#Plagued by Hope
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The rhyming scheme is a consistent ABAB scheme from first read which I really like
So it is short and simple
And I believe explains pretty well that feeling of hope though knowing the odds are unlikely
Or it starts to consume the writer, at least.
your vision and idea is well received, if your intentions were to use repetitiveness it's well written, but if not you can explore more words that will cater more deeply to the whole thing and it would add some contrast as well.