I would repeat the first 8 bars (15 seconds) again instead of switching to a variation already, the ornamentation or whatever it's called at 0:05 is a bit too soon I think, I would expect that more after we're already familiar with the melody, not right at the start
the transition at 0:30 is too abrupt and the part after it sounds like something that would fit more into the middle of the song instead of so soon, at 0:44 the notes go too high, the notes this high on the keyboard should imo probably only be used for sound effects or something idk :> also how they overlap the melody at the end is weird
in general I believe you could let the melody breathe a little, add some pauses and let the last notes ring out
#First piano composition
pliant juniper
pliant juniper
oh yeah I like it, well done :)