sugar crash | The Art of Poetry | Page 1

peak agate Dec 8, 2025, 4:02 AM

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And you,
A goddess,
Enveloped me.
And your tongue,
A beautiful, sweet thing,
Dripped honey.

And you were
Perfect.
And I was
nothing.
And together
We were everything.

At night, I lie in bed
And I think of how
Your honey
Made me rot.

runic marsh Dec 8, 2025, 9:03 PM

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WOAH WOAH WAH

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HOLD YOUR HORSES

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THIS IS INCREDIBLE

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the contrast in the first and second stanzas is imacculate and you really feel that sense of awe and love, added with a touch of resentment

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The ending in particular is effective but id love to see this expanded upon

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I think youve done a fantastic job!!

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if youre interested in checking out my poems here they are, i hope you have a fantastic day!!

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lament shell Dec 8, 2025, 10:02 PM

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This is amazing

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I love the juxtaposition of the other person being perfect, the narrator being nothing, and their combo being everything

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