My friend the moon

[olive saddle]

To My Dear Friend, the Moon

You understand me.

You see me in a way that no one else does.

You listen to my sad songs and flawed poetry,

And when water pours from the weight of my heart,

You’re always there to comfort me.

You sit there silently,

Looking down on me from up above.

It must be so lonely up there…

I promise I’ll visit you again

When the sun falls and the streets begin to quiet,

When the birds stop chirping

And the crickets’ sweet song fills the cool night air.

I’ll visit again,

So that way we can both have a friend in our loneliness.

Your dear friend,

Jeremiah

[fleet gate]

Needs more emotional depth like

If you're considering the moon as your friend

You must be there even if it is partially visible, even if some parts of it are missing (like the half moon, the crescent moon)

Etcetra

[olive saddle]

Sound good thanks for the feedback🙏

[fleet gate]

And it needs more punctuation

"when the sun falls and the streets begin to quiet DOWN"

It's beautiful

And this sounds more like a letter

Than a poem

Especially because of how you ended your poem

And i think it's a good format

Definitely unique