#The Deceived
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Beautiful writing! ❤️ This one is a bit literal in my opinion, and it feels like there is lots that is left empty. Maybe expand the liar’s intentions of lying or how the lies impact the narrative?
-# I just learned about this in a philosophy class that’s why I’m so passionate about this
ohh i can see what you mean
i'll redo this poem soon then
If you don’t mind can i try writing this poem? I kind of want to try this starting sentence.
sure! i'd also love it if you could elaborate on what you think this is missing
right now it feels (to me at least) like it’s stating what the question is in different ways then jumping to the conclusion without any reasoning
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damn man you are ultimate
this is my attempt (also my first attempt at this type of style: forgive me if i did something weird)
nah mate i have lots to improve on but thank you
i said that to sorrow😭😭
But you are too ngl
oh my god i am so sorry
i have done this too many times
it’s actually figuratively killing me
i am nowhere as good as sorrow who can write one of these per day
*i am nowhere as
good as sorrow who can write
one of these per day*
he is the real ultimate
hey hey dont worry
I would say both are fools.
ah igu
thank you man
this is amazing for a first attempt at the format
great work!!
i write multiple daily, but only post a few lol
i end up not liking a lot of them and then rework them multiple times