, trying to get em into the game. These text box hick-ups hurt.

[elfin nova]

btw if there a way to make threads in this channel or something

I want to go through and give comprehensive feedback on the early chapters translation but I don't wanna spam this chat with a bunch of images

[hoary canyon]

Do it anyways. It's Ace's job to look through this and categorise it. And we love em for it.

[elfin nova]

@vocal haven is it supposed to be sean or shawn anderson?

not sure which ones to keep track of

[vocal haven]

sean and shawn are just two different spellings of the same pronunciation (their chinese name is just the pronunciation so I can't make any conclusions based off of that)

I'm not familiar enough with lovecraft to know the reference so I'm unsure which is correct...

maybe flarin would know but otherwise I think Ace would have to answer that

[elfin nova]

Gotcha

[elfin nova]

ok bet

starting from the prologue and trying to view it from the perspective of a newcomer who heard the translation was wonky but has no idea what the original cn meaning is (a lot of 'your mileage may vary' and highly subjective and nitpicky stuff coming up):

'I'm back' feels a little confusing in this context. I think the implication is that the Keeper is saying they're back from the tombstone? but in this context as a rando it feels little confusing

makes sense with context but on first read through it kinda sounds like ramona's referring to someone else. might be better as 'your calculus grades' (but might conflict with the true cn meaning)

In context of Ramona's previous line asking Keeper if she wants to go the infirmary, (highly subjective) no worries sounds a little unnatural. I think it'd sound better as either 'Don't worry, I'm just a bit dizzy.' or 'No, I'm just a bit dizzy.'

when a raindrop falls feels like a weird description given that it's been raining during the scene, so an individual raindrop falling wouldn't be remarkable

(highly subjective) makes total sense but without the word forbidden being used before, the emphasis feels a little strange. imo it'd work better if either forbidden was changed into restricted, or restricted was changed into forbidden

I assume this should probably be 'linking all those awakeners back then'

this line is past tense when every other line is present tense in this section

'precision case' doesn't really make sense in english (at least to me)

'Stun slows your thoughts'

might sound more natural as 'that' instead of 'it'?

couldn't screenie cause the log doesn't work in this part, but the first part is something along the line of 'craft silver artifacts, etc etc', and the 'craft' should probably be 'crafting'

I think it'd sound better without the comma in the top option (without comma its direct, with comma its kind of casual)

might sound more natural as 'madness-driven desire for battle'.

doll wears boots? (unsure if this is a localization thing or if doll's pen feet are actually considered boots... which would be awesome)

in this part, there are several messages that don't show up in the log for some reason (you can see one in the background)

i understand the meaning here but I think it'd sound more natural as something along the lines of 'It is not human speech'

I think it'd sound more natural was an 'I' in front of 'just got my hands on two bottles'

same for inserting a 'you' at the front of this (I think this is chap 1 oops)

ok ch 1

might sound more natural with a 'that' between observed and memory

would sound more natural as 'being an East Distrct native'

misspelling of sean, assuming that sean is correct since most of the other lines use it

should be 'were you the psychologist' or 'are you the psychologist that was handing out surveys earlier?'

'your party enters the workhouse'

probably should have a , after jolts

'develop a comprehensive understanding'

'the girl clearly panics'

i imagine this is accurate to the cn meaning but it sounds super awkward in english. i think it'd probably sound better with the same meaning but using a familiar idiom like 'In the East Distrct, human life is priceless, because it has no value/worth.'

[hidden palm]

Chp 6-8 Murphy gender

6-10 too

[elfin nova]

should be 'slides a palm-sized slip into the drawer', cut the 'in'

the 'in' followed by 'into' is awkward. might sound better with 'in' replaced with 'as'

technically works as a slang line but since jenkins doesn't use this type of speech anywhere else, I think this should be 'she**'s** got a ghost in her pocket'

[velvet thunder]

Hello, sorry for the gender issue;
We'll update Chapter 6's translation in the next version, currently Chapters 6-9 are still machine translated

[elfin nova]

should either be 'watching as the drama', or 'especially Sarah--grow more and more'

I think this is missing a 'being' between definitely and sent

should be terms

might also sound a litte more natural as 'we agree to your terms'

should be 'she' instead of 'the'

'hidden in the shadows'

this might be intentional but the 'climbing up the clock tower followed by taking the stairs down' put an odd image in my head so i'm posting just in case it's a mistake

should be air

technically ungrammatical, as 'baring teeth and emitting a sharp, rodent-like hiss' (if brown's a rodent, can its hiss be rodent-like 🤔 ?) modifies 'brown's claws'. however this is a pretty minor issue

I foggy nights

[velvet thunder]

Hopefully you won't have to rely on me, your assistant, for XXX field work— like you did with calculus.
We'll change this line so it's easier to read

[velvet thunder]

Just consulted our writers and turns out there was a typo in the CN text too, it should be "go UP the stairs". We'll fix it along with the rest in the next update!

