I think titles take away | The Art of Poetry | Page 1

late cove Oct 21, 2025, 12:10 AM

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late cove Oct 28, 2025, 9:43 PM

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unborn ice Oct 28, 2025, 9:48 PM

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I think maybe add a sentence or 2 to transition from talking about titles to the main themes of the poem to make it flow better

steep finch Oct 28, 2025, 9:56 PM

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I agree with yada yada I think, I like that the title flows into the poem, I like that it doesn't shove more of its content in your face, the flow is pretty consistent, the similie about goats seems a bit heavy handed when compared to the rest of the very matter-of-fact metaphors used earlier. I like the fragmentation,

Especially

"mossed over— portcullises... sunlight no longer flowing in."

Also

"Quick to be quick with childlike infatuation"

is amazing sonically.

All in all I think the last stanza is the weakest but it's a suitable ending, I'd probably work on condensing it a bit.

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