Great! It has a nice moral conviction. I would like to point out that it starts strong, but when you switch from 3rd person to 2nd person, it gets weaker. (Sorry if that sounds rude)
#Weight of regret
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You seem to state things, but make no analogies or anything to blunt the blow. It feels like you are telling, not showing. Also, when I write poetry the form and sentence structure is played around with to figure out how to say something poetically.
I hope this is helpful, not rude. It is great, I get what you’re saying. And that’s important.