[paper knot]

Seems the third line is missing in the second branch “but develop “some symptom card” xx times” etc.

[elfin nova]

ok more ch 1 checking

might sound more natural as 'at the corner of his eye'

'come back to your senses'

'merely taking in the evening air'

might sound more natural as 'particularly for individuals wielding scalpels'

'The intense light made it hard to keep her eyes open.'

might sound more natural as 'Cold metal immobilizes the muscles around her eyes.'

this one part switches to second person POV. i understand the effect for putting us in aigis's viewpoint/the horror of seeing a scalpel approach your eye, but for consistency it might be better to have either the whole section as second person POV, or change this one part to 'her vision'

it'd sound more natural as 'Don't be alarmed.'

'delve into the basement with Jenkin.'

might sound more natural as 'She's just a kid from the slums, she doesn't know anything.'

'for your sister, it cost you a year's savings.'

might sound more natural as 'We are not Jenkin. We don't understand what you're saying.'

(even more subjective than everything else) might sound better as

'You look outside; buildings stand like graveyard statues in a faint white mist.

The door creaks open, just enough to let a cold night wind in through the dark gap.

A shadow darts from behind the furniture, attacking instantly.'

'with an eerie metallic sheen.'

this depends on the nature of the Pygmalions, but this might sound better as 'similar to what the Pygmalions pursue'. ('similar to what humans pursue' vs 'similar to what the humans pursue', 'similar to what buddhists pursue' vs 'similar to what the buddhists pursue')

might sound better as 'She smiles, gaze carrying a strange zeal.'

pupilless (without the dash) would be the correct word https://www.merriam-webster.com/dictionary/pupilless

could be accurate but at first read 'waves' confused me, so i'm posting just in case it's another up the clocktower situation and this was supposed to say 'walks'. also I can't put the exact name on it but i swear this is some kind of run on sentence/comma splice/something

'with him there, we**'ll** be fine.'

could fit, but might be more consistent with jenkin's other dialogue as 'Sis and your student friend have got to be down there with that so-called ghost.'

would sound more natural as 'an inexplicable tingling spreading from toes to ankles and up your back...'

'lowering it to illuminate a small patch of ground.'

might sound more natural (depending on context) as 'merging into a pitch-black abyss' or 'merging into the pitch-black abyss'

'Children line up in the gray mist, awaiting selection.'

'she wrings her skirt's hem.' or 'she wrings her dress's hem.'

'Giving in to the impulse,'

might sound more natural as 'Kids should learn to obey adults.'

'leaving with the others.'

with the scene change, the 'speaking' at the front felt awkward imo, since presumably its been a while since he said his last line

'Alright, that should stop Miss Sarah.'

[keen schooner]

is there anywhere to easily view the cn script to compare against the in game english translation?

[elfin nova]

'then bursts into laughter.'

[elfin nova]

i assume the volunteers might know

[elfin nova]

@vocal haven ?

[elfin nova]

I understand the meaning, but it feels like an awkward phrase for this moment. I think something like 'You're barking up the wrong tree' or something similar with fit better

[vocal haven]

unfortunately not that I know of, the only option readily available is to switch to CN language

[keen schooner]

typo from 1-6, i think this is meant to be air

[elfin nova]

with the use of 'read in books' earlier, Ogier's line should probably be 'Those books aren't telling the truth.'

[keen schooner]

also that I before foggy nights seems like it shouldnt be there

[elfin nova]

'Genuine.' would probably sound more natural as 'Genuinely.', and if Ogier isn't a knight of the current King/Queen/Royal family of the Kingdom of Leo (not sure how the dansks tie into them), it should probably be 'Personally knighted by a royal family.'

'Ogier, you said knights would protect everyone...'

might sound more natural as 'what about the criminals?'

'Depends on... themself...'

'Aigis pauses, savoring his words. Hesitant, she begins speaking slowly.'

might sound more natural with 'Yet these aren't the true horror/surprise.' 'Several reddish-brown statues stand displayed. Each graceful, with a weary expression.'

'caught in an illusion of the sea.'

'A grand city constructed from green, monstrous stones that completely defies Euclidean geometry' or 'A grand city constructed from green, monstrous stones that completely defy Euclidean geometry.'

