dusky idol
I think you need to try different melodies in the 1st part with the guitar. Something catchy that sits above the synths and grabs the attention. You need to turn the synths down a little.
At 2:00, its very cluttered. Redo the gain staging.
Do more with the drums. try snares and toms fills here and there, would fit the vibe.
Melody is the main part here.
Also, i would love it if u could check out mine and let me know what u think
https://discord.com/channels/955342751669551165/1125680560103247892