#hey, i made some shoegaze and i would like to get some opinions on where to take the melody

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static jewel
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Huh all this time I thought it was shoe gays

elfin onyx
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its

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its not SHOE GAYS

static jewel
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Oh sneaker head how could I get those confused

elfin onyx
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no

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just

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no

static jewel
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Lemme get my ||head||phones and give this a listen

elfin onyx
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alright, thank you for your time

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and

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its shoe GAZE

static jewel
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Maybe a regional variant

elfin onyx
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-_-

static jewel
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Can I ask questions

elfin onyx
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ofc

static jewel
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Or do you just want basic reactions

elfin onyx
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no

static jewel
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Can you tell me more about the instruments

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I'm guessing these are real guitars you recorded

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Bass is probably midi

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Drums are probably programmed?

elfin onyx
static jewel
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The vocal is really mild compared to the guitars

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It's pretty genre correct to me

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Like, nothing stands out as "oh well that doesn't fit"

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Biggest thing I want is a reason to focus somewhere

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But depending on your intention,

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You might intentionally be not doing that

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At least in headphones tho, it sounds solid.

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Well rounded in good ways

elfin onyx
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thank you cryingpepe

elfin onyx
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i currently have a good base

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but theres just something missing

elfin onyx
static jewel
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Are there any songs you think are somewhat similar that you like and dont feel have something missing

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Any examples come to mind?

elfin onyx
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HELL YEAH

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one sec

static jewel
elfin onyx
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this is heavenly

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the more that i think of it i think i just need a better melody plus fitting vocals

elfin onyx
static jewel
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Ahh

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Is the vocal and lyrics the thing you focus on a lot that you're missing?

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Any reason you don't have an attempt?

elfin onyx
static jewel
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I get that

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Here

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You wanna hear some dumb shit I do lol

elfin onyx
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sure

static jewel
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Because we are in the same boat here

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It has loads of flaws lol

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So, I often feel embarrassed lol

elfin onyx
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its a funny context but if you look at the music theres nothing that sticks out to me as "bad"

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i cant judge the mix because i have airpods on

static jewel
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lol ok fine I'll send a worse one? Ahaha

elfin onyx
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dont downplay yourself... A_pepeSadHug

static jewel
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I'm just calling it like I hear it

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lol

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But regardless, what im trying to get at is that if you just do stuff anyway regardless of how you feel, you get real experience

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So, I'm making myself share dumb stuff I hate parts of

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I figure that should kill off me caring

elfin onyx
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the drums are a bit stiff imo but i like the melodies, especially the guitar

static jewel
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Yep

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The drums are boring

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I'm not fast at good drums lol

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The vocals are both fx'd badly

static jewel
elfin onyx
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???

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it works wonders

static jewel
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Yeah I've done that sometimes!

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I'm still figuring out how to think of drums I guess

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I don't plan them well enough

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But I keep making things and noticing stuff

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Drums and bass design are my two big focus areas right now

elfin onyx
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hmmm like i said, make a story

elfin onyx
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?

static jewel
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I must become ....

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Phil Collins!

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Ya you wanna hear a thing I did when I was 15-16 that's all my own sounds besides one drum loop?

elfin onyx
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sure R_guitarYoda

static jewel
elfin onyx
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btw you said it were real guitars

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so is the strumming convincing?

static jewel
static jewel
elfin onyx
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back to the beat

static jewel
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Those are all custom synth patches in Reason

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Besides the drum loop I chopped

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The overall mix is kinda quiet and weak lol

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Took four hours on a Sunday

elfin onyx
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im getting "hunted in the forest by a mysterious person" vibes

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idk if you went for that

static jewel
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No idea how I do what I do

elfin onyx
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but the patches are nice

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do you know how to create pads?

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i know the basics but like i suck at sound designing

static jewel
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Oo

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I mean yeah lol

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I can mimic most sounds I hear

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Maybe not exactly, depending

elfin onyx
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DAMN

static jewel
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I have no idea if that's rare or common

elfin onyx
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if you can synthesize the arp that is playing on "little boy" that would be sick

elfin onyx
static jewel
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What synths do you use

elfin onyx
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because most people give up when they open up a synth XD

static jewel
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Oo

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I bought my own synth when I was like 14

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I like to learn what everything does

elfin onyx
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i have the arturia and korg collection aswell

static jewel
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Pigments I have and know pretty well

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Ah neat

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I've got Arturia collection too

elfin onyx
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nice

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they say pigments is the best on the market rn

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correct me if im wrong but i think pigments has every synth "style"

static jewel
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Hm I have no idea hehe but that's an interesting idea

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You're talking about the 3 note arp at the end?

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Rising arp

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Hmm. I wonder. How good at identifying instruments are you / other people

elfin onyx
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yeah

elfin onyx
static jewel
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It's swing time

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And triplets?

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lol

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That's a subtle but big change

static jewel
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How easy is it to go "that's a ____"

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I tend to know more often than not

elfin onyx
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i think so too

static jewel
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I mean I might be crude and say "a synth"

elfin onyx
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but then theres a million flutes and horns and stuff like that

static jewel
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Hehe yeah depending on tone and pitch ranges

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I think the timing and effects stuff on that arp would be the hardest part to get close to identical

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But the basic sound isn't that bad

elfin onyx
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but like i love having songs like that where i just cant get my head around it

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kinda magical

static jewel
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So.

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What do you plan to do next?

elfin onyx
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hmmm probably chat a bit and then go to sleep

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i actually wanted to go to bed 4 hours ago lul

static jewel
elfin onyx
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me rn happyhappyhappy_cat me rn + 5 hours deadkrillin

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alright, ill go sleep now

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was a nice conversation, have a great night/day

static jewel
fallow sage
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I love shoegaze, this is solid.. a lot of shoegaze is garbage sadly please keep making more