this feels like a haunting journey thru memory, identity and the silence of whats been forgotten…The imagery is strong but the pacing could breathe more with some spacing. Each line holds something sacred, and giving it room could make the weight of those moments land harder. I especially felt something stir in the line about her skin turning white, that contrast is chilling 😩 ur deff onto something here. It just needs a little more space to settle. 🫶🏼
#Nothing is here
wind void
warm girder
I can see it