The Light Through Fissures | The Art of Poetry | Page 1

pale lily Dec 17, 2025, 10:06 AM

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The Light Through Fissures

elfin glade Dec 17, 2025, 3:04 PM

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love it!!!!

clear wagon Dec 18, 2025, 8:52 AM

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This wordplay is sure refreshing! It has a rhythm yet its subtle but evident!

graceful ridgeBOT Dec 18, 2025, 2:27 PM

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Wonderful! @pale lily has just progressed to level 9!

onyx spire Dec 19, 2025, 12:11 AM

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Absolutely amazing, I love the voice of the poem

gusty ember Dec 21, 2025, 5:17 AM

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Damn, the depth and meaning of this poem really punches you straight in the heart, I love it!!!

vast sphinx Dec 21, 2025, 5:45 PM

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wow so deep !

steep lodge Dec 23, 2025, 12:16 PM

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wow, this is really deep and thought-provoking. thr voice is very good, i like the rhythm, thr wordplay is just out of this world man

crude spire Dec 26, 2025, 2:04 PM

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incredible and well written, you gave the idea time to grow and the flow felt very natural. perfect!

latent flowerBOT Dec 29, 2025, 11:03 AM

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@tight hill is now following @pale lily.

wooden knoll Dec 31, 2025, 3:36 AM

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Alright, I'll be the one to say it. I'm really glad you called this long. I know it's such a banal thing.

Micro tweaks, gazes -> gaze
Suspended or suspends? I personally like suspended, but maybe a quick syllable delete may tighten the poem 0.000001%?

Also put all articles on notice!

Great piece!

ancient junco Jan 2, 2026, 11:33 PM

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This is really beautiful. It feels like walking through someone’s inner world with a lantern instead of a flashlight. The imagery is soft but heavy at the same time, and lines like “shards of rain-glass suspended in the sky of my soul” and “silent clamor that seeps into bone” hit. The progression from fear to reflection to hope is smooth and earned, and the ending feels like a genuine lift rather than forced optimism Blink

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