Oblivious
A vacant reminder
As you sleep peacefully
Trading consciousness for dreams
Time split between
JND
#Just Noticeable Difference
final dune
spiral bison
Ooooo I like the concept of trading consciousness for dreams!
Even though you’re actually living when both awake and sleeping, you’re oblivious to reality when sleeping!
The final line of the poems feels out of depth with the rest though, could’ve landed a powerful punch to end it, especially with micro poetry!
Maybe another idea to bring even more meaning to the poem, a slight on purpose spelling mistake, or even change in typography could make it really fun considering you’re talking about Just Noticeable difference!
Would then be kind of like talking about JND but also showing it in a literary sense (if I’m explaining myself corrrectly).
Anyways lovely piece, thanks for sharing!