#Winter Mirage

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mighty lagoon
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Alone sat a boy in a winter mirage:
a lake whose icy eyes stared softly up,
its mane of dried flora swaying in the frigid air.
The scene was painted still with binding grass
that dearly held the winter's frozen veil.

Silently, the boy longed for a winter that didn't hum a quiet decay:
one with snow that was soft
and cocoa that was warm
and faces that looked down
and said I love you.

The chilled breath of the night danced in the slow, melodic winds.
Beneath a bare—unconquered sky, the boy rose,
gazing up at stars that sighed the purest shade of white.

In his mind, all the world was here
—and it was cold—
and there was no use waiting for the stars to reach gently down and take him.

If his heart carried a weight that left him stunned—sunken into his bed every morning,
then how could the stars even try?

mighty lagoon
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This poem has existed in a couple of different formats over the last few weeks, and I think this one is my favorite.

I'm lowkey tired of second-guessing myself, and I wanted to finally post something here after reading so many great poems, so here it is.

I'm still not really sure how to have a personality on the internet, so my apologies if my messages feel soulless.

I think the main thing I want to change is the ending. I feel like I could give it a little more emotional impact somehow. I've showed this poem to one person, and they had no idea what to say about it, so now I'm here.

(also this poem is best in full view for spacing and stuff)

kindred kraken
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OMFG THIS IS SOO GOOD 🫂 ✨

mighty lagoon
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Thank you, I'm really glad you think so.