'to the Sculptors' Association'

might sound more natural as 'A deep breath brings overwhelming sweetness that assaults your senses once more.'

'just wanted to borrow some'

'I'm not good at walking.'

might sound more natural as 'We don't need the disguise anymore.'

'and a righteous Ogier.'

this could fit as Jenkin being a kid without an understanding of words, but the correct term here would be 'jewelry' since it's both plural and singular

might sound more natural as 'You think they magically appeared there?'

'Keep them for workhouse emergencies'

might sound more natural as 'No, it can't be...'

might sound more natural as 'Now, behold the true beauty.'

her arms howl and turn into dissolution monsters? could be accurate just posting in case it's not. (oh I guess you can read it as like... the limbs of the syrup statues? but I only jsut got that)

maybe better as 'It's just a nightmare...'

'A success case of xenografted Silver Core implant.' sounds wonky. Lots of ways to fix it, simplest would be 'A successful case of xenografted Silver Core Implantation!', though that still sounds a bit rough

[keen schooner]

tbh i think it could just be shortened to a successfully xenografted Silver Core implantation

[elfin nova]

'Thanks that foolish Investigator for showing up at our doorstep.' also sounds awkward. could be maybe be fixed as 'Thankfully that foolish Investigator for showed up at our doorstep.'

comma splice I think? should theoretically be 'into a candy man**.** I am the true Ghost of the Workhouse.'

though it also fits with aigis saying it in a panic

at this for this one time

'Trying to fight me?'

'the changes on you won't stop' sounds awkward. not sure the original meaning so idk what the fix would be

'struggling to endure a throbbing headache and nausea.'

'to witness Mythag's future like that.'

'It can erase one's existence, even related memories.'

'at the workhouse forgets about me'

something strange happened here. after 'the sun's out today', it played another line that got automatically skipped halfway through to 'her blurry vision', and then in the log, the line that appeared was different from the one that played and got skipped?

happened here again too

might sound better as 'He told me I need to embrace the stars to strengthen my magic, although we couldn't see a single star here.'

heads up for the aigis cutscene, rn it's half busted in English. the scrolling text and some of the shorter lines go by so quickly it's hard to impossible to read them

'vanishing into the thick fog without a trace.'

either 'A small piece Silver Core falls into it.' or 'A small piece of Silver Core falls into it.'

ok that's chapter 1

chapter 2 tomorrow

[keen schooner]

Sis and your student friend have got to be down there with that so-called ghost

an inexplicable tingling spreading from your toes to your ankles, and up to your back…

illuminate a small patch of ground

also the last sentence feels a bit awkward; this is purely stylistic quibbling but i'd probably rephrase as "Your retina is struck by a harrowing sight" to match the formality of the word retina (retinas? do we pluralize in reference to how human beings have two eyes with two retinas, or in this case, does the word retina refer to both at once already? i feel like it sounds more natural as retinas but i also dont know anything about medical terminology for parts of the eye)

[velvet thunder]

Hi Keepers! Sorry, Combat Designer forgot to tell me Pollux was getting buffed yesterday so his new OE effect is now machine translated;
We'll update the human translation for his new skill effects next update!
We're also addressing all the issues mentioned above. Thank you again for your patience!

[hoary canyon]

there's a lot of sentences in desecrate that could use some work as well

there's a lot i havent gotten already in the first 3 nodes

[keen schooner]

rather than keeper miss wouldnt it be more natural as miss keeper?

[upbeat lily]

Hameln's Keyword Suggestions for Rondino
-Use Repeat instead of Rondino for clarity, (because most players aren't music majors and don't know what Rondino is) so players can understand why his Exalt doubles the usage of the Command Card.
-An alternative term, Da Capo, fits from a classical music usage. It means from the beginning, and more used than Rondino. The term is also used in one of Hameln's skill voicelines.

[keen schooner]

instead of "rigged with it", maybe just "rigged it" or tampered with/modified it

wrong pronoun for 24 used here

"They made me to" might be easier to understand as "They made me do it"

"freaks out" feels too informal for the general tone of the narration, it might sound more natural as "24 suddenly [breaks down/becomes agitated/flies into a rage]" <- not sure which would be more appropriate to describe her emotional state

also another case of the wrong pronouns being used for 24 (unless she's a she/they pronouns icon?)

wrong pronoun here as well

[elfin nova]

i think this should probably say 'wax sculptor'?

this works with 'the' but i'm posting just in case it'd sound more natural without it

also might sound more natural as 'we have lost the connection'