#Would really like opinions and advice

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shy yacht
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ocean iron
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your poem is extremely powerful and i luv it,
i do notice some grammar errors however but primarily i recommend you to experiment with structure !!

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no rule book for that, nor should anyone tell you how to structure YOUR poem, but some people use shorter sentencing for impact,
or implementing a volta, only changing structure rather than subject - i think you should look into how ppl use those techniques to further push the impact of this already-striking poem :p