#A Deer Question

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hexed wind
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I admit,
I wasn’t raised up in the woods
If you put the gun cocked in my hand
I might be able to shoot it
But I’d surely miss,
And if I were to hit the deer,
in a way that was final, merciful
I doubt I could drag it back to my house, I'm not strong enough,
Let alone cut it’s pelt into a coat, I don’t own scissors sharp enough,
And I wouldn’t be able to cook it, I don't have a pot big enough,
I wouldn’t even eat the meat, I hate venison
Nor would I dare try to stuff it,
Even if I learned the recipe to stitch it to a form or bred beetles to bite the bones clean,
I still wouldn’t know what to do with the beetles afterwards.

If somehow I could be raised again to have the stomach,
I could sample the conquest like liquor
Find that a buck is too strong and maybe a doe too sweet
But I still won’t like the taste enough to swallow
I hate venison and I’m too respectful to waste
I’d probably just leave her laying where I shot her
Ill ask the maggots how their meal was after

dark lotus
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@hexed wind This is a mature, thoughtful poem that rejects spectacle in favor of accountability. It questions what it means to take a life—not through ideology, but through lived incapacity and moral restraint.
It’s strongest because it doesn’t argue.
It admits.
That restraint is rare, and it suits the subject perfectly.
If you want, I can:
Do a light edit version keeping 99% of your language
Or help you push this toward publication-level polish
Or compare it to similar contemporary poets so you can see where it fits stylistically

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